Talk:Welcome to Earth-2

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Reviewer: Olivaw-Daneel (talk · contribs) 06:21, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Interested in picking this up. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 06:21, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Note: Per authorship stats, the nominator isn't the article's top contributor (courtesy ping Kailash29792). The GAN rules ask anyone who isn't a significant contributor to consult on the talk page prior to nominating; however, "significant" is a bit fuzzy, so this might be ok. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 07:26, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have no issues with Brojam taking this to GA. I just wished he got this edited at the GOCE first, or rewrote all my additions by himself. Kailash29792 (talk) 07:35, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I had gone over it and it didn't seem like we needed a GOCE, but we'll see with the review. - Brojam (talk) 18:51, 27 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'll have the review up in a day or two. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 18:56, 27 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General comments[edit]

  • I don't think yvrshoots.com (labelled as Hollywood North) is a reliable source – it seems like a personal blog of a journalist.
  • The webcitation.org links for TV by the Numbers don't work (ref 22, 30).
  • There are a lot of long quotes in the reception section. Per MOS:Quote this is discouraged, and may violate copyright (Earwig detects 46% similarity). Suggest summarizing most of them.
  • Short/single-sentence sections are discouraged per MOS:PARA. Suggest merging Production and Release, and also some of the short subsections within.

Lead[edit]

  • The first sentence is overly long; suggest breaking it into smaller sentences.
  • It is set in the Arrowverse, sharing continuity with the other television series of the universe, and is a spin-off of Arrow – there's some redundancy here; suggest trimming.
  • I don't think the entire cast needs to be mentioned in the lead; it's supposed to be an overview of the body. I'd just keep the ones most relevant to the plot summary.
    • Everyone in the cast plays an important role, except Candice and Keiynan, and it would feel odd to mention all the other series regulars and not them. - Brojam (talk) 05:31, 6 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think it's tough to justify overwhelmingly positive in wikivoice. Perhaps change to "highly positive" or "widely praised by critics".

Plot[edit]

  • Suggest adding context to terms like "Earth-2" and major character names when first mentioned. (Example from The Flash: "parallel universe of Earth-2", "crime-scene investigator Barry Allen", "speedster Zoom", etc.)
    • I've added context for some terms but not for the main characters since it's assumed they would already know who they are before reading this article and would simply bloat the plot summary. - Brojam (talk) 07:01, 12 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jay refuses, and privately tells Caitlin that he invented Velocity-6 and previously took it to become faster; the side effects caused his loss of speed, and are gradually killing him. – some of the commas seem unnecessary; also suggest rewording to avoid the many "and"s.
  • Reverb, who is also working for Zoom and has greater powers. – needs a bit of elaboration.
  • They use their powers repeatedly on him, despite Frost's objections, since Zoom wants him unharmed. – a bit unclear; it reads like they use their powers because of what Zoom wants.

Production[edit]

  • written by Katherine Walczak from a story by Greg Berlanti and Andrew Kreisberg – this isn't in the source. (It just credits all three as writers)
  • The sentence beginning Examples include the fact that seems overly long; it also has some overlap with the next paragraph. Suggest trimming to a few notable examples. Also it would be helpful to contrast against what the Earth-1 character does.
  • Robbie Amell plays Deathstorm,[14] Demore Barnes plays Henry Hewitt,[7] Michelle Harrison voices Nora Allen,[9] Michael Rowe plays Floyd Lawton and Patrick Sabongui plays David Singh. – suggest rewording to avoid repeating "plays". Perhaps "Other cast members include Robbie Amell as Deathstorm, ..."
  • The sentence in "Arrowverse tie-ins" is overly long; suggest splitting.

Reception[edit]

  • Suggest leading with the superlatives (highest rated, largest audience, etc) before detailing numbers. You could also organize by age group instead of repeating 18-49 twice.
    • I've kept it as is to be consistent with what we've done with other epsisodes by reporting the numbers first and then if there are any highlights such as highest, improvements, etc. - Brojam (talk) 05:31, 6 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Will give critical response a relook once the number of quotes is reduced.

Placing it on hold; please ping when done/if you have questions. Thanks, Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 04:58, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Brojam: It's been nearly a week, so I wanted to check if you hadn't missed this. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 08:54, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Olivaw-Daneel: Sorry, had indeed missed it. Will get on your feedback in the next few days. Thanks. - Brojam (talk) 04:13, 6 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Some of the quotes look paraphrasable, but I think this is good enough to pass GA. In general I'd suggest looking at WP:Reception for structuring the reception section. And it's cool to see that you're working on The Flash. I've enjoyed this show. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 06:12, 18 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination[edit]

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 00:27, 7 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Improved to Good Article status by Brojam (talk). Self-nominated at 06:04, 25 February 2022 (UTC).[reply]

  • @Brojam: Nice to see this here, since I'm actually a big fan of The Flash and Supergirl. I will do a full review later, but I did have one concern about the hook specifically. WP:DYKHOOK says If the subject is a work of fiction or a fictional character, the hook must involve the real world in some way, but the multiverse might arguably be in-universe. Are there other hooks you can propose? Epicgenius (talk) 16:58, 25 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    • @Epicgenius: I've reworked it to focus more on the real world and given an alternative. - Brojam (talk) 00:53, 28 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
      • All right. ALT1 seems like a decent alternative, so I'll review this nomination now. Epicgenius (talk) 15:12, 28 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]


General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.
Overall: I'm approving ALT1, but not ALT0, based on WP:DYKHOOK. The copyright violation check revealed only quotes and everything else is fine. Epicgenius (talk) 15:12, 28 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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