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Tochter Zion, freue dich
- ... that the popular German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) was written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke around 1820 on music which in two Handel oratorios describes the entry of a victor? Source: [1]
- Reviewed: Five Ash Down Independent Chapel; Uckfield Baptist Church, 2nd article
- Comment:
please no later than 23 December, perhaps 22 December?
Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 12:40, 8 December 2019 (UTC).
- Taking source on good faith, because I trust Gerda's judgement a little more than google books' auto translate so what would be the point. Besides that, article is good. I don't quite understand the hook, though, is there something else you can propose @Gerda Arendt:, and we can maybe force this into a space on the 23rd? Kingsif (talk) 00:46, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- Kingsif, thank you for seasonal greetings (on my talk) and for reviewing this, and many others!! Only, I have no time these days. Advent will be over tomorrow, so no rush. - I could propose something else, but this is it, a recommandation to conductors to not do it slowly but like a bright triumphal march ;) - We have no other song about which could be said that it is the music that Handel liked so much that he used in 2 (!) oratorios. Sorry, I won't have time now for looking at the other other reviews: with company, and singing 3 times on the 3 days we celebrate Christmas, + an extra rehearsal for the live broadcast. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:29, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- That's fine! I could understand from reading the article, but I don't think the hook makes it clear that Ranke put words over Handel's music, and Handel had used that music twice, and the description at the end more confuses what the hook of the hook is supposed to be. Whenever's good for you, enjoy the holiday season, nice pictures :) Kingsif (talk) 13:36, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- Could you rephrase the hook, perhaps? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:48, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- I could, but I'd have to put it back up for review? Kingsif (talk) 22:58, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- Not if you just rephrase the checked facts, - only if you'd introduce something new with other references. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 23:51, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- I could, but I'd have to put it back up for review? Kingsif (talk) 22:58, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- Could you rephrase the hook, perhaps? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:48, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
- That's fine! I could understand from reading the article, but I don't think the hook makes it clear that Ranke put words over Handel's music, and Handel had used that music twice, and the description at the end more confuses what the hook of the hook is supposed to be. Whenever's good for you, enjoy the holiday season, nice pictures :) Kingsif (talk) 13:36, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
While I think per the hook being part of the criteria does mean each phrasing needs independent review, I hope I can ping Yoninah to get that of my proposed Alt1?
- ALT1 ... that the popular German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) was written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke, over music by Handel that he had used in two oratorios to describe the entry of a victor? (189 chars. unless my counting is bad, same source as above w/ minor rephrasing)
- Kingsif (talk) 00:18, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
- I like that, thank you. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:40, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
echo 'that the popular German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) was written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke, over music by Handel that he had used in two oratorios to describe the entry of a victor?' | wc
- This gives "1 35 205"; the last number is the character count (1 line, 35 words). Minor quibble, but I think a more conventional English phrasing would be ALT1a; "writing" a song means writing both the text and the music, and words are set to music, or the music has a new text written for it. That/which is irrelevant in British usage, and has grammatical meaning in American usage; this is a nonrestrictive clause, so "which". The referent "he" is also a bit confusing.
- ALT1a ... that the popular German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) has lyrics written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke to music by Handel, which he had used in two oratorios to describe the entry of a victor? (211)
- ALT1b ... that the German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) has lyrics written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke to music by Handel, which Handel had used for victorious entrances in two oratorios? (198)
- ALT2 ... that the German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) has a melody used for victorious entrances in two Handel oratorios, with a later text written for it by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke? (196)
- ALT3 ... that the German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) has lyrics written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke to music used for victorious entrances in two Handel oratorios? (177)
- ALT4 ... that the German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) has Entry into Jerusalem lyrics written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke to music used for victorious entrances in two Handel oratorios? (198)
- ALT4a ... that the German Advent song "Tochter Zion, freue dich" (pictured) has Entry into Jerusalem lyrics written by Friedrich Heinrich Ranke to music used for victorious entrances in two oratorios by Handel? (201, but avoids WP:sea of blue)
Kingsif? We are allowed a bit of latitude on the character limit. HLHJ (talk) 00:23, 24 December 2019 (UTC)
- I think any of the alts introducing the "Entry into Jerusalem" part
will need another source review, since I didn't look for that in the original. Just found Parent & Stalmann in the article, taking on good faith for complex German on book autotranslate again, but looks fine. As far as I know, the "(pictured)" doesn't count towards the character limit, so it's irrelevant in 4a. Any of HLHJ's alts work fine for me. Kingsif (talk) 00:29, 24 December 2019 (UTC)- Thanks, I didn't know that; knock 10 off each character count (we could even add "popular" back in). I can read the German text; I vouch for the fact that it mentions David's son riding into Jerusalem on a donkey. Gerda Arendt, when you have time after the holidays, do you have preferences? HLHJ (talk) 04:15, 24 December 2019 (UTC)
- I think any of the alts introducing the "Entry into Jerusalem" part