User talk:Francescacast
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[edit]Hello, Francescacast, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:50, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
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[edit]Hi! I have a quick note: Be careful when pulling information from a primary source, as many of them will be written to promote the person or topic at hand. Some of the language they use may not come across as promotional per se, as it's sometimes wording that we're used to seeing and hearing, but can come across as promotional when used on an encyclopedia. I can definitely help you with this, as many of these words honestly are kind of difficult to spot. It took me a while to get used to this when I first started to edit. (Honestly it took me a year to learn all of the terms and buzzwords since there are so many out there.)
I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:20, 9 November 2019 (UTC)
Checking in re: Final Project
[edit]Hi Francescacast I have noticed that you haven't made any edits towards the Work Plan or Link List. Please do so ASAP! If you are having troubles, please let me know via email. --Theredproject (talk) 04:15, 17 November 2019 (UTC)
- Francescacast You now have a work plan, but I'm not seeing any annotated bibliography, and 1000 words added to the article? Feel free to email me if you have questions.
- Next step is to peer review one of your classmate’s articles. Like your own, these will be on their sandbox pages. You should be able to see who is assigned each article on the Assigned Articles tab, so click on their username to find their sandbox. Remember, you had a training on this, which you can rely on. Feel free to email me if you have questions. --Theredproject (talk) 23:22, 1 December 2019 (UTC)
Feedback on your draft
[edit]Hi Francescacast I just checked and your edits and want to offer a few pieces of guidance that you will need to follow in order to haver your edits successfully posted without being reverted.
- You need to add citations for every claim. For your purposes, you can think about this as pretty much one citation for every sentence. As we have discussed, you can reuse citations, but you have to have them there.
- When you copied and pasted your work into the sandbox, you lost the original citations. You will need to bring these back in. See for example the first paragraph in the article "She is an American business strategist and designer who was born in Pittsburgh Pennsylvania. She is the Founding Chair of the first MFA (Master of Fine Arts) program in Design for Social Innovation at the School of Visual Arts, President of the design lab CommonWise and winner of the AIGA Medal for her contribution to the field of design.[2][3][4] She is a Rockefeller Bellagio Fellow [5] She founded the first-ever design department in a major advertising agency and later became president. Heller's main focus is to investigate the contribution design is making to human health and what impact it has on society." The "[2][3][4]" and "[5]" were originally citations in the original article. But when you copied it over, you probably didn't copy the source code, which means you lost the citations. You will need copy those over (remember how I showed you the <ref></ref> tags? That is what you want to bring over. For example, the first one on the existing page is <ref name="twsNYT5">{{cite news|url=https://dsi.sva.edu/faculty/cheryl-heller/|title=DSI Faculty Directory|accessdate=October 17, 2017}}</ref>
- You need to copyedit for grammar. Take these sentences, for example: "When Heller was younger she attended the School of the Museum of Fine Arts. During her time there all she knew about was painting and printmaking. For years she studied in those two fields. Programs involving science, technology and business were rarely heard of. None the less anything that helped steer individuation in the proper career direction. Heller earned a bachelor's degree in Fine Arts at Ohio Wesleyan University, and later studied at Goddard College, where she earned her Master of Fine Arts in Creative Writing. With her creative writing skills, Heller has influenced several individuals around the world." This would be much clearer as something like "Heller attended the School of the Museum of Fine Arts, studying painting and printmaking. Heller earned a bachelor's degree in Fine Arts at Ohio Wesleyan University, and later earned her Master of Fine Arts in Creative Writing from Goddard College." I'm not sure what "With her creative writing skills, Heller has influenced several individuals around the world" means: I'm sure she has influenced more than several people, but is there a specific claim you are trying to summarize here? --Theredproject (talk) 22:59, 14 December 2019 (UTC)
- I wanted to add that this draft is extremely promotional in tone, as it takes a very positive, praising tone towards Heller. Sections like "Why Clients Always Get What They Deserve" will be seen as an advertisement for Heller, so I would recommend removing this entirely. I think that some of the tone is likely because you were heavily relying on primary sources for information - keep in mind that primary sources will almost always be written to advertise the person, topic, or viewpoint in question, so take any claims from them with a grain of salt. Here are some other notes:
- There is no need to create a section explaining social innovation, as there is already an article on this topic - all we need to do is link to it and readers can click through if they want to learn more about it.
- Make sure that you stick to Wikipedia's formatting and style when it comes to how articles are set up, such as with the article lead.
- In the lead, you mentioned that she founded the MFA twice.
- This needs sourcing, as much of what you've added is unsourced.
- I'm going to go through and make some sample re-writes of how things can be rephrased. I will also leave some notes in each section. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:41, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
Francescacast/sandbox moved to draftspace
[edit]Appears to be a duplicate of Cheryl Heller. Somehow it seems to have weird name so I have moved it to draft where you can work on it in. scope_creepTalk 00:49, 20 December 2019 (UTC)
Your submission at Articles for creation: Cheryl Heller (February 4)
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