Template:Did you know nominations/Teresa Wilms Montt

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:43, 3 October 2014 (UTC)

Teresa Wilms Montt

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... that the diarist Teresa Wilms Montt (pictured) attempted suicide at a convent before escaping from it?

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Sugarloaf Creek

Created by Rosiestep (talk), Dr. Blofeld (talk). Nominated by Rosiestep (talk) at 01:26, 1 October 2014 (UTC).

Nominated one day after creation, and is about 2900 bytes, satisfying date and length criteria. QPQ to be completed. Please clarify the following: "...and was first newspaper in an Iquique newspaper using..."; and "he joined the city's active cultural life" - should this one be "she joined...". I do not see mention of the American Red Cross or Gómez Carrillo in source #3, which is used to support most of paragraph 3 in the biography section. Nor does it mention her use of the pseudonym "Teresa de la Cruz", or the movie title "Teresa: Crucificada por amar" (it uses "Teresa", as do other sources). I can't find mention of "relationship with feminists and trade unionists" in the refs available (refs 6 and 7 have no preview for me). I didn't find mention of alcoholism in ref #4 on pages 109-110; could you give me the starting point in that source for this mention please. Overall, a decent article, but I'd appreciate better citations (and possibly supporting quotations in the citations) to be able to track down information, especially when non-English sources are used. A reader or reviewer shouldn't have to hunt for the info in the sources. I've also fixed some grammar issues. Please address the outstanding concerns, after which I'll complete my review. Mind matrix 00:11, 2 October 2014 (UTC)

@Mindmatrix: Thank you for the review. I think I've dealt with each of these issues. --Rosiestep (talk) 03:31, 2 October 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the updates. QPQ completed. I'll assume good faith on the offline source. All other issues addressed. Mind matrix 12:59, 2 October 2014 (UTC)

The hook is ungrammatical: "before escaping from it" could refer to suicide. Here is a corrected alt, and perhaps a better alt:
ALT1: ... that the diarist Teresa Wilms Montt (pictured) attempted suicide before escaping from a convent?
ALT2: ... that the diarist Teresa Wilms Montt (pictured) attempted suicide in a convent? Yoninah (talk) 17:55, 2 October 2014 (UTC)

@Mindmatrix: My understanding is that "it" would refer to the preceding noun, in this case, the convent. I'm ok with either ALT. --Rosiestep (talk) 01:19, 3 October 2014 (UTC)

Any of them are OK; I interpreted 'it' to refer to convent in the original hook. ALT1 is probably the clearest, so I'd go with that one. I should also mention that the image is public domain, used in the article, and reasonable at the size required for DYK. Mind matrix 12:55, 3 October 2014 (UTC)