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The first sentence in the lead needs a verb, and the second sentence has two semi-colons (I generally prefer to keep it to one per sentence).
The first sentence in the Early service section reads a bit odd, specifically the "he", then "it." I know what you mean, but it sounds odd when the subject of the pronoun changed in the sentence. Maybe instead of "it", substitute "the unit" or something like that.
The line he realized he was a junior lieutenant out prospects - should that be "without prospects" ?
In that same section, you've got ...was advanced to Rittmeister - that reads a little odd as well. I know you don't want to use "promoted" every time, but maybe "advanced in grade/rank" or something like that, just so we're clear what's going on.
In the second paragraph of the 7 Years War section, can you clarify what the "light troops" were? You mention above he was given command of a battalion; was it a full brigade?
The article has been significantly improved, and I feel it now meets the criteria for GA. Nice work, Ruth. Parsecboy (talk) 13:03, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
My two cents
This article needs a thorough copy edit, as there are missing wording and needlessly repetitive wording. (And that is just reading the first few sentences of the lead.) Regards, Xtzou(Talk) 22:36, 26 May 2010 (UTC)