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:The problem is that there are no inline citations and I could find ''nothing'' about the subject on the Internet. [[User:BenLinus1214|<font color="green">BenLinus</font>]][[Special:Contributions/BenLinus1214|<font color="red">1214</font>]]<sup>[[User talk:BenLinus1214|talk]]</sup> 15:23, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
:The problem is that there are no inline citations and I could find ''nothing'' about the subject on the Internet. [[User:BenLinus1214|<font color="green">BenLinus</font>]][[Special:Contributions/BenLinus1214|<font color="red">1214</font>]]<sup>[[User talk:BenLinus1214|talk]]</sup> 15:23, 8 April 2015 (UTC)

== 07:23:11, 10 April 2015 review of submission by Gkwork ==
{{Lafc|username=Gkwork|ts=07:23:11, 10 April 2015|declined=Draft:Music_Fest_Perugia}}

Hi

Regarding the music fest Perugia page, what kind of citations should I add? The articles in the external links contain citations and I am not sure what to add.

Thanks
[[User:Gkwork|Gkwork]] ([[User talk:Gkwork|talk]]) 07:23, 10 April 2015 (UTC)

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Request on 16:58:41, 10 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by NalaHenkel


Hi Ben. Could I ask you which specific references you couldn't verify in my article on Bellwether Credit Union? Thanks so much. Nala

NalaHenkel (talk) 16:58, 10 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Throughout, you need more references. You also can't cite Wikipedia, and the directory refs don't show the subject's notability. In addition, I would also clean up the tone--it sounds fairly promotional right now. BenLinus1214talk 22:34, 10 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for responding, Ben. I'll work on those and resubmit. NalaHenkel (talk) 16:15, 11 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 23:53:07, 11 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Cameroncowan


Could I get some guidance on the A. R. Heaver article you rejected? I could use some help. Its been through many drafts and revisions.

Cameroncowan (talk) 23:53, 11 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. The tone just doesn't seem quite right for an encyclopedia article. Think of your article as having to be very formal. Also, you need more sources. BenLinus1214talk 18:02, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

08:08:00, 12 March 2015 review of submission by Rkosloff


I do not understand you comment on unreliable sources. I used only pear review papers using Chicago style The first section has inline links to other wikipedia sources and serves as an introduction. I refereed to a paper of Scoville who was the first to point out the connection. can you please help me to improve the paper. Rkosloff (talk) 08:08, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The reliable sources thing wasn't exactly what I meant. This looks like a good article, but there are several sections of the it which do not have enough sources for it to be verifiable. If this info is in some of your existing sources, you can use those by doing ref names. Other than that, it looks good. BenLinus1214talk 17:58, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 12:25:43, 12 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by TheOnionLord


Look I know you denied my article, but please, this is for my girlfriend. She is depressed right now due to personal issues and the Pattonian Reign of Terror is a running joke among her and her friends and she's always found hilarious. Im just doing this to cheer her up, to see her smile. So please just let this one go. I swear that I won't post anything else this is the only thing I will post. So I ask again, please just allow this.

Thank you for your time.

TheOnionLord (talk) 12:25, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'm very sorry, but a joke which is not factual or even a real thing is not appropriate for an encyclopedia. I hope that you can find somewhere else to post this, but unfortunately, it is not suitable for Wikipedia. BenLinus1214talk 17:53, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

15:53:24, 12 March 2015 review of submission by Prediger8i


I read all the information posted. I also read most of Wikipedia entries of major NGO's I tried to comply. But it is still rejected. Our fist entry in Wikipdeia was flagged outdated, which is true. Should I just update it? Thanks! Prediger8i (talk) 15:53, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Well, the main problem that I had with the article was the tone. It sounded very promotional to me. Please be sure to read and thoroughly digest WP:NPOV before resubmitting. Good luck. BenLinus1214talk 14:13, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

United States federal judges are inherently notable.

Please note that United States federal judges, including U.S. Court of Claims judges are inherently notable for the reasons set forth at Wikipedia:WikiProject United States courts and judges/Notability. bd2412 T 00:49, 14 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I wasn't aware of that. Thanks for letting me know! :) BenLinus1214talk 02:46, 14 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Notability

Hi, just editing the Jim Ricks artist page http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jim_Ricks and have eliminated unnecessary links. However, if you read through he has been the subject of a number of significant articles in the Irish Times, and Guardian, and been discussed in important journals like Art Monthly. His collaborative project In Search of the Truth may need its own page, but has been very widely acknowledged (for instance being part of the official public sculpture section at Art Basel Miami). Again with direct media coverage.

