Nominator(s): Neelix (talk) 14:52, 14 August 2013 (UTC)
I am nominating this for featured article because I believe that it meets the criteria. This article has received a copyedit from a member of the Guild of Copyeditors and has also passed a good article nomination. Neelix (talk) 14:52, 14 August 2013 (UTC)
Images are all fine, captions are good. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:19, 16 August 2013 (UTC)
Source review - spotchecks not done
Since most readers do not have the advantage of being Canadian, you might want to either include province or wikilink locations like Springdale
Suggest also wikilinking Tom Cochrane
FN27/28: possible to give the time of the broadcast? Also, italicization is wrong here: the segment shouldn't be italicized, the news show (NTV Evening News) probably should be. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:19, 16 August 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for the review. I have wikilinked Tom Cochrane and the locations in the citations. I can call NTV on Monday to see if they can give me a time for that broadcast. Neelix (talk) 00:54, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
I have received the broadcast time from NTV and added it to the relevant citations. Do you have any additional concerns regarding the article? Neelix (talk) 17:37, 20 August 2013 (UTC)
Support for FA status, meets the criteria in my book. See review below. Well done Neelix! —Cliftonian(talk) 08:43, 20 August 2013 (UTC)
Resolved comments from Cliftonian
From first glance this article looks in pretty good shape. Well done so far Neelix! I had not previous heard of Kellie but I look forward to reading about her.
Infobox and lead
It seems quite counter-intuitive and clunky to me to say she's from "Badger, Newfoundland and Labrador". I understand that N&L is the provincial unit of Canada we are referring to, but to me it seems like saying somebody is from "Downpatrick, United Kingdom"—technically correct, but not actually that helpful. I had to click the link just to see whether Badger was in Newfoundland or Labrador, and I'm sure many others would too. I would favour rewording in the infobox to "Badger, Newfoundland, Canada", and in the lead to "is a Canadian independent singer-songwriter from Newfoundland". This will be more clear to international readers and Canadians will still be aware that the province has been called Newfoundland and Labrador since 2001.
We say in the infobox that she plays guitar and piano, but in the lead that she also plays drums. Drums should be added to the infobox. Maybe also add vocals, as she sings too.
Perhaps we should mention in the lead that she wrote the song about her cousin killed in a traffic accident when she was 15.
"National Hockey League player"—I would simply wikilink "National Hockey League" myself
"which are more likely to bring commercial success"—I would say that they are "generally considered more likely to bring commercial success"
I'm not sure we need to wikilink medicine; most people know what the general subject of medicine is, and anyway we've already mentioned that she is a trained nurse
See point above about where she's from.
This reference doesn't seem to confirm that she was born in 1988. Nor does it indubitably say she was born in Badger, saying only that she is "originally from" there. I personally would accept this as meaning this is where she was born but some might not. If you can find a better source for the birthplace that would help, and we definitely need a source for her birth year (and date, if possible), as right now we don't seem to have one. This link incidentally mentions that she was 23 at the time that article was written (it was published in February 2012)
"her mother frequently placed headphones on her stomach while Loder was still in the womb, and Loder kicked to the beat of Michael W. Smith's music"—this doesn't seem like something we would actually know, more like something Kellie would have been told when she was a child. Perhaps we should qualify that "according to Loder, her mother frequently placed ..." or something like that. I'm not sure "kicked to the beat of Michael W. Smith's music" is really an encyclopaedic way of putting it. Perhaps say that "according to Loder, her mother frequently placed headphones on her belly while Loder was still in the womb, playing Michael W. Smith's music" Maybe also mention that Michael W. Smith is also a Christian artist.
"She claims to have "natural rhythm", and began emulating the drummer at her church by beating on a pew with pencils by age two" maybe add "and that she" at the end of the second clause here ("and that she began emulating"). also maybe change "by age two" to the less casual "by the time she was two years old".
"Her younger brother learned how to play guitar before she did, and he taught her the basics when she was 14. She received her first guitar that year after her brother taught her three guitar chords." maybe reword to "Her younger brother taught her the basics of the guitar when she was 14,[ref] teaching her three guitar chords. She received her first guitar later that year."
