Talk:Sven (building)

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:38, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

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• ... that the 67-story Queens Plaza Park, slated to become one of the tallest buildings in Queens, includes the borough's first skyscraper, a 14-story clock tower? Source: LIC Post, NYCLPC p. 1. See also NY Times
  • ALT1:... that the 67-story Queens Plaza Park, planned to be one of the tallest buildings in Queens, includes a 14-story clock tower, the first skyscraper in Queens? Source: Same as above
  • ALT2:... that Queens Plaza Park, originally planned as the tallest building in Queens, includes a 14-story clock tower, once Queens' tallest commercial building? Source: NY Times

• Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Julio and Marisol

5x expanded by Epicgenius (talk). Self-nominated at 20:04, 27 January 2020 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook eligibility:

• Cited: - Needs to be all in one place; as it stands, the hook's parts are spread out.
• Interesting:
• Other problems: - "includes" is a bit problematic, and I had to go digging around to find out what you meant by that. "will incorporate" would be a better phrase for ALT0.

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Can sign off once the sourcing of the hook is fixed. ALT0 is a bit more descriptive and ALT2 retains interest, but ALT1 doesn't feel like an improvement on either. SounderBruce 07:56, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

@SounderBruce: Thanks for the review. The best I can do is to add two sentences right next to each other, since I can't fit them in the same sentence. I have just done that. Also can you check this ALT3? epicgenius (talk) 13:55, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

• ALT3: ... that the 67-story Queens Plaza Park, slated to become one of Queens' tallest buildings, will incorporate Queens' first skyscraper, a 14-story clock tower?

It's fine as long as the same citation is next to both sentences in the lead. It's a relatively minor issue, so I'll pass this one and let you update it as needed. SounderBruce 22:28, 31 January 2020 (UTC)