Template:Did you know nominations/George W. Macfarlane

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:41, 24 January 2017 (UTC)

George W. Macfarlane[edit]

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Kalākaua with Macfarlane and Baker

... that George W. Macfarlane and Robert Hoapili Baker accompanied Hawaiian King Kalākaua (all pictured) on his final trip to California where the king died in 1891?

Source: [1]

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Lemon-bellied flyrobin

Created by KAVEBEAR (talk). Self-nominated at 06:38, 30 December 2016 (UTC).

New, long enough, meets policy criteria. No apparent copyvio or unacceptable paraphrase.
hook length Ok, is sourced, is moderately interesting. But it's unclear from the hook who exactly died. Suggest replace 'he died' by 'the King died'.
QPQ undertaken. Pic seems to meet requirements.
Needs clarification of hook, otherwise OK.Smerus (talk) 12:39, 1 January 2017 (UTC)

@Smerus: Changed.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 18:40, 1 January 2017 (UTC)

Then good to go by me. Smerus (talk) 22:11, 1 January 2017 (UTC)