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Peer review 2 by Wei Xie

In general, the article is quite comprehensive and informative. This article is a biography of a basketball player of UNC-Chapel Hill. The structure of the article is organized, but the name of the first content "Personal" sounds a little ambiguous. Maybe "personal life" or "early life" will be more appropriate since the content is about Marcus's early personal life. One suggestion of the structure is to try put the "high school" and "college" under one content called "Professional sports career." The "Career highs" could be stand-alone as one content. Also, adding a content for honors and awards may make the article more clear and attractive. The table on the right is a great feature served as a brief biography. However, the information in the table should be more precise because it may confuse readers. For example, the person's college is "North Carolina." The readers may ask "is the college in North Carolina" or "is the college called North Carolina?" The factual information should be accurate because potential audience of Wikipedia is from around the world. The information in this article is up to date because the player is still in the college. Other evidences of currency and accuracy are that the resources are from the college and the ACC(Atlantic Coast Conference) which provide credible information of the athlete's profile. The main problem of the article is citation. Throughout the article, there is no formal citation used. Therefore, it is hard to tell which part of the article is from resources. And it looks like the whole article is a synthesis of the resources. In this case, there is a possible violation of copyright. At last, the bias issue. When writing a biography, it is easy to become biased because people have their motives in writing a particular person. Then, the writer becomes biased towards one side unwittingly. So is this article. There is a sense of favoring the good sides of Marcus Ginyard. One reason may be the lack of information. One could try to revise the words and sentences in order to minimized the sense of bias. Wxie (talk) 02:59, 8 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review- By Hillary Great job overall! I just have a few comments!

Strengths: - Thought the links to other pages (like cities, schools, tar heel) really add to the professionalism and help to understand what's going on - the description box to the right is very informative - very organized, like the titles, easy to find information - thought the career highs section was really interesting and creative - nice use of an external link so that viewers can find more information

Tips for improvement: - make sure to cite LOTS ( for example, the stories about Marcus and his mom, little things like that you need to cite) - watch out for bias - expand college years (perhaps by each year of his career, considering that is really why he is worthy of a Wikipedia page, not for his high school career)

Questions - Do you think your tone is biased? Can the readers tell you are obviously a Carolina fan? ( try to use more neutral language?) - Where is your information coming from? Are the sources biased themselves? Are you using a wide variety of sources? (for example are the cites sponsored by the University or are they independent? ) Heharper (talk) 00:00, 25 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

For starters, I think this article is well done, good job. The strengths of this article include the great amount of information provided. I like the table provided; that's a nice touch. Also, the general organization works well with the nature of the article as it makes sense to outline a personal bio followed by two sections of his basketball career. Unfortunately, the article is not perfect--yet. The greatest weakness of this article is its obvious bias. For example, you say one can find evidence of his defensive contributions in Carolina's season since he has been injured. Here, you need to further this evidence by stating the effects of his absence instead of assuming the reader is a fellow Carolina fan and keeps up with Carolina Basketball. In the personal section, you may want to shorten the bit about his parents and maybe move it to explaining his upbringing. For example, it may make more sense to say his mother played basketball for the Marine Corps and his father served as a Marine until he tragically fell victim of the terrorist attacks... Proof reading for a neutral tone will help the article much as well. Lastly, you need to sharpen up your citations. Try putting all your sources into a formal citation so one can find more easily the articles you read while researching. In other words, cite the articles/passages you used, not the general websites. As for additional resources, I think you pretty much covered it seeing that few have written about Ginyard thus far, but maybe you could interview a former teammate or Ginyard himself. --Hturley (talk) 18:05, 25 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This article is well organized and informative. I like the box listing basic information at the top of the page which makes finding any general information about Ginyard easy. I would recommend posting a picture of Ginyard in the top of the box, however, which I feel would add significantly to the aesthetic nature of this page. Also, I like the organization moving from earlier career hightlights and statistics into the college era, however I feel there could be more done with the college section. Does Ginyard have any specifically notable games, performances, or plays that could constitute another subsection within "College?" The Tar Heels just won the national championship which gives Ginyard another high accolade (despite not being able to play) which is probably noteworthy on this page. Furthermore, could his likely presence as an senior leader amoungst many talented but young players next year be discussed on this page? Maybe you could find links to interviews where Roy Williams discusses the impact that Ginyard is expected to have in the 2009-2010 season?

There is a significant lack of citation throughout this article which is hurting its credibility. Although a couple of references are listed, there are few to none direct citations to them and if your reader is not shown exactly where information is comming from it becomes suspect. I recommend simply going through the page again and citing exact news articles, websites, or player biographies that yo have utilized for this page to clear up this issue. Overall, great job! Barrettgholland (talk) 13:50, 8 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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