Template:Did you know nominations/Maria Corsini
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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:07, 31 December 2015 (UTC)
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Maria Corsini[edit]
- ... that Maria Corsini, (pictured) Italian writer and Roman Catholic lay person was beatified by Pope John Paul II on 31 October 2001 along with her husband Luigi Beltrame Quattrocchi?
Created by Nvvchar (talk) and Rosiestep (talk). Nominated by Nvvchar (talk) at 08:00, 11 December 2015 (UTC).
"Italian writer and spiritually oriented Roman Catholic lay person was beatified by Pope John Paul II, on 31 October 2001,[1] at St. Peter's Basilica, Vatican City along with her husband Luigi Beltrame Quattrocchi.[2] They were the first married couple, who did not belong to the religious and priestly class, to be beatified together for the reason the Pope during the Homily stated, the "husband and wife kept the lamp of the faith burning - lumen Christi ", as models for their children and "lived an ordinary life in an extraordinary way." "
"spiritually oriented"? The second sentence I have no idea what you're trying to say!♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:51, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
Which Serravalle is it? It's a dab page.
""Scout group for youth" " -this looks suspiciously like a mistranslation, it should probably be given in the original language and not quoted. A name would be in cap letters anyway.
"The day of the beatification was special as it marked the 20th anniversary of publication of the Familiari Consortia an Apostolic Exhortation which means "the role of the Christian family in the modern world"." what means "the role of the Christian family in the modern world? Why does that need quoting in the lede?
"raised the married couple to the honour of the altars". -no idea what you mean. " A miracle for which they were associated was also accepted before the beatification." -I removed this as I don't see how that is a miracle being beautifed, it was written in Catholic gobbledygook.
I wish Nvv you'd take more time to copyedit your articles.♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:53, 11 December 2015 (UTC)
- Much better though "Along with her associate, Armida Barelli, she helped students at the Catholic University of the Sacred Heart. Corsini, along with her husband and children, was instrumental in establishing "Scout group for youth" and provided advice on matters related to marriage and family." is unsourced and I'm still dubious about "Scout group for youth". Which Serravalle is it? The link in the infobox goes to the dab page.♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:16, 12 December 2015 (UTC)
- I've improved the place of birth and place of death info, adding a Vatican source for Serravalle di Bibbiena. I c/e the Scouting sentence and added a source. There are sources for the Armida sentence but mostly in Italian, and not wanting to get it wrong (it wasn't just Corsini and Armida who helped establish the school), I deleted the sentence. --Rosiestep (talk) 15:42, 12 December 2015 (UTC)
Much improved, great job. Article new enough, long enough, and adequately cited. Hook short enough, interesting enough, and also cited. Article appears to be neutral and free of copyright violations and plagiarism. Cheers!♦ Dr. Blofeld 18:18, 13 December 2015 (UTC)
