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Atomic bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki

Atomic bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

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Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:26, 31 January 2014 (UTC) and Binksternet (talk) 10:26, 31 January 2014 (UTC)

This article is about one of history's best known events. It also ranks 282 in traffic on the English wikipedia. About 2.4 million times per annum. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:26, 31 January 2014 (UTC)

The article made GA three months ago, in a thorough review conducted by Anotherclown who is a veteran editor in the military field. A week ago, the article passed the tough A-Class review conducted by the WikiProject Military history. Here's the A-Class version of the article from 18 January 2014. Of course, the topic is of much wider interest than a purely military audience. I think now is a good time to see that the article satisfies the needs of the English-speaking world. Binksternet (talk) 16:24, 31 January 2014 (UTC)

Comments from Mirokado

Comments after reading through the article (not yet really "a review")

• Surrender of Japan and subsequent occupation: ... Japan would accept their terms on one condition, that the declaration "does not compromise any demand which prejudices the prerogatives of His Majesty as a Sovereign ruler." "compromise" is wrong here. The word "comprise" was probably intended, but "include" is quite likely to be the best translation of the original as it refers to only a part of the whole. If this is a mistranslation from the Japanese you can correct it, otherwise it needs a [sic].
• Japanese-language references (I noticed Kido & Yoshitake 1966 which is presumably in Japanese) need |trans_title=... and |language=Japanese parameters (similar if there are any other foreign-language refs).

--Mirokado (talk) 23:25, 31 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for your review! There's no need to post a New York Review of Books review at FAC. A few comments here and source check there are most welcome. I've checked this source and it seems that "comprise" is correct. (But Wainstock p. 176 says "compromise")

Yes, "comprise" looks correct based on the text provided by Hoshina (which is very interesting to read). Thanks. Mirokado (talk) 15:28, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

I've translated 木戶幸一日記 (Kido Kōichi nikki) as ("Kido Kōichi diary". Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

• Background / Air raids on Japan: In the large scale industrial warfare ..., the primary aim of the USAAF was ...: "In this large scale ..." will read better.
  • Reworded Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
• Background / Atomic bomb development: scientists and technicians at the Los Alamos under ...: Remove "the".
  • Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
• Preparations / Organisation and training:
  • civilian and military personnel of Project Alberta: "from Project Alberta" (which also appears later in the article) will be better here.
    • Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
  • SS Cape Victory should be "SS Cape Victory" (no italics for SS)
    • Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
• Preparations / Bombs: "tamper" has a specific technical meaning in the context of atomic weapons, which I had to look up. Please clarify the article text (for printed versions) and add a wikilink, thus: "Magnesium was chosen because it does not act as a tamper (neutron reflector)."
  • Linked. This is the sort of thing I never notice, because I've spent two years now working on Manhattan Project articles. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
• Preparations / Choice of targets: In the list of criteria, the quote is misplaced: it is relevant to the first and second items but not to the third.
  • Removed the quote. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
• Hiroshima / Hiroshima during World War II: the [[5th Division (Imperial Japanese Army)|5th Division]] and the [[IJA 224th Division|224th Division]], a recently formed mobile unit.: The redlink target is inconsistent with the naming of the existing article. It looks as if [[224th Division (Imperial Japanese Army)|224th Division]] would be a better redlink definition here.
  • Either way it is still a red link, but the MILHIST naming standard changed in 2007, so .. done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:24, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

That was quick! Thanks. --Mirokado (talk) 21:05, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

• Hiroshima / The bombing:
  • Some times for the aircraft themselves may be helpful: when did they take off from Tinian, when did they rendezvous over Iwo Jima? (corresponding information is given for the flight to Nagasaki).
    • Added from the navigator's account. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:45, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
  • Japanese early warning radar detected ...: The timing will be clearer to the reader if this sentence begins something like "During the night of August 5–6, Japanese early warning radar detected ..."
    • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:45, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
  • The all-clear was sounded in Hiroshima at 12:05.[117] About an hour before the bombing, the air raid alert was sounded again, as Straight Flush flew over the city. ... The all-clear was sounded over Hiroshima again at 07:09.[119] Something wrong with the timings here. All-clear at 12:05 and again at 07:05. If the other raids were night bombing (mentioned elswhere in the article), five minutes after midnight is 00:05.
    • Changed to 00:05 Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:45, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
• Hiroshima / Japanese realization of the bombing: do we know the name of the staff officer who flew to the city, gave the first comprehensive report and started to organise relief measures? If so, please add it.
  • No, I could not find that. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:45, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

