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The second section is a biography submitted to an organization, how do we deal with that? Can it be edited by an editor here? I doubt it. I am not sure how we deal with it or where we should put it. Tennisedu (talk) 19:47, 2 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Tennisedu, both references to the USTA Halls of Fame are dead but based on the text and the intro of the Biography section it appears to be a clear copyright violation and should be removed in its current form. Frankly this article has been rather a mess for a long time and needs a thorough rewrite. It used to be even worse but it is still a puff piece that lacks a neutral and factual tone. Most of the copy originates from one editor and there is a hint of a conflict of interest. A few pointers in case you want to rewrite the article. Section titles should be in sentence case, see MOS:HEADCAPS, so 'Tennis career' instead of 'Tennis Career'. Also, try to avoid multiple single line sentences separated by line breaks but instead create logical paragraphs for a better flow of the text. Finally, for better readability it is best to alternate the 'he' pronoun and the name. This is not an ironclad rule but there are now five consecutive sentences with 'Holmberg' at the start which is repetitive and somewhat unnatural to read.--Wolbo (talk) 15:34, 7 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I will just remove that block "biography" section in total. Will start to improve the rest of the article.Tennisedu (talk) 17:32, 7 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]