Template:Did you know nominations/Coffee production in Jamaica
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The result was: promoted by Victuallers (talk) 15:11, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
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Coffee production in Jamaica
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... that the coffee grown in the Blue Mountain area of the Jamaica, known as the Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee (pictured) is said to be of very high quality, which is mostly exported?
Created by Rosiestep (talk), Nvvchar (talk), and Dr. Blofeld (talk). Nominated by Dr. Blofeld (talk) at 19:46, 8 June 2015 (UTC).
Article is long enough with 2683 chars, and nominated on 7th day so new enough. Neutral, in-line citations, does not appear to have close paraphrasing. Hook is interesting (where can I get it?) and is 168 chars (omitting word pictured). I'm okay with the first part of the hook, but do not see a source for the claim that it "is mostly exported". The source says importer demand exceeds production but that doesn't necessarily equate to them exporting it. (It could simply mean that the government doesn't allow export, but people want it.) Photo appears to be properly released and available for any use per commons. SusunW (talk) 21:04, 25 June 2015 (UTC)
- @SusunW: thanks for the review. Here's ALT1:
... that the coffee grown in the Blue Mountain area of Jamaica, known as Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee (pictured), is said to be of very high quality?--Rosiestep (talk) 01:03, 26 June 2015 (UTC)
Perfect! GTG. SusunW (talk) 01:11, 26 June 2015 (UTC)
- To my ears, the hook sounds too repetitive. Also, a number of citation needed tags have been added to the article. Yoninah (talk) 23:44, 4 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks @Yoninah: All the citations have been fixed now. The references were already there at the end of each section. How about this ALT2 hook
... that Coffee export to Japan is mainly of Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee (pictured), which is reported to be more than 80 per cent of its production?--Nvvchar. 00:43, 5 July 2015 (UTC)
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- Hi, sorry I didn't get back to you sooner. Yes, I think you should submit something hookier. And you've already written a hook about coffee quality in Template:Did you know nominations/Coffee production in Panama. Yoninah (talk) 21:43, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- I just took another look at the article. There's a citation needed tag to take care of. Also, the article is top-heavy with a largely unsourced lead, and the rest of the article seems to be strung together too casually. If you could come up with a source for the beans being used as the base for Tia Maria liqueur, that would work as a hook. Yoninah (talk) 21:47, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks @Yoninah: All the citations have been fixed now. The references were already there at the end of each section. How about this ALT2 hook
- @SusunW: thanks for the review. Here's ALT1:
- @Yoninah:. There is some mix up here. The lead has only two sentences and both are refrenced. There is no tag in the article. Probably you read the Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee, which is not our article. The artcile also does not have any sentence related to the beans being used as the base for "Tia Maria liqueur". --Nvvchar. 23:34, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry about that. I did a copyedit on the nominated article and made a few things clearer. What do you think about:
- ALT3:
... that more than 80 per cent of the production of Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee (pictured) is exported to Japan?Yoninah (talk) 13:39, 8 July 2015 (UTC) - ALT4: ... that Jamaica exports more than 80 per cent of its production of Jamaican Blue Mountain Coffee (pictured) to Japan? Yoninah (talk) 15:59, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