    Not an issue, but I'll leave it open in case anyone else can find it. --Mirokado (talk) 00:05, 2 February 2014 (UTC)

• Nagasaki / The bombing:
  • "Sweeney continued to wait for The Big Stink, ...": The aircraft name seems to be just Big Stink according to other occurrences here and in Big Stink. Replace by "Sweeney continued to wait for Big Stink, ..." or change the others to include "The".
    • That's correct. Removed "The" Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:45, 1 February 2014 (UTC)
  • Big Stink's absence seems to have had a significant effect on the mission. Can we add a sentence saying what it was in fact doing? (the plane article says it arrived late at Nagasaki to take photos of the blast effects and then joined the other aircraft at Okinawa, but I'm not seeing sources there suitable for an FA to confirm that).
    • General Groves knows the answer. Interesting how this incident was swept under the carpet. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:45, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

-- Mirokado (talk) 19:33, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks, you've addressed all my concerns with the text. I'll try to have another look round on Sunday. -- Mirokado (talk) 00:05, 2 February 2014 (UTC)

• Post-attack casualties:
  • People opposed to the atomic bombings have claimed that birth defects and deformities were common among the children of survivors who were pregnant at the time of the bombings. We need an example ([who?]) of such a claim and a reference for this sentence. I'm not at all trying to encourage you to remove the sentence which provides balance but we need to know, for example, whether these were claims based on studies on people or "just" the fears or studies on mice mentioned in Voosen 2011 (if so, the Voosen ref repeated here with a brief clarification would be OK)
  • James Crow expressed that they could still find the likelihood of birth defects or other causes among the survivors of Hiroshima and Nagasaki.: I'm pretty sure this should read "James Crow expressed doubt that they could still find ...".
  • Twice in this paragraph we refer to "birth defects or other causes". I would think of birth defects etc as "effects" of the radiation rather than "causes", but "birth defects or other effects" would not read well...
  • Many members of the ABCC and, later the RERF, were still looking for possible birth defects or other causes among the survivors decades later, but found no evidence that they were common among the survivors. This sentence is problematical from the point of view of formulation, here are some suggestions:
    • repetition of "birth defects or other causes" (or whatever if that is changed) from earlier in the paragraph, perhaps we can say "these problems" or similar the second time?
    • repetition of "the survivors": can we omit "among the survivors" as it is implied by context?
    • "common" is a rather imprecise summary of medical study results: it depends a bit on what the references actually say of course, but "... found no evidence that they were significantly more common than in the general population." is an example of how the results might have been expressed.
• alt text for pictures: where present, the alt text is fine, describing what we can see in the picture as opposed to the caption which gives details of what is depicted. Please add alt text for the rest of the pictures, or ask me to do so if you prefer.
  • for the lead photos, the alt text could say "Two aerial photos ..." to distinguish them from the ground-witness photos presented later

I try not to make requests in dribs and drabs, but I like to look through an article once more if I am still finding typos, so I'll try to look through it again during the week. -- Mirokado (talk) 15:31, 2 February 2014 (UTC)

Comments from John

At first glance I see the infobox flag issue we have been discussing for weeks has still not been resolved. I also see "atomic" used instead of the more correct "nuclear" and a tendency to focus on the US experience rather than the Japanese (in the run-up section). There are some fairly major infelicities (howevers, WP:SEASON, etc) which will need a bit of copyediting. I see one sentence which isn't. The sourcing looks good and the pictures. Let me come back to this. --John (talk) 22:03, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

I will handle the infobox. I spent some time fiddling with it. The terms "atomic" and "nuclear" are generally interchangeable in the context of this article. See here for an explanation. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:13, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

