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Gent Strazimiri

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I've listed this article for peer review because I build it up from scratch and wants to know what could be done better.

Thanks, Vinie007 14:58, 30 May 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for working on this interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement.

• A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are many Biography FAs at Category:FA-Class biography articles for some model articles
• two disambiguation links
• The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself
• My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
• Watch WP:OVERLINKing - link once in the lead and once in the body of the article (at most). Here in just the lead Assembly of the Republic of Albania is linked twice (Albania Parliament is a redirect) and so is Democratic Party of Albania
• Avoid vague time terms like current in Stazimiri is the current deputy leader of the Democratic Party in the Albanian parliament.[7] Use things like "As of June 2011, Stazimiri is the deputy leader of the Democratic Party in the Albanian parliament.[7] or you could give the year he started as deputy leader
• I am not sure what this means On 1992 Strazimiri graduated on the faculty of Law at the University of Tirana.[8] I think it means he graduated from law school, but it sounds like he was a faculty member (professor) instead.
• I would list events in Background in chronological order for better clarity. It goes from 1992 to 2007-2009, then back to 1990, then forward to 2007-2009 again.
• Avoid needless repetition - in Background it says He joined the Democratic Party in the 1990, and was an activist at the fall of communism in Albania. and then in Career it syas Strazimiri became member of the Democratic Party in 1990, this was during the fall of communism in Albania.[4]
• Spell out abbreviations on first use - so "Forumi Rinor i Partise Demokratike (FRPD)"
• The article has lots of little typos - "He entersed the race with several years of political experience ..." (entered) or "During 2002 and 2005 he was the adcisor to the president ..." (advisor) - and needs a copyedit.
• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 05:17, 4 June 2011 (UTC)