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Requests for Feedback

This page provides comments and constructive criticism about articles that you have drafted, created, or substantially changed. This is not a general help page. To seek assistance or ask a question, see Wikipedia:Questions. If you are seeking an outside opinion about a dispute, please follow the steps in Wikipedia:Dispute resolution. Please note that this page is patrolled by volunteer editors just like you and it may take several days to review your request.

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After Receiving Feedback

Check back here often, as you will receive a response here. Respond to the feedback, either with a simple thank you, to ask for help with anything mentioned, or, after you've made some of the improvements, what they think of them. Consider helping out here in the future - anyone can read up on what articles should be like and provide constructive criticism.

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Index of all requests for feedback

Jonathan Gleich

Greetings, I have re-publish this article, and would appreciate opinions, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jonathan_Gleich

Thanks for any help, Lscappel (talk) 23:37, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

Mikhail Shufutinsky

I know a little about this singer Mikhail Shufutinsky - probably the most popular artist in the Russian chanson style - but I'm by no means well-placed to write an authoritative article.

Thought it would be useful to get one started and allow experts to amend.

Marek Losey

Request for feedback on this page Marek Losey. Thank you.Sophieusiskin (talk) 08:32, 22 September 2009 (UTC)

Great work! You included plenty of references which is always welcome. I made a few adjustments that are common to biography articles, like putting birth and/or death dates in parentheses and most important, adding Category:Living people for those still alive, as special rules apply (see WP:BLP for more on that). If you have inline citations (those bounded by <ref> and </ref> then under the "References" or "Notes" section you include <references/> or {{reflist}} just once, and your citations will show up automatically at the bottom. When you're just listing references as you did with some articles, just use bullets (with the star key) and it should be fine. Otherwise, job well done, and feel free to ask any questions you might have. Joshdboz (talk) 22:36, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Black_Hearted_Hero

Hello, and thanks for taking the time to read this and help with editing. This is about a band I first saw on Vans Warped Tour, and having been following since. They have had great success including major radio play across the US, so I thought a little write up would be a good idea. Let me know your thoughts, thanksWikipedia Link

Band Myspace Major Radio Station Link

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ArchitectsAlliance

please review this new article— Preceding unsigned comment added by Xrdeem (talk • contribs) 08:51, 23 September 2009 (UTC)

I took a quick look (and edit :P) at architectsAlliance and I like it. At first I was worried that the firm would not be notable (the concept is covered here) but there are plenty of third party news sources in existence. For improvement:

• Ideally an article should be based on third-party reliable sources rather than the official website
• Probably one official external link is better than three
• The image in the infobox needs a caption

I can help dig up newspaper articles that are not online using a subscription to Factiva. Just ask on my talk page.--Commander Keane (talk) 08:52, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

UCore

UCore is a U.S. Department of Defense / Justice / Homeland Security intelligence content sharing initiative. It is a significant XML schema standard that may gain even more traction in coming years. This links to my subpage draft. (Sorry, I couldn't figure out the wikilink to my subpage draft without using the full URL).

- Mark Underwood (knowlengr) 17:34, 28 September 2009 (UTC)

Like this! [[User:Knowlengr/UCore]]

Wow, that is a great start for that article, bravo. It is sectioned, pretty neutral and you got refs and everything, beautiful. A few pieces of feedback. First, you should remove the bold on the who/what/when stuff in the lead - generally wikipedia only bolds mention of the article subject itself (e.g. Ucore) in the article body. The italics further down should go as well, usually that is in mentioning a publication. I would go to Wikipedia:Manual of style just to make sure. Second, the external links need to be cut down at the end. Things like the brochure can be tossed - wikipedia is not here to promote anything (WP:NOT). Look at Wikipedia:External links and more specifically WP:ELNO to narrow it down. As an example, look at XML's external links - a topic far more broad has only a handful of links - yours has way more! Finally, get some Wikipedia:Reliable sources and reference the history section to firm it up. Again, great work, keep it up! Tap this page or my talk page if you'd like more feedback. JoeSmack ^Talk 18:09, 28 September 2009 (UTC)

Spot-on feedback, JoeSmack. Thanks. I've tried to adopt all your suggestions in a new draft.

- Mark Underwood (knowlengr) 20:01, 29 September 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Knowlengr (talk • contribs)

arbob cultural palace

I've written an article, i'd like some feed back on before passing to the main site

The article is at arbob_cultural_palace

It's definitely a notable place, as everyone in Tajikistan knows about it. It's even appeared on bank notes. However i'm struggling to find references beyond the guide book which i've included.

