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Catherine Wilkins

Request on 17:04:07, 15 March 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Chislou

• Chislou (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Catherine Wilkins (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi. Can you let me know what 'Please connect the references to the article and do not leave them as embedded links' means? I am not sure what to do. Thanks

Chislou (talk) 17:04, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Chislou I've gone ahead and fixed the references. It needs to go into detail on what books she wrote and how they were received by critics. Were there any that were best-sellers, or did she get any rewards? When she ranked number one, was it a relative ranking, like hers was the best, or she was just listed among a bunch of other authors the newspaper writer recommended. Do you have any news articles that go into Wilkins's life and career in more detail? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:10, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Request on 18:32:57, 15 March 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Chislou

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  • Draft:Catherine Wilkins (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Thanks very much for amending the references and I'm sorry I didn't understand the instruction :)

I have the following link about her personal life and providing the citation for her marriage: https://www.independent.co.uk/arts-entertainment/comedy/features/secrets-of-comedy-couples-whats-it-like-when-both-you-and-your-partner-are-stand-ups-10424981.html

Her stand up comedy reviews are hosted on chortle which is a fairly official comedy source: https://www.chortle.co.uk/comics/c/33491/catie_wilkins/review

Aside from those two Guardian reviews all of her book reviews are by book bloggers which likely wouldn't count as proper sources

The Independent ranking was more a placement in their list, the first of its kind. She hasn't been in best seller lists, just ranks highly on amazon when they do kindle offers

She was nommed for a FAB book award: http://catherinewilkins.co.uk/latest-news/60/fab_book_awards_nomination.html

Does any of this help?

Thanks again for being so helpful! Sorry to be such a wiki dunce :)

Chislou (talk) 18:32, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Chislou, those are helpful. I also found this from The List (magazine): https://edinburghfestival.list.co.uk/article/44463-catie-wilkins-joy-is-my-middle-name/ although that's written by Wilkins. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:46, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Request on 18:52:05, 15 March 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Chislou

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  • Draft:Catherine Wilkins (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Thanks for confirming those sources help. Should I add them and submit again for review? Or is this something you are doing behind the scenes in reviewing? Thank you again for your time tonight

Chislou (talk) 18:52, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

See if you can find some sources that would meet WP:THREE and post them towards the top of the article in the AFC comments section If they are detailed and cover Wilkins's career, then those would be best. The book reviews are good, they should be talked about more in a career section, like "Wilkins released a children's book (book 1 title) in 2012. It concerns the (premise brief plot summary). The book became a (accolades and best-seller rankings if appropriate). (Critic) of (critic magazine) wrote that (quote)" I'm not really doing much else behind the scenes. The marriage and children stuff can be supported by other news articles that mention both her husband and herself. You don't need to include the references where her husband just passively mentions "my wife Catie", but there are some good articles that go into more details like https://www.independent.co.uk/arts-entertainment/comedy/features/secrets-of-comedy-couples-whats-it-like-when-both-you-and-your-partner-are-stand-ups-10424981.html Hope that helps! AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:01, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Request on 20:20:41, 15 March 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Chislou

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  • Draft:Catherine Wilkins (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hi. I have gone into more detail about her comedy and about the podcast, and submitted the changes for approval. The Catherine 'Catie' Wilkins titling you have done is a good idea, as she works in equal amounts under both names. Thank you for your continued help.

Chislou (talk) 20:20, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Can you write up more about her comedy background and the subjects she covers? Same with the Drunk Women podcast. The comedy seems to be her main occupation, so I moved that up. Also had to tweak more of the references, please take a look. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:31, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Should her article be renamed to Catie Wilkins? That seems to be her stage name for her comedy act, where she uses the full Catherine in her books. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:33, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

Hi. I have gone into more detail about her comedy and about the podcast, and submitted the changes for approval. The Catherine 'Catie' Wilkins titling you have done is a good idea, as she works in equal amounts under both names. Thank you for your continued help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Chislou (talk • contribs) 16:23, 16 March 2019 (UTC)

Hi. Not sure if I posted correctly before so just posting again to say I have made some requested edits. Is it ok now? Thanks. Now adding this brackets and tildes thing to sign the post hopefully correctly :) (Chislou (talk) 21:07, 26 March 2019 (UTC))

Chislou, I bounced this back to you for more feedback. It needs to be organized more concerning the history of his career. It sounds like she is a comedian first, and then author and podcaster later. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:26, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks, I have rearranged the text to make it flow chronologically. She started comedy in 2004 whilst working on her books, then got published in 2012 when she did her final Edinburgh show and took a break from comedy to be an author, then returned to comedy in the podcast in 2018. Hope it works better now. Thank you for the guidance. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Chislou (talk • contribs) 21:49, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Chislou, it's good to go. You can continue developing it there at Catie Wilkins. Congrats! AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:52, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

Ace, thanks so much for all of your help throughout. All the best! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Chislou (talk • contribs) 19:40, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

Request for help with AfC submission by Leeuk01

Hi,

I've made the suggested changes to a new article I created after it had been declined but the re-submission hasn't done anything new since. Is this to be expected?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Actual_Radio

Thank you in advance!

