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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 07:10, 15 July 2017 [1].

Grevillea juniperina

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Nominator(s): Melburnian (talk · contribs) & Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:52, 24 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a nice plant I grow in my garden. Melburnian have buffed it up over the years. Have at it. Cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:52, 24 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

now fixed--Melburnian (talk) 02:52, 25 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from Hmlarson

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Here are a few questions/suggestions. Overall, looks very good.

under Taxonomy
  1. First sentence: should it read from the Port Jackson area (the)?
now added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:33, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Second paragraph: last sentence is unreferenced.
  2. bullet point #4 - could link to Western Sydney (if applicable)
better/tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:33, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  1. bullet point #5 - "is a shrub to 2 m (7 ft) found in alluvial soils and riverbanks in the catchments of the Cox's, Kowmung, Wollondilly and Shoalhaven Rivers in the Central and Southern Tablelands, from Tallong to Berrima, as well as Lidsdale to Jenolan State Forest in the southwestern Blue Mountains.[5]" --> Is there a way to split this fragment up?
long sentence split now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:55, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
under Cultivation
  1. third sentence: should there be a "the" before the word subspecies?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:33, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  1. sixth bullet point 'H22': should comma be a dash?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:33, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  1. 'Poorinda Adorning' and last bullet point: should these include periods at the end?
tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:33, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
images need alt text
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References
  1. There are three dead links Hmlarson (talk) 00:24, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
one updated, one is a book page with an isbn so not needed and removed....and the last I am hunting have found. Not a great source but is a bog-standard fact about prickly plants and safe haven for small birds. All the books have snippet views on this only...(am not at home currently). Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:46, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good to me. Nice work! Hmlarson (talk) 03:11, 28 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support from JennyOz

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  • Distribution - mugga ironbark E. sideroxylon - refine wlink to Eucalyptus sideroxylon?
oops, that was an oversight, now fixed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:30, 29 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
now added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:30, 29 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Second mention of Coxs River (at G. j. sulphurea) - remove apostrophe?
thx/removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:12, 29 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks JennyOz (talk) 13:00, 29 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from FunkMonk

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For the inflorescence, I have "has several individual flowers emerging from a central rounded flower head", perianth would be hard to do succinctly "non-reproductive tube-like structure around sexual parts...? - which is why I have just left bluelink, pistil is similarly complex, but added "growth form" to habit Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:33, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This was later synonymised with G. juniperina, before being recognised as a distinct subspecies." No source, could also give date and author for synonymisarion.
the taxonomy was a bit all over the place until 2000, when Makinson sorted it out. Sometime between 1870 and then the recognition of sulphurea just sort of went away... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:24, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "There are seven subspecies of Grevillea juniperina, six of which have been recognised or described by Bob Makinson of the New South Wales Herbarium in 2000:" Though it is probably given below, could be nice to have a citation at the end of this sentence.
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:24, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "'Audrey' – G. juniperina crossed with G. victoriae. Bred in 1957." Needs citation.
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:24, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why not spell out Australian Capital Territory?
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:33, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "– is a shrub to 2 m (7 ft) that grows" Missing word?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:33, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "yellow-flowered shrub to 2 m (7 ft) high" Likewise.
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:33, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It hybridises" Link?
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 13:33, 30 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I see some broken harv citations.
done Parcly Taxel 03:34, 3 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
File:Grevillea juniperina.JPG: File information might need some filling in.
now added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:49, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
File:GrevjunMorongCk1.JPG: License seems fine for me.
File:Grevilleajuniperinamolonglo.jpg: License seems fine for me.
File:Grevillea Poorinda Queen.jpg: License seems fine for me.
File:Grevillea x semperflorens.jpg: License seems fine for me.
ALT text is simply a recitation of the caption, which isn't helpful. All image uses seem pertinent. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 13:25, 1 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
alt rejigged Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:49, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Support on images only Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:49, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support I can't find any fault with this little gem, after fixing the aforementioned Harv error Parcly Taxel 03:50, 3 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Source review from Ealdgyth

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  • I randomly googled three sentences and nothing showed up except mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no copyright violations.
Otherwise everything looks good. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:38, 7 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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