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Requests for Feedback

This page provides comments and constructive criticism about articles that you have drafted, created, or substantially changed. This is not a general help page. To seek assistance or ask a question, see Wikipedia:Questions. If you are seeking an outside opinion about a dispute, please follow the steps in Wikipedia:Dispute resolution. Please note that this page is patrolled by volunteer editors just like you and it may take several days to review your request.

Before you request feedback

There are certain things which come up again and again so it may help if you deal with them before requesting feedback: Does your article have reliable sources? These are important in terms of both verifiability and notability. Do you have a conflict of interest that may harm your ability to produce a neutral article? If you would like a beginner's guide to these sorts of issues, take a look at the article wizard. If you are unsure about how to edit Wikipedia articles, take a look at this tutorial. For a more general discussion of writing your first article, see "Your first article".

How to post a request

Place a Wikilink, with the title of the page inside [[ and ]] - for example, [[User:Example/Lipsum]] or [[Cats]] - in the box below. Click Click To Add Request In the new article, Write a brief summary of your work or what in particular you need help with, but do not post the whole article here. If you have rewritten an existing article, you may wish to provide a diff link from that article's history that shows your changes. Check regularly for responses to your request; they will most often be made here. ↓ Post your request using the box below. Replace "Untitled" with a wikilink to your article - e.g. [[User:Example/Lipsum]] or [[Cats]] ↓

After Receiving Feedback

Check back here often, as you will receive a response here. Respond to the feedback, either with a simple thank you, to ask for help with anything mentioned, or, after you've made some of the improvements, what they think of them. Consider helping out here in the future - anyone can read up on what articles should be like and provide constructive criticism.

Are you providing feedback?

Please consider notifying the user whose article you are providing feedback for by placing a message on their talk page, so they will be able to read it in a timely manner and reply if necessary. You can use.. {{Feedbackreply-sm}} A template asking the user to check back here and consider responding {{Feedbackreply-alt}} A more personal version of the first offering your help with developing, moving to mainspace, etc.

(For help, see Wikipedia:Purge)

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Index of all requests for feedback

Chandra Om

Hello,

This is the first page i have created, subject is Chandra Om User:Premandom/Chandra_om, a well-known teacher in Yoga circles. i am intersted if you think it needs any work, and what type before i try to post it for everyone to see. Thanks very much.

Premandom (talk) 23:30, 21 November 2009 (UTC)

Good job on the article not being promotional, but aren't you in violation of the conflict of interests rules? Xcviii (talk) 01:16, 4 December 2009 (UTC)

Premandom - thank you for your time and the feedback Xcviii. i am not sure what you mean about the conflict of interest. Is it because my username has a 'om' in it? 'Prem and Om' is how i sign some of my emails. It means Love and God and i thought it was a nice username. Sorry for the confusion. Should i try to post it under a less confusing looking username? Or do you have any other suggestions? Premandom (talk) 13:48, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Your user name is fine. However I disagree with Xcviii about the draft article. It does read as promotional to me, more like a press release than an encyclopedic article. Phrases such as "dedicated her life to selfless service", "initiated by Sri Dharma Mittra into his spiritual lineage", "dedicating her life to the service of others" are not encyclopedic. – ukexpat (talk) 16:40, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

Premandom - thank you for the feedback. I am not sure how to edit it to make it more understandable. In the Yogic tradition, spiritual initiation and selfless service (Karma Yoga) are commonly understood phrases and ideas, though in western culture they are not. I looked at wiki pages on other Yogis, ie, Swami Sivananda, Dharma Mittra and Swami Sivanda Radha to see what language had previously been acceptable and this language is common to them as well. Do you have any specific suggestions on how it can be more encyclopedic? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Premandom (talk • contribs) 16:59, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

3CX Phone System

I have updated this page based on the feedback received User:Voipguy/3CX_Phone_System and would welcome further feedback Voipguy (talk) 13:52, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JanaDixon/ipodmeister

Hi there! I wrote this article on a company I heard about on the news. I've tried to write it once before and it came across too advertisment like I suppose. I was hoping to get some feedback to make it acceptable for wikipedia. Thanks for any help!

JanaDixon (talk) 18:09, 25 November 2009 (UTC)JanaDixon 11/25/09

At the moment the tone is still too promotional in my view so the tone will need some work before it is moved to the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 18:56, 30 November 2009 (UTC)

I revised the article and added a picture. I think. I'm still a little confused and I have 12 windows open with different guides. Is it still too promotional? Thanks again!

JanaDixon (talk) 16:09, 2 December 2009 (UTC) JanaDixon 12/2/09

I think in order for this to be sufficiently nonpromotional, you need to think of it as a page to explain another page. Such as, if there is a general social movement towards bartering/recycling, you could talk about this group in that context, and provide links to the main wiki page talking about that movement. As long as all the article does is talk about a company or group and its objectives/goals/projects, it's not an encyclopedia article; it's a promotional item. Xcviii (talk) 00:59, 4 December 2009 (UTC)

Sorry again to bother everyone! I tried to add more about the recycling and Voluntary Simplicity aspects of the company, better? Worse?

JanaDixon (talk) 19:50, 7 December 2009 (UTC) JanaDixon

I appreciate your energy to improve the article. Currently, it still looks to me like a promotional article for this company. --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 01:59, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Richard Isaac Fine

Seeking feedback.InproperinLA (talk) 15:16, 4 December 2009 (UTC)

I'm uncomfortable with some aspects of this article.

I've made some changes, and reported my concern here.

BLP's are a high profile issue at Wikipedia, so I want to make sure we are handling this correctly.--SPhilbrickT 19:07, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

New Industrial Revolution

I would like some assistance in tightening up the article New Industrial Revolution. This article was deleted once and was just recently reinstated. If you would like the full history, you can check out my talk page ~ * ~ Blue Lunar Storm ~ * ~ (talk) 23:40, 4 December 2009 (UTC)

I am specifically interested in including more references to this movement, so that it is not on the chopping block again. This is an existing worldwide movement, and has been referred to by this name. Thank you!! ~ * ~ Blue Lunar Storm ~ * ~ (talk) 23:40, 4 December 2009 (UTC)

I am leaning towards requesting its deletion again to be honest with you. You might be better writing an article on the book Cradle to Cradle if it meets notability guidelines.

