Talk:Foothill High School (Pleasanton, California)

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News/band[edit]

There's a lot of POV in this article, and not enough citations, especially in the band section. There's an especially long paragraph in the "In the News" section about a freshman girl in 1984, with no citation (and it probably shouldn't be in there anyways, as it's probably not "news" anymore). 24.4.6.180 (talk) 01:57, 18 January 2008 (UTC)

Copyedit[edit]

Let's attempt to fix this...

From FHS Webpage

Foothill High School, a four-year secondary school, is one of two comprehensive high schools and one alternative high school in the Pleasanton Unified School District, first opening in 1973. Currently enrolling about 2100 students--a student body that has doubled in the last eight years--the campus is located literally at the base of the foothills that border the inner eastern San Francisco Bay Area.

From Wikipedia article

Foothill High School, a four-year secondary school, built in 1973, is one of two comprehensive high schools and one alternative high school in the Pleasanton Unified School District. Currently enrolling about 2100 students — a student body that has doubled in the last eight years — the campus is located literally at the base of the foothills that border the inner eastern San Francisco Bay Area.

--Stacey Doljack Borsody 17:07, 3 September 2006 (UTC)

Rather sad to see that the Amador Valley High School wikipedia article also copies word for word from the AHS website. --Stacey Doljack Borsody 17:12, 3 September 2006 (UTC)

Marching Band[edit]

Foothill marching band is by no means the largest in California. Just look at James Logan in Union City... —Preceding unsigned comment added by Laurie ak (talkcontribs)

It never said anything about it being the largest band, it just marched the most distance —Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.7.109.167 (talkcontribs)

I am a little disapointed that there is so much on the Marching Band. Yea, they are good and deserve respect, but come on....There is just so much fluff in there. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 170.167.4.210 (talk) 20:19, 8 May 2008 (UTC)

I agree. While I hate to say it, rival school Amador Valley's page is eons ahead of Foothill's. This page needs to expand, to include more original information, as well as provide a neutral POV. Perhaps a piece on Bob Moorefield as well; he seemed to be a notable figure in California. --Falconrok5 (talk) 00:04, 17 July 2009 (UTC)

Freak Dancing[edit]

What really needs to be in the article is how FHS banned "freak dancing." Biggest news of the year... —Preceding unsigned comment added by 128.12.132.120 (talkcontribs)

POV[edit]

Very POV article, obviously lifted from some Foothill HS publication. Note use of 1st person pronouns. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Tafinucane (talkcontribs)

What are you talking about? I dont see any POV pronouns —Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.5.240.44 (talkcontribs)

The article is a basic cut'n'paste copy from FHS's website, probably done by a current student. See [About Foothill]. I think this violates some sort of Wikipedia originality requirement. --Stacey Doljack Borsody 16:50, 28 December 2005 (UTC)

eBay[edit]

What really needs to go on the page is how it was put up for sale on eBay last year. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.169.159.111 (talkcontribs)

Clean-up[edit]

I changed the student body part around, there was too much gratutis information about the city and Silcon Valley and not enough about the actual student body. --User:WalterWalrus3

needs to be tagged for cleanup put under wikischools 128.54.160.176 05:36, 20 March 2006 (UTC)

What is notable?[edit]

Since there is a dispute over what belongs on the page ([1],[2]), I will annotate my recent revisions here:

  1. Selling something unusual on eBay is not notable. Foothill would be one of tens of thousands of unusual items listed on eBay. For sale on eBay have been souls, dates, entire countries, etc. eBay#Unusual_sale_items
  2. "They are one of fewer than 35 schools in the state to have maintained an increase in API score for four consecutive years." needs a citation - it is a specific, verifiable fact, the like of which spring up all over the web uncited and incorrect.
  3. I changed the wording of the world record section to not infringe on the copyright of the source.
  4. The source says that they've performed only four times at the Rose Bowl Parade.
  5. The cited source does not list the band's size.
  6. "Stunningly talented" violates Wikipedia's Neutral Point of View policy
  7. The "1,500 awards" claim comes with no mention of what "most" means, and requires additional, third party, citation according to WP:Reliable sources#Self-published sources in articles about themselves.
  8. The "freak dancing" "controversy" included notes about citation in other media. Until those media sources are cited, this information is not verified and does not belong in an encyclopedia.
  9. The student opinions and names of senior prankers are original research.

********** 04:13, 22 August 2006 (UTC)

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