Template:Did you know nominations/Ben Kimondiu

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:08, 23 August 2019 (UTC)

Ben Kimondiu

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... that Ben Kimondiu won the 2001 Chicago Marathon as a pacesetter? Source: [1] p.171
- ALT1:... that Ben Kimondiu became the first pacesetter to win the Chicago Marathon in 2001? Source: [2] p.171

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Suicide in Finland
Comment: I did a QPQ before the one linked, but it's not completed. This one I linked is completed.

Moved to mainspace by MrLinkinPark333 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:33, 28 July 2019 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Looks good to go, and I think ALT1 is more interesting (though I would drop the "ever"). Sounder Bruce 02:41, 28 July 2019 (UTC)

@SounderBruce: Dropped ever in ALT1 per suggestion. Does it sound accurate though? To me, it reads as the winner in 2001 was a pacesetter, instead of in 2001 a pacesetter won for the first time. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 02:53, 28 July 2019 (UTC)

Oops, that could be interpreted that way. Perhaps moving the 2001 to the end of the hook would make it work. Sounder Bruce 02:56, 28 July 2019 (UTC)

Think that would work, so i did as suggested @SounderBruce:. Otherwise, someone else can proofread it and say otherwise. Thanks! --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 03:31, 28 July 2019 (UTC)