• It appears to be similar to a neologism. It may not be an appropriate article. See Wikipedia:Avoid neologisms
• Yes, it is sourced, but it looks like you used synthesis of published material that advances a position (WP:SYNTHESIS}. "New Industrial Revolution" does not appear in here or here for example. You need to find sources linking all of the subsections to the subject. If they don't even mention the subject you are publishing an essay (WP:NOT#ESSAY).
• These are a couple lines that jumped out:

• "The New Industrial Revolution will produce a world of abundance and good design - a delightful, safe world that our children can play in." We cannot tell the future
• "At the heart of the New Industrial Revolution is a quantum leap in the way that humans think of the products that we purchase and consume. The traditional "cradle to grave" product lifecycle must be changed to a system of "cradle to cradle" product flow" I assume this is a direct line from the book. Quote it if it is. A little fluffy for a neutral encyclopedia so paraphrasing might be even better.
• "An analogy of the shift in values can be drawn from such governmental agencies as the Army Corps of Engineers and their activities of the past two hundred years..." needs a citation from a reliable source.
• "The destruction that comes from war is now being recognized as wasteful, expensive, and an ill-conceived method for achieving peace in our world" -by who?
• "Looking back there is just the one model for development, the global economic development that we know." Again, more essay like writing not appropriate for encyclopedic text.
• "Spacious fields of greenery and towering housing complexes in Chicago." I'm seeing a small city garden and some mid rises.

• Biomimicry. I don't know what is up with the link (fix it) but text is preferred over lists.
• Earthships and Permaculture have 0 refs.
• See WP:CITE#HOW for better citation formats.

Don't hesitate to ask if you need clarification on any specifics.Cptnono (talk) 06:44, 5 December 2009 (UTC)

I concur. It reads like an essay. An interesting essay, to be sure, but still an essay.--SPhilbrickT 16:48, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Blizzard PPC

The Blizzard PPC Hi, this is my first article, it is related to the Commodore Amiga systems, specifically the Amiga 120 as its an accelerator for it. Please give me feedback on it, and tag appropriately. Thank you! Dreamcast270mhz (talk) 00:07, 5 December 2009 (UTC)

I see the article has been proposed for deletion. I assume you think otherwise. You might leave MrKIA11 a note at his talk page. While he is someone preoccupied with his bid to become an administrator, he is an active member of the Video Games Project, and may be in a position to give you useful advice.--SPhilbrickT 22:10, 5 December 2009 (UTC)

Sharon Irla

Request for review, input and assistance of article User:Profklm/Sharon Irla. (created Nov 28, 2009)

I hope to later expand this article to include photo of the artist and, with her permission, some sample work.

Moreover, I hope to later add a section header of "Movement," as Irla is one of a handful of contemporary Cherokee Artists whose artwork is based on historical, scholarly research of the Cherokee. Other notables in this "Movement" would include Martha Berry, Talmadge Davis, and Anna B. (Sixkiller) Mitchell (for whom an article needs to be written).

I look forward to your input. Thanks Profklm (talk) 16:21, 5 December 2009 (UTC)

Notability is sketchy. I see one mention in a reliable source. Is that it? I'm not sure this would survive a deletion proposal. I see quite a few awards, have any of them been discussed in a reliable source? Even if not, some referencing is required to support Verifiability

Please review Article Layout, as your article structure does not follow Wikipedia conventions.--SPhilbrickT 16:45, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Please review new page Satan's Pilgrims