This fulfils the guidelines 3 and 4 here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Notability_(people)#Creative_professionals

— Preceding unsigned comment added by 79.97.170.154 (talk) 12:56, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

My main problem is that many of your sources are not primarily about the subject. They only include a passing mention. Passing mentions in sources are not enough to establish notability. BenLinus1214talk 14:11, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

There are 2 Irish Times articles entirely about the artist and a UK Guardian piece comparing him and the very famous Jeremy Deller, as well as significant mentions in reviews of group shows. Meaning he was singled out and discussed. But most importantly, his collaborative project In Search of the Truth has received numerous primary mentions including a documentary for the Tribeca Film Institute. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 79.97.170.154 (talk) 21:22, 18 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Could you possibly point me to some links that show what you are saying? BenLinus1214talk 22:20, 18 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Article in Irish Times on Jim Ricks: http://www.irishtimes.com/culture/the-art-of-imitation-1.761000 Guardian piece: http://www.theguardian.com/culture/charlottehigginsblog/2012/may/02/bouncy-stonehenge-glasgow

Work highlighted here: http://www.irishtimes.com/culture/art-and-design/visual-art/sleepwalkers-artistic-experiments-in-biting-the-hand-that-feeds-1.2120477 and here: Art Monthly, Reviews, “Futures 12; Young London”, November 2012, by Curt Riegelnegg

Irish Times Video interview with Jim Ricks on 'In Search of the Truth' going to Afghanistan: http://www.irishtimes.com/news/video?vid=1.1694548 Art Basel Miami Beach 'In Search of the Truth': http://www.artnews.com/2014/11/19/art-basel-miami-beachs-public-programming-includes-baselitz-benglis-and-elmgreen-dragset/ Tribeca 'In Search of the Truth' project: https://tribecafilminstitute.org/films/detail/truth_booth — Preceding unsigned comment added by 79.97.170.154 (talk) 11:33, 19 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Those references are great! It's great that you went ahead and removed ones where Ricks was not the primary subject. Unless you see something else that needs improvement, go ahead and resubmit! :) BenLinus1214talk 15:40, 19 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 79.97.170.154 (talk) 09:19, 24 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

17:22:38, 16 March 2015 review of submission by Johnsonsinclare

This user requested on IRC that you re-review the draft, posting this on behalf of the user :) --George (Talk · Contribs · CentralAuth · Log) 17:22, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Done. BenLinus1214talk 23:07, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

10:46:39, 17 March 2015 review of submission by Linuxste


Hi BenLinus, the article purpose is merely to have a small overview of the supply-chain consulting role in the business. Removing the list of the the firms would help to get accepted? I tried to be as neutral as possible without any hint about on any particular consultancy firm,

Thanks linuxste

Linuxste (talk) 10:46, 17 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The main problem isn't the list of firms, actually. It's the tone in everything else, as well as the benefits section. Both make it seem like the article is trying to promote supply-chain consulting. In particular, a section listing the benefits of something usually amounts to promotional material, as is the case in this article. BenLinus1214talk 14:06, 17 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Ok, I'll try to do it differently than, thanks for the explanation

linuxste

Softech College

Sorry, but A7 doesn't apply to educational establishments. Everything at CSD can be put on if appropriate, but not that one. I'd suggest prod if nothing seems to be happening. Peridon (talk) 17:47, 17 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

