Talk:King Edward's Place

A fact from King Edward's Place appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 10 September 2021 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that King Edward's Place, once a love nest for King Edward VII, later became a children's activity centre?

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 04:39, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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... that King Edward's Place was once a love nest for King Edward VII, before becoming a children's activity centre?
- ALT1... that King Edward's Place was both a love nest for King Edward VII and the scene of the suicide of prominent financier James White?
- ALT2... that financier James White killed himself at King Edward's Place, formerly a love nest for King Edward VII and Lillie Langtry?
- ALT3... that owner of Wembley Stadium, James White killed himself at King Edward's Place, formerly a love nest for King Edward VII and Lillie Langtry?

Created by Owain.davies (talk). Self-nominated at 16:02, 18 August 2021 (UTC).[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: I prefer the first hook; it is catchy and to the point.
The usage of PGL's own website as a source makes me uncomfortable - are there no secondary, independent RSes? The section about the various activities offered by PGL sounds vaguely promotional and similar in tone to what they would write on their own website. It should be written more neutrally.
The article seems to be comprised of a large number of single-line paragraphs, including one incomplete sentence in the section about Jimmy White. The prose should have complete sentences and should preferably be condensed into larger paragraphs.
QPQ: Waiting—I see nominator is currently reviewing Sefine Shipyard. Wilhelm Tell DCCXLVI ^{talk | fings wot i hav dun} 15:16, 19 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

- Thanks for the helpful feedback. I've tried to address the prose in those two sections as suggested, hope that helps. I took the view that primary sources were appropriate in terms of what they offer at this centre, and I can't seem to come up with much in the way of third party sources which talk about them offering these things at this centre. I can find citations that say that PGL in general do these things, but not necessarily at this centre. Any further thoughts welcome. OwainDavies ^(about)_(talk) edited at 11:24, 20 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Owain.davies, it's all good to go now. Waiting for your QPQ. If the nominator there hasn't responded you could review something else and ask on Wikipedia talk:DYK for someone else to take over Sefine Shipyard's nomination. Wilhelm Tell DCCXLVI ^{talk | fings wot i hav dun} 17:43, 26 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Owain.davies I see that the Sefine Shipyard review is temporarily on hold, but I think you've done due diligence in the review and trust you will take it to completion, so I'll pass this DYK. Cheers, and happy editing!

the first hook ("...children's activity centre"). Kind regards, Wilhelm Tell DCCXLVI ^{talk | fings wot i hav dun} 16:40, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

To T:DYK/P3

"entertain?"

This isn't DYK-disqualifying, so i'll leave it here, but are we allowed to euphemize that way? I didn't think we were. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (they/them) 04:38, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]