The new page about the instrumental surf band, Satan's Pilgrims,can be found at User:Crowdesign/Satan's Pilgrims.

```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Crowdesign (talk • contribs) 03:36, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Your footnotes need tighetening up, but before working on that, make sure you can establish Notability. That link is general, for more specific advice, see WP:MUSIC.--SPhilbrickT 16:57, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Frank B. Wynn

I have just started a new article User:Davidclydewalters/Frank B. Wynn I have much more information on Dr. Wynn and his considerable contribution to medical history and the conservation movement in the United States. I have just completed a Doctoral dissertation on leadership and the biography of Dr. Wynn at the University of Montana. The article is not complete. I have only started it to learn how to contribute. I am requesting feedback only so that the article is properly constructed and will not be deleted. I will continue to work on it. Thank you for creating and maintaining this valuable information resource. I have already made a donation and expect to do so again in the future. --Davidclydewalters (talk) 05:39, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Safety_Fuse

I am writing this article for a history class I am taking at the University of Maryland. I was wondering if anyone could provide me with constructive criticism on how I can improve this article. Any feedback would be appreciated! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Smodarre (talk • contribs) 05:52, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Your opening sentence assumes the reader knows what a safety fuse is. Start with an introduction, directed at people who might not be familiar with the object.

Please review Article Layout for some suggestions for improvement.

Your current structure is a single long section. Think about how to break it into two or three relevant sections.

Unfortunately, I have to suggest that you read Fuse (explosives). At first glance, I see a lot of overlap, so you'll have to figure out if your exposition can be distinguished from the existing article.--SPhilbrickT 16:39, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Institute of Land Administration

Requesting feedback. Institute of Land Administration Smwiti (talk) 10:41, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

You've jumped too quickly into details without a proper introduction.

For example, you mention it is in East Africa, but you don't mention the country.

One might guess it is a college or university, but those guesses would be wrong.

Start by telling us what is it, and where it is. With whom is it affiliated? When was it created?

The sentence starting "possible employers" and the sentence closing "this is an education for you" are not appropriate.

You need to establish Notability with references to reliable sources

If you can address these issues, then look at footnotes for suggestions on how to properly include references.--SPhilbrickT 17:10, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Dynamic Language 2

user:Rick206/Dynamic Language This article is about a communications company I heard about located in Washington State. It is in a subpage. I would like to add a picture as well if this possible after the move is allowed. Thank you for reviews and remarks. Much appreciated. Rick206 (talk) 19:13, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

As before, you still need to provide more third party, secondary sources that support claims of notability. The tone is also a little spammy so that will need some work. Also take a look at WP:FAQO. – ukexpat (talk) 19:35, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

Is it possible to request another review to see if the above issues have been resolved or are making progressive steps toward a mainspace article? Thank you!

Rick206 (talk) 19:53, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

The added sources do not add a lot of the mentioned necessary press coverage in WP:CORP. Please add more information of third party, secondary sources if possible to document notability. The revenue alone is not reason for notability alone, although this could be argued. Furthermore, there could be the question of WP:COI with your username. Are you related to the company? --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 01:50, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback. I am aware of the COI rules. It is truly a coincidence. My only relation to the company is that I have used their services. I have never personally dealt with their higher management and thus never knew the gentleman's name was Rick until beginning this article. But I see the cause for COI. How do I go about resolving that situation to not conflict with COI?

Also, if you wouldn't mind clarifying, as article writing is new to me: "The revenue alone is not a reason for notability?" Would revenue mean the location of the sources? The sources I found are all articles about the company or founders. Is it not possible to use that as notability? Thank you for your help. Much appreciated! Rick206 (talk) 17:06, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

The Chain Gang of 1974

The Chain Gang of 1974

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LCLproject/The_Chain_Gang_of_1974

I'm new to wiki and any help would be greatly appreciated.

LCLproject (talk) 06:55, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Acrompton/multifaith spaces

Posting request based on Acrompton (talk · contribs · deleted contribs · logs · filter log · block user · block log) pasting article text into this page. – ukexpat (talk) 14:37, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

PRIMO (Internet Marketing System)

Hi, there, I am new and have just created an article called PRIMO (Internet Marketing System which is a automate system used for internet marketing.

I would appreciate your feedback and correction on it!

Many thanks for your help and input!

Kind regards,

Graciousness2009 (talk) 01:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

Draft is at User:Graciousness2009/PRIMO (Internet Marketing System). I am afraid that at the moment this reads like a blatant advertisement for the system and its creator and would almost certainly be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace. You will have to do a lot more work on the tone of the article and find some more third party reliable sources to support the notability of the subject matter if this one is to have a chance at surviving in the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 19:17, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

Timothy Hampton

Timothy Hampton recently died in suspicious circumstances. He was a British weapon of mass destruction specialist and employee of the Comprehensive Nuclear-Test-Ban Treaty Organization (CTBTO) in Vienna, Austria.

This is only my second posting but it looks close to me :) I do appreciate any input.

Wittym (talk) 01:42, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

Your article is interesting, but it uses plain URLs in its external links. This is undesirable because sometimes websites/pages change URLs, and do not leave a redirect in their stead as is usually done here at Wikipedia. Therefore, over time, plain URLs could eventually become dead links, a phenomenon known as linkrot. With only a plain URL, it would be difficult for a user to track down the new location; therefore, it is recommended that you also provide a brief summary of the webpage (title, sitename, etc.) by using the syntax [http://www.example.com link title], obviously replacing example.com with the URL. Citation templates may assist with this task, particularly {{cite web}}. Cheers, Intelligentsium 03:34, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

My idea for a section on articles

I often refer to wikipedia for information. I often leave an article, after having read it, with more questions about the topic at hand. It would be nice to see a section in each article where visitors can post questions about that article so that others with knowledge could contribute answers to those questions directly in the article in a seamless form. Not as if they were answering the question (as forums do) but as a further contribution to the article to make it more complete. Once that question was answered then the question could be grayed out to show visitors that the the answer is in the article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.90.191.233 (talk) 03:00, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

We have the talk page, wherein editors can ask a bit of information be included, then it is, and this is very similar to what you suggest. Unfortunately, this is the Requests for feedback page, for requesting feedback on articles. For requesting feedback on your idea to better Wikipedia, please see the proposals section of the village pump. Thank you. Intelligentsium 03:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

In theory, one of the justifications for the reference desk is that people can ask questions, and if the question is a good one, and can be answered by someone staffing the desk, but cannot be found in an existing article, perhaps a relevant article should be expanded to include the answer.

However, the linkage between those types of discussions and actual changes to articles is rare. Perhaps if you flesh, it could be implemented, either on the talk page or on the relevant reference desk with a closer linkage, and someone actually changing the article. As noted, the best place to push this forward is the Village Pump, but you might check out the reference desk, and see if those pages should be part of the solution.--SPhilbrickT 00:46, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Genie (programming language)

I have created a new article on Genie, a dialect of the Vala programming language. I am not affiliated with GNOME and tried to write the article as neutral as possible, but some revision (and hopefully enhancement) would be appreciated. Latinmidget (talk) 17:58, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

