Template:Did you know nominations/Girl Online

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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 10:15, 14 December 2014 (UTC)

Girl Online

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• ... that demand for Zoe Sugg's debut novel Girl Online was so high that every bookshop broke the release embargo?

• Reviewed: Trimma nasa

Created by Nikthestunned (talk). Self nominated at 17:08, 27 November 2014 (UTC).

• Comment: I made a punctuation correction in the hook (it's → its). --Rosiestep (talk) 20:01, 27 November 2014 (UTC)

• New enough, long enough, well referenced. Generally, the article does not closely paraphrase the sources, except in the case of the hook fact:
• Source: Sugg’s book has proved so popular with fans that every bookseller broke the embargo on its sale, according to a spokesperson for the publisher.
• Article: Penguin stated that due to high demand every bookseller broke the embargo on its sale before this date
• The material should be rewritten in your own words, or put in quotes. QPQ done. Yoninah (talk) 22:21, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I've changed to a quote in the article and reworded the hook above. Nikthestunned 22:40, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

• Thank you. To be honest, when I first saw the hook, I didn't understand why the word "embargo" was there. I thought embargoes have to do with shipping goods. Would you consider rephrasing the hook in plainer language, like:
• ALT1: ... that demand for Zoe Sugg's debut novel Girl Online was so high that every bookshop started selling it before its official release date? Yoninah (talk) 23:01, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

• Yes that sounds good to me! Thanks for the help. Nikthestunned 23:58, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

• Thanks. Since I just reworded part of the hook, I'm going ahead and approving this. The close paraphrasing in the article has been put in quotes, so that's fine. Hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 10:19, 30 November 2014 (UTC)