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:I've removed that part but other parts of your edit made no sense which is why it was reverted. [[User:Inexpiable|Inexpiable]] ([[User talk:Inexpiable|talk]]) 20:31, 18 June 2024 (UTC) |
:I've removed that part but other parts of your edit made no sense which is why it was reverted. [[User:Inexpiable|Inexpiable]] ([[User talk:Inexpiable|talk]]) 20:31, 18 June 2024 (UTC) |
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::Thx. Here is the next improvement: I cut "when she was attacked" from the lede because it is redundant. If a person is murdered, that automatically implies that they have been attacked. --[[User:Melchior2006|Melchior2006]] ([[User talk:Melchior2006|talk]]) 05:01, 19 June 2024 (UTC) |
::Thx. Here is the next improvement: I cut "when she was attacked" from the lede because it is redundant. If a person is murdered, that automatically implies that they have been attacked. --[[User:Melchior2006|Melchior2006]] ([[User talk:Melchior2006|talk]]) 05:01, 19 June 2024 (UTC) |
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:::{{re|Melchior2006}} I've re-worded the whole thing. [[User:Inexpiable|Inexpiable]] ([[User talk:Inexpiable|talk]]) 12:04, 19 June 2024 (UTC) |
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Lede should be more concise[edit]
"accused of orchestrating the killing, with the motive being life insurance money" -- was he really accused of a motive? Motives are usually not parts of arrests. Facts lead to arrests, not motives. Is there any way of truly proving a motive? -- Melchior2006 (talk) 17:17, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
- I've removed that part but other parts of your edit made no sense which is why it was reverted. Inexpiable (talk) 20:31, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
- Thx. Here is the next improvement: I cut "when she was attacked" from the lede because it is redundant. If a person is murdered, that automatically implies that they have been attacked. --Melchior2006 (talk) 05:01, 19 June 2024 (UTC)
- @Melchior2006: I've re-worded the whole thing. Inexpiable (talk) 12:04, 19 June 2024 (UTC)
- Thx. Here is the next improvement: I cut "when she was attacked" from the lede because it is redundant. If a person is murdered, that automatically implies that they have been attacked. --Melchior2006 (talk) 05:01, 19 June 2024 (UTC)
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