--Leeuk01 (talk) 18:13, 22 March 2019 (UTC)

Leeuk01, it usually goes back in the AFC submissions pool where any of the reviewers can take a look again. I added some more feedback. It needs more outside news sources that talk about the station. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:11, 23 March 2019 (UTC)

Hi AngusWOOF, I've added some more external links to the page. I copied the same format as other radio station pages and added the same topics of content to make sure this page is also as relevant as they are. Thank you.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Actual_Radio

Leeuk01, those are press release kind of announcements that don't really go into detail on the station. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:04, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Made desired changes to article please help publish

Hi, I have made the desired changes to the page for Dr. Khurram Kayani. Kindly check and help me publish that. Thanks. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Drbadloti (talk • contribs) 22:08, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Drbadloti, please see my feedback on that page. Also identify WP:THREE of the best sources concerning this person up front. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:25, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Paulo's many articles

Hi Angus! FYI, an AfC you declined a couple of weeks ago Draft:Paulo Victor Soares, which the author has re-submitted and is currently pending, is duplicative of an article we already have called Paulo Victor Costa Soares. The mainspace article (which was created after you declined the AfC) is at AfD, and the article's creator is currently blocked for creating too many unsourced BLPs and editing while logged out. Also note that the editor who is creating the draft also has another draft going of the same article, Draft:Paulo Victor, and has also !voted keep at the AfD of the mainspace article. I wasn't sure how to post a "heads up" to reviewers that these two drafts are duplicates, as I've never done anything in draftspace before, so I figured I'd give you the heads up. Please let me know if there's something further I should do, like post a template or something on the draft articles' talk pages. Thanks. Leviv ich 15:10, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

Levivich, If they're created by sock evaders, you can CSD them for that. I'll comment that they are duplicates of the one that's currently in AFD. I think they can end up being redirects to that article if it stays and they can be deleted if the AFD results in delete. Or delete for housekeeping as the creating editor is now working on the mainspace article. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:06, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks. I guess I'll see how the AfD shakes out and go from there. Good to know it won't be taking up reviewers' time at AfC. Leviv ich 01:41, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Levivich Paulo's article survived AFD so I converted both of the drafts into redirects. Thanks again for tracking these down. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:42, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Clarification

Hi AngusWOOF, thanks for reviewing the draft article Draft:FutureBrand. I would be really grateful for some clarification on the reasons for declining the submission if possible?

The draft article includes references from AdWeek and Fast Company (detailed articles on their American Airlines rebrand), The Wall Street Journal (article on their acquisition strategy) CNBC, Forbes and Fast Company (describing their research and findings) and Creative Review (full feature of their work rebranding NatWest).

Sorry to ask but given the status of these publications, the nature of the content in the articles, and the focus on the company in question, can you help me understand why in your opinion they don’t establish notability or show more than a passing mention?

Having looked at other pages in Category:Branding companies for reference, could you also help me understand why the following examples show notability more effectively than this draft?

Moving Brands, Lippincott (brand consultancy), Prophet (company), Brand Union, Lambie-Nairn, Traction (company), Brand Institute, Master-McNeil, Tinsley Advertising, Saffron Brand Consultants, Interbrand.

Appreciate your help.

--Woollara (talk) 16:06, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi AngusWOOF, are you able to help clarify the above? Thank you.

--Woollara (talk) 10:19, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Woollara, I see a ton of passing mentions of the company as it collaborates with other companies, so need your help to identify WP:THREE articles that best cover the article. Forbes should not be from contributor section. You can post those three at the top of the article and resubmit. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:53, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Review of Draft:Aerofly_FS

Hello AngusWOOF, Thanks for your previous review, I fully agree your remarks. I hope my last edit will satisfy you. It's true that the article may look complimentary but it is not exaggerated. About the 3D engine for example, Aerofly is much much better than its competitors, it is just a fact. Thanks for your feedback, Vincent. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Turman (talk • contribs) 13:37, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

I have read your last review. I don't understand why I need to make a reception section for the reviews. I have never seen that. Could you please detail it or give a sample from an existing article ? About the other part of your review: in fact FS2 is the notable version as FS1 was more confidential. I'll try to explicit that in the article. Thanks, Vincent. Turman

See Sonic the Hedgehog (1991 video game) for example. It doesn't have to be from a video game review website, but from the other flight simulation / computing reviewers. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:11, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for having extending the refs for me ! I have also made small improvements, please tell me if it's enough. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Turman (talk • contribs) 20:45, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Hello Angus, Could you please rereview my draf since I've made a lot of improvements (I don't know if I can contact another reviewers as you have already made some remarks on my draft). Thanks, Vincent. Turman

Turman, please see feedback from previous. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:49, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:H&K Group, Inc.