TomEspley (talk) 08:29, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Link: User:TomEspley/Arbob Cultural Palace, Khujand. I looked on Factiva and found 4 brief mentions of politicians etc visiting the place, but no good facts for the article unfortunately. I will make some style improvements to the article though. Hopefully someone else can give some full feedback.--Commander Keane (talk) 09:05, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Hi guys. Made a couple of changes and added a couple of references - hope you don't mind - on the page TomEspley created here.

I agree, visiting politicians and tourists are not worthy of note but an official ceremony probably is (considering the lack of any other contemporary references). Feel free to disregard my changes if you like.

I also added a few more links - allowing for continued movement through articles once this one is published (which in my opinion you probably have enough for already - there are many articles far less comprehensive than this one). There are plenty of significant references in your article that refer to other people or places for which Wiki pages already exists - don't get excessive but do try to link things back through to other articles of note.

Looking good though - nice work.

Stalwart111 (talk) 23:37, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

The Middle East (band)

The Middle East (band)

The Middle East (band)

(121.79.48.44 (talk) 12:07, 29 September 2009 (UTC))

Knowledge to Action

Knowledge to Action http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:FollenA/Knowledge_to_Action

29/09/09

really new to this and finding it all a bit confusing any help is greatly apprecaited FollenA (talk) 15:39, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Hi FollenA. Articles about companies, like all articles on Wikipedia, must be notable, meaning they have sufficient coverage in reliable sources (see WP:Corp for more info). Doing a quick search on my own, this seems to be a borderline case, so it's imperative to add as many third party sources as possible and cite them appropriately. For this I'd recommend you take a look through WP:CITE or just look at some well developed articles and see how the inline citations work and look. Just as a word of warning: as you can imagine, Wikipedia gets a lot of spam from self-promoters who want themselves or their company, organization, etc, to have an article, and so a new user trying to create such articles are inevitably viewed with some suspicion (see Wikipedia:Single-purpose account). This need not be the case as long as you follow the basic rules of neutral point of view, notability, and of course add reliable sources. Feel free to ask any more questions you might have. Joshdboz (talk) 23:20, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Thank you, I will have a go —Preceding unsigned comment added by FollenA (talk • contribs) 12:21, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

Hello Joshdboz,

I have made some changes please could you let me know if it is okay to publish? and if it is how I go about this???

Thank you —Preceding unsigned comment added by FollenA (talk • contribs) 14:35, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

The refs are looking good. Again, in a case like this it will be up to the community to decide whether or not it passes notability, but to create it all you have to do is put "Knowledge to Action" in the search box, search, and then click on the redlink at the top of the results. Now you are editing a blank article with the title you searched for, so you can just copy/paste from your user page and click the save button. Joshdboz (talk) 19:56, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

Whether and if.

Whether and if User:DanielR235/Whether

I am unsure whether this article is suitable for Wikipedia, could some please tell me whether it is?

Thank you.

DanielR235 16:39, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Hi Daniel. Please see your talk page for my comment. Joshdboz (talk) 22:59, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Count Antoine Seilern (1901-1978)

Count Antoine Seilern (1901-1978)

94.143.1.120 (talk) 06:53, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

September 30, 2009 js@byronfunds.com

Suggestion: Should probably be simply Count Antoine Seilern (without the date) or even Antoine Seilern without the title or the date, so the first line of the article can read:

Count Antione Seilern (b 1901, d 1978) was the x Count of x...

... and you can always add redirects.

There are a few references to him already on Wiki so I would suggest an article would fill a little hole. Stalwart111 (talk) 23:47, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Women Create Life

Dear all,

I have written an article in regards to the World Health Organizations "Women Create Life" campaign. I have added my content, some references, but I am confused as to what I need to do to find "sources". All of the information I have been given came from the WHO themselves and is a direct feed from the group.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gdm_geneva/Women_Create_Life

Can you please look at my article and let me know what I need to change, add, delete. Any recommendations will be a great help.

