Template:Did you know nominations/Yuan Xian

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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 08:42, 29 November 2014 (UTC)

Yuan Xian

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~~... that according to the Shiji, impoverished Yuan Xian was visited by Duanmu Ci, who arrived in a quadriga?~~

Reviewed: Li Lianyu

Created by Zanhe (talk). Self nominated at 06:35, 27 November 2014 (UTC).

Article is new from 26.11., long enough (1,800 prose ch.), based on excellent sources and without obvious grammar issues, close paraphrasing etc. Slight POV issue was handled by me, and now the article is fully NPOV. The hook is good, neutral, short enough and fact-checked by me in two external sources. Self-nominator did his QPQ. Good to go.AddMore (talk) 11:37, 27 November 2014 (UTC)

The hook uses so many foreign words that I find it obscure rather than hooky. Yoninah (talk) 22:29, 27 November 2014 (UTC)

ALT1 ... that Duanmu Ci was said to have ridden a quadriga to visit Yuan Xian's tiny hut?
ALT2 ~~... that Yuan Xian was said to have adhered strictly to the teachings of Confucius despite living in abject poverty?~~

@AddMore and Yoninah: to address Yoninah's concern, I propose ALT1, which removed the "Shiji" part from the hook, and ALT2, a new and more plain one. Please take a look. -Zanhe (talk) 06:20, 28 November 2014 (UTC)

Thank you, ALT1 is much hookier! Hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 10:00, 28 November 2014 (UTC)