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Law School of Beirut

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Nominator(s): Eli+ 13:23, 3 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This article came into being only recently. I looked up forgotten sources such as Collinet who dedicated a great part of his life to bring back the school from oblivion.The Law School of Beirut was an important learning center of the classical antiquity, it is much less known than the library of Alexandria for example. I believe that the scarce historical sources that Collinet and other researchers relied on provide enough material to ensure an adequate coverage of the subject. The article also passed GA review, I hope a FA review and your suggestions will help me improve it further. Eli+ 13:23, 3 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done, PD attribution tag present

  1. Source for "From a legal point of view..."?
  2. Source for "The first mention of the school's premises..."?
  3. Ranges should consistently use endashes
  4. Missing full bibliographic info for Decline and Fall
  5. Be consistent in whether you provide locations for books
  6. What makes cosmovisions a high-quality reliable source?
  7. Publisher for Mommsen?
  8. Format of Further reading. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:35, 11 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your time Nikkimaria, I numbered the list of your comments to make it easier to address them.
  1. Yes, you are right, the term is superfluous and does not add the article. source to the passage was added.
  2. Source for "The first mention of the school's premises..." is Collinet; added.
  3. en-dashes issue fixed
  4. Missing full bibliographic info for 'Decline and Fall of the Roman Empire added
  5. some refs don't specify location, location removed
  6. Right on, cosmovision ref removed.
  7. Publisher for Mommsen provided
  8. can do without further reading section especially that reviewer Khazar2 pointed out that article can't be used as a reliable source earlier. Eli+ 17:28, 11 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Great. Check alphabetization of Bibliography, inclusion of locations is still inconsistent, and check format on Skaf. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:30, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
done; Skaff's is a conference paper published in a journal and it was cluttering the references section so I moved it as Quadell recommeded. -Eli+ 12:42, 21 August 2013 (UTC) [reply]
Comments from Ceranthor
Lead
  • Jurisconsults - Someone unfamiliar with law (ie. me) knows nothing of this term
It's synonymous with jurist, a person who studies and deals with the law. All instances were replaced -Eli+ 11:22, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Justinian took a personal interest in the teaching process, and charged the teachers, the bishop of Beirut, and the governor of Phoenicia Maritima with maintaining discipline in the school. - Serial comma issue. See below comment. This one differs from the rest, so it seems natural you would want to change this one and leave the rest.
i was a bit hesitant to remove the serial comma, to avoid confusion I will reverse the order so that the readers don't think that the Bishop and governor are among the teachers. I will not use serial comma in the text...-Eli+ 11:22, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Background
  • I don't think Background is the appropriate title for this section. There must be something better.
I can't think of anything else, the section introduces the history section; should i merge the two? -Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
History
  • It was chosen as a regional center instead of the more prominent Phoenician cities of Tyre and Sidon, which had a history of belligerence against Rome.[5][6] - If which means both, you should add "both" after which, because it's unclear.
Right on, done -Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • and the date is much debated among later historians and scholars. - Later is a very vague word choice. It could mean modern or from the 800s.
All post-classical scholars who studied the Law school of Beirut did not and could not determine its founding date -Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Imperial constitutiones arriving in Beirut were translated to Greek, published and then archived. - Previously you'd been using a serial comma. You need to keep this consistent throughout the article, whichever you choose.
For the sake of consitency I won't be using it here. -Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • From 425 onward, Constantinople became a rival center of law study and was the only school, - Constantinope the city was not a school!
Well of course, I thought that was clear. My mistake... - Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • closed those of Alexandria, Caesarea Maritima and Athens in 529 CE.[1] - Again, serial comma.
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Academia
  • Ancient texts provide an idea of the curriculum, the teaching method, the course languages and the duration of the study. - Do you have a source for this statement?
This statement is an introduction to the "Preparatory studies" and "Curriculum" sections both of which are sourced. -Eli+ 12:17, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • grammar, rhetoric and encyclopedic sciences studies. - Serial comma issue
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:10, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Another prerequisite was the mastery of Greek but also of the Latin language, - why but also?
I got carried away translating; removed -Eli+ 12:17, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • which is comparable to the one used in the rhetoric schools. - Which rhetoric schools? You haven't mentioned any that I know of.
Neither Collinet nor Jolowicz give examples, but rhetoric schools were widespread. -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • ' and the lecturer would add his comments, consisting of references to analogous passages from imperial constitutions or from the works of prominent Roman jurists of the like of Ulpian. - I don't like how consisting fits here. Perhaps which consisted of or that consisted of?