"her first song was about a cousin who had died in a traffic accident. This song used lyrics from a poem by a friend who was also close to Loder's late cousin" maybe you can merge these to "her first song, about a cousin who had died in a traffic accident, used lyrics by a friend who was also close to Loder's late cousin"
Maybe mention her parents' names in the first sentence? This would be a more usual way of doing things.
If you make the above change, this means you can reword the first sentence. Maybe "Loder was raised as a Christian, and considers herself ..."
"she favours the piano because it is the most beautiful"—This wording could imply that the piano is, by definition, the most beautiful musical instrument. Perhaps make clear that it is her opinion: "she favours the piano, considering it the most beautiful"
"appeared on The Way" what is The Way? we haven't mentioned it in the main body of the article yet. Ditto Imperfections & Directions.
The first three paragraphs here are quite long. I would consider splitting these up
"Loder studied nursing at the Grenfell Campus of Memorial University of Newfoundland through the Western Regional School of Nursing. While still a nursing student, she met a record producer" Why not "While studying nursing at the Grenfell Campus of Memorial University of Newfoundland through the Western Regional School of Nursing, Loder met a record producer"?
"she met a record producer and released her first album, an independent release called The Way, in August 2009". That seems quite abrupt. Do we know how it happened, what the processes were? Did all these events happen in August 2009?
"Devin Robinson produced the album, recorded at Sweet Music Studios" Was Devin Robinson that producer she met, or somebody else? I see from here he also played drums for Anyday.
"all eleven songs" per MOS should be "all 11 songs"
"That year, Sarah Burton of The Nor'wester wrote" maybe "in November that year" or "three months later".
"that Loder has 'her own unique style.'" This is very vague and I'm not sure it really adds anything. While I'm sure it is the case, just saying it without any direct support seems peacocky and almost promotional. Why is her style her own and unique? Does the source say? If not, I would leave it out.
"a Christian youth conference which has been held in Corner Brook, St. John's, and Gander". Perhaps make clear that it is not held in all of these places concurrently, but rather takes place in one of them each year. I would put "which has been hosted by Corner Brook, St. John's and Gander over the years" or something like that
"As part of the award, which was valued at $20,000" by who?
"a MusicNL membership" what is this?
"time with music industry and production professionals and" I would put a comma before "and"
"Loder referred to the music professionals she met" I would make clear that this was later. "Loder later referred to"
"the top players"—what is the context of this quote? did she just say "the top players"? or the top players in Christian music, top players in Newfoundland, etc? as is the quotation is kind of odd
"she opened for Anyday" make clear that this is a band. "she opened for the band Anyday". Also maybe mention they are Newfies and a Christian band
"Loder said that she was surprised by the large turnout for the event. Loder and Anyday performed together again on November 28 at Dorset Collegiate on Pilley's Island." The source for this is dated 19 November, nine days before the event, and therefore we seem to be giving credence to a prediction of the future. Do we have a source that says the 28 November concert actually happened (as opposed to just being scheduled)?
"performed at the Exploits Valley Salmon Festival gospel concert, attended by hundreds, in Grand Falls-Windsor alongside Starfield and Roy Martin that year"—I would move "that year" to the start of this quoted segment and put "alongside Starfield and Roy Martin" after "performed".
"The singer" Who? The last singer we mentioned was Roy Martin. Perhaps "She"
"A critic" maybe change to "a reporter" or something like that as the linked article doesn't seem to be a review per se
"In early 2012 Loder made a music video for "Your Love Alone"" maybe start a new paragraph here
"While she lost the award to downhere" Is downhere another band?
"Loder competed in the Juno Cup hockey game, in which she was considerably shorter than most of the other players at 5 feet 4 inches (1.63 m)" Maybe rearrange to "in which at 5 feet 4 inches (1.63 m), she was ..."
"National Hockey League players" As above, I would just wikilink National Hockey League
"Nonetheless, she scored"—I don't think "nonetheless" is merited
"which are more likely to bring commercial success" see above
"Loder sees her music career as a Christian ministry of which the goal is to inspire people to live happier, better lives" Maybe reword to "Loder sees her music as a Christian ministry, the goal of which is ..."