My main concern is Notability You have no examples of reliable sources showing that language has been used, discussed, or reviewed by others.--SPhilbrickT 00:21, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Well, only the first two external links are related to GNOME, the others are from independent authors who have certainly used and reviewed the language. Reliability is relative, but take for example Barry Kauler (creator of Puppy Linux, a well-known distro), who has chosen this language as development platform. In any case, it should be noted that this is actually an alternative dialect (I have rephrased this in the article) of a well known language (which already has an entry in Wikipedia and is intended to become one the main development platforms for GNOME 3.0), so IMHO the article on Genie has notability. Nevertheless, your concern is valid and I will try to look for more independent sources. Latinmidget (talk) 04:55, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

I didn't look at the external links; they should be interpreted as "reader, you might also find this interesting". If they do help establish Notability, that's great, but they need to be properly referenced to material in the article to "count". --SPhilbrickT 17:35, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

All right. Please stand by and don't delete the article while I ask for help in the Vala development list. Latinmidget (talk) 15:03, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

Well, there has been some contribution to the article, and now it has changed to reviewed state. Thanks. I don't know if I should now delete this section, ask someone else to do it, or leave it for a while. In any case, you are welcome to make any further recommendation. Latinmidget (talk) 08:05, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Kresimir Chris Kunej

The article is in my user space at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Turqoise127/Kresimir_Chris_Kunej. It was deleted due to notability concerns. Since the deletion I have shortened the article to a great extent, replaced some rotlinked sources with screenprints of when they were active, I added some screenshots of the significant coverage source (TV show coverage), improved the refs, and added a paragraph entitled "Resulting Lasting Impact in the Field of..." which provides a clear corrolation with article subject and significant impact. I believe that now the article meets WP:PROF 1 and 4, there are 2 good RS one significant, that meets WP:N, notable enough to meet WP:GNG, mainly for subject's activities on the WP:fringe (his strict translation standards theories are very fringe, as I recently realized), as well as WP:ANYBIO (2.The person has made a widely recognized contribution that is part of the enduring historical record in his or her specific field.)(see "resulting lasting impact" paragraph). Although I believe my work has addressed the notability concern and met it, recently I was advised that now there may be WP:SYNTH concerns over the very paragraph that clearly shows notability. How do I re-word or change so there is no WP:SYNTH? What are your thoughts? And, can you provide me with some help and advice for improvements? I would be much obliged. Turqoise127 (talk) 18:48, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

For clarity and the convenience of other editors, can you please list here:

• two reliable sources you refer to; and
• the specific claims and sources backing them up that give demonstrate satisfaction of PROF 1 & 4?

Thanks, <sup>Bongo</sup><sub>matic</sub> 01:36, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

I hope I did not misunderstand the nature of this forum, I was merely attempting to solicit some feedback, help and advice from experienced editors on here regarding an article I have worked hard on and firmly believe is a good contribution to the accumulation of knowledge on the project. Regardless, nothing in policy or guidelines says that sources have to be available to everyone, whether for reasons of physical access (e.g. if they are from books or journals only avaliable in libraries in one country) or of language. Sources have been provided for this article, and they are verifiable. If there is a language barrier issue please let me know.Turqoise127 (talk) 16:30, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

I don't think anyone patrolling this page is unaware that sources are not required to be on the internet or even in English. However, the article has 22 references, many in another language and some may require a library visit. It would be a waste of my time, if for example, I tracked down translation of reference 22 and concluded it didn't support notability. You might respond that it wasn't #22 that supports notability.

None of the first three sentences in the lede demonstrate notability. The fourth sentence might, but it isn't referenced. So I read Bongomatic's question as - which references should I look at in order to confirm that you've now met the requirement? Lots of relevant references is a good thing, but in most articles, it only take one or two references to support notability.--SPhilbrickT 17:50, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

I was not aware that I would have to present a case here, I believed I would get some advice here for improvements by previously uninvolved editors. Regardless, for the sake of Sphilbrick's reasonable comment I will address the question;

• the two reliable sources I refer to are (I will actually offer 3)

1) #14, significant reliable in-depth coverage on the subject on a national TV show. It is cited per guidelines. To strengthen this I have added screenshots of the actual segment showing subject interviewed and his academic publishing discussed.

2) #15, coverage in an article in Jutarnji list, as of late there is an article on that newspaper on our Wiki. Reliable, sourced.

3) #16, coverage on the subject on a different national channel and different TV show, reliable, sourced.

• PROF 1 is met because it reads The person's research has made significant impact in their scholarly discipline, broadly construed. Read paragraph "Resulting Lasting Impact in the Field of Croatian Translations" for details on that. Also, article subject’s works and translated books are held widely in Republic of Croatia, WP:ACADEMIC does not state it has to be libraries in the US or a particular state. I listed sources of subject’s works in numerous libraries in Croatia (verifiable internet sources), including the major National University Library of Zagreb.
• PROF 4 is met because at least two of the subject’s works are being used as textbooks, his translation of a Civil Engineering textbook at the University of Zagreb, Croatia and one of his academic papers as required reading at the University of Tubingen in Germany (both are sourced).

Article is also notable per WP:ANYBIO - 2.The person has made a widely recognized contribution that is part of the enduring historical record in his or her specific field. and per WP:FRINGE, which I actually realized in discussion with editor Bongomatic; subject's theories are fringe. Turqoise127 (talk) 22:03, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Suggestions for improvement include suggestions to help you edit the article so that it meets the basic inclusion criteria. If you read the rest of this page, you will see that the vast majority of responses are about notability and sources as those are areas about which there seem to be the most confusion or misunderstanding. – ukexpat (talk) 22:11, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Understood. I will be grateful for any and all input. Turqoise127 (talk) 22:42, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

You are correct that you are not required "to present a case here", but neither are you required to list an article here for consideration by others. If you wish other editors to spend their time reviewing your article, specifically with reference to the criteria you yourself cited:

I believe that now the article meets WP:PROF 1 and 4, there are 2 good RS one significant, that . . . meet WP:GNG . . . as well as WP:ANYBIO

you are likely to get more thoughtful responses if you direct people to the relevant places. My suggestion, to which you took inexplicable umbrage (despite calling a nearly identical request "reasonable"), was a suggestion that—since the issues I excerpted from your initial request are those that readers of this page are likely to focus on—you make it easier for editors to review your article and claims regarding it. <sup>Bongo</sup><sub>matic</sub> 02:04, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you for your comment, Bongomatic. It is exactly because of what you state here that I complied with the original request, which is a few lines above your most recent comment. Thanks! Turqoise127 (talk) 17:03, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Nabto

Nabto http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tommyped/Nabto

Tommyped (talk) 20:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

Please take a look at WP:N and WP:PRODUCT - at the moment the draft says nothing to indicate how or why this product is notable as required by our inclusion guidelines. You will also need reliable sources to support any claims of notability.  – ukexpat (talk) 20:39, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

The Chain Gang of 1974

The Chain Gang of 1974

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LCLproject/The_Chain_Gang_of_1974

LCLproject (talk) 22:31, 9 December 2009 (UTC)

The article is mostly unreadable and looks more like a list of songs and albums than providing any useful information about the group. Lack of inline citations makes it difficult to tell what reference supports any notability the band may have. Most importantly, the article does not make any reliable claim that it passes WP:MUSIC, meaning that this article would likely be Speedy Deleted. -Drdisque (talk) 17:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