Okay -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Gaius, Ulpian, Papinian and Paul the jurist. - serial comma issue
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • 'The students of each year were distinguished by special names: 1st year, Dupondii; 2nd, Edictales; 3rd, Papinianistae; 4th, Lytae.[26] - I thought there were five years?
that was before the Justinian reform, review the passage plz -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • consisted of taught elements - Taught elements? I don't like it. It's too fluffy.
Yes it is :S >>> "lectures" -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • namely the Institutes, Digest and Code.[27][28] - Serial comma issue
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Footnote c: Digest should be capitalized.
Done -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • What are "cognomens"? I can tell but it should not be so unclear. This shouldn't be reading comprehension.
Okay, okay :S >> changed to "nickname" -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Professorial body
  • the scarce sources include historical accounts, juridic works, anthologies, ancient correspondences and funerary inscriptions. - serial comma issue
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Rhetoric teacher Libanius wrote many letters of correspondence to a fourth-century law school professor called Domninus (the Elder). - Why put it in parentheses?
yes, u r right -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Libanius attempted to recruit Domninus in the school of Antioch where he taught, - This is mostly incomprehensible. What does that mean?
Libanius invited Domninus to teach with him at the school of Antioch. __ does this do it? -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Cyrillus, Patricius, Domninus, Demosthenes, Eudoxius, Leontius and Amblichus.[32] - serial comma issue
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • He is believed to have taught from 400–410 CE to 538 CE. This is unclear, though I believe I know what it means. If you're unsure about the exact start date, make that obvious.
He is believed to have taught from c. 400 or c. 410 CE to 538 CE. -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • ecumenical school of jurists. - Which was?
it's a succession of highly esteemed law masters: the oecumenical; oecumenical means "universal". I will hopefully start an article for this one too. -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC) [reply]
  • the Basilica or the Basilika? MAKE UP YOUR MIND!
Blame the wikipedia article -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • (υπομνημα των δεφινιτων) - Translation, please.
the name of the book roughly translates to "memo on definitions" (or treatise) but i prefer not to make that assertion on the article page; im no expert in Greek.-Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It's just "treatise on definitions", but definition is of Latin derivation, not Greek. The form given by the sources are from a single citation in a late law text which is transliterating a Latin source, and the phrase need not be presented as a title. Best just to delete the parenthetical Greek and let the already present description as "treatise on definitions" suffice.  davidiad { t } 01:56, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you Davidiad, greek text removed. Eli+ 22:36, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Patricius is a fifth-century teacher who garnered praise - Pretty sure he was a teacher. I don't think he's still around...
LOL okay, done -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Beirut law school. - Capitalize Law School.
I'll wait for a consensus on this one -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Later came Domninus the Younger, Demosthenes and Eudoxius, who were coevals. - Serial comma issue, and what are coevals?
replaced by contemporaries although i still think coevals is better -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Leontius was another Ecumenical Master, a son of Eudoxius and the father of Anatolius, who was summoned by the imperial court to assist with the writing of the Justinian Code. - This sentence is a mess.
rephrased -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Beirut law school - Caps!
you are HORRIBLE :P, I think I'm gonna wait for the consensus, all instances should become "Law school of Beirut" -Eli+ 13:31, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Euxenius was the brother of the city's bishop Eustathius and was involved in the 460 CE religious controversy caused by Timothy Aelurus.[39] - A brief description would be nice.
changes made; is this enough -Eli+ 13:43, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • e Dorotheus, Anatolius and Julianus. - Serial comma issue
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Julianus Antecessor, the last known professor of Beirut, is extolled by Theaetetus as "the light of the law". - Citation?
epithet given by Irnerius, documented by Pringsheim before Collinet
  • to the teachers, the city's bishop and the governor of Phoenicia Maritima.[28][43] - Serial comma issue.