Kindest regards, Gabe 30/9/09 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Gdm geneva (talk • contribs) 09:21, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

A good start, but there is still some work to do here. Here are some recommendations:

1. Title - one of Wikipedia's main navigation routes is when folks search for names of articles, so articles should have titles that describe their contents and are plausible search terms. No-one is going to search for A new bottom-up market oriented strategy to generate resources for maternal and newborn health. If your article is about the "Women Create Life" campaign it should be named Women Create Life.
2. Contents - Wikipedia articles must be written from a neutral point of view. You should aim to describe what the campaign is and does and how it originated - but you are not trying to promote it, endorse it or recruit new members. I would drop the sections on "The Need" and "Benefits".
3. Style - avoid the words "we" and "our", as the first person is an unencyclopedic style. Phrases such as "we have decided ...", "Our aim is to create ..." and "We envision Women Create Life ..." should be re-written in the third person. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style for more details of accepted style in Wikipedia articles.
4. References - you need to give more details on each of your references. Books need publisher, date, ISBN; journal articles need journal name and issue, page numbers. See Wikipedia:Citing sources for more details.
5. Notability - notability is a key criteria for including a subject in Wikipedia; a perfectly written and formatted article may still be deleted if it fails to establish the notability of its subject. To establish notability you need to show that this campaign has been covered in reliable sources that are independent of the campaign itself. Newspaper articles or independent journal articles would establish this; press releases or advertorials would not (although they can still be used as sources for statements in the article). Gandalf61 (talk) 10:35, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

Under The Skin (Film)

Hello!

I watched this film and was surprised there wasn't a wikipedia article on it so I thought I would start one. I realise the article is very basic but I plan to add to it as soon as I get time. I don't seem to be able to upload pictures yet since I am a new contributor but I will put the film poster up as soon as I am able to.

Thanks,

Superbeecheese McGuinty. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Superbeecheese (talk • contribs) 10:37, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

I have moved the article to Under the Skin (film) per our naming conventions, and made a few minor changes. You're off to a great start here at Wikipedia! Regards, decltype (talk) 11:02, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

UNITS Mobile Storage

UNITS Mobile Storage

Looking for feedback that this article is notable and unbiased. Thank you! --Usmatlanta (talk) 20:52, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

I believe you mean User:Usmatlanta/UNITS Mobile Storage—the article is in your userspace. I am reviewing it now—please wait. Intelligentsium 01:38, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

On review, I have detected the following problem(s): The article seems promotional in tone or style; the article may contain close paraphrasing of unfree sources. As even userpage are eligible under the G11 criterion of speedy deletion, I strongly suggest you rewrite it. Thank you. Intelligentsium 01:42, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

Sonja_Lyubomirsky

Sonja_Lyubomirsky --Bcjordan (talk) 01:36, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

Please read WP:PROF for our notability guidelines on academics. Intelligentsium 01:44, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

George Nene

Please provide feedback and more information for the article on Zimbabwean artist George Nene George Nene. News, historical sources, and other information from Zimbabwe can be difficult to obtain, even about people like Nene who were memorialized on a national stamp.

In particular, it would be helpful to add non-copyrighted images of Nene's work.

Thank you for your assistance,

NetSpatial (talk) 03:38, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

Finding images will be difficult - a challenge for many wikipedia articles. Looks like you have some references in there, but they need to be cleaned a bit. Look at Wikipedia:Referencing_for_beginners for figuring out a consistent, single formatting method. Also, you can't cite Wikipedia as a reference, sorry. But great work for just starting out, keep up the good stuff! JoeSmack ^Talk 04:06, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Robin French

Hello,

I set up a page for Robin French. I would just like someone to check that the writing style is OK and to confirm it as an accepted wikipedia page.

Many thanks, 62.31.46.121 (talk) 12:04, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

I made quite a few manual of style changes and provided transparent attribution for the references but I gotta run. If someone else could categorize, stub tag, etc. that would be good.--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 12:36, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

I have added a category. Writing style looks fine to me, but I think it needs more references from independent sources to clearly establish notability. Gandalf61 (talk) 12:42, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

Robin French again

Thanks very much for the above commentary!

I have now added in 5 independent references. Please let me know if these suffice as criteria for notability. Also, I could add in more about his background (i.e. education) and other works of his if the page requires more information.

Thanks again. Felicity Waters (talk) 16:20, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

Looks pretty good to me, but as always the more the better. There is no fixed firm amount. Put more in, by all means! Also, put sections into the article. One for education, one for career, subsections into theater and tv, etc. Great work Felicity, great work! JoeSmack ^Talk 03:58, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

going the right way, but could use expansion and more citations to specific factual claims. And be careful that references actually back up exactly what the article says - the academic one backed up a related point, but not the original sentence (I've corrected it). Rd232 ^talk 08:07, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

ObjectFX

ObjectFX I'd like some feedback on this article on the first of an number of major contributors to the Open Geospatial Consortium please. Kcroth4809 (talk) 20:56, 1 October 2009 (UTC)