Agreed. Start by applying paragraph organization and grammar check. The claim that the bass player is also in another band and that that other band always mentions this band suggests that there is no real evidence of notability; such expressions are red flags. The very first link, to an article in the Colorado Daily, that one might count (so to speak); I don't see how the rest add up to notability. Sorry, but them's the shakes--it looks like the band has more work to do. Drmies (talk) 16:08, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Obie One B.A.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nemo05/obieoneba (Nemo05 (talk) 01:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)).

Canadian Crossroads International

Canadian Crossroads International Cbentl2 (talk) 17:30, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

You have no reliable sources demonstrating Notability. --SPhilbrickT 17:58, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Carmen2u/Lee_Aase

This is an article I have written regarding a notable figure in the world of social media in healthcare, Lee Aase. I have compiled an extensive list of references, external links, and other supplementary information. With able guidance from PhantomSteve (a Wiki contributor and advisor), I have fortified each of the sections I created and am now seeking broader review to ensure that this page will be ready for formal submission to the active site. I welcome your constructive criticism. As a first-time article writer for Wikipedia, I have been warmed by the good counsel I have obtained so far and look forward to your input. Thanks. Carmen Gonzalez, also known as Carmen2u (talk) 04:26, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Despite the list of potential sources, external links, and interviews, I'm not sure if you have established notability. One to two lines in reputable sources (ie Forbes and Good Morning America) are not enough to create an article. Articles cannot rely predominately on primary (the subject's) sources or blogs. You might want to consider creating an article on social networking in medicine since it appears to be the subject receiving the significant coverage in the reliable sources. That being said, you have made some steps towards this biography. If you choose to continue with it:

• Remove the interviews and reduce the external links sections. It appears that you were attempting to assert notability but it does not improve the encyclopedic value of the article. WP:ELNO for the external links.
• A good PR run (which appears to be what some of the coverage is based off of) will make a PR article. Limit and watch the wording of coverage solicited by the subject.
• Remove all blogs. These are not references. A mention of the subjects blogs can get some room but I would recommend making sure sources discuss it or other editors will assume it is promotional (just the way it works on Wikipeida). Blogs should not be used as sources. None of them appear to be by reputable sources joining in new media but utilyzing full editorial control so they do not meet the requirements in the guidelines. See Wikipedia:Reliable sources#Self-published and questionable sources
• Reformat all of the references. I recommend cutting out all of the inappropriate ones before taking this step
• The lead does not need a section header . WP:LAYOUT
• "evangelist" seems a little fluffy. "Proponent" or something similar would be less pretty but more encyclopedic.
• The Speaking engagements subsection needs sources independent of the subject that are not blogs for lines such as "Aase is a highly regarded figure in the social media arena..."

• Your "sources" have verified that the subject spoke at conferences (such as the one in Vegas) but without appropriate sources throughout the article already truly verifying notability, it reads like a resume.

Cptnono (talk) 05:22, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Ayodele Awojobi

I have recently written the article, Ayodele Awojobi, and would need valuable feed-back.

The article, I believe, speaks about the life and achievements of what I believe to be a remarkable Nigerian academic; a pioneer in Mechanical Engineering research, out of Africa.

Feed-back would be highly appreciated.

Thanks.

Krrush 10:00, 11 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Krrush (talk • contribs)

I have reviewed about half the article and cleaned it up quite a bit -- the language is way too "flowery", repetitious, and full of hyperbole, and has to be toned down to make it more encyclopedic. Please take a look at WP:MOSBIO for guidance. I will continue to review and tone down. – ukexpat (talk) 17:19, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Legion Airs

Legion Airs is a published collection of music that may be of interest to WWI and WWII historians, Choral groups, or others looking for public domain materials.

user:Paskperfect/Legion Airs

I am giving the publisher's address (directly from the published work) as the reference. Is this acceptable?

Paskperfect (talk) 18:18, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

The key problem here is notability - please read WP:MUSIC, and I guess WP:NB, for appropriate guidelines. – ukexpat (talk) 19:00, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Wertheim & Co.

Wertheim & Co. Stanleywmorten (talk) 20:18, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

I have done a quick review and made a couple of format changes. The main problem however is the flow. Rather than setting out the history in a chronology, you should convert it into prose and break it down further into sections, see Microsoft, and DuPont as examples.  – ukexpat (talk) 20:24, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

HappyFeet Soccer

Please review this updated page- any feedback would be greatly appreciated! HappyFeet Soccer: HappyFeet Soccer Upper90 (talk) 20:39, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

The references must be to significant coverage in reliable sources to support notability. The current references do not appear to be significant coverage. Has the programme received any press coverage? – ukexpat (talk) 21:02, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Jeff.Hull/Articles of War (U. S. Army 1806)

Hi, I was looking up "Articles of War" in conjunction with a book I am reading and SURPRISE the Wikipedia entry had no samples of Articles of War of the period I am interested in. So I have written one. (Well, found one in the Congressional Record and formatted it for Wiki)

User:Jeff.Hull/Articles of War (U. S. Army 1806)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jeff.Hull/Articles_of_War_%28U._S._Army_1806%29

Please review it and let me know if it is acceptable and how I can improve it. Feedback to jeff.hull@mac.com or here.

Thanks.

Jeff.Hull (talk) 01:26, 12 December 2009 (UTC)

Full texts like that belong in Wikisource, not in Wikipedia itself. --Orange Mike | Talk 02:03, 12 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Tabak4/ecosia

I would like you to read this article( Ecosia ) and write me your feedback. As english is not my native language, there might be some language mistakes. Thanks for your help. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Tabak4 (talk • contribs) 14:08, 12 December 2009 (UTC)

Neither asserts nor evidences any kind of notability. I'd nominate it for speedy deletion as an article about a non-notable website. --Orange Mike | Talk 17:44, 12 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Trunks_cscs/Anthology_of_Anvil

I was reading the Wiki page on the band Anvil and noticed that the link for Anthology was to an unwritten article, so I decided to put something together User:Trunks_cscs/Anthology_of_Anvil. —Preceding undated comment added 18:50, 12 December 2009 (UTC).

The album does not appear to meet the notability guidelines set out at WP:NALBUMS and the tone is not encyclopedic - "One of the nice things about this disc..."; "Excellent career retrospective of one of heavy metal's most respected underground bands" etc. – ukexpat (talk) 16:40, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

IronE Singleton

Hello,

I'm new to Wikipedia. I am trying to start an information page for a local actor in Atlanta Georgia, IronE Singleton User:Rbsingit/IronE_Singleton who has managed to land over 4 major TV/Hollywood production deals in the last year including the role as lead villain in the current #1 movie in the country "The Blind Side". I tried submitting his information before but it was deleted because it lacked sufficient references. I don't want to make the same mistake again so I am seeking your wiki wisdom and critical eyes to provide feedback on my progress thus far.

Thank you for any help you can provide. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rbsingit (talk • contribs) 07:12, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

The subject is probably notable enough to meet the guidelines at WP:BIO, but the tone of the article is not encyclopedic - some of it is definitely on the flowery side, for example: Singleton passion and drive peaked during his earlier years of dancing and recreational football. He has always had a die-hard and live harder mentality; one that against many odds landed him on the football playing field of Kentucky State University (KSU) and later the Bulldog's football field at theGeorgia University of Georgia (UGA). While football served as Singleton's physical outlet and alternative to violence in the inner city, acting served as a supplement which later became his passion, giving him the freedom of spiritual and emotional expression for which he had always longed.

So I think before it is moved to the mainspace, it need to be toned down to a more neutral point of view.Also, your user name indicates that you may have a conflict of interest so please read WP:COI. Hope this helps.nbsp;– ukexpat (talk) 17:13, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Good Data Practices Related to Government Data