And at KateCookie - A11 isn't for people. It's for things like new words ('used by everyone' but apparently only in one class at one school), new drinking games (Beer Pong for cider, or Liebfraumilch, or tequila...), new non-drinking games (which look like a cross between baseball and cricket and usually are played by a National League containing two sides). If it's a person, it's A7 if they're real, or prod if fictional or myth/legend. If they're not fictional (i.e existing in a book) or myth/legend but still are not 'real', or if the tale told about them is ridiculous, they're a hoax. 'Made-up' assumes good faith. Someone actually made it up, but only a very small number know about it and virtually no-one really cares. Hoax assumes bad faith - the intent being to spread deliberate misinformation. CSD takes a bit of getting the hang of - it's a bit like a railway timetable crossed with a theological manual. Peridon (talk) 19:04, 17 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, thanks for letting me know. BenLinus1214talk 02:34, 18 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Hi Ben Is their any news on my resubmission? thnaks RonnieRkosloff (talk) 19:25, 21 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like not yet. It should be reviewed in the next few days. BenLinus1214talk 02:28, 22 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 15:42:01, 23 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by LaraSonnet


I am trying to create a page about the songwriter Patrick Mascall. He has written for a number of big names, including the single Sirens for Cher - however I keep getting rejection due to the lack of proof of his notoriety. What am I missing from the piece?

Sonnet Music 15:42, 23 March 2015 (UTC)

First of all, Don't cite Wikipedia, Facebook, or MetroLyrics. The first results in circular logic when on Wikipedia, and the latter two are considered unreliable. After that, your sources don't really show the subject's notability. References in databases don't count. Please see WP:NMUSIC. BenLinus1214talk 20:20, 23 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"barely slides past CSD A7"

I like it... Peridon (talk) 18:59, 24 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 23:38:06, 24 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Jvwood1121


You denied my Wikipedia page, but I am the adviser running the station. How much more credible can I be?

I even modeled the page after other high school radio pages.

Please help me fix it.

Jvwood1121 (talk) 23:38, 24 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Certainly. Your main problem now is that your references don't prove that the subject is notable. Just being in the app store and on Google Play does not make the subject inherently notable. BenLinus1214talk 01:50, 25 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:John Kavanaugh

For some reason decline template for this AFC draft landed on my talk page instead of the creator who submitted it. I'm not clear on U.S awards but wonder if a Daytime Emmey Award For Music meets WP:NMUSIC. Flat Out let's discuss it 02:18, 25 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Did you resubmit it? Because then, it would appear on your talk page. Eh, I guess you're right that it meets WP:NMUSIC. By the way, the ABC link is broken. I declined it because he was just one of many listed in the ASCAP source who won an Emmy. However, upon further review, I think that that still meets NMUSIC. BenLinus1214talk 02:23, 25 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
There's an edit that says I submitted it.. weird. Certainly didn't mean to. I'll fix the link. Thanks Flat Out let's discuss it 02:27, 25 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

16:44:24, 25 March 2015 review of submission by 13jospin


Edited Sol Kjok article by Twb1934

Hi Ben, In reference to your reply on the Sol Kjok article below, thanks for getting back to me and your kind support! I made the changes you requested with the external links and am hoping it is now okay for approval.

I am going to resubmit it now.

Thanks again for your kind support!

Twb1934

Original exchange below-


17:00:03, 9 March 2015 review of submission by Twb1934[edit] Twb1934 (talk · contribs) Draft:Sol Kjøk (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Twb1934 (talk) 17:00, 9 March 2015 (UTC) Hi BenLinus1214, I received word that my article was declined and read your comments on the reason why. Do you have any other advice on how I can improve it and specifically, what sections are the most problematic? Thanks for your help, TWB 1934

Actually, I think that the review was a mistake on my part. Sorry! I was originally thinking of the "work" section's comments about her style and subject matters, but looking over it more, I realized that it is not original research and has been confirmed by published sources. The only substantial comments that I really have at this point are that the "external links" and "additional references" sections should be merged and that you have too many external links (should be three or four at the most). However, those external link problems aren't justification for declining, so my declining was a mistake. You can go ahead and resubmit it anytime and I would be happy to accept it! :) I'll clean up the external links in mainspace if you don't know what to cut. Good work on this article! :) BenLinus1214talk 19:45, 9 March 2015 (UTC)

Great! I've published it. BenLinus1214talk 22:24, 25 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Ben!! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Twb1934 (talk • contribs) 00:22, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 08:55:22, 26 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Maybelline Ooi


Dear BenLinus1214,

Thank you for reviewing my submission previously. I have taken your comments into the editing. Could I know if I am on the right track with regards to the issue on notability as well as the content since previously it seemed to be like an advertisement?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Queen_Silvia_Nursing_Award