The Telegram—Maybe make clear this is the St. John's Telegram
medicine wikilink—see above
Discography; Awards and nominations
Generally looks good but perhaps put from earliest to latest (as they are they are upside down)
Formatting generally looks good, but note the issues I raised above.
For an FA it is best to have these in alphabetical order.
Overall this article looks in good shape and I think it will eventually get to FA with a bit of work and a few fresh sets of eyes. I enjoyed reading it and look forward to seeing it develop and lending a hand where I can. I hope all this helps. Well done again and let me know if there's anything else I can help with. —Cliftonian(talk) 19:45, 18 August 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for performing such a thorough review. I believe that I have addressed all of your concerns save Loder's birthdate; I have been unable to find this information in any published sources. I have had to resort to calculating from sources that state her age at a particular time. Should her birthdate simply be removed? Please let me know if you have any further concerns or if I have not adequately addressed any of your previously stated concerns. Neelix (talk) 03:10, 19 August 2013 (UTC)
It's really no problem. I'm glad it has helped. The article is in better shape now. I would rearrange the lead slightly so that the first paragraph explains more succinctly who Kellie is and exactly what makes her notable; the bit about the first song could be moved down. I would have the lead something like this:
Having written her first song at age 16 about a cousin who died in a traffic accident, Loder released The Way in August 2009, and later that year won a talent-search contest hosted by YC Newfoundland, a Christian youth conference. As part of the award, Loder was given time with music industry and production professionals, who helped her with Imperfections & Directions, which was released at the 2010 YC Newfoundland. Loder was nominated as Female Artist of the Year at the 2010 MusicNL awards, and then as Gospel Artist of the Year in 2011. Imperfections & Directions was nominated as Contemporary Christian/Gospel Album of the Year at the 2012 Juno Awards. Taking part in that year's Juno Cup ice hockey game, Loder took a penalty shot after fighting with former National Hockey League player Troy Crowder.
Loder's music career is unusual in that she chose to begin it in Contemporary Christian music (CCM); most young musicians choose music genres such as country and pop, which are generally considered more likely to bring commercial success. Loder has said that she chose CCM because it gives purpose to her music. Having studied at the Grenfell Campus of Memorial University of Newfoundland, Loder is also a trained nurse. As of April 2012, she had not decided whether she would focus on medicine or music.
Just a suggestion of course. On the new image (this one), you shouldn't force image sizes ("300px"); put "|upright=1.6" instead (this allows users' preferences regarding image sizes to still work, instead of forcing everybody to look at it at 300px).
Regarding the date of birth, there seem to be quite a few sources that mention her age at a certain point or other in time (see the link I put above for one). I'm sure you could use these to support 1988 as a year of birth? I've been having a look as well and I also can't find a source for her date of birth... a pity. Well done on the work so far, I feel the article is progressing. —Cliftonian(talk) 03:57, 19 August 2013 (UTC)
I have restructured the lead, largely as you have recommended, and have also fixed the image size issue and readded the date of birth with one of the sources that simply states her age at a particular point. Do you have any remaining concerns regarding the article? Neelix (talk) 01:17, 20 August 2013 (UTC)
Okay, that looks good. That's me satisfied, well done on this, great work! I have posted support above. —Cliftonian(talk) 08:43, 20 August 2013 (UTC)
Comment, leaning to support
The nominator asked me to look at this article, which, despite a near-total ignorance of popular music, I have done. The prose is excellent (very natural and seemingly effortless – most readable) there is no sign of bias, the references are evidently from reputable publications. My only question is about the length of the article. It is very short for a Featured Article, but of course if this is all there is to say then so be it: we don't want padding to bulk it out. There is some WP:OVERLINK that could do with pruning - traffic accident, drummer, Christian, faith, piano, recording studio and music industry for starters. I think I'd like to see what other editors better versed than I in popular music think about the length of the article before I sign up as a supporter, but I have lively hopes of being able to do so. Tim riley (talk) 15:45, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for reviewing this article. I have reduced the overlinking. All the secondary sources I have been able to find are already used in the article; I have searched using Google Books, Google News, Google Web Search, and several newspaper and journal databases accessible through my local library. If you discover any additional sources, I would be glad to add them to the article. Neelix (talk) 01:30, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
Reading the comments below reassures me that the brevity of the article does not imply any omissions. I am happy to add my support. I gladly echo SchroCat's comment – "small but perfectly formed". Tim riley (talk) 15:12, 26 August 2013 (UTC)
"Loder's music career is unusual in that she chose to begin it in Contemporary Christian music (CCM); most young musicians choose music genres such as country and pop, which are generally considered more likely to bring commercial success." – The link to the television broadcast goes to a page that does not have the video. Likewise, a link to a CBC radio broadcast also links to a page but not the broadcast.