This article consolidates technical information related to good and best data practices used by governments when publishing on the Internet.

Joe Carmel —Preceding unsigned comment added by Joe carmel (talk • contribs) 16:36, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

That's not an encyclopedia article, it's a chapter reading for a data management course; it violates our prohibition on synthesis and original research. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:24, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

I can see where using the phrase "Good" or "Recommended" might be construed to mean that the article is advancing a position. I'll clean up the language. There's already been some pro and con language too. Thanks.

Joe Carmel (talk) 00:23, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Request for feedback on new international prize for poetry and medicine

Please advise whether this entry is sufficiently informative and referenced for Wikipedia inclusion.

Drjsinger (talk) 17:27, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

Are you asking for a review of this article User:HippoPoetPrize/International_Hippocrates_Prize_for_Poetry_and_Medicine? This is an article on a prize that will be awarded next year for the first time. Therefore, I do not know how the evaluation "major" can be given to such a prize in the definition of the prize. Although there are many single references, many of them are not valid. Many just refer to a biography of a person mentioned (which could then also be done just with a Wiki link in the article). Others are just referring to the prize's own web site. Currently, there is no third-party evaluation on this prize; please add if found. Generally, I think that an encyclopedia should reflect current knowledge and facts; it should not be used to report on upcoming events. --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 18:05, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

That's exactly right - please see WP:CRYSTAL; anything "new" is unlikely to be notable enough for an article at the moment. – ukexpat (talk) 16:35, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Material ConneXion

Hello, I am requesting feedback on this page. The company is one of the few existing resources on innovative materials. Your insight is appreciated! Thanks. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kylewooley (talk • contribs) 17:51, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

Gene expression profiling in cancer

Hello. This is the first article--Gene expression profiling in cancer--I have written and any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks! Ahwang1 (talk) 23:54, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

Great first article, well done. A few remarks: On the first hand, the article is repeating a lot of information that can be found already in other articles. In this respect, I was wondering whether this profiling could not just be a section in the main article Gene expression profiling with a few references on clinical applications, which is the major important point of the new article. However, the topic cancer is very important. Therefore, it could really be worthwhile to have a specific article on this sub-topic. Still, the text should be shortened to prevent too much of redundancy with other articles. A shorter text will also help the reader to really find the specific information and not loose him/herself in the long text. In respect of shortening: Currently, I get the impression that single references are cited with many additional information like author name, university and journals inside of the text instead of just using the reference. This could be deleted not only to shorten the text but also to increase the focus to the facts themselves and not distract the reader by less important information.

The article is well referenced. Currently, there are just a few examples of certain cancers, which is a good starting point. However, such a selection has always the risk to give a biased overview, in particular if there are some primary sources. I think that the article could be improved for an encyclopedia by moving the focus to more general insights that can be drawn on various cancers with this method. If a reader really needs very detailed information on a particular cancer, she/he has to read current scientific articles.

And as a last point, I would like to recommend to also introduce some critical discussion on the value of this technique. This would help to get a neutral point of information. Such points could be: What is really the clinical relevance of these markers at the moment despite of scientific interest? Although many markers have been shown retrospectively or prospectively to be associated with better or worse prognosis (i.e. to be a prognostic factor), it is not so sure for many of them whether they can also be used as a trigger for therapeutic decisions.

In general, I think your article is on a very good road. Best wishes, --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 01:24, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

David Joseph Marcou

I would like some feedback on the article mentioned above. I met with someone who does editing and is somewhat familiar with Wikipedia's standards. We used a public terminal at the library. I would like to know how much more editing it needs. Any help would be appreciated. Sincerely, kayak paddler David Joseph Marcou —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kayak paddler (talk • contribs) 01:39, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Few points: that other person needs to read up on WP:LAYOUT and WP:EDIT! You need to get rid of most if not all of the redlinks and generally take a look at WP:MOSBIO. If you are Mr Marcou, you should also take a look at WP:AUTO. – ukexpat (talk) 03:47, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your reply. I will try to implement your suggested changes. Sincerely, Kayak paddler —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kayak paddler (talk • contribs) 03:58, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Doren Robbins

Doren Robbins http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Doren_Robbins

I have created this Wiki page for Doren Robbins himself. He has provided me with all content, much of which has already been cited. Please let me know what else I need to do to get the warnings at the top of the page to go away.

Thank you!

Jrwood08 (talk) 02:13, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Please read our guidance on conflict of interest. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:30, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Wiruae/Iron oxide nanoparticles

Adding request in place of article text. – ukexpat (talk) 18:01, 14 December 2009 (UTC), pp Wiruae (talk • contribs) 05:45, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

seeking user input on first page: Willie George

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gu2542/williegeorge —Preceding unsigned comment added by Gu2542 (talk • contribs) 17:34, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Request for feedback on wood project

Wood facade project http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Baruns7/Wooden_Facade_project

Baruns7 (talk) 19:35, 14 December 2009 (UTC) BSG 14th December 09Baruns7 (talk) 19:35, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

The Orange-Striped Green Sea Anemone

To whom it may concern; I am almost done with my article, User:Jhadcock/The Orange-Striped Green Sea Anemone. Before I am finished, I am requesting the assistance and feedback from any one on this topic and article I have created. I appreciated anyone who comes forward here. Thankyou, Jhadcock (talk) 20:36, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

You might get some ideas for formatting your article by looking at Anthozoa and the articles in Category:Anthozoa. Wikipedia has a preferred style for reference sections that you should try to use. Notice that most of these articles use Template:Taxobox; you should try to use that as well. I trust that the material in the article is original with you. I notice that it credits a personal communication which occurred in 1919. That is probably not a personal communication with you! Even if you draw material from an external source, you're expected to put it in your own words to avoid problems with copyright. Your draft seems to have too much detail, and it should have a picture if at all possible. See WP:IMAGE for ideas on getting a free image that we could use in Wikipedia. EdJohnston (talk) 04:11, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

H2O Audio

I have created the page H2O Audio and don't want it to get deleted as potential advertising, I feel that I have reliable sources, but would love a second opinion...

DanaS (talk) 20:56, 14 December 2009 (UTC)DanaS 12/14/09

Color Mapping

Hello all, I've noticed that Wikipedia is missing "Color Mapping", which is an important topic in digital image processing. I've created an article in my userspace, Color Mapping, with some basic information on it, with a few references. Would appreciate any feedback, reviews, remarks, or contributions to the topic. Odo1982 (talk) 09:26, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Thanks a lot for your nice new article with the good example. I did not know this topic before, which is well explained by your article. An article can always be extended to more details, like more detailed explanation of the principle or examples of application (also in movies?); are there also references that are not online? If you know more on the topic, thank you already for additional effort. Otherwise, well done. --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 13:22, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Lock-in (decision-making)

Lock-in (decision-making)

Cccantarelli (talk) 10:22, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

uploading pictures on page

Hi I have a problem with uploading pictures on a page the images were deleted. Can I use images taken from a myspace page, having the owner of the page send a mail to confirm the usage of these images? I've seen similar pages with pics referring to Flickr accounts