Hello; you previously reviewed and declined this draft on 2/25/19. I have made the changes you pointed out, and stripped the page down considerably. As I made the editorial changes based on the guidance of your specific notes, it should now be acceptable. I understand that it could take up to two months to be re-reviewed, as Wikipedia states, but with 3 weeks passing I figured it could do no harm to simply let you know that the page has been resubmitted. Thank you! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rmanfredijr (talk • contribs) 12:40, 5 April 2019 (UTC)

Rmanfredijr, can you identify WP:THREE articles that significantly describe H&K Group, and that are not connected to the subject? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:57, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for getting back to me. Here you go:

1) http://www.thebluebook.com/eastern-pennsylvania-and-delaware/articles/high-principles.-hands-on-practice.html - The Blue Book Network is a national publication that connects close to half a million building and construction companies across the United States, and they have been an institution for over 100 years. This profile of H&K was the cover story for the Spring 2017 edition.

2) https://www.constructionequipmentguide.com/nascar-drivers-laud-handks-paving-work-at-pocono-raceway/18542 - H&K repaved NASCAR's Pocono Raceway in 2012, only the third repave of Pocono since it opened in 1968. H&K and the repave project were the subjects of this article in the July 2012 national edition of Construction Equipment Guide. Jeff Gordon and Greg Biffle are quoted praising the work of H&K in the piece. Pocono is tied for the second-largest NASCAR track in America (after Talladega).

3) https://www.senatormensch.com/2017/07/21/august-2017-hk-group/ - PA State Senator Bob Mensch made H&K the focus of the August 2017 episode of his monthly web series "The Mensch Report" , in which Senator Mensch visited H&K's facilities and interviewed CEO Scott Haines and COO Jim Haines. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rmanfredijr (talk • contribs) 16:05, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Cellemetry article

Thank you for the edits and reformatting. It made the article much better and fit with the Wikipedia format. If you have time, take a look and see if I answered your questions / concerns. — Preceding unsigned comment added by CSYguy (talk • contribs) 17:47, 9 April 2019 (UTC)

CSYguy, which are your WP:THREE sources? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:58, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Southend local elecions

Oh yes thank you. I had it originally rejected and I made some changes but for some reason it created one which published straight away by itself and one which needed review. Sorry for wasting your time, thank you for reviewing it. Fatguyinthedeli (talk) 08:11, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

Fatguyinthedeli, no worries, keep developing the one in mainspace so that it doesn't get deleted for lack of notability. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 03:40, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:Danny P. Dietz

Hi, I can't thank you enough for the help with my draft: Danny P. Dietz, It's greatly appreciated. I noticed that you stated possible glowing praise for the soldier, upon going through the draft with this perspective in mind, I realized you were right, I was showing a lot more support and nearly becoming somewhat biased. I have done some cleaning up of the draft, it would greatly be appreciated if you could go over it again and tell me if anything else is faulty. Thank you! User:Delta fiver (talk) 20:01 , (UTC)

Hi thank you again for the edits on the draft, is it clear for resubmission or are there things that need to be fixed, Thanks! User:Delta fiver (talk) , 5:46 (UTC)

Thank you for investing your time and helping me publish my first article. Greatly appreciated! User:Delta fiver (talk) , 19:08 (UTC)

My GRC webpage

Hey, I was the one who requested the Green Run Collegiate page to be published. I just wanted to explain that there is a Green Run Wikipedia page but not a Green Run Collegiate page. They are located in the same building but are two completely separate schools so that is why I wanted to make a separate page . (Ina0124 (talk) 21:21, 10 April 2019 (UTC))

Can you find some more news articles about Collegiate, and expand upon the two different schools? See also talk page for Talk:Green Run High School. If it's going to be split, then the Collegiate stuff should not be on the High School page, unless they are affiliated, like students can attend either classes / programs? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:26, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

Hey I made the changes you recommended am I good to go now or is there anything else that needs to be clarified? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ina0124 (talk • contribs) 23:36, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

Ina0124, it's up and running now. Please see the refideas on the talk page. I need to find some articles that confirm when Patricio took over. I'm guessing it was in 2018 sometime. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 03:39, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

THANK YOU !! I will continue making needed adjustments:) (Ina0124 (talk) 12:55, 11 April 2019 (UTC))

Anil K. Chauhan Page

Hello,

I hope your day is going well. Thank you for taking the time to review my page. I am really needing some specific recommendations on changes that should be made so that I can get this page approved. I am open to any suggestions that you might have. Thank you! RYANMICHAELMILLER (talk) 22:30, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

RYANMICHAELMILLER, the main thing is that it should not read like a resume statement, but be more of a biographical description. It should also be supported by external references that are independent of the subject. If there are news articles that write up about him, use those, not the ones within his immediate research groups and communities. As it stands, it reads like it was copy-pasted from an academic profile, so of course it will contain a lot of resume-stuffing activities and positive things to say about the person.I suggest rewriting the career section completely and in somewhat chronological order. In (year), he worked at (place) where he studied (main topics). While there, he published several papers that were (recognition by the community). (further recognition). He also founded (organization) in (year). Have another paragraph on Try to explain briefly what topics he worked on and link those to other Wikipedia articles. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:53, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

RYANMICHAELMILLER, the article was deleted for being too promotional / advertising. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:00, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Robert W. Stallman

Why isn't the Award reference and the items under References adequate for showing reliable secondary sources? I have also posted my COI on my page.