"… her first song, which was about a cousin who had died in a traffic accident, used lyrics from a poem by a friend who was also close to Loder's late cousin. Loder began performing this song, and her family encouraged her in singing and songwriting; she then wrote another song for a friend's graduation." – Can we name these songs?
""Giants" eventually appeared her albums The Way and Imperfections & Directions." -- "Giants" eventually appeared on both her albums The Way and Imperfections & Directions.
"She was nominated as Female Artist of the Year at the 2010 MusicNL awards with Mary Barry, Teresa Ennis, Irene Bridger and Amelia Curran" – Fix the link to Teresa Ennis.
"the song's lyrics revolve around the idea that the grace and mercy of God can be found in the most difficult situations." – Fix link to "mercy of God".
"Although Loder lost the Juno Award to downhere, an alternative rock band" – Link downhere.
"at the Stavanger Drive Second Cup on the 15th and at Cornerstone Ministry Centre on the 21st" – Fix link to Stavanger Drive.Jimknut (talk) 18:55, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for your comments. I have switched the three links you mentioned and corrected the grammatical error you pointed out. The television broadcast and radio broadcast citations include the links as additional information, not to present the video and audio sources themselves; both the video file and the audio file no longer exist online, but these are still valid sources as they have been broadcast on specified dates on television and radio respectively. I can remove the url field from these citations if that is deemed an improvement. The names of the first two songs Loder wrote do not appear in any sources I have been able to find; I am under the impression that neither of these songs appear on her albums or were ever released in another formal capacity. Because downhere is linked in its first instance, I believe linking it a second time in the body of the article would be considered overlinking, but feel free to correct me on this point if I am mistaken. Neelix (talk) 01:46, 25 August 2013 (UTC)
I made a couple of minor changes: feel free to revert if you don't agree or like them.
"used lyrics from a poem by a friend who was also close to Loder's late cousin": feels a bit clunky to me. Perhaps "used lyrics from a poem by a mutual friend of her cousin" may suffice, unless others can come up with better wording?
CBC Radio source: I presume there's a clip on the source to listen to? It might be worth noting somehow, somewhere that it's not available to listen to in all territories.
"favours": Do Canadians also spell this with the U? (Do they also spell "generalizing" and " organization" with a Z? I am asking from a position of ignorance, but also to make sure it's consistent with CanEng spelling.
"Loder met Devin Robinson, a record producer; Loder released her first album...": seems a bit of a jump from met to produce with only a semi-comma to cover what happened in the middle! Perhaps a little meat on the bones may help? Suggestion below for you to compare with your original: pick whichever you feel more comfortable with:
In 2008, while studying nursing at the Grenfell Campus of Memorial University of Newfoundland through the Western Regional School of Nursing, Loder met Devin Robinson, a record producer. The meeting led to a Robinson producing Loder's first album, The Way, which was recorded at Sweet Music Studios. Loder wrote all 11 songs for the album, which was released in August 2009.
"hosted by Corner Brook, St. John's, and Gander in different years". Firstly an event is hosted by people, but in a town. Secondly, do we need to know that the location of the competition alternates locations? Just put where it was when Loder won.
Good stuff overall - small but perfectly formed! - SchroCat (talk) 02:57, 26 August 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the encouragement and input, Gavin! I have reworded the sentences you have indicated and removed the information about YC Newfoundland's alternating between locations. The CBC Radio citation links to a webpage where the audio clip used to be accessible, but is no longer. A brief summary of the broadcast is still located on that webpage. I can remove the url if that is deemed an improvement; the citation is valid without it. Thank you for taking an interest in Canadian spelling. The words you indicate in that question are all spelled correctly in the article. Here is a helpful table on the subject: . Please let me know if you have any further concerns regarding the article. Neelix (talk) 19:33, 26 August 2013 (UTC)
"Loder began performing this song, and her family encouraged her in singing and songwriting; she then wrote another song" -- Repetietive use of "song" and its deriritives, suggest: "With encouragement from her family, Loder concentrated on her singing and songwriting and performed this and a follow up song..."
