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I agree, and also there are several badly worded sentences: e.g.
" Jewish state was the arid Negev desert. That area, which included a large tract in the Negev desert" This makes no sense, or is redundant, not sure what they were trying to say.
" the Yishuv authorities tried to supply the city with" There is a link, but the name is not previously referenced or explained in the earlier text.
"Almost all of Haganah's armoured vehicles" Again, there is a link, but the name is not previously referenced or explained in the earlier text. It might similarly be desirable, though less essential, to identify Transjordan later in the next paragraph.
"Ben-Gurion ordered Yigal Yadin" Where not referenced earlier, the name should be identified in some way.
" irregular troops from Irgun and Lehi formations " Again, no explanation of what these mean, and no prior reference.
I believe this is a standard protocol, so the average reader can go through an article and understand it without having to leave the page. That does not mean there has to be a large amount of explanation, just a minimal identification of the person or group of some kind. These are some examples, but the article has many more such problems.