Dan — Preceding unsigned comment added by DanStallman (talk • contribs) 22:48, 10 April 2019 (UTC)

Dan, the award page is a Wikipedia page so it can't be used as a reference per WP:CIRCULAR. The rest of the material you cited come from Stallman himself which is either WP:SELFPUBLISH or WP:PRIMARY. We need sources that are secondary and independent of the subject. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:42, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Ok, one last stab at this. Can the number of authors that cite his work count as "secondary and independent of the subject"? ........................................................................................

https://doi.org/10.1111/j.1745-6584.2006.00218.x (I was thinking this is independent)

https://www.lm.doe.gov/cercla/documents/fernald_docs/CAT/111622.pdf - Referenced

https://agupubs.onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/abs/10.1029/TR037i004p00451 - Cited 35 times

http://link.bowdoin.edu/portal/Multiphase-fluids-in-porous-media--a-review-of/Wp4L6tlK-HQ/ - College library

http://adsabs.harvard.edu/abs/1956TrAGU..37..451S - Harvard abstract search

http://www.twdb.texas.gov/publications/reports/other_reports/doc/Circ63-03.pdf - Cited

https://www.usbr.gov/tsc/techreferences/hydraulics_lab/pubs/PAP/PAP-0236.pdf - Lecturer at MIT

http://ufdcimages.uflib.ufl.edu/UF/00/00/12/34/00001/UF00001234.pdf - Cited by Florida Geological Survey ..............................................................................

I found these after I searched for robert w stallman hydrogeology. My apologies for dragging you through the minutia, my attempt is to highlight his work without boring the reader with his technical content. I am beginning to think I do need to add content about how much he published and was cited.

Regards, DanStallman (talk) 00:23, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

"Wikipedia is not a memorial page. You need articles that are not self-published or the standard obituary to show notability." You are correct, I did not read this. Let me add the correct content, within 2 weeks.

Regards, DanStallman (talk) 01:37, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Bradley Cooper (politician)

you have rejected the publication of the article Bradley Cooper (politician) and you gave reasons such as not enough references and not proving him to be a notable politician. You said in a comment you made that him serving the school board doesn't make him a politician and I would agree but he has done a lot more than working for the school board he has worked with campaigns of some of the biggest politicians in Missouri and even the president would it help if it were to say political activist. and also how many sources would you say is enough to make it good enough? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Smallman1093 (talk • contribs) 00:50, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

See WP:GNG and WP:NPOLITICIAN But if you have WP:THREE that you can clearly indicate are secondary sources independent of the subject, post those. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:56, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

would it help to change politician to political activist because brad is heavily involved in politics and the campaigns while maybe not being a politician himself he has been involved in them — Preceding unsigned comment added by Smallman1093 (talk • contribs) 01:06, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Smallman1093, when I look up "Bradley Cooper politician" or "Bradley Cooper activist" I get mostly political stuff concerning the actor, unless I add in Missouri, then I get "student" as occupation [1] [2] and it doesn't seem that notable. We need more sources that give him an occupation besides being a student that's appeared in the local news. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 02:58, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Well of course the actor is going to get more coverage than him and he is a student but the Kansas city star article talks about him being involved in the campaigns of both josh hawley and Donald trump and the columbiam article mentions him as a volunteer with the Greene county republicans neither of those are just saying student — Preceding unsigned comment added by Smallman1093 (talk • contribs) 03:22, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Smallman1093, I renamed the article to (activist) AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:08, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

DYK nomination for Sarlacc's Pit cave

Hello, I have completed a DYK review for an article which you made substantial contributions to. I noted some questions at Template:Did you know nominations/Sarlacc's Pit cave. If you are interested, please respond there. Thanks. Flibirigit (talk) 15:33, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Miraculous: Is it distributed by Toei Company?

Hey, I'm still thinking about Miraculous Ladybug being distributed by Toei Company. I know that I have been doing my past edit on Miraculous Ladybug being distributed by Toei Company because Toei Animation is owned by Toei Company. Should I use add a "citation needed"? Or what should I do? PascalMuganyizi (talk) 18:26, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

PascalMuganyizi, I'd just WP:DROPTHESTICK on that. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:09, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

What's that mean? Why'd you'd WP:DROPTHESTICK on that? PascalMuganyizi (talk) 15:33, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

RE: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Nora_Herting

Hi. You requested three sources to reference about wiki draft subject, Nora Herting. Here they are for your reference: 1. https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/235521 2. https://hyperallergic.com/50249/nora-herting-jc-penney-portrait-studio/ 3. https://www.theguardian.com/technology/2012/mar/25/image-think-technology-idea-diagrams

I have edited the draft according to your feedback as well. Rhashiva (talk) 15:46, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