"Loder says that, while she enjoys all the instruments she plays, she favours the piano, considering it the most beautiful." -- Pronoun will do at the start. You will need to go through the article and check for this as this is the second time now that I have picked this up.
"Also that year, she won a talent-search contest hosted by YC Newfoundland, a Christian youth conference. The conference took place in Gander that year..."
-- I think the last sentence is a bit redundant as we have already said that she won the contest. I don't really think we need to be reminded where it took place and when. May I suggest: "Also that year, she won a talent-search contest hosted by YC Newfoundland, a Christian youth conference, where she performed "Giants".
"As part of the award, which was valued at $20,000, Loder was given an East Coast Music Association membership, a MusicNL trade association membership, time at a recording studio, time with music industry and production professionals, and a featured performance slot at the following year's YC Newfoundland." -- Repetition here of "membership" and "time". Suggest this or something similar: "As part of the award, which was valued at $20,000, Loder was given a membership for both the East Coast Music and MusicNL trade associations, and was given time at a recording studio and advice from music industry and production professionals. She was also engaged in a featured performance slot at the following year's YC Newfoundland."
"She later referred to the music professionals she met as part of the award package..." "as part of the award package" is redundant here.
"She said that she was surprised by the large turnout for the event." -- If she said it then it should be quoted. If not, suggest "thought" or "noted" or something else.
"Loder moved to St. John's in January 2010, and performed alongside Starfield and Roy Martin later that year at the Exploits Valley Salmon Festivalgospel concert, attended by hundreds, in Grand Falls-Windsor." -- "attended by hundreds" is an irritant which would otherwise get in the way of a nicely laid out sentence. Could this be either swapped for "the popular" before Exploits Valley Salmon Festival, or removed altogether?
"She also performed at the 2010 One Worship Festival in Springdale, and released Imperfections & Directions, another independent release, at YC Newfoundland that October." -- Was this the official release of Imperfections & Direction? If it was, could you say so as we speak of this album in the previous paragraph and one might assume that this has already been released.
"A reporter noted that "the album demonstrates how Loder wears her faith and love of God on her sleeve." -- Do we know for which medium the reporter worked? Not essential, but it would be nice to know what kind of media was commenting.
We appear to have suddenly been told that she studied nursing. This is the first mention of this unless I have missed it. When was this? Could this be built in chronologically to the text?
Prose is a bit iffy here "She stated that she wrote the song at a hard time in her life..." -- This is also not quoted so I shall use poetic licence for an alternative. Suggest: "She confessed that she had written the song during a difficult phase in her life"? This also removes the repetetive "stated" you use in the next sentence.
"her grandmother's house" -- redundency.
"Loder was inspired to write the song by the interview." -- redundency.
Do we need a link to "text message"?
"Loder has said that she chose CCM because it gives purpose to her music" -- Quotes? If not, I would change "said" to some other descriptive term.
"With a voice that has been described as "powerful yet serene and soulful"" -- By who?
"As of April 2012, she had not decided whether she would focus on medicine or music." -- Again here, we have been surprised with the fact she had a prior interest in medicine. This should be mentioned a lot earlier as well as here.
