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[edit]OK, your draft is better than I expected, but some comments
- It's too geared to what you sell, nothing about the company, not even an where its headquarters are. To show notability you need hard verifiable facts such as the number of employees, turnover or profits.
- I've never seen "speaking engagements" in an article before. That section should go since it has no function beyond promoting the CEO or company.
- Remove weasel words such as "more popular". Even if reffed, it's one person's opinion, not verifiable fact.
- Please use standard Wikipedia style. Don't bold or italicises heading, and add an unheaded introductory section to summarise your article. You also have an error where you have used the same ref name with different content.
- If you have a conflict of interest when editing this article, you must declare it. In particular, if you work directly or indirectly for the company, or otherwise are acting on its behalf, you are very strongly discouraged from attempting to write an article at all. Regardless, if you are paid directly or indirectly by the company you are writing about, you are required by the Wikimedia Terms of Use to disclose your employer, client and affiliation. You can post such a mandatory disclosure to your user page at User:Ahryan1972. The template {{Paid}} can be used for this purpose – e.g. in the form: {{paid|user=Ahryan1972|employer=InsertName|client=InsertName}}. If you are being compensated for writing this article, please provide the required disclosure. Note that editing with a COI is discouraged, but permitted as long as it is declared. Concealing a COI can lead to a block. Please do not edit further until you respond to this message.
Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:00, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
Thanks, Jimfbleak,
Will adjsut accordingly and get back to you.
Best, Ahryan1972 (talk) 14:50, 13 March 2017 (UTC)
- Don't forget that you must declare any COI as per the last bullet point Jimfbleak - talk to me? 15:48, 13 March 2017 (UTC)
The draft has been updated with more company information and more 3rd party references to verify the information listed. Please let me know your thoughts. Thanks again for all of your help. Ahryan1972 (talk) 14:29, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
- Comments
- References should follow punctuation
- One ref is showing an error
- It will look less promotional and more logical if you move the technology to precede the applicationa
- I'll unprotect the article title so you can move it back. Note that this no guarantee that other editors won't find fault with the article, but you can but see what happens
- Jimfbleak - talk to me? 19:13, 23 March 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for all your help Jimfbleak. If for some reason it is taken down again. Do you have any tips on what I should do?
Best,Ahryan1972 (talk) 16:28, 24 March 2017 (UTC)
- If it's actually speedy deleted, probably less likely now, you will have to discuss with the deleting admin. If it's nominated for a deletion discussion you will have the opportunity to justify keeping the article and to respond to any specific criticisms Jimfbleak - talk to me? 16:38, 24 March 2017 (UTC)