It looks like it has been deleted. Try starting it in your namespace first (Wikipedia:Subpages#How_to_create_user_subpages) by clicking and starting it with this link. When it's ready, ask for feedback here so you can make sure it won't get deleted again! We'll help you out! JoeSmack ^Talk 04:12, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Or the Article Wizard has an option to create a draft in your userspace first. Rd232 ^talk 08:08, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

The page is at User:Kcroth4809/ObjectFX. My feedback is:

• Format - looks okay.
• Style - reads too much like a corporate brochure. For example, "Record of Innovation" is a brochure heading, and the list contains several unsubstantiated claims of "first x".
• Contents - should say more about what the company actually does. What is "ObjectFX technology" ? Did the company develop this technology, or does it only market it ? Also, there is a possible copyright violation, as parts of the content seem to be copied from the ObjectFX web site.
• Notability - needs to have more independent sources to establish notability. Advertorials, opion pieces and press releases are good sources for facts, but do not establish notability. Gandalf61 (talk) 09:02, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

(Copied following from my talk page so discussion can stay in one place. Gandalf61 (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2009 (UTC))

My thoughts regarding your comments are imbedded below:

• Style - reads too much like a corporate brochure. For example, "Record of Innovation" is a brochure heading, and the list contains several unsubstantiated claims of "first x".

{these innovations are the very things that make this member of the Open Geospatial Consortium notable and worthy of an entry in Wikipedia. Another member would be ESRI aka Environmental Systems Research Institute, who is already listed in Wikepedia. I'm having a hard time understanding the difference.}

• Contents - should say more about what the company actually does. What is "ObjectFX technology" ? Did the company develop this technology, or does it only market it ? Also, there is a possible copyright violation, as parts of the content seem to be copied from the ObjectFX web site.

{I will rephrase to provide better description. btw, the text has not been copied from the ObjectFX website, so there is no copyright violation. Can the article reference the website? The ESRI entry definitely does.}

• Notability - needs to have more independent sources to establish notability. Advertorials, opion pieces and press releases are good sources for facts, but do not establish notability.

{I don't see much difference between the ESRI entry and the ObjectFX text}

Thank you very much for your help. Kcroth4809 (talk) 15:46, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Chiron Review

User:PoetryFan61/Chiron Review

Input and advice appreciated regarding grammar and source/footnote format and any other problems you see.

PoetryFan61 (talk) 06:19, 2 October 2009 (UTC) Jeremy Michaels, Oct. 2, 2009

I've wikilinked the authors, removed your signature from the bottom (not needed in articles or article drafts) and moved the page to the right name (still in your userspace). Generally looks a pretty good start, but sourcing for the authors published is lacking. Rd232 ^talk 08:14, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Robin French

Hello again,

Thanks for previous comments.

I have now added background, sections and another quoted source. Please advise if I need to do anything else for it to be considered acceptable.

Thanks, Felicity Waters (talk) 14:01, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

The phrase "gained a first" will not be known to many readers. Perhaps "gained first-class honours"?--SPhilbrickT 15:10, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Many thanks. I have made this change as suggested. Please can someone have a look at the page and confirm if it is now acceptable? It is still showing the tag 'This article may not meet the notability guideline for biographies'.

Thanks again, Felicity Waters (talk) 10:31, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

Hello!

Please please can someone check the page Robin French for me? I have now added in all advice however it still shows the tag 'This article may not meet the notability guideline for biographies'. I would like someone to comment or confirm that it is acceptable if possible... Many thanks!!!! Felicity Waters (talk) 01:02, 7 October 2009 (UTC)

Seco Tools

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Seco_Tools

Seco Tools

I've added this article, please provide feedback, thank you.

AChildress (talk) 18:26, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Sorry, but my first reaction is that this reads more like a publicity brochure than an encyclopdia article. Please take a look at Wikipedia:Notability (organizations and companies) and note the requirement for "significant coverage in reliable, independent secondary sources". Perhaps that exists but there's no evidence of it in the article.--SPhilbrickT 20:10, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Hal M. Becker

I am looking for feedback for an article I wrote about Hal Becker in my userpage which i am hoping to post on Wikipedia as a new article. I am new at this and would appreciate your advice. Thanks

Janneyw (talk) 21:31, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

I see OrangeMike is already proving some help. He moved your article to a user subpage, which is where it belongs. The user page is about you, subpages are for draft articles and other material.