first serial comma removed -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's a decent amount to do. More later. I have to weak oppose given the number of issues, but I don't think any will be difficult to fix. ceranthor 15:14, 30 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

hello Ceranthor, your comments are much appreciated. I wil startl fixing the issues as of tomorrow. Meanwhile stay calm, enjoy life, it's beautiful and please just DON'T SHOUT :P OOPS was that a serial comma ? :P -Eli+ 20:14, 30 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Don't you worry, I spent a lot of time outside today! Sorry for the shouting, I just have a loud personality. ceranthor 00:47, 31 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
LOL, I'm happy for you. Ok, I don't want to vex you... but concerning the serial comma issue, which in my POV is not an issue. In my own experience, this is serial comma: I ate chinese food, fooken chicken, and whacked fox tails.; whereas there is no serial comma in this sentence I ate chinese food, fooken chickem and whacked fox tails. I haven't reviewed my text yet BUT I'm pretty sure I never used a serial comma there. Anyway a serial comma should not be an issue (even if it's there) as long as it clears confusion. I commend your thorough an comprehensive notes but for now I will overlook the serial comma issues you mentioned until I get a second opinion. I will be working on the article soon (I hope), real life is a bitch... but it's still beautiful... Keep smiling buddy :) -Eli+ 11:19, 1 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Outside interjection: Wikipedia:MoS#Serial_commas requires that the choice to use serial commas or not be consistent within an article, except in those rare cases where to do so would cause confusion. (Examples are given in the MoS.) Unless it's one of those rare cases, all applicable sentences need to use the serial comma, or all applicable sentences need to omit it. (Either is fine.) – Quadell (talk) 18:38, 1 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, that's exactly what I said. See above "Previously you'd been using a serial comma. You need to keep this consistent throughout the article, whichever you choose." The consistency is the serial comma issue. Sorry that was at all unclear. ceranthor 02:36, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment. I've been delighted to have this article ever since I first learned of it, and congratulate Eli on creating it and persevering to bring it to this level. I just wanted to express two reservations regarding the granting of FA status at this particular moment.
    • The source most ubiquitously cited is from 1925, and I'm concerned that FA status as a "model" article would make it seem like it's OK to base articles about classical antiquity on old sources. Let me qualify that by saying that 19th- and early 20th-scholarship is still considered foundational in the field of classical studies, and Mommsen will always be there. But when I took a cursory look at this topic (I mentioned it in Roman Empire#Secondary and higher education before the article existed), I found a lot of stuff from the 1990s to the present. There's been a boom in scholarship on late antiquity during the last three decades, and it seems underrepresented.
I understand your concern, but to my knowledge, Collinet was the only one to run such a dedicated & extensive study of classical sources on the subject. All the modern sources I have checked cite his work so what's the point in citing these newer sources if they don't add to Collinet's work. I don't think anyone can deny Collinet's authority on the subject; his insights and research are the most comprehensive so far. If you happen to have other sources please share them. I will check for other sources and the sources you have used for your secondary and higher education section to see if any address the law school. -Eli+ 11:14, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
MacAdam speaks of the importance of Collinet's work here, p.30;I could not have said it better: "Paul Collinet (1925) compiled the major textual evidence for the education of law in Beirut. Few new materials can be added to this exhaustive and authoritative publication (MacAdam, Henry Innes 2001, Studia et circenses: Beirut’s Roman Law School in its Colonial, Cultural Context, ARAM 13-14: 193-226.)" -Eli+ 05:06, 15 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • I should've brought this up earlier, and have been meaning to, but is this the correct title for the article? Seems like "Roman law" needs to be specified. And is "Law School of Beirut" a proper noun? (It doesn't seem to be in Mousourakis[2] [3] [4], CAH[5], Blackwell's Companion to Late Antiquity (2012) [6], or any source I've seen; hence I would disagree with the recommended capitalization above.) The title also raises the question of whether there are no other law schools in modern-day Beirut. Since the title doesn't point to it being about antiquity, and the top image is also of modern structures that don't represent the ancient institution, I find the "first glance" presentation to be a little confusing. I'm wondering whether School of Roman law at Beirut wouldn't be a more accurate title, per sources such as these: [7] (a translation of Mommsen himself), and [8] [9] [10] [11] [12] [13] [14] [15]. (There are lots more.) This reference is not about Beirut, but indicates that "school of Roman law" is generically useful for these kinds of institutions. Fergus Millar for some reason even problematizes the word "school",[16] so I don't think we have a proper noun to work with anywhere. It isn't like the name of a modern university. Cynwolfe (talk) 17:05, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I agree, I have removed the capitalization from the body, I dunno about the title though, most sources I have checked call the institution either law school of Beirut or - of Berytus. I don't see why we should complicate things further; consider the 'library of Alexandria', its name also raises the question of whether there are no other libraries in modern-day Alexandria, but for the sake of simplicity and for easier access to the topic, I think the title should remain as it is. I have added the variants you guys have suggested in the lead. -Eli+ 11:14, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review by Quadell (including spotchecks)

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Resolved issues
Image review by Quadell
  • Why was File:Downtownbeirut.jpg chosen as the main image in the infobox? Is it simply a good picture of a landmark near where the school was? Or does "thought to lie to the north of" mean that the school would be visible in a photo from the same vantage point if it still existed?
