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Check kiting

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I've listed this article for peer review because it seems like a potential GA, but I'd like to seek some additional input before submitting a nomination. It's completely referenced, reads well, and has no concern tags.

Thanks, C_(u)w_(t)C_(c) 19:19, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments:

I gave this article a quick scan. Despite the intro above, this article is not completely referenced—the section dubbed "Retail-based kiting" has no cites whatsoever. It also has a "dead link" tag posted as a concern tag. Additionally, it partially overlaps in subject matter with Cheque fraud; a merge should be considered.

I do not believe this article is anywhere near GA Status; it lacks the citations to even clear B Class standards.

Georgejdorner (talk) 15:14, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

I'm not in agreement with the idea of a merge. Check Kiting is a form of Check Fraud, but it's much more appropriate for it to have its own article. C_(u)w_(t)C_(c) 18:02, 8 November 2013 (UTC)

I did not expect that you would be in favor of a merge. However, the fact that I suggest it points out the lack of demarcation between the two articles.Georgejdorner (talk) 15:37, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments from LT910001

Thanks for your edits to this article. I agree that this article would need to be improved before it could be promoted to GA. Some improvements you might want to consider include:

• References for all paragraphs
• Rewriting the lead to make it less technical
• Summarising the examples given, and providing more information on analysis / use in famous crimes / history / current prevalence etc.

I would advise you to find and consult an additional 3-4 sources, such as news articles, books, or journal articles, that detail the use and history of this crime, expand the article with these sources, and then consider nomination. I think that the input of an extra 3-4 good sources would probably help you renovate the article and would make a big difference. I hope this input is helpful! Kind regards, LT910001 (talk) 01:27, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

Thanks! C_(u)w_(t)C_(c) 19:43, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

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-(t) Josve05a (c) 22:56, 22 November 2013 (UTC)