The style comes across like a marketing brochure, but that can be fixed. It looks like he may be notable (but we need clearer evidence—see Notability). I'll fix up some of the references.--SPhilbrickT 13:59, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

• I edited the reference above to reflect the current location of the article.
• I made some changes to the article, fixing the reference section, wikifying some links and adding citations
• I added some discussion to the talk page of the article User_talk:Janneyw/Hal_Becker--SPhilbrickT 14:52, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

User:Thelema12/Utah Education Association

Working on stub about UEA - User:Thelema12/Utah Education Association - all feedback appreciated! --Thelema12 (talk) 21:37, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

You seem to have two "References" sections. More in a bit, if I don't leave for some reason. Intelligentsium 01:32, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

Our Manual of Style suggests that stub templates should be under everything in an article. Intelligentsium 01:40, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the help. I've made those edits. --Thelema12 (talk) 16:50, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

User name: "Bruce Cairney" being used to defame him

The User name Bruce Cairney has been used to put derogatory comments, contains photo of Bruce Cairney and make some editing in articles on wikpedia seem to come from Bruce Cairney when they have not. This has been continueing since 2006 and still no one does anything. What does wikipedia do about this type of internet stalking occuring within its pages? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bacmac (talk • contribs) 16:19, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

Previous request for assistance on this when docglasgow Dec/06 interviened on editing of user page ... Revision as of 14:53, 4 December 2007 (edit) (undo)Bacmac (talk | contribs) (→User name created to Slur an individual) User name created to Slur an individual You visit the user page for Bruce cairney before and removed 'unhelpful comments' how about deleting the user completely it is obvoiusly only created to sling mud and BS —The preceding unsigned comment was added by 124.152.12.41 (talk) 09:05, 25 December 2006 (UTC). oops , I see I did not sign - this user name is still being used to slur an individual -- Bacmac Bacmac 14:53, 4 December 2007 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bacmac (talk • contribs) 09:36, October 4, 2009 (UTC)

I don't think you are in the right place. This page is intended to provide comments and constructive criticism about articles - it is not a general help page or noticeboard. The page on which to report persistent vandalism of articles is Wikipedia:Administrator intervention against vandalism. The page on which to report an improper username is Wikipedia:Usernames for administrator attention. The page on which to report other incidents that may require admin intervention is Wikipedia:Administrators' noticeboard/Incidents. Gandalf61 (talk) 10:16, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

- Thank you! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bacmac (talk • contribs) 14:06, 7 October 2009 (UTC)

Wellspring_learning_community_of_beirut

HI,

I created the page above, and need to change the title to —Preceding unsigned comment added by Psmeers (talk • contribs)

This question seems to be a fragment. As much as it sometimes seems, Wikipedia cannot read your mind... If your question is about moves, I think it is already resolved. Intelligentsium^review 01:13, 7 October 2009 (UTC)

Wellspring Learning Community of Beirut

Capitalization is the only change. Am not good with this code stuff, and cannot figure it out, and am about to pass out from frustration.

I created the page before, and it was deleted for lack of referenced notability, after I requested a "stay of deletion" while school admins. got me some references. They did it today.

Are you applying these deletions willy-nilly? Take a look at "Cabot Elementary," just as one example. Luckily, I saved my file as a Word doc.

best, Paul Psmeers (talk) 14:02, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

I have moved the article to Wellspring Learning Community, Beirut. For future reference, page moves can be requested by following the instructions at Wikipedia:Requested moves. Gandalf61 (talk) 14:28, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

I don’t believe deletions occur in a willy-nilly manner, but when literally thousands of people are making decisions in a non-hierarchical organization, it is inevitable that one person might propose deletion of an article another might choose to keep. In addition, standards evolve over time, so I see today more emphasis on the need for references (I support that goal), while some articles created years ago might still have none. I can imagine it is frustrating to be held to a higher standard than some existing articles, but I support improving the below standards articles rather than allowing new articles below standards.

I added a no references template to the Cabot Elementary pageSPhilbrickT 13:41, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

Help!

