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Bruno Lanteri[edit]

I launched a project in late 2013 to start a biographic article on the Italian priest-founder Fr. Bruno Lanteri, currently Venerable. Visit the project page here: User:Paulmnguyen/Lanteri. I hope the writing will proceed smoothly and it can quickly be made available in the various languages indicated on that project page.

GNOME[edit]

GNOME[edit]

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.

  •  Done The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
  •  Done Per WP:WIAFA, Images should have concise captions.
  •  Done Per WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
  •  Done Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at WP:GTL.
  •  Done Please alphabetize the interlanguage links.
  • There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
    • are considered
    • might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).[1]
  •  Done Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: meter (A) (British: metre), center (A) (British: centre), organize (A) (British: organise), organise (B) (American: organize), ization (A) (British: isation), isation (B) (American: ization), analyse (B) (American: analyze), aging (A) (British: ageing), ageing (B) (American: aging).
  • Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
  •  Done Please provide citations for all of the {{fact}}s.
  • Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Emx 22:18, 14 November 2006 (UTC)

Remaining tasks[edit]

Duplicated from above:

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Emx 22:18, 14 November 2006 (UTC)

  • Later Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
  • LaterThere are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
    • are considered
    • might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).[1]

GNOME[edit]

Previous peer review

This peer review discussion has been closed.
WP:LINUX wishes to take this article to FA quality. I copyedited the article recently but received no attention at Talk:GNOME#Peer_review_imminent. I just finished rearranging the sections in order to convey a stronger article structure and I would like some outside input on the scope and depth of coverage in this article. I think it is sourced fairly well, but I do not know what all is expected of an FA-class article in terms of what is already present in this article and what else should be added. A quick glance at current FAs would lead me to believe this one is short.

Many thanks, –Paul M. Nguyen (chat|blame) 02:49, 10 November 2010 (UTC)

  • Later What is the GPL and why is it important? (Yes, I know the answer to this)
  • Later The third paragraph of the History section is actually about KDE and appears to be taken from an article about KDE or desktops
  •  Done I don't think having a gallery in the body of the text is stylistically acceptable
  •  Done The "Future developments" section appears vestigial and extraneous.
  •  Done The "GNOME 3.0" section does not explain why this is an important version that deserves inclusion in the article, considering the main History header is only 3 paragraphs. Remove it?
    •  Done PMN: could be blended and the section break removed. Consider better organization of History content.
    • Later PMN: need to expand the pre-3.0 releases section to discuss major breakthroughs then. move graphics to each section once written
  • Later The article should not be primarily constructed around primary sources. Please find outside sources such as Ars Technica or reliable Linux news sites, and fix {{fact}} tags
  • Later Too many lists in the "Project structure" section
  • Later Too many one-sentence paragraphs
  • Later Screenshots are too squinty and could be improved

Shii (tock) 00:20, 13 November 2010 (UTC)

Thank you! I'll be going over all of that and any dangling issues from the previous PR on my way to FA. Thanks, again! –Paul M. Nguyen (chat|blame) 02:43, 13 November 2010 (UTC)

Later I think it would be useful to explain what KDE is in the start of the History section. The text presupposes a knowledge of these projects. Maury Markowitz (talk) 02:51, 26 November 2010 (UTC)

From Pnm[edit]

Pnm made some structural edits to the release history and had two suggestions relating to the release gallery:

  • Later Provide in the caption a highlight from each release
  • Later Add an entry for the upcoming 3.0 release (maybe the existing screenshot can just be moved).
  • Later Also, how about combining the numerous citations to GNOME press releases (in the release table) to one citation that points to http://www.gnome.org/press/releases/ ? Having so many makes the references section more difficult to use, and as primary sources, those citations aren't especially important.

GOCE Archive[edit]

Completed copy edit requests - September 2010
Date posted Article name Requestor's username Date copy edit started Copy editor's username Remarks
September 02 Petitcodiac River User:Ericleb01 postponed to October 2010
September 03 Rutherford B. Hayes User:Schwindtd September 11 User:WikiCopter
September 03 Animal (Kesha album) User:L-l-CLK-l-l September 23 User:Diannaa
September 03 Albany Convention Center User:UpstateNYer September 24 User:WikiCopter
September 03 List of Connecticut Huskies bowl games User:Grondemar September 21 User:Grondemar Withdrawn at completion of FLC
September 05 No. 4 Commando User:Jim Sweeney September 08 User:Lfstevens
September 06 2010 Pichilemu earthquake User:Diego Grez September 16 User:Derild4921
September 07 Sherlock (TV series) User:The JPS September 13 User:The JPS Withdrawn by requestor
September 08 A1 (Croatia) User:Tomobe03 September 20 User:WikiCopter
September 09 History of FC Barcelona User:Sandman888 September 20 User:Paulmnguyen
September 11 Old St Paul's Cathedral User:Bob Castle September 22 User:WikiCopter
September 12 Weezer (2001 album) User:GamerPro64 September 14 User:Tdslk
September 13 Motul de San José User:Simon Burchell September 18 User:SMasters
September 13 La Masia User:Sandman888 September 20 User:Paulmnguyen
September 13 Things Aren't Simple Any More User:The JPS September 25 Repeat copyedit unnecessary [1]
September 14 Crickets as pets User:East of Borschov September 20 User:1234r00t
September 15 Abraham Lincoln User:Peregrine Fisher September 20 User:SMasters
September 15 Limbo (video game) User:Masem September 25 User:SMasters
September 16 Deshastha Brahmin User:Zuggernaut September 18 User:SMasters
September 16 Washington & Jefferson College User:GrapedApe September 25 User:WikiCopter
September 17 Third Anglo-Maratha War User:Zuggernaut September 20 User:Diannaa
September 17 Upanishads User:Zuggernaut September 18 User:SMasters
September 17 Family Guy (season 1) User:Pedro thy master September 19 User:Dank
September 17 Klaus Händl User:Torsten Wittmann September 18 User:Diannaa
September 17 When Love Takes Over User:Lil-unique1 October 02 User:Diannaa
September 18 Final Fantasy VII Advent Children User:Tintor2 October 06 User:Diannaa
September 20 Siege of Trsat User:Kebeta September 23 User:Diannaa
September 20 The Texas Chain Saw Massacre User:TaerkastUA September 25 Repeat copyedit unnecessary [2]
September 20 Mandodari User:Redtigerxyz October 07 User:Diannaa
September 20 List of number-one Billboard Latin Pop Albums from the 1980s User:Magiciandude September 21 User:Derild4921
September 21 2010 PapaJohns.com Bowl User:Grondemar October 08 User:Diannaa
September 21 Into the Wild (Warriors) User:Derild4921 September 21 User:WikiCopter
September 24 Spanish toothcarp User:XRDoDRX September 28 User:Lfstevens, User:Odysseus1479
September 25 Crickets as pets User:East of Borschov October 08 User:Diannaa
September 25 Dreaming of You (album) User:AJona1992 October 06 User:AJona1992 Sandbox version requested at User:AJona1992/Sandbox8; later withdrawn by requestor
September 25 Dragon Quest User:Jinnai October 08 User:Diannaa
September 26 Sviatoslav's invasion of Bulgaria User:Cplakidas October 09 User:Diannaa
September 26 Flag of Bhutan User:Spongie555 October 10 User:Derild4921
September 29 No Rest for the Wicked (Supernatural) User:Ophois September 29 User:Ophois Withdrawn by requestor
September 30 Camp Nou User:Sandman888 October 09 User:Derild4921

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GOCEreviewed test[edit]

Nothing:

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  1. ^ a b See footnote