Thank you in advance! Maybelline Ooi (talk) 08:55, 26 March 2015 (UTC)Maybel[reply]


Maybelline Ooi (talk) 08:55, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like another user has already accepted it! :) BenLinus1214talk 16:17, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

09:43:11, 26 March 2015 review of submission by CAMBRO1031


Dear BenLinus1214,

I was under the impression that I had written the article from a neutral point of view, as I was using facts about the history and development of Cook'n With Class Paris. Do you have any advice on how I can edit the article for resubmittion to be better suited for Wikipedia? Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Kind Regards, CAMBRO1031

CAMBRO1031 (talk) 09:43, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Basically, the first three paragraphs or so sound like an advertisement. Phrases like "trained with the likes of famous chefs" or the "is recognized as one of the first" make the submission sound like an advertisement. BenLinus1214talk 16:15, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

09:58:04, 27 March 2015 review of submission by 46.164.129.182


Hi! I kindly ask to provide the reviewer a detailed explanation of what exactly he/she has found inappropriate in the article. This information is very important, because I am really willing to have the BeNaughty article posted on the Wikipedia. So, it it more about unreliable sources or advertisement in the article? Do you mind providing any suggestions on the improvements of the article? Thanks you in advance. Looking forward to your reply. Best Regards, Ann

46.164.129.182 (talk) 09:58, 27 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hello,
The tone to the article just sounds promotional. Especially the top section and the "Features" section. Also, be sure to check out WP:MOS. BenLinus1214talk 22:16, 31 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

10:56:17, 27 March 2015 review of submission by O'Segun Soulrich Emiola


Just want to know while the submission is pending/rejected

Soulrich 10:56, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

you are a f*****g guy I wanted to submit my article. of course I am going to submit this again95.225.25.164 (talk) 10:57, 27 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Just submit it again. It looked like a test before, but you've done a lot with it. 95.225.25.164, I'm not sure whether you're the submitter or not, but no matter what, there's no need for profanity. If you're talking about a different article, start a new section. BenLinus1214talk 22:18, 31 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 17:08:43, 30 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Smsegall


Hello, I was given feedback on an article I submitted for review. "The content of this submission includes material that does not meet Wikipedia's minimum standard for inline citations. Please cite your sources using footnotes. For instructions on how to do this, please see Referencing for beginners. Thank you."

Can you elaborate on this please? Do I need more citations? Did I do the citations incorrectly? I used ref tags following my cited material. There was a references list at the bottom of the article.

Thank you for your help. Smsegall (talk) 17:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Smsegall (talk) 17:08, 30 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

You need more inline citations. As a biography of a living person, your article needs to have citations for nearly everything. Also, be sure your citations are inline citations (do this using ref tags) BenLinus1214talk 22:21, 31 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

08:45:40, 2 April 2015 review of submission by Oupho-udv


Oupho-udv (talk) 08:45, 2 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Hi BenLinus1214 I am writing regarding this article draft: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Digitalife

I have already had a chat in the "teahouse" and they have explained to me briefly why it has been refused.

I believe I have understood the main reasons, however, I do not understand why it was flagged as SPAM? Can you please explain to me?

Also, when the research is completed and the new building material is on the market (for any producer to produce, not only one! which is the aim for the EU Life+ programme), if we provide all the scientific research there is (there is plenty on this matter, since we are talking about beneficial vs cancerogenous building materials) and reduce the external links to private commercial entities, would the new material research project be acceptable? It would not be an original research, but a final sum-up research of other researches, which will be finalised in a EU-approved new material. Can you please let me know how it can be improved?

Thank you for your help and have a great day/night :)

Looks like User:RHaworth has deleted the page under CSD G11. I review so many AfC submissions that I don't remember individual submissions until I see them again. I suggest you talk to the deleting admin. Best of luck. BenLinus1214talk 18:43, 2 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi have got your messages ok — Preceding unsigned comment added by 162.104.88.80 (talk) 01:07, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

01:47:12, 6 April 2015 review of submission by Dianaliverman

I do not understand why the page is a problem. There are many similar pages that provide links to well known figures in different fields. I wanted to create a page to inspire young women to become global change scientists! How do I need to change it? Is the list of women inappropriate? We tried to outline appropriate criteria. Is the intro incorrect? Can you refer me to a page about leading scholars in another field that I can use as a model?