Can anyone help me? I need some advice with my article. Its http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Napkin_PC Macka77 (talk) 07:41, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

What sort of advice are you looking for ? I have done some general tidy up on the article. My feedback is that it has two main problems:

1. It does not describe its subject in enough detail. The reference to paper and pens made me think at first that this was a "joke" concept describing ordinary paper. But then the later references to electronic ink etc. made me wonder whether it is in fact some form of rollable display. The article is not sufficiently clear about what it is describing.
2. More seriously, more than one source is needed to establish that the concept is notable. As it stands, the article does not establish the notability of its subject, and notability is a key criteria for inclusion in Wikipedia. Gandalf61 (talk) 10:43, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

I would make the Gizmodo link a web link. Literally, I would, and tried, except my browser doesn't support Cite so it failed.SPhilbrickT 13:48, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

ObjectFX

ObjectFX

I have made some edits that were suggested and also would like to cite the Wikipedia entry for Environmental Systems Research Institute entry as another member of the Open Spatial Consortium as a precedent for including ObjectFX into wikipedia: Kcroth4809 (talk) 15:00, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

We don't "cite precedents" here; that's a more formal way of saying, "Other stuff has articles, so this should too!" We do not regard the "other stuff exists" article as a valid argument for retention of an article; instead, you should argue for its retention on its actual merits as far as verifiability, notability, and so on. --Orange Mike | Talk 00:20, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Camp Salmen House

This is my first article: User:SCPS70458/Camp_Salmen_House I had some difficulties in finding proper formatting, etc. and would appreciate any and all feedback. I was not sure how much information to put into the article, so I tried to be concise.

Thank you for your help.

--SCPS70458 (talk) 17:13, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

I see it is a NRHP, so please take a look at Template:Infobox nrhp/doc. I realize you are new, and this may be daunting; I'm not in a position to help much more now, but if you don't have other help by this weekend, I'll see if I can help. Take a look at WP:Layout -among other things, the TOC should not be first. SPhilbrickT 22:26, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

Thank you so much for the direction. I admit to great difficulty in finding all the corners where information is available for new contributors. I have downloaded the template and am in the process of ensuring compatibility with standards. The template I used has the TOC in the beginning and am now trying to figure out how to move it. I also took you advice and sent a request for feedback to the National Register group. --SCPS70458 (talk) 22:39, 7 October 2009 (UTC)

Hey, it's looking good. I see you figured out the template. I'm still not sure why the TOC is at the beginning; maybe someone else will take a look at it and figure it out. Nice job. I think the National Register group is fairly active, so I hope they can provide you with additional specific ideas.--SPhilbrickT 01:30, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Aaron Fish (producer)

I created a new article several days ago for Aaron_Fish_(producer), a living, Canadian entertainment producer who runs multiple companies. After much review of the Wikipedia guidelines on notability and article writing/structure/format, I feel the article in question meets the necessary criteria.

However, I would greatly appreciate any input from other contributors/editors that could assist in improving the article as it now stands. Thank you in advance for your help.

Maninga (talk) 17:46, 6 October 2009 (UTC)

The article looks fine to me - well written, NPOV, sourced. You had some duplicate references - it is better to have a single reference which you can then cite at multiple places in the article, so I have changed this, and removed the unreviewed article tag. Gandalf61 (talk) 09:32, 7 October 2009 (UTC)

mr budgie

Mr Budgie

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(Jennymorgan (talk) 21:11, 7 October 2009 (UTC))

It looks as if your article Mr Budgie has been deleted because it did not explain how the subject of the article is important or significant or sufficiently notable to be included in Wikipedia. There are notes explaining this on your talk page, and you cen read the notability guidelines that are linked from those notes. If you then want to try creating the page again, I suggest you create it as a sub-page of your user page (there are instructions on how to do this here) and then ask for feedback on it again. Gandalf61 (talk) 09:03, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Puyravaud

Puyravaud (Puyravaudcarp (talk) 10:38, 8 October 2009 (UTC))

It looks like you are trying to promote your business and that is NOT what Wikipedia is for. Teapotgeorge^Talk 10:47, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Agreed. You have created an article called Payravaud which has been marked for speedy deletion because of concerns that its text is a copyright violation. Even without the copyright concerns, the article is unlikely to be acceptable in its present form because it reads like an advertisement. To create an article that is suitable for Wikipedia you need to (a) write it in a more neutral tone and (b) show that the subject meets Wikipedia's notability standards. Gandalf61 (talk) 10:53, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Puyravaud

Thanks for your feedback it was initially declined since then I have changed it. Do you not think this is of interest to anyone? and should I give up?

(Puyravaudcarp (talk) 11:00, 8 October 2009 (UTC))

Bougainvillea

I wonder if anyone knows why my Bougainvillea is losing its leaves? I live in Central Pennsylvania and brought the plant inside when it started getting cold. I haven't overwatered it; the soil is still moist but it has been losing its leaves everyday. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Cricketbrown666 (talk • contribs) 15:53, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Sorry, but I don't think you are in the right place. This page is intended to provide comments and constructive criticism about Wikipedia articles. You could try our article on Bougainvillea, or you could ask your question at the Science Reference Desk. Gandalf61 (talk) 15:59, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Robin French

Hello!

