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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: Mnsvyc.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 03:57, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review / 10/4

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Although the "lead" section is quite short, it still gave me insight as to what the article would be about in the coming information. Once you gather more research, I would suggest expanding the "lead section," including her birth date and death date in the beginning of the lead as well. You might also want to find out what year "Young Abe Lincoln" was published and put that into your article. I suggest this because after the Marsh Joint Guardianship Law is mentioned, which took place in 1913, the next date to be mentioned is her death in 1946. This large gap makes me curious as to what went on during the years between, if anything. William.hirsch (talk) 17:13, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I really appreciate your advice! I totally would've missed that publication date if you wouldn't have pointed it out. I also appreciate your perspective on the gap in the later half of her life, I'll work to learn more about that time and fill in those noticeable gaps.

==I like how you discussed her motivation to change the law. For the to-do list you could have someone write an article about Allroy Phillips and the daughters of the revolution. Also I think it would be helpful to link to the guardianship law if there is a page for that. What do the sections say in the law? Which is most beneficial and influential? I don't know if you had any other sections to add but it might be nice to have a legacy section. You could discuss how the law has changed the state and you could also talk about who she was survived by. Really good work! Epchdc (talk) 17:31, 6 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much! I've been having trouble finding information on Alroy Phillips, but I agree that it would help further develop the article. Thank you for your suggestions, I'll definitely be using them to help edit my article!

==Great job on the article, I liked that you added a picture of her as well as of her book. Here are a few suggestions for editing: The section early life seems to just contain immediate family relations. Is there any more information about her childhood that could be added? If not, I would like to suggest maybe changing the section heading title to something like "Family". Is there a page for Alroy Phillips that could be linked to your page? Other suggestions to link pages/stub ideas: Marsh Guardianship Law, Douglas Oliver, Daughters of the American Revolution, literary works. Under political involvement, is it possible to expand on how they met/their relationship? Were you able to find any information on if she was involved in any other political activities? After the law passed, was she ever recognized for her role in getting it passed during her lifetime? Did she had a career outside her political involvement? If it was writing books, were you able to find out how she became involved in that? Was she ever educated? (maybe this stuff could go into early life if so?) Just a few random thoughts to help if you were aiming to add to content :) Great article, she seems like quite a determined lady! Mnsvyc (talk) 17:10, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Unfortunately my hunt for information on Alroy Phillips has led to many dead ends, but I'm still looking to find information. Thank you for these suggestions! I'm just as curious as finding answers to these as you are! Really appreciate these questions, I haven't thought of many of them!

A link to her book: http://www.worldcat.org/title/missouri-anthology/oclc/2640739 MeganPeiser (talk) 17:01, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from Prof. P

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Great work here. Your sub-headings do a good job at guiding readers, and also highlighting the diversity of Marsh's work. How can we make sure that this article is no longer an orphan by December 2016? Can we edit the Daughters of 1812 page to list her award, and like to her? We want to ensure that this page is stable. Love that you were able to snag a picture of her. Can we also get the covers of her books up here? MeganPeiser (talk) 15:57, 14 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Xx236 (talk) 08:03, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

She was a women's rights activist, whcich should be linked in the lead. Activism doesn't inform about such activism.Xx236 (talk) 08:15, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]