    • Follow up: after reading the "location section", the issue is clearer. I would recommend changing the caption to something that makes the image's significance clearer. What would you think of this caption? "The exact location of the Law School of Beirut is uncertain, but it is thought to have lain just north of Nejmeh square, next to the Saint George Greek Orthodox Cathedral." Would that be a more explicit description of the importance of what we're seeing? – Quadell (talk) 15:48, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nitpick: The caption "Justinian I, who instigated the rewriting of Roman law." is not a sentence and should not have a period, per WP:MoS.

All other images are legitimately free, accurately tagged, appropriately used, and well captioned. – Quadell (talk) 13:32, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Main review
  • Many sources call it the "Law School of Berytus", as does the top image caption. I think this alternate name should be in the first sentence.
Okay, done. -Eli+ 12:01, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Since the lede should summarize information in the article body, and should not include information not found elsewhere, there is no need to cite the first paragraph. Instead, those citations should be included wherever those facts are stated in the body of the article.
all paragraphs are cited, refs in lead removed. -Eli+ 12:01, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I feel that the Background section should remain separate from the History section. It seems to me that the title "Background" is fine, although something like "Roman jurisprudence" would also work. Would it fit better after the history section, do you think?
I can't think of any other way, I don't like the idea of putting it after the history section because i have arranged the text in chronological order.-Eli+ 12:01, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Occident" links to Western world. Would it be better to use the term "Western world" instead?
fair enough. -Eli+ 12:01, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nitpick: a comma is needed after "along with the Law School of Beiruit".
okay. -Eli+ 12:01, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think the sentence "The study course at the Law School of Beirut did not comprise the provincial laws of Phoenica;[21] it only included Roman law." could be reworded for clarity.
reworded -Eli+ 12:01, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Juridic texts were discussed and analyzed, and the lecturer would add his comments, consisting of references to analogous passages from imperial constitutions or from the works of prominent Roman jurists of the like of Ulpian." This needs rewording in several ways. I would recommend "The lecturer would discuss and analyze juridic texts, often adding his own comments. These comments included references to analogous passages from imperial constitutions, or from the works of prominent Roman jurists such as Ulpian." But any better wording of your choice will work.
thank you -Eli+ 12:30, 5 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The prose in the first half of the "Professorial body" section isn't as good as the rest of the article. A style cleanup throughout the section would be wise. Examples of clunky or unclear bits are below.
  • The paragraph beginning "Rhetoric teacher Libanius..." is unclear. Was Libanius in the school of Beirut, and Dominius in the school of Antioch, when they corresponded?
It's the other way around, i reworded the passage. -Eli+ 20:16, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Does anyone actually believe Cyrillus was teaching for 138 years? Maybe I'm misunderstanding the sentence.
OMG!!! I must have messed up, i rechecked the source it only says when he started teaching. -Eli+ 20:16, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Scholia" should link to Scholia, since most readers will not know the word.
Okay -Eli+ 20:16, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...revealed a funerary monument which is believed to belong to the deceased Patricius" needs rewording. I don't believe he still owns it, and the fact that he was dead in the 20th century goes without saying.
Indeed -Eli+ 20:16, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "coevals"? That sentence may not even be needed. It doesn't seem to have anything to do with the rest of the paragraph or the Ecumenical Masters part of the article, and interrupts the flow. If you remove that sentence, I think the Leontius paragraph shoud be combined with the Patricius paragraph into a single paragraph. (We don't want a long list of very short paragraphs.)
Done -Eli+ 20:16, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The quality of the prose improves at the mention of Leontius, and the rest of the section is smoother and clearer.
  • The "Professorial body" section starts with a sentence that helps introduce and section. The "Notable students" section could use an introductory sentence that serves a similar function, so you're not thrown straight into Pamphilus. I'm not sure what it should say... perhaps something like "Most of the thousands of students who studied at the Law School of Beirut are not remembered by history, but many went on to achieve fame", but better than that. :)
right on -Eli+ 20:16, 10 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "were more cognizable and of a superior style than" is a little clunky, and I'm not sure what a superior style would mean... perhaps "were more coherant and easily understood"?
Done ;) -Eli+ 22:36, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The second-to-last paragraph seems like it would be more at home in the "Notable students" section, rather than the "Legacy" section.