Rhashiva, the second article is co-written by Herting, so it is considered primary. Do you have any others? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:26, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

Yes, here's one https://www.forbes.com/sites/deniserestauri/2015/02/19/how-ditching-your-ho-hum-powerpoint-presentation-can-make-you-a-star/#6975126e7af4 Rhashiva (talk) 19:48, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

Rhashiva, the Forbes one is coming from a contributor section so that doesn't meet reliable source per WP:RSP AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:50, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

My mistake, I missed that requirement. Please consider this one instead https://mashable.com/2015/03/18/imagethink/#xuubqEHxRqqE Rhashiva (talk) 20:04, 12 April 2019 (UTC)

Rhashiva, please take some time to reorganize her career section as it jumps years back and forth and is rather confusing. Also list the WP:THREE sources up front there. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:12, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Career section now reorganized and slightly updated for syntax. I included the three references up front there as well. Rhashiva (talk) 17:50, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft Article

Hello again AngusWOOF,it's been more than a month since I worked on the article Draft:Alliance School Kermanshah which you declined to take out of the draft, but it is still there and no one has touched it.I wonder if you could check this forgotten article again. It is good that you help me create better articles.Thank you Alex-h (talk) 19:03, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Alex-h, can you explain what you meant by "was". Is the school no longer around? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:07, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF , I just added some information showing this school does not exist any more(after Iran's anti-monarchy revolution).If you take a look at my articles, the scope of my work is human rights and history. I don't know much about schools.I translated this article from Wikipedia Persian. It is now ready for your checking. Alex-h (talk) 14:35, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Alex-h, it's difficult to keep as a separate article when it could be added as a single paragraph in the Alliance Israélite Universelle article or can be expanded upon in a new [List of Alliance Israélite Universelle schools]] with an entry like:

• Alliance School Kermanshah (1904–1979), in Kermanshah, Iran.

But I'll let other reviewers check for this. WP:WITHIN suggests it be merged. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:18, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:Audiodog

Hi AngusWOOF,

Thank you for reviewing my submission so quickly. I'm having a tough time figuring out what it will take to get Draft:Audiodog to pass muster with regard to references and/or album reviews. I've modeled my article after one about another album by the same artist (Transformer (Bruce Kulick album)), and at this point mine parallels the example in most ways (including references and such); StraussInTheHouse seemed to think the beefing up I had done to my draft after he first declined it would allow it to pass upon resubmission (please see User talk:StraussInTheHouse#Draft:Audiodog for additional details).

Your comment was, "Need more album reviews." Would it suffice to add and cite an excerpt from the review here, and/or add a reference to the rating here in the Professional Ratings box? Can you say whether the Transformer article has something mine lacks, or suffers from the same problem?

Thanks for your guidance,
Lardofdorkness (talk) 19:10, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Lardofdorkness, it needs a paragraph section where it summarizes some of the major reviews by music journalists. Not just a corner rating box. Regarding allmusic you could write "Greg Prato of Allmusic said that (criticism detail)" Discogs is not a reliable source. You'll need more reviews. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:15, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Lardofdorkness, you can also add the Greg Prato part where they compare songwriting styles with the other members as per [3] That it's being reported from a Kiss Encyclopedia book is helpful. Also, can you can also add a paragraph about the origins of the title being named after his dog Joe, per [4], I know it's a primary source but still useful for background information. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:10, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Will do - thanks for the review and additional suggestions. Lardofdorkness (talk) 15:27, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks. I pushed the article through. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:27, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

I appreciate it, AngusWOOF -- thanks for your help getting my first article published! Lardofdorkness (talk) 18:03, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Examples of Concerns on Canada and the Armoured Combat Vehicle (ACV)

Thank you for your comments on the subject draft article.

As this is my first ever article, could you provide some examples of where the draft fails to meet the following requirements?

       Submissions should summarise information in secondary, reliable sources and not contain opinions or original research. 

       Please write about the topic from a neutral point of view in an encyclopedic manner.

Thank you,

Bluenose Gunner (talk) 20:44, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Bluenose Gunner, please see WP:NOTESSAY, as the article is formatted like it's coming from someone's research and opinions on the subject rather than a description of the subject. If you want to talk about ACVs in Canada, then the intro paragraph should describe what that is, and then provide sections on history, reception, legacy (if no longer in used) AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:50, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Bluenose Gunner, also note there is already an article on Armoured fighting vehicle and Tanks of Canada. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:53, 13 April 2019 (UTC)

Some stroopwafels for you!

Thanks for your recommendations and making it happen on the article about the Free Burghers . Some sweets for you. Bhistory 19:29, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Request on 18:27:34, 15 April 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Giantsarethebest

• Giantsarethebest (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Jenny Lam (SF) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Hey AngusWOOF - the sources are from independent and well established news orgs. The articles are also written about the subject and not just mentioning in passing. Jenny Lam will be running in SF's first ever special election for school board commissioner. Do I need more content + sources?