I have posted a new page - Robin French and refined it according to the many suggestions received here. I think it should now pass the criteria. Please can someone check for me. It is still showing the tag '...notability guideline for biographies...'

Many thanks! Felicity Waters (talk) 16:10, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

The article has favorable pull quotes from reviewers. Such quotes appear in jacket blurbs or ads on the sides of buses, not in encyclopedia articles. --Orange Mike | Talk 21:08, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Hi!

Please can someone help me with this page. It now has a tag saying it is written like an advertisement and has been marked for speedy deletion. The above message advised to remove quotations. Therefore I have removed the second quotation which was the only that I have added (the first quotation was added by another user. I had previously been advised that the writing style of this page was fine.

Please can someone advise me if I should delete the other quotation? Please can someone advise me how I can get this page authorised?

I am concerned that this writer now has a page with three uncomplementary tags at the beginning.

Thanks for any help, I would appreciate it if this could be cleared up as quickly as possible. Felicity Waters (talk) 18:40, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

There is no authorisation of Wikipedia pages. The simplest way to find out why a tag has been added to an article is to ask the editor who added it. You can find an editor's identity by looking at the page history, and then you can post your question on their user talk page or on the article's talk page. If you believe you have addressed the issue related to the tag then you can simply remove it from the article. Gandalf61 (talk) 22:22, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Sans aucun doute

I wanted to create an article on Sans aucun doute and found that fr-Wiki already had one , although it was completely unreferenced (except a broken link). I rewrote it in English, removing some of the less interesting information (such as the Opening credits (Généric) section) and have progressively added in as many citations as possible. There are still bits for which I can find no WP:RS and watching the show every week (WP:OR I know) the section about the teams of lawyers and journalists is out of date and makes so sense timeline wise (I'm tempted to change to "Previous team members and current team members"). Any input on this article which has largely remained untouched by the community would be welcome. Regards -- Александр Дмитрий (Alexandr Dmitri) (talk) 09:06, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

The lede sentence is confusing. presented by Julien Courbet until 30 May 2009 then by Christophe Moulin since 12 September 2008 So who was the host from Sep '08-May '09? decltype (talk) 15:43, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Fixed. I introduced a typo during translation. Now reads "[...]Julien Courbet until 30 May 2008 then by Christophe Moulin since 12 September 2008". The June-September 2008 period would be accounted for by being off for the summer (though can't find any references yet for that). -- Александр Дмитрий (Alexandr Dmitri) (talk) 16:47, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

For a 16 season show, there is very little information about critical reception. decltype (talk) 15:45, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

I will dig around for some more coverage, but the sources are poor. -- Александр Дмитрий (Alexandr Dmitri) (talk) 16:47, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

I am very glad to see that the translation was done with proper attribution. decltype (talk) 15:47, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Thanks -- Александр Дмитрий (Alexandr Dmitri) (talk) 16:47, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

User:Thelema12/Dennis Van Roekel

I am working on a stub for an article about the President of the National Education Association, Dennis Van Roekel , and would appreciate any feedback. Thanks!--Thelema12 (talk) 19:29, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Claims to this person's notability seem grounded, but your article also cites non-reliable sources, such as the Huffington Post and blogs. Also, to prevent a phenomenon known as linkrot, please use citation templates when citing webpages, or if this is not possible, at least give a short summary of the nature of the webpage. Intelligentsium^review 21:23, 10 October 2009 (UTC)

Evolution Article

I would like to see more information concerning the competing theories of evolution, namely the views held by Conservapedia. I believe that it is very important to cross reference this article in order to develop a greater discussion and widen the context of the subject of evolution. This is important as the subject's modern history as involved serious debate in which both sides of the argument (of whether or not evolution is real) cites many accredited sources.

Thank you —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jcoving28 (talk • contribs) 19:59, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

I think you are in the wrong place. This page is intended to provide feedback on new articles that editors have written. If you want to suggest a topic for a new article, you can do this at Wikipedia:Requested articles. Gandalf61 (talk) 22:26, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Furthermore, "Conservapedia" is also a wiki and does not represent a notable viewpoint, such as that of a major news agency or governmental group, except perhaps for its own article. Though a Conservative view on Evolution is notable and is included in that article, Conservapedia's view is not. Intelligentsium^review 21:20, 10 October 2009 (UTC)

Bob Pereyra, The Godfather of Street Luge.

Please review my piece on Bob Pereyra, The Godfather of Street Luge.