I dunno, it kinda introduces the later section and links the contributions of the teachers to the corpus and its later influence . Eli+ 22:36, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The structures of the Notes, References, and Bibliography sections are generally excellent.
  • Why are footnotes (a) and (b) not references?
I'm sorry i can't get hold of the full books for the two references and had to work with bits cited in other books and journals :S those two are ancient, would it make too much difference? I can always remove them in case there are other sources available, anyway let me know -Eli+ 23:26, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I performed spotchecks as of this revision, examining the sources for references 1, 7, 27, 38, 42, 49, and 55. In each case, the statement in the article was fully supported by the source text, and in no case was material copied verbatim in a inappropriate way. The sourcing seems great.
  • Would it be an improvement to move the long journal entries from References down to Bibliography? It would look better and be easier for the reader to follow, but I honestly don't know if it would be appropriate or not. (The word "Bibliography" seems to indicate books only, but Wikipedia:WikiProject Bibliographies#Recommended structure gives information on citing journals and reports, and besides, you already include an encyclopedia entry in Bibliography.)
Done -Eli+ 23:04, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Digest of Justinian should be moved from References to Bibliography, regardless, since it's a book. It would be a hassle to find page numbers in such a difficult source, but I suspect that can be omitted if necessary , since the original publication did not have page numbers. (It would be better to have page numbers of the Monro translation for each statement, but it isn't necessary for me to support this nomination.)
Done -Eli+ 23:04, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
OK -Eli+ 23:22, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The url parameter of {{cite book}} is only to be used for cases where the book is available to be read online. Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lists of works says explicitly "A link to a Google Book should only be added if the book is available for preview." Most of the links to the book titles are fine, but the urls for Attridge, Jolowicz, Jones Hall, Pomeroy, Rawlinson, Sartre, and Sterk (if you'll excuse the serial comma) all link to the Lebanese version of Google Books, and the eBook is not available for these books, even in the English version. Therefore those URLs should be removed.
removed the ones without preview, others work fine -Eli+ 23:04, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
There are still some issues with these links. Many of these link to the Lebanese version of Google Books (with navigation and such in Arabic script) even though the books themselves are in English. You should link to the English Google Books if you link to anything. At several of these (such as Jolowicz, Dumbarton Oaks, etc.), Google Books says "No ebook available". – Quadell (talk) 19:41, 18 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
ok, you are right, the links are for the lebanese version, i didn't pay attention to that because I switched google settings to display the navigation in english... anyway i removed the .lb extention, the books should be easily browsable now. Although I don't think that Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lists of works guidleines are applicable for source citing (description says:"This style guideline aims to create a consistent method of displaying lists of works, such as lists of texts, discographies and filmographies." and I believe this is only applicable in articles where a list of works is required eg. for a literary figure or .. a film director...) but i have removed the links to books without previews and reviewed all my google books links; all of them link to "preview" or "full view" books. I think we are dealing with an issue of per location availability of content here. All books, including Jolowicz and Lokin's can be previewed. -Eli+ 06:43, 19 August 2013 (UTC) [reply]
  • "Dupondii" is helpfully translated. It would be informative to translate at least "Iustiniani novi" for the reader, and perhaps the other names for years of study as well.
  • The "Legacy" section implies that work done at Beirut helped shape the legal systems that would become Byzantine law and later Western law in general. In my opinion, this section should overtly mention and link to these concepts through prose.
