Template:Did you know nominations/Thawun Gyi

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The result was: promoted by sst✈^(discuss) 03:32, 15 December 2015 (UTC)

Thawun Gyi

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... that Thawun Gyi (r. 1279–1317) was the founder and first ruler of Toungoo, the predecessor state of the Toungoo dynasty of Myanmar?
ALT1: ... that Thawun Gyi was the founder of the Toungoo dynasty of Myanmar?
ALT2: ... that Thawun Gyi was the founder of the Principality of Toungoo of Myanmar?

Reviewed: Genesis Motors

Created by Hybernator (talk). Self-nominated at 20:27, 22 November 2015 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook eligibility:

Cited:
Interesting: - ?

QPQ: Done.

Overall: AGF for sourcing and foreign language usage. Note 1 skirts close to OR, but is an accumulation of information rather than research. I would recommend ALT1 as being a snappier hook, at 109 characters versus 174. Also, including date of reign in ALT0 is a questionable overkill of information. It may seem I am being hard on the nominator, but I truly admire the scholarship involved in working in both Burmese and English. Delete the dates from ALT0, and/or accept ALT1, and this article should be GTG for DYK.Georgejdorner (talk) 17:05, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

Thanks very for the review, Georgejdorner. ALT1 is certainly snappier but inaccurate (as the Toungoo dynasty was founded in 1485.) What do you think about ALT2? It's in the same spirit, and factually accurate. Thanks, Hybernator (talk) 18:27, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

ALT1 struck for inaccuracy. ALT2 approved. I still have reservations about ALT0, as I do not recall seeing similar date ranges in other editors' prior DYK hooks.Georgejdorner (talk) 19:18, 28 November 2015 (UTC)