• I have to move to oppose. Notwithstanding the sterling work that has been done and is being done on this article, the little UK flag is still giving way undue weight to the two (2) UK observers who sat in on one plane on one of the two attacks. We discussed a solution back in December, but it seemingly has still not been implemented. More importantly, as the reviewer below has noted, the story has been told largely from a US military point of view, neglecting the Japanese military and Japanese civilian points of view. I know sources exist which could be used to balance the article. It's a shame this has not been done. Roughly 50 times as many civilians died in these attacks as in the September 11 attacks; without getting all weepy about it, we should give that some weight, imagine if our article on those attacks focused mainly on the Al Qaeda methods and personnel. It wouldn't work, and neither does this. I don't like the nuclear-atomic thing either; I obviously get the point that terminology has shifted over the years, but as a scientist, I feel strongly that the "atomic" terminology is just plain wrong. Rethink required, on several fronts. --John (talk) 20:19, 7 February 2014 (UTC)
  1. The solution was implemented; the strengths are in the infobox. The British contribution was significant. The US and British governments intended that it be seen as an Allied effort. Most of the servicemen of the 509th CG were enlisted air and ground crew. Of them, only Tibbets would still be notable if the bombing had not occurred. Their contribution was outweighed by those of the 51 scientists and technicians of Project Alberta, many of whom are notable in their own right. Penney's contribution goes deeper than that, in that he was a close confidant of Groves, and also one of the people who chose Hiroshima as a target.
  2. As noted below, if you can suggest a good book on the relief efforts, I will obtain it and incorporate it.
  3. The title of the article represents substantial consensus over a long period of time. Your point is noted, but I will require a clear consensus before I rename the article to Nuclear strikes on Hiroshima and Nagasaki. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:10, 7 February 2014 (UTC)
  • The terminology isn't a show-stopper. The infobox slightly is. The slanted coverage very much is. I'm not sure what you mean by "relief efforts". I recommend Retribution by Max Hastings (ISBN 0307275361) as a source for the Japanese side of things. Do you know it? --John (talk) 18:12, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

    Yes, I am very much aware of the controversy surrounding that book, and that is why we are not using it. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:31, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

    • Interesting. Do you think controversy is always a bad thing? Do you think this is a controversial subject? Should controversy be avoided in talking about controversial things? Maybe if "we" had better answers to these questions than we do at present, this would be a better and more complete article. As it is, it's a long way off FA. It fails, in my strongly-held opinion, on 1b, 1c and 1d. Probably 1a too (it did the last time I looked) but that is a lot easier to fix. These three are hard to fix and I don't think, judging by your responses here, that they will be. --John (talk) 20:44, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

      Depends on what sort of controversy we are talking about. When the controversy is about the gross misuse of sources, it runs afoul of our requirement for reliable sources. The article is about a controversial subject, and I think it handles that well. I regard the work done on the leaflet campaign as one of Wikipedia's finest pieces of scholarship. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:43, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

      Gross misuse of sources? --John (talk) 23:54, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

      [1] Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:55, 9 February 2014 (UTC)

Comments from EddieHugh

I'm interested in certain aspects of this, so will comment as I notice things.

• "Although some Japanese were taken prisoner,[232] most fought until they were killed or committed suicide.[233]". The paragraph contents before this sentence mean that this implies civilians & military. The source is specifically about the military, and even then is really only about PoWs at one camp in New Zealand. "most" requires statistical back up for total war casualties, not just a few extreme examples.

• There seems to be no mention of the idea that the bombs were dropped by the US in order to influence Russia – in part to end the war before Russia could gain Japanese territory, and in part as a demonstration of the weapon's effects. These may be minority views, but they are seriously discussed.

• There's vast detail on the process of bombing (especially for Nagasaki – a paragraph on a seemingly irrelevant letter; a paragraph on a plane landing; a paragraph on a confused journalist...), and comparatively little on what the bombs did, physically and otherwise. I suspect that this is a symptom of a strong lean towards an Allied/Western/Anglophone perspective in the article. Further examples: "Depiction, public response and censorship" is almost all about the UK and the US (surely the reaction in Japan is at least as important, and what about in China, Korea...); the more than 600,000 (?) survivors get 3.5 lines on my screen, the same as the quirky trivia story of one 'double survivor' (the consequences, including societal, for the survivors were great, but are they mentioned?); there's detailed information on damage to Mitsubishi plants, but things such as Urakami Cathedral are not mentioned; the first thing written about the Hiroshima Peace Memorial is that it was designed and built by a Czech man; "Casualty estimates for immediate deaths range from 40,000 to 75,000. Total deaths by the end of 1945 may have reached 80,000" (is there a description of why? The next paragraph has lots of detail on Allied PoWs, but the 5,000–40,000 Japanese get nothing that I can find, except in the lead, which should be a summary).