Giantsarethebest (talk) 18:27, 15 April 2019 (UTC)

Giantsarethebest, sfmayor.com is a primary source / press release, so it is connected to the subject. The other article is a secondary report on it, but attributes statements made about Lam from the mayor's statements and not from its own research, so it is echoing the press release. You need to find some more news articles that aren't either. But SF Chronicle otherwise is okay for one source. You need more. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 18:38, 15 April 2019 (UTC)

angusWOOF, Pulled some more sources but they all generally reference the same day/topic/events as Jenny Lam is new and there's not much published info on her.

Video game Article Notability

Hi there. The game Heaven's Vault is notable despite being new.

https://www.pcgamer.com/au/heavens-vault-review/

https://www.google.com/search?q=Heaven%27s+Vault&client=firefox-b-d&source=lnms&tbm=nws&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwjYmN_xmNfhAhVORRUIHcESDLwQ_AUIDigB&biw=1248&bih=580 Urigamer (talk) 13:09, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Urigamer, can you add those into the article for Reception, especially any where the video game website meets WP:VG/RS as reliable? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 13:52, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Urigamer, it looks like Hahnchen pushed this into mainspace already and bypassed AFC together. Jovanmilic97 has since added a decent number of WP:VG/RS reviews so you can continue developing it there. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 00:19, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

virtual kitchen brand

Thank you for your suggestion. I added it as category for ghost restaurant. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Isybells (talk • contribs) 14:45, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Isybells, it needs to be condensed a lot more and not be as redundant as the main article. How are the three types defined? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 14:52, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Request on 18:10:42, 17 April 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Doinashalaru

• Doinashalaru (talk · contribs)
  • User:Doinashalaru (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I've edited the Dr. Beth Shubin Stein page a few times already and have also added the Creative Commons license on her site in order to use images from there. Is there anything else that I should do for the page to be published?

Thanks! Doinashalaru (talk) 18:10, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Doinashalaru, you need to rewrite the biography in your own words, not copy-paste it from her public profile at https://www.drbethshubinstein.com/our-office/dr-beth-shubin-stein/ You also need news sources independent of their website to show Stein is notable. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:27, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Help with new page

Sorry, this is my first time attempting to do anything on Wiki. I'm trying to create a page for the Police Department for which I work. I know LOTS of facts and I personally am the Historian for the department but it's difficult citing facts.

For example, I cite the City Clerk of Owasso as the citation for when my Police Department was officially formed. When I cite Owasso City Clerk, do I need to specifically write her name at the time? Or how else would I cite that person/position?

Also, I list many facts regarding changes through the decades. I make statements based on photographs I have of the decades, for example I make statements regarding uniform changes because I have pictures to back it up, but how do I cite picture that I have?

Lastly, I make statements on the page I'm trying to create because I was here for them, or personally interviewed the people that worked here at the time. How do I make a citation based on an interview of someone that was here at the time?

Sorry for all the questions — Preceding unsigned comment added by Owasso940 (talk • contribs) 22:19, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Owasso940, thanks for drafting the page. A lot of the details are coming from within your organization and would be better suited for writing up for your organization's website. Wikipedia needs sources that are independent of the subject to show notability, so consider outside media such as newspapers or local television websites. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:40, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Owasso940, kindly check WP:PSCOI as well to help self-disclose your connection to the group. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:48, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Request on 13:01, 17/04/2019 for assistance on AfC submission by AlexChristofi

Hi - the draft article for Max Porter (novelist) now has a couple of dozen references, very broad ranging from all the major UK news outlets, and reference to his numerous prize wins / nominations. This should be sufficient to establish that he is a prominent UK novelist and is often talked about without reference to any TV or film adaptation.

Alexchristofi13:07, 17 April 2019

Alexchristofi, just the best WP:THREE would do. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 01:25, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Talking Tom and frienss

Hello, AngusWoof, which date is season 4 of Talking Tom and friends coming out? Oreratile1207 (talk) 06:23, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Oreratile1207, that hasn't been announced yet, so please do not add random guesses. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 15:47, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:Trans Euro Trail

Hey there, thanks for giving me hints on what was missing on my first article in the English wikipedia (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Trans_Euro_Trail). I added more information and references, and linked quite some text now. Better and acceptable now? Thanks and have a nice day, Schwenn (talk) 14:25, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Schwenn, you need more secondary sources that show the founding / naming / approval of the trail and its maintenance. As it goes across multiple countries, how is it maintained and managed? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:28, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF, thanks for the input. I now added 3 more references about foundation, maintainance by the Linesmen and the trademark stuff. Ok now for publishing? --Schwenn (talk) 15:43, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

Schwenn, it needs articles independent of the organization itself. Do you have some major newspapers that discuss the TET? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:14, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF, well, this is a kind of a self-organising community and the Linesmen keep "their" country up2date. I will put links from independent motorcycle magazins in the article, pls check again - thanks :). --Schwenn (talk) 06:50, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Crowdshipping

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Crowdshipping Hi AngusWoof. I've revised the page and updated the sources. For two of my main sources, the archive url is not working, and I seek your advice for the resolution. Other than that, please provide any feedback and recommendation and I will make the changes. Thank you very much. I'm looking forward to your feedback.