I have finished my review. I note Jim's comments below and feel I have to agree with the majority of them, especially the lack of sales or chart positions of her records and no critical reception section. Jim has provided a good set of comments that will need to be addressed. I will base my support on your responses to them as I think at least four of them are vital for a music related biography. -- CassiantoTalk 11:22, 28 August 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for the comments, Cassianto, and for the promise of additional ones. I have removed the links to music and songwriter, linked pew, reworded the two sentences you indicate, and switched many instances of "Loder" to "she" throughout the article. Unfortunately, the name of the first song Loder wrote does not appear in any of the sources I have been able to find; I do not believe the song was ever released in any professional manner. Neelix (talk) 19:58, 26 August 2013 (UTC)
I have implemented all of the changes you recommended above, except one which I was unsure about how to address. You suggest that Loder's nursing studies be mentioned earlier in the article. They are mentioned in the first sentence of the "Music career" section. Do you feel that this statement should appear in the "Early life" section? I would be grateful for any advice you can provide in how to address Jim's concerns stated below. I have already implemented all of the information from all of the sources I have been able to find on Loder, so I don't know how to proceed. What are the four things you mention that are vital? Neelix (talk) 22:14, 28 August 2013 (UTC)
I think the nursing should be mentioned in the lead, specifically in the second paragraph chronologically. I also agree with the following issues given by Jim:
The article needs a sales/charts/critical reception section.
I think the hockey game is given a bit too much emphasis. This will need to be trimmed and more time spent on explaining her national as opposed to local fame. -- CassiantoTalk 10:03, 29 August 2013 (UTC)
I have moved the mention of Loder's nursing studies to the beginning of the second paragraph, added a "Critical response" section, deephasized the hockey game, added some sales information (selling out of original album and door-to-door sales thereafter), and added some information about Loder's national fame (Loder's regular featuring on Rogers TV). If you can think of any other ways in which I can address Jim's concerns, please let me know. Neelix (talk) 18:12, 29 August 2013 (UTC)
Support – I agree. Kudos to Neelix for making the most of what little was there. -- CassiantoTalk 11:23, 4 September 2013 (UTC)
Support from Oppose for now from Jim I started with just a few nitpicks, but became increasingly concerned as I went along Jimfbleak -talk to me? 14:54, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
when she "started to accept [her] gifts for what they were... and just assumed it was God.—as written, it says her gifts were God
eventually appeared on both of her albums —is the "of" redundant or Canadian?
lost the Juno Award to downhere, an alternative rock band—If downhere is a band, I assume it should be capped
No sales or chart positions of her records, no critical reception section. I would have thought these were basic requirements of a musician's article.
Instead, she is effectively allowed to commentate on her own music and god-given gifts.
I suppose that she is just about notable because of the Juno award, but there is precious little in your article to suggest anything else other than local/niche fame, and I'm surprised that that a hockey game is deemed more relevant than sales/charts/critical reception. If there is no detectable reception of her music, letting her promote her godly gifts comes close to spam. Doesn't anyone dislike/have mixed views of her stuff?
I came across this. I don't have much time for Ottava, a known trouble-maker, but, having read the Loder section, I thought it only fair to invite you to respond.
Thank you for your considered review of this article. I have reworded the sentence you mention about gifts. I am under the impression that "both of" is grammatically correct; there are more than three thousand Google Books hits for the string "both of Canada's official languages". The band downhere styles its name with all lowercase letters; I thought it best to honour that on this article, but I can switch the capitalization if there is consensus to do so. Where would one find the sales or chart positions of Loder's records? I am under the impression that neither of her albums has charted or sold a large number of copies. I have done as thorough a job at finding sources for this article as I know how. As such, I do not believe that anyone has written reviews of Loder's music beyond what is already included in the article. Loder's notability rests primarily on her Juno nomination (criterion 8 of our notability guidelines for musicians); neither of her albums are sufficiently notable to justify their own articles. I would be grateful for any recommendations of additional sources you know of or are able to find. Would you recommend removing some of Loder's comments in light of the lack of critical response? I generally find it unwise to respond to comments on websites like Wikipedia Review, but I would be glad to respond here to any of Ottava's concerns that you believe to have merit. Neelix (talk) 17:46, 28 August 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for replies. I'm fine with the minor points. Further clarification below Jimfbleak -talk to me? 06:30, 29 August 2013 (UTC)
FWIW, I'm not bothered by Ottava's comments. They concern single phrases where the source says "X did Y" and there is little scope to do more than "Y was done by X". I don't see genuine plagiarism. I just thought I should make you aware of the accusations if you weren't already
As a consequence of the lack of independent commentary, we are reliant on her description of her talents, god-given or otherwise.