Thanks Xer014 (talk) 11:23, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Didn't we deal with this already? You should ask the copyright owner, who may not be the "owner" of the MySpace page, to release the images per the process set out at WP:IOWN. – ukexpat (talk) 16:57, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Charles S. Zane

Requesting comments on my new article about Utah's first Supreme Court Chief Justice, Charles S. Zane. Charles S. Zane All feedback appreciated.--Thelema12 (talk) 16:10, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Zenos Frudakis

I uploaded an article on Zenos Frudakis in October 2009. It's still flagged as unreviewed. I'd like to have it reviewed and get rid of the unreviewed notice - can anyone help? How long does it usually take?

Forgottendelights (talk) 17:17, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

This page may meet Wikipedia’s criteria for speedy deletion. It does nothing but promote some entity and would require a fundamental rewrite in order to become encyclopedic.--Orange Mike | Talk 18:42, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

surbiryal,nizamabad

surbiryal, nizamabad and Surbiryal, Nizamabad --Shashankreddyd (talk) 05:02, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Fixed link; offered some feedback at article itself. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:55, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Louise Schabacker

Louise Schabacker User:Myivories88/Louise Schabacker

Myivories88 (talk) 18:06, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

"Personal interview by phone, interviewer unknown" and "Unknown Erie newspaper source" do not constitute reliable sources of the sort we require. --Orange Mike | Talk 19:03, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Cincinnati Women Bloggers Page

This is my first attempt and creating a Wikipedia page. I would love your feedback. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shannanb/CincinnatiWomenBloggers

Thank you! shannan boyer 18:48, 16 December 2009 (UTC)Shannan Boyer —Preceding unsigned comment added by Shannanb (talk • contribs)

Unless you can WP:CITE some significant coverage in reliable sources this group does not appear to meet the notability guidelines set out at WP:ORG, and the article would almost certainly be speedily deleted if moved to the main space. – ukexpat (talk) 19:33, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

We have been written about by the Cincinnati Enquirer too, but unfortunately the article is no longer online. Is there another way to site them;/ shannan boyer 20:28, 16 December 2009 (UTC)shannan boyer —Preceding unsigned comment added by Shannanb (talk • contribs)

It is a common misconception that sources have to be online - they don't - as long as the source can be verified by someone minded to do so (in a public library for example) then it is perfectly OK. In fact we have a citation template for that - {{cite news}}. However unless that coverage is significant, I don't think it's going to help. Also, as you appear to have a conflict of interest, please see WP:COI. – ukexpat (talk) 15:37, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Request for comments on User:Hezimmerman/new article name

User:Hezimmerman/new article name here

I've put in the article I have as a temporary file.

This is fairly long and involved a lot of work. But it eventually will need chemical drawings in places.

But for now I need to know if it is acceptable as a good review of some imporants organic chemistry.

Fine-tuning the article with drawings will take time but is not necessary at this point.

In short, I don't want to re-do all this work. Improvements are possible but re-doing all of it is not reasonable.

Thus do give advice, an opinion, regarding whether it is to be deleted. If it is, I will know not to do more work on it.

As I've noted elsewhere, I submitted this as a result of several suggestions of people who liked the material and did not know all of it came from one source.

Hezimmerman (talk) 20:55, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

I have no idea what this is but it is not an encyclopedia article. If you intend it to be a repository for your own research, a collection of source material for personal use, or snippets for a curriculum vitae I am afraid that is not an appropriate use of Wikipedia and should be tagged for deletion accordingly. If it is supposed to be an article it needs a lot more work, particularly in stating exactly what it's supposed to be about. – ukexpat (talk) 18:20, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Sorry to add that I concur. Obviously, a lot of work was done. Please make sure to make a copy of it somewhere so it isn't lost. I have no idea what it is for, but it doesn't look remotely like an article.--SPhilbrickT 18:37, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

This user is an old academic who clearly is finding it difficult to come to terms with wikipedia. He needs help not biting. I have just removed a prod notice on his user page. I have also been trying to improve the WP article on him at Howard Zimmerman. He is clearly notable, but the article needs improving. --Bduke (Discussion) 22:53, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

No one is biting and no one is denying that this user is probably notable. That was a speedy tag on the user page, not a PROD, because as far as I am concerned it is a c.v. and way too overboard for a user page. As regards User:Hezimmerman/new article name here, I am prepared to assume good faith, but it is most certainly not a draft article. – ukexpat (talk) 01:48, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

As to your "new article name" , Wikipedia is not a gazetteer to list every work you published or worked on, it is not CiteBase. It has no content, only a list of products produced by a person named "Howard Zimmerman", and not a very well presented list at that. If you handed that as a "biography" to a 9th Grade English teacher, I'd hate to see the grade s/he'd give you. Think of what you could hand-in as a biography assignment given in High School English Class. If it won't pass muster for that, then it probably won't here either. Only list works that were award winning or greatly cited by others (non Howard Zimmerman people and groups), or which third parties (not related to organizations involved with Howard Zimmerman) consider significant works. Then work these papers/studies into paragraph form that an English teacher would give a passing grade on, with footnotes. Describe why these papers/studies are influential, award winning, or greatly cited. 76.66.194.220 (talk) 10:27, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

stephen miles

Created a new article on Stephen Miles

Leadershipadvisory (talk) 23:00, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

At the moment the draft is too promotional in tone to survive if moved to the mainspace. Mr Miles may be notable per WP:BIO but the article needs toning down a lot to a neutral point of view. – ukexpat (talk) 18:25, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

PostERP

I am trying to write the article for User:CN Liou/PostERP. The previous draft was deleted by someone else. Please review and comment this rewritten version so I can bring it alive. CN Liou (talk) 09:50, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Please read Article Layout. Articles are generally written as prose, not bullet points.--SPhilbrickT 18:52, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you! All the bullet points have been removed.CN Liou (talk) 03:57, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

Nice improvement.

One of the most important of the criteria for an article is Notability which can be staidfied by showing the software system is discussed in a few reliable sources--SPhilbrickT 18:15, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

Pomodoro Technique

I would appreciate feedback and suggestiions for improving this article about a time-management technique. Thank you in advance. Pomodorotechnique (talk) 16:22, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Sounds potentially interesting, but your references are extremely sketchy.

The first one is understandable, but doesn't qualify as a reliable source. The second is a reliable source, but only mentions the technique in a minor way. The third and fourth refs gave me "not found " errors. The seventh ref worked, but I didn't find "pomodoro" in it.--SPhilbrickT 18:47, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Vitamini

Please review my Vitamini Vitamini article here http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Neteraser/Vitamini: It's about an indie video game which recently became notable enough to publish it here on Wikipedia! I appericate any feedback on this article. Thanks!

Neteraser (talk) 21:43, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

At the moment the draft says nothing about how or why the game is notable per Wikipedia's inclusion policy. You will have to cite reliable sources to support claims of notability. – ukexpat (talk) 21:51, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Steampunk

(Steampunk) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Steampunk

I'm not sure what to do here. I wanted to mention a couple other steampunk novels:

The Airborn series by Kenneth Oppel

Boneshaker by Cherie Priest

98.246.7.114 (talk) 05:27, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

The best way to do this would be to begin a discussion on the article's talk page at: Talk:Steampunk. – ukexpat (talk) 14:48, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Kashcroft/new article name here

Hi I wondered if someone could take a look at this for me. I can't seem to figure out how to get the title right! It should be GEORGE PECK. Also, any other comments would be really helpful. thanks

Kashcroft (talk) 12:08, 18 December 2009 (UTC) Kashcroft 18/12/09