-Kate

Hi Kate, it needs more background as to how the specific term came about and how widely used it is. See WP:NOTNEO and show how it is not just a recently made up term. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:24, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Bitcoin SV (Satoshi Vision) article

Hi... With respect to your rejection of my BSV draft, I note that there are standalone Wiki pages for both Bitcoin Gold and Ethereum Classic, other hard forks off existing blockchains, and both of those cryptocurrencies have significantly smaller market-caps than BSV. GorgeHoward (talk) 22:48, 21 April 2019 (UTC)

GorgeHoward, you'll have to convince folks at Talk:Bitcoin Cash that you have enough coverage on the Bitcoin SV for it to now have its own article. But it needs to be more notable than the most recent AFD which is less than a year old. Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Bitcoin SV AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:22, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Regarding https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:S7000A_(tax_law)

Can you review https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:S7000A_(tax_law) and let me know if there are any options left.

I am new to wikipedia and I must say that it seems to be a very dangerous place for people that would like to contribute to the history of our world.

You have been very friendly and collaborative, but this is not the norm and it really should be.

Thanks,

Ryozzo (talk) 18:57, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Ryozzo, the key components section looks like it still has some copyright / tone issues as it tries to explain to the audience about market value and assessed value "Your property tax is a percentage of the property's assessed value. " This needs to be rewritten and neutralized. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:12, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF Thanks. I will correct it.

Draft:David Welch

Thanks for your feedback. Truth be told, I was not keen on writing about myself, but I was told editors of major journals in the field should have pages. But I obviously undersold myself :) I actually do meet the criteria (e.g., two named chairs and a University Research Chair), but I would rather someone else created the page anyway, so I have tagged it for deletion. Cheers, DW — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dwelch60 (talk • contribs) 19:25, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Dwelch60, no worries. If someone writes one up, you can make sure they follow WP:NACADEMIC and if they are connected to you or your research group, they should self-disclose. There's also WP:PROUD, which, if you have a public article, people could write stuff about you that isn't always positive but fair game. You can also make suggested edits on your draft's talk page. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 20:17, 22 April 2019 (UTC)

Regarding Submission at Articles for creation: Lee Dae-hwi (April 23)

I want to ask why did you decline the article to be reviewed, as Lee Dae-hwi's individual notability has been discussed on Deletion review, and has been declared as "Allow Review and Recreation". May you check this first, Thank you.--Otterlyhwi (talk) 01:13, 23 April 2019 (UTC) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Deletion_review/Log/2019_April_14#SECTION_HEADER_AT_THE_DELETION_REVIEW_LOG

• Looks like a typical example of "fail per NBAND". The only thing that appears to make him notable is the songwriting credits, but those are typically overrated in this genre. Drmies (talk) 01:16, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Otterlyhwi, you need to bring up more sources that show his notability outside of the band so that he meets WP:MUSICBIO that way. So far, he's only got a single called "Candle" to his name that made Gaon. Then apparently he's become the co-host of M Countdown. If that's going to be a long-term role, that will help him with meeting WP:ENT that way, but if he is going to go off and join another boy band AB6SIX (or whatever), then that won't help. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 01:22, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

He is indeed a fixed MC of M countdown now since April 2019, and what do you mean by he is going to go off if he will join another band? I want to ask why such a same case like this can be accepted, like what happened with Park Woo-jin (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Park_Woo-jin) He also is notable by his songwriting credits. If this article is going be evaluated objectively, please do so. Thank you, and sorry if I sounded rude.--Otterlyhwi (talk) 01:32, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Otterlyhwi, as it stands, his career is still borderline notability whether it be WP:MUSICBIO, WP:COMPOSER, or WP:ENT. If you have secondary news articles that focus on Lee's career himself and not in the context of his bands, then you should bring those up for consideration and then he could possibly meet WP:GNG or WP:ANYBIO that way. The draft won't be deleted, unless it's been tendentiously submitted at low quality without improvement. By joining another band, I meant that if he is only there on M Countdown for a few episodes as with the guest formats they had been doing for the past few years, and then he leaves to join AB6SIX, then it's not really a permanent job but a guest host job. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 01:45, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback. I have added new source which focused on Lee's career in the draft. For your information, M Countdown has changed their program format since April 4, 2019, of which before this they used guest and Global MC Crew as host(s). But since the new changes, they didnt use that system anymore and Lee has been pointed as their permanent MC with Han Hyun-min. I honestly wondering if there is such standard(s) of which the subject should achieve to get his notability, since user Drmies had said that some criteria can be seen as 'overrated'. I have asked on Tea talk regarding this but no one responded. If adding this new references can help to fix the miscommunication part, kindly tell me if there's anything that I should fix.--Otterlyhwi (talk) 02:49, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

