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Welcome

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You are now officially on Wikipedia!Telupei (talk) 20:22, 20 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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I didn't know what else to put here, so... hello, classmate? PeabodySam (talk) 20:23, 20 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lin.chr, you are invited to the Co-op!

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Hi there! Lin.chr, you are invited to The Co-op, a gathering place for editors where you can find mentors to help you build and improve Wikipedia. If you're looking for an editor who can help you out, please join us! I JethroBT (I'm a Co-op mentor)

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PeabodySam_Lin.chr_U3PR

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Summary

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Printable organs are artificial organ replacements primarily used for transplants. These organs are made via 3D bioprinting, which was first introduced in 2003 by Thomas Boland for cell matrices and has since grown to produce tissues and organs. Two major methods of 3D bioprinting are drop-based bioprinting and extrusion bioprinting, with the former being faster and the latter being better for more complex structures. Bioink, such as alginate or fibrin polymers, must be biocompatible, biodegradable, customizable, and adaptable. However, the lack of biological signaling and processes in artificial environments limits development, and artificial structures must be vacularized.

Major Points

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For the most part, this is a very well-done article. It covers a lot of information that is relevant to the article's subject; references a number of articles and literature reviews; and is styled and formatted appropriately for a Wikipedia article, with links to other pages (and definitions provided when links are not available) and distinct sections. It seems complete to me; I honestly don't know what else to suggest including, aside from an image and/or infobox if possible.

It is clearly a massive improvement over the current Wikipedia page for printable organs. In that regard, I suppose that it might be useful to transfer over some of the content that is exclusive to the current Wikipedia article (i.e. the "smart gel" information) and maybe work in some of the external links on that page, though that would be up to the author's discretion whether or not this information is relevant enough to be included in this revision.

Minor Points

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In most of the article, phrases starting with "such as" are appropriately preceded by a comma, but the second sentence of the first paragraph has two instances where the commas are missing.

Since the subject of the article, printable organs, is produced largely (if not entirely) through 3D printing, the name of the section "3D Printing of Organs" seems vague and possibly even redundant. Since the section discusses various techniques, perhaps it would be better named something along the lines of "3D Printing Techniques."

In terms of language, "as opposed to" could possibly be simplified to "instead of." The use of "somewhat" feels a little vague and informal.

The sentence starting with "Estimates for when such organs" has a lengthy subject and only a one-word predicate "vary." This syntax feels strange, so I would recommend revising this sentence. Perhaps examples of the varying estimates could be provided.

--PeabodySam (talk) 23:28, 5 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Mentorship

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Hi Lin.chr, I was assigned to be your mentor through the co-op. Let me know how I can help you with your article on printable organs (or anything else)! Thanks, Calliopejen1 (talk) 17:38, 13 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Calliopejen1, It's great to hear from my co-op mentor. Right now, I just completed a draft of an article, which is in my sandbox. It basically reworks Wikipedia's current article on printable organs. I was wondering if you could look it over, maybe provide some suggestions. Thanks for the help! Lin.chr (talk) 21:15, 14 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay responding! Somehow I missed this message. :( Overall, this looks good, and significantly better than the sad article on Wikipedia currently. A couple thoughts: for times that you are making medical claims (e.g. printed bladders are used clinically), you should use high-quality medical sources -- see WP:MEDRS. Comments on your sources generally: Huffington Post and Business Insider are poor-quality sources and should be replaced. For the first history paragraph, it would be good to include a secondary source in addition to the primary source (patent). As a general matter, secondary sources are better than primary sources; it looks like you use some of both in your draft. Calliopejen1 (talk) 17:59, 22 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the advice! Don't worry about the delay, I'm just glad to have some feedback. I'll incorporate the suggestions you provided, and then "submit my draft for review," using the link provided on my sandbox page. I'm a bit busy now, with classes and tests, but I'll try to have some edits made within the week. Thanks again! Lin.chr (talk) 20:03, 25 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Printable organ (May 7)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Wikiisawesome was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
wia (talk) 20:30, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]


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Hello! I noticed your article was declined at Articles for Creation, and that can be disappointing. If you are wondering or curious about why your article submission was declined please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! wia (talk) 20:30, 7 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there, I'm HasteurBot. I just wanted to let you know that Draft:Printable organ, a page you created, has not been edited in 6 months. The Articles for Creation space is not an indefinite storage location for content that is not appropriate for articlespace.

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Thank you for your attention. HasteurBot (talk) 01:37, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]