Please take a look at WP:BIO - at the moment the article does not speak to the notability of the subject as per Wikipedia's inclusion policy. You will need to look for and cite significant coverage of the subject in reliable sources to show notability. – ukexpat (talk) 14:51, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

The modpodTM

User:Compeng001/modpod is my first attempt at drafting a wikipedia article.

I have attempted to follow the guidelines for the development of articles for publication on Wikipedia. Can some kind volunteer give me their feedback as to whether they think the article is ok for going live?

Compeng001 (talk) 18:00, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

Sorry but at the moment the major problem is that it reads like an advertisement - expressions such as "innovative application", "a solution that offers superior strength and durability but with the benefit of reduced weight", "pleasing livability and aesthetics", etc are promotional, not encyclopedic and the use of TM is inappropriate. So the draft needs toning down considerably to a neutral point of view. – ukexpat (talk) 18:08, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

UFC Fan Expo

I've created a new page called "UFC Fan Expo". It is about the Expo that the UFC (Ultimate Fighting Championship) hold once a year. Here is the wikilink:

[[1]]

UFC Fan Expo

seedofsparta 20:19, 18 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Seedofsparta (talk • contribs)

I see two major problems: first, the article doesn't address how or why the event is notable per Wikipedia's inclusion criteria - you will need to cite significant coverage in reliable sources to show notability; second, the tone is not encyclopedic - it reads more like a promotional piece for the event (prices, no-strollers, photo policy etc), so it will need some significant rewriting from a neutral point of view. – ukexpat (talk) 21:21, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

Feedback request! short and sweet!

Need help getting this live. User:Addyj1987/Anna Dello Russo Russo there aren't many credible source on Dello Russo hence the brevity but i think she deserves one as director at Japanese Vogue. Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Addyj1987 (talk • contribs)

"there aren't many credible source [sic]": That's the problem - I don't think the day-in-the-life blog counts as a reliable source, and unless you can find some significant third party coverage, I am afraid this one is doomed, even as a stub. – ukexpat (talk) 16:09, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

Personal Historian

Hello

I have posted an article on personal historian and solicit your feedback.

Thanks Lax —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kakade (talk • contribs) 19:26, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

Where did you post it? It's not showing up in your contributions nor does Personal Historian exist. – ukexpat (talk) 02:32, 20 December 2009 (UTC)

Spill.com

hello, I just recreated the page for Spill.com, a page that has a contentious history and has been deleted many times in the past. I put a lot of time into it and I believe it to be notable and reliable with over 10 reliable sources so I think it should be fine. I'm just requesting here for someone to give it a quick look to see if there are any other things wrong with it so that new unreviewed article template can be removed. Smithers45 (talk) 19:54, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

It's still a minor website with no notability outside the Austin city limits. --Orange Mike | Talk 21:04, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

You can read my answer on the article talk page and your talk page Orangemike, but I thought I might post my reply to your suggestion for deletion here as well. I would have to completely disagree with the suggestion from Orangemike that Spill.com isn't notable. Under the specific criteria for notability for web content located atWikipedia:Notability_(web), it mentions that only one of the listed criteria must be met for the page to be considered notable. The second listed Criteria for web content goes as follows,"2. The website or content has won a well-known and independent award from either a publication or organization." Obviously Orangmike must have not read the entire article because there is an entire section dedicated to awards in which it is mentioned that they won the 2009 best podcast for the movies/film section from The People's Choice Podcast Awards, better known as the Podcast Awards. Clicking on the wikilink or going to their website at www.podcastawards.com and scrolling down the page, on the right hand column, will find that Spill.com has won the award. The podcast awards are the preeminent awards for podcasts in the world and are most definitely an organization. Other winners include This American Life and ESPN so it is very feel known, I really don't think there are any disputes of that. Also, user Gogo Dodo has backed this article up in saying that it is notable. On my talk page he has said, " The awarding of a 2009 Podcast Award would qualify Spill.com per the notability guidelines." I have no objections to recreating the article because now the site meets the notability guidelines" and you can visit the top of my talk page to confirm that. Smithers45 (talk) 00:46, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Kaitlin Cassidy

Kaitlin Cassidy Kaitlin Cassidy

Greentoga (talk) 06:11, 20 December 2009 (UTC) greentoga December 18 2009

Your current version is here:Kaitlin Cassidy

You need to establish Notability with references to reliable sources. Please check out Referencing for beginners. I prefer LDR style, but go with the suggestion in the beginners page if you choose.

You've included a number of external links. They do not "count" as references, unless the text in the article is specifically cited to the link. The format of the links can be improved—I've fixed the first one to show you how—it is very easy, just add a space and text.--SPhilbrickT 14:59, 20 December 2009 (UTC)

Leonard Steinhorn

I'd like to request feedback on the new article for writer/political analyst Leonard Steinhorn. Thank you. Theparticipant (talk) 23:22, 20 December 2009 (UTC)

The subject's autobiography at his college's website does not constitute a reliable source; neither do book reviews on commercial sites such as Amazon. Please read WP:CITE for guidance on how to format a citation. --Orange Mike | Talk 21:11, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

75B

I like feedback before moving this article: 75B to the mainspace I am an Art History student specialised in contemporary graphic design

Thank you Ghckraak (talk) 13:39, 21 December 2009 (UTC) GHC Kraak December 21, 2009

User:LiMarMu/Gabriele_Giolito_de'_Ferrari

I've created the page User:LiMarMu/Gabriele_Giolito_de'_Ferrari in my user space. Giolito was a 16th century Italian printer active in Venice during the early 16th century, and was later succeeded by his sons. The text is largely translated from the Italian Wikipedia, though I also consulted a source not previously listed in the Italian article. Thanks in advance for your feedback. LiMarMu (talk) 18:02, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Shuuro

Is it [2] a reliable source for new article "Shuuro"? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Italian giusti (talk • contribs) 23:46, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Review of Kenwood Towne Place

Seeking feedback Kenwood Towne Place

This article is about a large scale business development in Cincinnati, Ohio that has been making local and national news because of its finical problems and mismanagement. I have started, what I think is good article, however I would like someone else to look over it. Jsgoodrich (talk) 00:41, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

The Monster's Mind (novella and film)

Hello,

This is my first draft for the article about a novella and its adaptation, both called The Monster's Mind User:Tyler durden fc/TheMonstersMind. The information in the article is limited, but it is as much as I could use/write that was reliable and unbiased. I would love feedback on the quality and how much more I could possibly include.

Thank you!

--Tyler durden fc (talk) 10:54, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Brand Tribalism

Hi I would love some feedback on this article/stub I have written. I feel that this is an area that is becoming commonly refered to in mainstream culture and for this reason it shoukld have a wikipedia entry to explain it in more detail. I also feel that given the subjetc matter and contributary nature of this space, wikipedia is the ideal platform to begin defining this movement/topic.

(Jozette Heerman (talk) 13:19, 22 December 2009 (UTC))

Electronic Discount

Electronic Discount is a computer outlet in the Dallas Ft. Worth & Arlington Metroplex in Texas and sells old and new items and equipment. Its atUser:Bronzejr98/Electronic Discount thanks.Bronzejr98(talk) 19:18, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Champmasters/James_M._Masters_Sr.

Hi, I am a wiki newbie. I have written a biographical article about a Marine Corps General (deceased), located at User:Champmasters/James_M._Masters_Sr.. I would appreciate if you can review and provide comments - and corrections, as necessary. I particularly had difficulty with creating new categories (e.g. Notable graduates of the u.s. national war college). I also had difficulty trying to add entries to categories that contained lists (e.g. United States Marine Corps generals). I would very much like to have your comments so that I can make required changes I before publish the page 'live'. Thanks very much Champmasters (talk) 19:17, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Covert Affairs

An article I created about an upcoming television series. It may not be notable yet, and if it is, go ahead and delete, and I'll save a copy to my archives in case it's ever acceptable. Otherwise, I'd just like some feedback. Thanks. Kevinbrogers (talk) 19:45, 22 December 2009 (UTC)