• There aren't many sources from Japanese writers, but there is lots available, including in English.

• Linked to my third bullet point, the article does show the signs of coming from those with a military interest, as indicated by the nominator. As a military article, it is detailed if still too close to one-sided, but the events are about far more than decisions, orders and actions. Considering the readers: are the 2.4M looking for detail on military hardware and action, or on broader matters? Both, perhaps, but more of the latter, I suggest.

Even for "the needs of the English-speaking world", then, I feel that the current incarnation leans very strongly to one perspective and that it concentrates excessively on military aspects of what is a much more nuanced topic.

I didn't start writing with this intention, but I have to put myself down as oppose. EddieHugh (talk) 22:18, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

1. I have removed this.
2. The Debate over the atomic bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki has its own article. There is only a summary here. Same goes for the Surrender of Japan and Hibakusha. The article's focus is on the bombing, which is only covered in this article.
3. Do you have a recommended source? The editors were particularly interested in locating details about the relief efforts.
4. The former by a long shot actually if article traffic analysis is anything to go by. The article needs to cover both.

Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:56, 1 February 2014 (UTC)

Source review - spotchecks not done

• FN61: formatting
• FN83: need full citation info
• FN88: possible to provide translation of title and publisher?
• Be consistent in how website names are formatted - compare for example FNs 35 and 123 and 125
• FN133: missing publisher
• FN138: formatting, and publication wikilink goes to the wrong place
• FN143: publisher? Check for other cites that are missing info
• Why is the Truman Library linked in FN145 but not 132? Check for consistency
• Fn194: page formatting
• FN214: page?
• Compare FN216 and 217 and 228
• FN221: location?
• Fn227, 245: formatting
• What makes this a high-quality reliable source?
• FN233: pages?
• Why does Ward come after Williams?
• More specific location for Coster-Mullen?
• Gruhl: which New Brunswick?
• Lifton appears to be combining info from two different editions - the one in New York was published by Random House, and UNC is in North Carolina
• Be consistent in whether you use D.C. or DC
• Kanabun: date formatting
• FN66/67 appear to be referring to a source in Further reading - if so, that should be moved. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:35, 2 February 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks for that Nikkimaria. I think I have made all the required changes. I've added translations, but the templates do not have a field for a translation of the publisher, so I put it in with the publisher. The neatorama appeares to be sourced from this book. Given the comments on the page by the publisher (not to mention Coster-Mullin and Krauss's comments) I have removed the text. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:42, 3 February 2014 (UTC)

Feedback from Curly Turkey

I live in a city near Mt Fuji that was firebombed ten times during the war. Not that that makes me an expert or anything ... anyways, not all the following is necessarily required to meet FA standards, so feel free to strike back at any of my carpet bombing———

• I realize there are strong ties to the US here, but at the same time it is an article that involves quite a number of nations, so wouldn't it make sense to privilege metric over imperial measures (e.g. with "{{convert|16|sqmi}} of the city and 267,000 buildings")? (Yes, yes, that's an awful fine hairsplit)

  You won't get any disagreement from me about measurements. Everyone understands metric, but few people remember the old measurements. But conversions have to be handled with great care. On a recent book of mine, the copy editors wanted to convert tons to tonnes, but of course tons were a unit of volume in the old (40 cubic feet to be exact). As a historian I have a strong preference for the original measurements. FWIW, the Manhattan Project largely used metric, but the USAAF used imperial. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• Sometimes you use "U.S.", and sometimes "US" (and "UK")

  Per WP:NOTUSA, I have standardised on "U.S." Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "[[mokusatsu|ignored]] this ultimatum.": I'd format this "[[mokusatsu|ignored this ultimatum]]."—you're not linking to the word "ignore"

  I've removed it. The article is correct, but this was not the Japanese response. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "the U.S. Army Air Forces 509th Composite Group": I might word this "the 509th Composite Group of the U.S. Army Air Forces" to avoid two links appearing as one (I don't know what to do about "Silverplate Boeing B-29 Superfortress")

  A good idea. Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "The bombings' role in Japan's surrender and their ethical justification are still debated.": it would be nice to enumerate briefly some of the most common arguments

  Well, it is only one short section of the article. But the sentience sums it up well. There are actually two debates. One is about the role that the atomic bombs played in Japan's decision to surrender, as compared with other factors (namely the blockade, conventional bombing, the threat of invasion and the the Soviet Union joining the war). The other is about the ethics of using nuclear weapons.