Ironically I am watching 60 minutes on Wikpedia right now and they are talking about gender bias - and the need for more pages by and about women!!!!

Professor Diana Liverman

Dianaliverman (talk) 01:47, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I totally agree that there is a need for more pages by and about women! I think that a page you could use as a model is women in science or women in philosophy. Your criteria for inclusion are good criteria, but there's no need to put them in the article. There are two main routes you could take with the article: One is a list (such as List of female astronauts), and the other is an article with prose that lists a some notable female environmental scientists at the end. Also, you need inline citations: See Referencing for beginners. Best of luck! BenLinus1214talk 02:55, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I have done an extensive edit to turn the submission into an essay with extensive citations. I hope it now meets criteria for posting to Wikipedia! Thanks! Diana Dianaliverman (talk) 14:31, 8 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Questions regarding Submission Draft:Raiffa-Howard_Decision_Quality_Award

Hello BenLinus1214,

Thank you for reviewing my submission!

In your feedback, you said the article "read more like an advertisement", and I would love to make efforts to make it more "Wikipedia compatible": it is not an advertisement as there is no financial motivation hidden behind this award at all. It is in fact part of an academic proceeding (Annual Conferences of the Institute for Operations Research and the Management Sciences as well as its celebration of the 50th Anniversary of the discipline Decision Analysis). So it is not mean to promote a product or service or a company. Please let me know how I could revise the draft so that it is consistent with Wikipedia guidelines.

In order to comply with the policy of referring to "independent, reliable, published sources", I have included two external links at the end of the article, hoping that would help this article in this respect. There is a rich body of academic literature on the subject of Decision Analysis and Decision Quality, and I have referred to the most cited journal in this article as well.

Please advise further if there is anything else I could do to improve this article.

Best regards,

Lwhhorn (talk) 03:36, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I wouldn't say promotional exactly, but the article does not meet the Wikipedia policy of a neutral point of view. Much of the article seems to espouse the view that the award is very prestigious and only given to very distinguished candidates (which it may be--but don't put that in your prose. If you want to say that, make sure that it's an opinion that other people have written. An example would be the sentence, "They also noted that Chevron has substantially out-performed its peer group on a host of financial metrics, consistent with the belief that improved decision quality will deliver superior financial performance in the long run." Also, your section on the criteria is overly detailed and seems to show off the award. If possible, incorporate your external links as inline citations. Let me know if you have any more questions about my decline reason. If you have questions about the core content policies, I would visit the Teahouse. Regards, BenLinus1214talk 14:58, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

06:33:44, 6 April 2015 review of submission by Ashlesh84


Ashlesh84 (talk) 06:33, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Did you have a particular question? If it's about my decline reason, the sources you have, by and large, are not reliable and do not prove the subject's notability. Also, Wikipedia does not cite itself. BenLinus1214talk 13:57, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:BeNaughty.Com (dating site)

Draft:BeNaughty.Com (dating site) Hi! Please review my article about BeNaughty.com service once again. I would be thankful to you if you also explain how to avoid the “advertising” tone in its contents. This time I have edited the article trying to make its tone as neutral as possible. The reason of why I ask you about that is that I compiled our article looking up to the articles about other dating services published on Wikipedia. The latter all have nearly the same descriptions. I would be very disappointed to see my work go for nothing as it is very important for me. Best regards, Ann

Okay, the promotional tone seems to be a bit better. However, you need to format your article in accordance with WP:MOS. It should be reviewed in a few days. BenLinus1214talk 14:50, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft Page for A. G. Riddle

Hello, Two questions:

1.) I'm not sure if my newest revision is the one you reviewed. I hit the "saved" button, but the old revision is still there; although I still have my new revision in my Sandbox, I can't tell that the newest revision is saved anywhere. Perhaps I just re-submitted the old revision?

2.) My newest revision contains references to Riddle's book rights being picked up for movie rights by CBS Films and 20th Century Fox. I can't believe this does not elevate him to being "notable"?

Just to make sure we are on the same page, here is my latest revision:

A. G. Riddle is a science fiction writer. He is presently ranked in Amazon's Author Rank as #33 over the categories Action & Adventure, Science Fiction, and Science Fiction & Fantasy [1].