Here are some projects, Bob worked on or was featured.

Commercials Diet Mountain Dew Discovery Channel Promotion Aero Sport - Australia & Japan Dew & Diet Mountain Dew Route66 British Knights Extreme Sports BBDO Mountain Dew Ad Spot ESPN promo for 1997 X Games Going To Extremes - Subaru Jack In the Box Air Force   Film & Video 48 Hrs ABC 1995 – 2001 X-Games ESPN Extreme 101 (profiles)  Wave Entertainment   Extreme 101 documentary PM Magazine USA Today Discovery Channel - The Adventurers Sports center (ESPN) Prime Ticket Sports  - Press Box MTV Sports        Stuntmasters Belgian Television    FNN Sport News L.A. TV Stations 2,4,7,5 & 9  Channel 17, San Diego CA Channel 56,  Orange County CA  French TV-1  ll Ne Faut Pas Rever Inside Edition Japan Network News - Video Voice 99 Guinness Prime Time Red Bull record attempt  (81.28mph) HD Theater Discovery (The Secret Club Of Speed) News print, Magazines & Publications Sports Illustrated1995 Center Fold     People (European Edition) Poweredge Center Fold     View (U.S.) Transworld (International)      Valley Magazine (L.A.) VSD (France)                No Way (France) Outside/Outsiders            Esquire Gentlemans¹ Quarterly/GQ    Star Thrasher - Cover Photo    Allsport Worldwide The London Face     Zoot Capri - Cover Photo Popular Mechanics -1996 Center fold    Playboy Books and Guides Street Luge Racing published by Capstone Press Street Luge Regulation Guide Street Luge sports cards memorabilia Print USA Today 3 articles  L.A. Times (national wire feature) Christian Science Monitor  3 articles  Ventura, CA Chronicle Daily News (L.A.) - 5 articles   Acorn (LA) Providence Daily Journal cover Asahi Shim bun - Tokyo cover Narragansett RI Gazet 

My name is Karen Wondra Grisham, (e-mail removed). October 11, 2009. Streetlugehome (talk) 16:39, 11 October 2009 (UTC)

Your article Bob Pereyra, The Godfather of Street Luge needs quite a bit of work before it can be an acceptable Wikipedia article. Here is some feedback:

• Title - the title of the article should just be "Bob Pereya" - see our policy on naming conventions.
• Style - is much too promotional; needs to be more encyclopedic - see our style guide.
• Notability - the notability of the subject needs to be established by showing that he has been written about in independent reliable sources - see our notability guideline.
• References - the quotes and facts given all need to be refernced back to reliable sources - see our verifiability policy

I suggest you look at some other biographies in Wikipedia, and try to copy their style and structure. Gandalf61 (talk) 17:25, 11 October 2009 (UTC)

The article has now been deleted by User:Orangemike under speedy deletion criteria G11 - unambiguous advertising or promotion. Gandalf61 (talk) 09:11, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

Boyd's Marriage Index

Boyd's Marriage Index Eddaido (talk) 06:42, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

This article does not conform to WP:MOS. Please read the relevant pages. Intelligentsium^review 01:47, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

The Tribe

I hope this is the right place for my request. I've been working on The Tribe article for some time now but I don't edit very regularly. I've tried to make the article as clean as possible and to include citations, references and images. Other contributors have added sections about fan productions and a cast reunion. Is this relevant to the article? I would greatly appreciate any input from other contributors/editors that could assist in improving the article as it now stands. Thank you very much. ErisDysnomia (talk) 16:09, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

The article is currently rated B-class, which means it's a pretty good article. User:Orangemike has beaten me to removing the CRUFTy sections, but overall, I don't see any obvious issues that need to be addressed. One thing, I would do, however, is add more third-party sources, independent of the subject. There are already some, but many sources are from the Official Website, which is accepted in articles about TV series, but generally not in other types. Thank you for trying to help out; if you need anything, let me know, or ask a question. Cheers, Intelligentsium^review 01:42, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

Dog sex

sup, I think it would improve this internet homepage if there was an article and not a redirect at the article Dog sex. I think it should be a disharmonious homepage because tehr are several different things that can be meant by dog sex, but now it redirects to Canine reproduction. An editor thought it would not be a good idea to make it that way and that to make it good should be asked on the homepage for canine reproduction but no one has since replied to the talk page on Canine reproduction. I think my idea is a good idea, what do you think? Could you comment in on that please. Peter Napkin Dance Party (talk) 04:03, 13 October 2009 (UTC) Thanks