Background

• "had entered its fourth year": I think you can safely drop "had"
• "1.25 million battle casualties": is "1.25" a translation of "one and a quarter", or does it just happen to be such a "round" number?

  It's rounded to the nearest 10,000. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "in the Philippines to 2:1 on Okinawa": "in" the Philippines, but "on" Okinawa?

  Because the Philippines is a collection of islands, whereas Okinawa is just one. It would be more historically and geographically accurate to say "the Ryukyus" (as us military historians do), as there was fighting on Ie Shima and the Kerama Islands, but we run the risk of the readers not knowing what we're talking about. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

  Actually, "Okinawa Prefecture" has been the name of the administrative district that includes the Ryukyus since 1879. If the historians insist on using "Ryukyus" to refer to the area, I suppose we have to defer to them, but anyone who's lived in Japan long enough will associate "Okinawa" with the prefecture before the island. Curly Turkey (gobble) 09:56, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "two parts: Operations Olympic and Coronet", "Operation Ketsugō": worth redlinks?

  Alas, they all redirect to to Operation Downfall. So the links would be blue. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Vice Admiral Takijirō Ōnishi", "General of the Army George Marshall", "Secretary of War Henry L. Stimson", "Brigadier General Haywood S. Hansell", "Major General Curtis LeMay", "Major General Leslie R. Groves, Jr.": are "Vice Admiral", "General of the Army", "Secretary of War", "Brigadier General", "Major General" overlinking (and some duplinks)?

  Only one duplicated. Removed it. Otherwise they are all fine. Military ranks are not widely understood. And the Secretary of War is a post that no longer exists. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• File:Tokyo 1945-3-10-1.jpg: you've got some cited material in here—isn't it best to have this (and the cites) in the body?

  Not sure. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Japan's six largest cities had been devastated.": I could've sworn I read that Kyoto was spared—am I wrong, or was it not in the top six?

  It wasn't one of the largest six. Tokyo, Osaka, Nagoya, Kawasaki, Yokohama and Kobe. In that order.

  Surprising—today it's the sixth. I was under the impression it's growth was on the decline, not the rise. Curly Turkey (gobble) 09:56, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

  Sounds right. From the Kyoyo article: In 1947, it went back to being 3rd, but its population has gradually declined ever since. By 1960 it had fallen to 5th again, and by 1990 it had fallen to 7th, in 2012 it is now 8th. If current trends continue it could fall to 9th after Kawasaki. I think the bombings may have had something to do with its sudden rise to 3rd. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:54, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "escorts based on Iwo Jima and Okinawa": this is the first appearance of Iwo Jima, so could you give it a link?

  Done. It used to be mentioned earlier byt we cut that stuff back. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• "under American physicist": definitely overlinking

  Removed a duplicate link. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

Hopefully I'll find time to continue before long ...

———Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:16, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for your review! It's great to see some reviewers I haven't seen before. (Could also use a few of you on this article hint. hint.) Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:05, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

• Coincidentally, I actually had my eye on that one. Curly Turkey (gobble) 09:56, 5 February 2014 (UTC)

More from Curly Turkey

• The dates are sometimes MD, sometimes DM (particularly later in the article).
• surprised to see no mention of the word "pikadon". Do English sources never mention it?
  • It looks like it's mentioned in at least Death in Life: Survivors of Hiroshima, which you're already using as a source. Curly Turkey (gobble) 05:28, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

    Not me, but I have a source for it. Added. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

    Well, that's not really what I was aiming at. "Pikadon" is a word used to describe the two bombings—there are books and films named Pikadon. When my father-in-law talks to me about the bombings, he uses the word pikadon. Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:38, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

Preparations

• "then approached President": is definitely overlinking

  Many people have not heard of him. Also, the role of the President is not widely understood. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

  The president himself certainly needs to be linked, but President is without a doubt overlinking. Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:38, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "saying that "we can propose no technical demonstration": not a fan of this style; when read aloud, the unannounced switch from third to first person is jarring
• "some even 97% destruction": were there several that suffered "97%" destruction, or was there one extreme case? If the former, I'd reword to "up to"; if the latter, I'd name the place

  Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Japanese opposition to the war": this makes it sound like Japanese were generally opposed to the war. Is Japanese resistance to the Empire of Japan in World War II related to this?

  Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

  Sorry, I didn't just mean it should be linked—the wording tiself could be interpreted as there being a general opposition to the war by Japanese people in general. I was thinking something along the lines of "those Japanese opposed to the war". Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:38, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Various sources give conflicting information about when the last leaflets were dropped on Hiroshima prior to the atomic bomb. Robert Jay Lifton writes that it was July 27, and Theodore H. McNelly that it was July 3. The USAAF history notes eleven cities were targeted with leaflets on July 27, but Hiroshima was not one of them, and there were no leaflet sorties on July 30.": this seems to me overly detailed, dragging down the flow of the text. I'd relegate it to a footnote.

  The text is the result of long and protracted discussion, and I'm not changing it. It actually sparked some scholarly research. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

  That's unfortunate. I really think it drags down the text with what is serously tangential to the point—in other words, footnote material. Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:38, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "for firebombing: Otaru, Akita, Hachinohe, Fukushima, Urawa, Takayama, Iwakuni, Tottori, Imabari, Yawata, Miyakonojo, and Saga.": you don't want to link any of those?

  Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Prime Minister Suzuki Kantarō": WP:MOS-JA specifies that names of those born since the Meiji era are to be SURNAME-GIVEN NAME. I've had the page moved.
• "than a rehash (yakinaoshi)": is there some reason to provide the Japanese here?

  The wording is controversial. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

  Can we get a note on that then? Otherwise it just seems random—out of all the Japanese words that could be in the article, which this one? Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:38, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Sir Henry Maitland Wilson,": I can't remember where in the MOS it is, but I'm pretty sure we're supposed to drop the "Sir"

  Per WP:HONORIFIC: The honorific titles Sir, Dame, Lord and Lady are included in the initial reference and infobox heading for the person, but are optional after that. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "a strongly worded signal": what is this? A telegraph?

  Radiogram. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

  Could it be explicated? I think most readers will be left scratching their heads over this one. Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:38, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

Hiroshima

• "in the Hiroshima Castle": is that "the" supposed to be there?

  Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "and extended, right up to the morning": you could safely drop ", right"

  Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "armed the bomb during the flight to minimize the risks during takeoff": can this be clarified? It sure sounds to me like maximizing risk!

  Added explanation: Parsons had witnessed four B-29s crash and burn of takeoff, and feared that a nuclear explosion would occur if a B-29 crashed with an armed Little Boy on board. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• inconsistent formatting: earlier "on the night of 9/10", now "During the night of August 5–6,"

  Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• very nitpicky, but while "one mile" does convert to "1.6 km", that would assume it were quite precisely a mile, and not rounded. Can you confirm if this is so? 1.5 or 1.7 km would round pretty nicely to a mile.

  "about 1 mile" Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "where they were stoned to death": before, during, after, as a result of the bombing?

• Re-worded to make it clear that it was after the bombing. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "operator of the Broadcasting Corporation of Japan noticed": the official English name of the NHK is "Japan Broadcasting Corporation"

  Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "as the Genbaku, or A-bomb Dome": "Genbaku" tranlsates as "A-bomb", whereas this wording seems to imply it translates as "A-bomb Dome"

  Re-woeded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "{{Nihongo|Eizo Nomura|野村 英三|Nomura Eizō}}": I'm pretty sure this is not how the {{Nihongo}} template was meant to be used—it's a translation template, but this isn't a translation, it's a name. I don't think we're doning the reading any favours by showing them the Japanese names in Japanese style and English style, either. Personally, I'd drop the whole thing (including the kanji) and just go with "Eizō Nomura" (GIVEN NAME-SURNAME, with the macron as per MOS-JA)

  Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

• "who was in the basement of": definitely overlinking

  Unlinked. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:45, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

More later ... Curly Turkey (gobble) 05:26, 7 February 2014 (UTC)