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{{dyktalk|25 March|2011|entry=... that '''[[John Balmer]]''' achieved renown as a [[flight instructor|flying instructor]] in the [[Royal Australian Air Force|RAAF]] by reputedly parachuting from an aircraft to force his pupil to land single-handed?}} |
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![]() | John Balmer is currently a War and military good article nominee. Nominated by Ian Rose (talk) at 10:48, 13 March 2011 (UTC) An editor has indicated a willingness to review the article in accordance with the good article criteria. Further reviews are welcome from any editor who has not contributed significantly to this article (or nominated it), and can be added to the review page, but the decision whether or not to list the article as a good article should be left to the first reviewer.
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![]() | A fact from John Balmer appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 25 March 2011 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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GA Review
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- This review is transcluded from Talk:John Balmer/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Nick-D (talk) 07:26, 20 March 2011 (UTC)
I'll review this article either tonight or over the next few days.
- Interesting, I'm sure I checked this a few times after you opened the page but only just seen the comments now even though the history says you posted them on the 20th...! Anyway, better late than never (on my part) -- and many thanks for reviewing. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
Comments
This is a very high quality article. I've got a few comments, of which only the third, fourth and sixth are really relevant to passing the GA criteria:
- Should "on the 1933 'B' course" be "in the 1933 'B' course"?
- Well, I always thought you went "on" a course rather than "in" a course... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- I think that the usage is 'in' (eg you participate 'in' a course), but it's not a big deal
- Well, I always thought you went "on" a course rather than "in" a course... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- What's meant by "commissioned as a pilot"? ("commissioned" is usually used to refer to earning a rank rather than qualifying as something)
- You're right of course, just trying to get two ideas across with the minimum of verbiage-- will see what I can do... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- The ADB entry doesn't say that he gained "national attention as a long-distance motorist", though this does seem likely.
- Meant to put in one of the Trove articles that refers to it... ;-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- "Parallel to his Air Force career" sounds a bit odd as he obviously wasn't flying aircraft and driving cars simultaneously.
- I didn't think it really came across like that the way it's worded. I thought about this at the time and decided it was better to put it this way so it wasn't implied that he left the Air Force for a time (as some did before the war, and then rejoined) when he took up motoring. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- Fair enough - I was probably being rather pedantic here
- I didn't think it really came across like that the way it's worded. I thought about this at the time and decided it was better to put it this way so it wasn't implied that he left the Air Force for a time (as some did before the war, and then rejoined) when he took up motoring. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- "cannibalised" might be a bit unclear to readers who aren't familiar with the ways in which military units are formed - you could say that 13 Sqn was formed by "splitting" 12 Sqn or similar.
- Damn, I always liked "cannibalised", but you're probably right, see what I can do... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- Actually, looking again, is it such a problem given it's in inverted commas? Anyway, let me know, the rest are done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:55, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- In the context (particularly given the following sentence) it should be OK. Nick-D (talk) 10:07, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- Actually, looking again, is it such a problem given it's in inverted commas? Anyway, let me know, the rest are done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:55, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- Damn, I always liked "cannibalised", but you're probably right, see what I can do... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
- "before returning to the New Guinea Campaign at its new base in Milne Bay" - this reads as if Milne Bay was the new base for the campaign, not the squadron
- Heh, I guess it does at that, will rephrase. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:44, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
Assessment against GA criteria
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
- Thanks Nick. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:16, 25 March 2011 (UTC)
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