He has published four books: The Atlantis Gene (4/5/13) [2], The Atlantis Plague (11/18/13) [3], The Atlantis World (5/15/14) [4] and Departure (12/2/15)[5]. The books are self published.

On June 26th, 2014, CBS Films acquired the rights to Riddle's Atlantis series [6]. On April 2, 2015 it was announced that HarperCollins acquired the print rights to Departure, and that 20th Century Fox acquired the film rights.

Steven C. Price 13:39, 6 April 2015 (UTC)

Looks like the one I reviewed and this one aren't the same. Anyways, on this one, I would still recommend cleaning up the sources. The Deadline source is good, but the majority of your sources are from the author's website, which aren't considered reliable. BenLinus1214talk 15:59, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

References

  1. ^ http://www.amazon.com/A.G.-Riddle/e/B00C32LQBK/ref=sr_tc_2_0?qid=1428091648&sr=8-2-ent
  2. ^ http://www.agriddle.com/Atlantis-Gene
  3. ^ http://www.agriddle.com/Atlantis-Plague
  4. ^ http://www.agriddle.com/Atlantis-World
  5. ^ http://www.agriddle.com/departure
  6. ^ http://www.deadline.com/2014/06/atlantis-gene-movie-cbs-films-rights-deal/

15:22:13, 6 April 2015 review of submission by Steelyskoal


Hello BenLinus1214, thank you for reviewing my recent submission about the Center for Women's Health in Portland, Oregon. This is my first attempt at an article, and it seems I didn't get it quite right. Can you tell me if there are particular areas of the article that read as too much of a potential advertisement? Was it the use of the Center's website as citation material? Any feedback would be appreciated--I mainly want to get something up as the Center is engaged in planning an edit-a-thon relating to WikiProject Medicine and I'd like people to know where they are going.

Thank you! --Steelyskoal (talk) 15:22, 6 April 2015 (UTC) Steelyskoal (talk) 15:22, 6 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Basically, some of the material sounds promotional, such as "The OHSU Center for Women’s Health supports the OHSU mission of research by cooperating with researchers who wish to use the Center’s patient population for their studies," as well as the bullet points in the "History" section. One possible solution is to create a section in either Oregon Health & Science University or Oregon Health & Science University Hospital (I don't know which one fits better) about the Center. Or you could try to clean up the tone in the existing submission. BenLinus1214talk 11:46, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Trying to understand submission denial

Hello BenLinus,

You recently declined my submission for the following page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_Musicians_Guide_To_Polyrhythms

You suggested making a Personal Bio page for Peter Magadini which may help establish his notability. Another user has done this, and the page was approved and now live. That personal bio page uses external references that I originally used in this book article, but I was told that they were not reliable. So, I changed the reference to established Library references including the Library of Congress. These have also now been denied. I'm unsure where to go from here. I used references from "reliable publications which have an editorial process" and was denied. I removed those and link to publication details which you denied. Can you offer any suggestions on which references will work? Thank you.

Gsrouse (talk) 02:23, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It probably has something to do with the fact that the majority of your sources are search queries in notable libraries. Just being in a library does not establish notability. I also suggest that you contact the most recent decliner to get their opinion on the subject. BenLinus1214talk 11:54, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Dope D.O.D. Page

Hey BenLines1214,

My wikipedia page is rejected. Can you help me with what to do if I want it to be accepted? I'm new to this and i don't really know what i'm doing.

Thank you in advance! — Preceding unsigned comment added by AlexTsolodimos (talk • contribs) 09:55, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sure. You just need to add inline citations to reliable sources. For more information, see WP:REFB and WP:IRS. BenLinus1214talk 15:22, 8 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 16:14:39, 7 April 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Manubay


I appreciate your critique on my article. It's not a hoax but it appears like one to you, it obviously needs more work. Thank you. Manubay (talk) 16:14, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The problem is that there are no inline citations and I could find nothing about the subject on the Internet. BenLinus1214talk 15:23, 8 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

07:23:11, 10 April 2015 review of submission by Gkwork


Hi

Regarding the music fest Perugia page, what kind of citations should I add? The articles in the external links contain citations and I am not sure what to add.

Thanks Gkwork (talk) 07:23, 10 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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