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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot (talk) 4 December 2024 [1].


Nominator(s): 750h+ 05:43, 4 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a gorgeous grand tourer, which is the successor to the Aston Martin DB9—the first FA I made. This is my seventh nomination, and underwent a recent GA review by Mertbiol for which I'm very grateful. Thanks for any comments I get. 750h+ 05:43, 4 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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Just doing the image review:

  • All images have a free license from the photographer on the Commons. All have alt text, captions, and links to the Commons. The Aston Martin logo is de minimis and not a major part of any photo.
  • For the first caption in "Background", I think it would be more clear to people unfamiliar the cars to have "The DB9" either link to that car's article or expanded to "Aston Martin DB9" as it is in the body text.

And that's it, Rjjiii (talk) 22:44, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Thanks for the review. 750h+ 23:09, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Quite welcome. No issues remaining, Rjjiii (talk) 23:16, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SC

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  • I have a few others to do first, but I will review. - SchroCat (talk) 06:33, 10 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "at the facility in Gaydon": I think just a little more than "the facility" is needed. Maybe "at the Aston Martin facility in Gaydon"?
  • "2004[7][8] at the facility": same here: "2004[7][8] at its facility" will suffice
  • "2016 at the facility in Gaydon, Warwickshire": -> "2016 at its facility in Gaydon" (doesn't need Warwickshire mentioned again)
  • "a near-perfect weight distribution": the description of 'near-perfect' needs inline attribution I think
  • "doors ... are swan-hinged": As this is a semi-technical term, I think you need to explain what it meant by it (see MOS:NOFORCELINK – "do not force a reader to use that link to understand the sentence).
  • "humourously" -> "humorously"

That's my lot. Very little to pick up on here – another enjoyable read. - SchroCat (talk) 12:11, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done. the second last concern, i've explained via footnote. Thanks for the review @SchroCat:. 750h+ 12:31, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review: pass

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I may as well pick this up while I'm here - SchroCat (talk) 12:11, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Placeholder

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Support from Crisco

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Not really a car person, but I'll be happy to review.

  • Any reason why they skipped the DB10?
  • The upcoming range, known as the "second-century plan", which the DB11 was a part of, was to introduce a refreshed design approach directed by Marek Reichman, whom Aston Martin appointed lead designer in May 2005. - That's an awful lot of subordinate clauses. Any possibility of simplifying?
  • The Vanquish features anti-roll bars and double wishbone suspension supported by coil springs. - I thought the Vanquish was a previous line/model. What is the applicability here?
    • wrong car, mistake
  • 17 miles per US gallon (14 L/100 km; 20 mpg‑imp). - Is it standard in British English to refer to milage in US gallons? Given that the rest of the article is BrE, as a layperson I'd expect L/100km first. Same with the mph measurement later.
  • In May 2018, Aston Martin introduced the DB11 Aston Martin Racing (AMR) version, which succeeded the DB11 V12. The DB11 AMR offers enhanced performance capabilities compared to its predecessor. - Perhaps "In May 2018, Aston Martin introduced the DB11 Aston Martin Racing (AMR) version, which succeeded the DB11 V12 and offers enhanced performance capabilities compared to its predecessor."
  • M177 twin-turbocharged V8 engine - Given that this is a WP:SEAOFBLUE and you already link V8 engine in the previous sentence, I'd consider delinking at least one of these
  • The DB11 has received mostly positive reviews. - Since production was discontinued, any reason for "has received"?
because the car still exists, and can still be reviewed.
  • Car criticised its interior - Any particular model?
  • Production of the DB11 ended at the end of June 2023. It was replaced by the DB12, which was unveiled at the 2023 Cannes Film Festival in May. - Not sure two sentences really suffices for its own section.

Otherwise looks good. Nice and tight.  — Chris Woodrich (talk) 00:46, 24 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Crisco 1492: thanks for the reviews! all done unless responded to 750h+ 01:36, 24 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@FAC coordinators: can I begin a new nomination? this one has three supports, and a completed image and source review 750h+ 06:31, 24 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. FrB.TG (talk) 07:46, 24 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]


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