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I've done some edits to remove extraneous details (ex. biographical bits that are not important to her story or her contribution), wordiness, flowery language, etc. It could still be trimmed down quite a bit, hopefully by someone who knows more about the subject than I do. Some additional things to consider removing or trimming: details about her parents, names of people who may not be notable enough to mention by name (such as Wilhelmina Stigter and Peggy Kloppers? and others), the tours from 1976-79
For external links, see WP:EL. Articles are meant to have only one (maybe two) EL's that are fundamentally representative of the topic, such as the link to the central Eurythmy organization.
Bits that could be more clear:
"In 1947 she was finally able to report on what had happened to Marie Steiner after a gap of nearly ten years" (so what happened to her? Or would you rather say they were finally able to communicate, perhaps?)
"Verein zur Förderung der Eurythmie e. V." (Association for the fostering of Eurythmy) was founded to support the school.[1] They called this provisional setting “Private Eurythmic Conservatory Köngen on the Neckar.” (is there a translation for that? Why are there two separate names and do we need to know both?) Also, “Eurythmeum e.V.” - what's e.V. mean?--Karinpower (talk) 22:37, 29 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Also, I wanted to say thanks to 3rdWorldKid for being such a good sport about my meddling. --Karinpower (talk) 23:09, 29 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]
3world Kid (talk) 00:17, 30 November 2014 (UTC)I've done the best I could by now. Other editors might still be able to improve things. Her notability I think is clear as the pioneer of a modern art form, writer, performer to packed halls of some hundreds of thousands of people all over the world and being acknowledged with the Order of Merit of the Federal German Republic. And many thanks to Karinpower for all the support.[reply]