Tried to keep it as concise as possible; going into too much detail is very problematic here. Eli+ 22:36, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I understand not wanting to get too detailed in this. But you already say "this academic movement gave rise to the minds behind Justinian's juridic reforms" and Dorotheus' and Anatolius' additions to the Codex of Justinian "profoundly impacted the modern legal system" and "had a great influence on the juridic history of western Europe and its American colonies". Much of the section basically says that work done at Beirut helped shape the legal systems that would become Byzantine law and later Western law in general; but the text isn't as clear about it as it could be, and doesn't link to the articles on those concepts. – Quadell (talk) 19:41, 18 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No one can be certain of the extent of the two Beiruti professors' contributions in compiling the CJS but the fact that they were summoned all the way to constantinople and the words of praise which which justinian showered them indicates their stature and level of knowledge. The later paragraphs highlight the importance of the work (the CJS) which was partly drafted by men from the law school of Beirut. I can't make the connection any more apparent :( -Eli+ 12:19, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Please carefully note what my original issue is here, and how I worded it. "In my opinion, this section should overtly mention and link to these concepts through prose." That's something you can do if you choose. Arguably, the most important thing about the law school is its impact on later Byzantine law and Western law in general. The article pretty-much says this (it even calls Beirut the "mother of laws"!), but it doesn't mention either of these legal systems, and doesn't link to them. This is not just a minor nitpick; it would be like an article on Archduke Franz Ferdinand of Austria not mentioning or linking to World War I. – Quadell (talk) 12:31, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Please be patient with me, i will tend to this issue shortly. -Eli+ 12:51, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
In regard to the top point above, I'd like to renew my objections to treating any form of reference to this institution as a proper noun unless we can confirm usage in a preponderance of sources, preferably those dating from the last thirty years. My impression is that there is no "alternate name", because there is no proper name in the first place. It's just referred to as the "school of Roman law" at Berytus or Beirut, or generally as the law school at Beirut. Since it's a common noun rather than a proper noun, we need to specify that it's a school of Roman law, and where it's located. But I can't find evidence that it's a proper noun. Cynwolfe (talk) 17:27, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
For the record, I have no opinion on whether "the law school of Beirut" or "The Law School of Beirut" is more appropriate. I just don't want the reader to be confused by references to Beirut vs. Berytus. – Quadell (talk) 19:32, 2 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Many of my objections have not yet been resolved. – Quadell (talk) 22:09, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I was working on the article as you were typing your message Quadell, if there's anything else, please let me know -Eli+ 23:22, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am very close to supporting, but I would need the reference format improved and legacy section to be made more explicit. – Quadell (talk) 19:41, 18 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Middling support. Eli+ has addressed my concerns, and I believe this article now passes our FA criteria. It's not as good as the best FAs, and there are still areas that could be improved. (Translating and Wikilinking could be more consistent, a few notes could be better as references, some of the prose still could be improved...) But none of these are fatal flaws, and FA status does not mean "cannot be improved". – Quadell (talk) 14:05, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Delegate comments -- This article looks to have had a pretty thorough review but after six weeks the only declaration is a weak oppose. Unless I can see clear consensus to promote (or reject) the nomination in the next day or so, I'll have to archive as no consensus. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:09, 17 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

More Comments from Ceranthor
Notable students
  • While most of the law school's students names are not remembered by history - This is a little ambiguous. Are the students themselves not remembered? Or is it just that there aren't great records of who attended which school?
this is a nitpick, i think it's pretty obvious -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • and who went on to achieve fame - I don't know if this is used elsewhere in this article, but using "went on" or "goes on" always ends up making a phrase redundant. Just use later achieved fame; it's so much cleaner, always.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Pamphilus later became the presbyter of Caesarea Maritima - Not sure if this is linked earlier in the article, but if it isn't, could you link it here for people like me who aren't immediately familiar with what a presbyter is?
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • and founder of its extensive Christian library. - Since you used a the for presbyter, it only makes sense to keep parallel structure and use a the for founder too.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Libanius' correspondence with Gaianus of Tyre discusses the latter's achievements after his graduation from the law school of Beirut. Gaianus became the consular governor of Phoenicia in 362.[49] - A semicolon would better combine these two sentences.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Location
  • "whose career was consecrated for the study of law". - Citation?
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Legacy
  • were more clearer - more clear
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • and of a more coherent - more coherent what? missing a word here.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • found what they needed at the time.” [69] - The reference for 69 skips a line. There must be an extra space here or this would not happen. It has to be fixed; it's hard to look at.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • with the Christian values - No "the" needed.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Leo’s work was written in Greek since Latin had fallen into disuse and its provisions - Comma after disuse.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • emperor Basil I's issued Why the apostrophe s?
That's what happens when you write a phrase over and over because there's always someone who doesn't like the way it's put together -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • 1913, Paul Huvelin the first dean of the newly established Université Saint-Joseph's Faculty of Law, - Appositive needs a comma after Huvelin.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
General
  • Keep it consistent. Either "fifth century" or "5th-century". Don't alternate; make sure you fix any mix-ups. There are a couple throughout the article.
OK -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think this is quite ready to be promoted just yet. It is close, though, so I recommend getting a PR, using a good copyeditor (look through current FAC reviews for people who do prose commentary!!!), and bringing it back soon. I also left out my serial comma comments for this round, because at this point I'm confused as to what preference (with serial comma or without) you've chosen. The legacy section needs a decent amount of copyediting because it seems pretty choppy. Overall, wonderful article and stellar work. I look forward to seeing it at FAC again. ceranthor 02:09, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Can't wait -Eli+ 12:19, 21 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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