This is a well-written article. I've supported your previous FACs, and I would like to do so with this, since I'm a reluctant opposer at the best of times. However, unless some solution can be found to the outstanding issues, it's likely that my oppose will stand, and it will be for the delegates to decide what weight to give (I've had several FAs go through with an oppose). I'd be interested to read other reviews so see if I'm completely out of kilter on this
Thank you for your encouragement despite opposing the FAC. I have made an attempt to address your concerns, as I explain above in my response to Cassianto. If I have not already addressed your concerns, I feel as though there may be no way to address them except to delete the article; all the known existing sources have been fully exploited. Are you calling for the article to be deleted? Neelix (talk) 18:19, 29 August 2013 (UTC)
Do we know what the original run was? I've seen the changes, but I'll have another look in the morning. I can see you have probably done all you can, I need to ponder Jimfbleak -talk to me? 18:35, 29 August 2013 (UTC)
How do you mean "delete"? Do you mean delist at FAC? I want it known that I am leaning to support this now as your responses have been satisfactorily met IMO. I do think the "Critical response" section is a little on the short side, but at least we have something in the way of critical response. Could you dig up any more? -- CassiantoTalk 19:51, 29 August 2013 (UTC)
I've struck my oppose, but it still looks a bit thin. Is it worth seeing if her agent can point you to some factual stuff, like numbers of records sold (has to be referenceable, so may not be easy. Jimfbleak -talk to me? 07:19, 30 August 2013 (UTC)
I haven't managed to find the number of albums produced in the original run, but I did manage to find another CBC Radio interview and have implemented it in the article. The "Critical response" section is a bit longer now. I have contacted Kellie Loder Music to ask for chart/sales information and for any additional reviews I may have missed. Neelix (talk) 18:55, 30 August 2013 (UTC)
I may be scraping the bottom of the barrell at this point, but I found a brief mention Loder in Grenfell Connects that indicates radio play of her songs on a national level. Kellie Loder Music still hasn't gotten back to me. Neelix (talk) 17:54, 2 September 2013 (UTC)
┌────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────────┘ I think anything is better than nothing, as long as it comes with some kind of reliability. No rush with the Loder people, I'm sure a small wait would be fine. -- CassiantoTalk 22:37, 2 September 2013 (UTC)
I think the nominator has done all that is feasible on content, and I have no problems with the prose. I've therefore changed to support above, but perhaps the next FAC might be for someone a bit more, well, notable (: Jimfbleak -talk to me? 10:24, 4 September 2013 (UTC)
Comment -- I note the discussion re. the Critical response section and I have to say to say it does jar somewhat to me. First of all, has she received nothing but praise in her time? OTOH, given there's not much to the section, it might work better dropping it and simply rolling one or two of the comments into the main section at appropriate points. BTW, just on the formatting side, I suspect that ndashes, not mdashes, are correct for the Awards list. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:44, 9 September 2013 (UTC)
I have searched extensively and have not found any published reviews of her albums; I have found no published negative criticism of her music, and the only positive criticism has been from people interviewing her, who are likely to provide praise in the context of an interview. I have therefore merged the "Critical response" section into the "Music career" section as you recommend. I have also switched the em-dashes to en-dashes in the "Awards and nominations" section. Do you have any other concerns regarding the article? Neelix (talk) 17:45, 9 September 2013 (UTC)
Well my suggestion was to roll one or two bits from Critical response into the main body, not necessarily all of it. For instance, professional commentators are one thing but I'm not sure that the opinions of politicians and radio listeners really belong. Of course I'd be happy to hear how any of the reviewers above stand on that. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:33, 14 September 2013 (UTC)
I have re-split-off the "Critical response" section, retaining only the comments from professional critics. Please let me know if you have further recommendations. Neelix (talk) 23:33, 15 September 2013 (UTC)
Apologies if I confused you. What I was getting to was that such a small section (which it was even in its original form) should be dropped, and some of the comments rolled into the main body at relevant points, the rest of the section to just go. So if what's there now was merged into the main section at appropriate points, I think it'd be an improvement. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 00:44, 17 September 2013 (UTC)
I hope I have correctly understood your recommendations this time around. I have removed the comments from the politician and the anonymous listener, and have remerged the "Critical response" section into the "Music career" section. How does that look? Neelix (talk) 16:07, 17 September 2013 (UTC)