References

Otterlyhwi, the article was moved to mainspace now thanks to Zanhe. The new information about Gaon and M Countdown needed to be added first and shown up front for WP:MUSICBIO purposes: "To meet Wikipedia's standards for verifiability and notability, the article in question must actually document that the criterion is true. " AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 14:38, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

• I do not think that people like Park Woo-jin should be called "songwriters". If so, then every single artist who ever wrote a song for their own band or whatever should be called "songwriter", with a table full of titles. Imagine we did that for Neil Young. Drmies (talk) 17:22, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

I've cleaned up the songwriter section, getting rid of songs he wrote for himself and for Wanna One. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:45, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Fred Again page

Hi There,

Thank you for taking the time out to review the Fred again draft! I seem to be having a bit of trouble getting the page published and was hoping you could point me in the correct direction to get this published? I've seen our comment about removing discogs cite's which I'm the process of doing now. Could you please give me a list of viable sources I could use? At the moment I'm trying to use as much from Allmusic as possible but unfortunately, not all of his work is mentioned on there.

Thank you very much.

Jkaiser91 (talk) 15:32, 23 April 2019 (UTC)Jkaiser91Jkaiser91 (talk) 15:32, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Jkaiser91, you'll have to look at WP:COMPOSER and explain how Fred Again is notable from that perspective. You'll need news sources that go into Fred Again's career but aren't direct one-on-one interviews. Discogs is not a reliable source as it is user-generated. Allmusic should be used sparingly. WP:RSP has a number of general sources, but you'll want to find reputable music journals / magazines and not random blogs. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:01, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:Sonia_Syngal

Thanks so much for your quick review and feedback on the Draft:Sonia Syngal article. I have cleaned up the article based on your comment. Can you please take a look and let me know if you see any other areas of concern that should be modified/removed? Thanks again.

Benzeeful (talk) 16:43, 23 April 2019 (UTC)

Benzeeful, if there are some key news articles that cover Syngal's life and career, you'll want to note those. WP:THREE would be best. They shouldn't be press releases though or written by "contributors". AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:04, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF Thanks again for the feedback. I removed the press release citation and added citations for Washington Post and ABC News articles to supplement. Can you please advise if this may be ready to submit again for review or if you recommend additional edits? Benzeeful (talk) 17:07, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

Benzeeful, I've pushed the article through. You can improve it from there. Congrats! AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:40, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF Thank you for your guidance and help! Benzeeful (talk) 21:47, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

Request on 01:13:26, 24 April 2019 for assistance on AfC submission by Reorx911

• Reorx911 (talk · contribs)
  • Draft:Cate Song (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Reorx911 (talk) 01:13, 24 April 2019 (UTC) in regards to your flippant dismissal of this post submission: How is citing two major motion pictures and one of the largest record production labels in existence "coming from her own production"? I'd love to give you the opportunity to explain yourself before this is reported for moderator bias and discriminatory action without cause, and of course negligence, as your reasoning clearly proves you did not investigate this publication attempt whatsoever. How embarrassing. Reorx911 (talk) 01:13, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

Reorx911, you're citing IMDb. See Wikipedia:Citing IMDb. You're also citing Spotify, Tunefind, and Universal Production Music. These are either primary sources or vendors that are connected to her, or her own website. Please read WP:INDY. You need sources that are independent. At this point, you have not provided any news articles about Song that go into her career. You're welcome to resubmit this but it will still have to meet WP:MUSICBIO regardless if whether I review it or any of the other AFC reviewers see it. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 23:29, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

Request for Assistance on AfC Submission

Hi, I wrote an article on copyright and infringement of memes which was rejected for not having sufficient content for an independent article and not being an encyclopedic article. I have gone ahead and added some more content and I believe that the content would be sufficient for a standalone article, rather than merging it under another article. If it is merged it could lead to lot of confusion for readers who specifically want to study the area. Further, the article has used secondary sources and does not have opinions per se. Considering, how memes are currently in vogue and their copyright still in question, the page provides information as to how courts have gone about in the past in deciding similar matters of copyright. The page provides information into the reasoning of the court so that people are more informed about the kind of memes they create and the possible copyright infringement that could occur in the creation of those memes. I request you to please re-review the draft. Thank you! — Preceding unsigned comment added by WrightPhoenix (talk • contribs) 15:10, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

WrightPhoenix, it should be incorporated into the article as with Mashup (video)#Copyright issues, but if you think there's enough for a standalone, as with YouTube copyright issues, then you can organize it like those articles. I will rename it to Meme copyright issues. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 16:42, 24 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:Rotation of senators after a double dissolution

Hi Angus, you rejected Draft:Rotation of senators after a double dissolution on the basis that it does not have sufficient content and suggested instead I merge it with another article (after discussing it on the talk page). I have since added four more sections to it (the text only, still need to add more references to some sections). It now reflects my expectation of the amount of content it is due, though other editors may wish to add more. Can you please clarify whether this amount is still 'insufficient'? I suspect it has too much detail on this particular controversy for the double dissolution page, though no other editors have commented there yet. Oz freediver (talk) 01:06, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Update: one of the other admins has commented in favour of separate articles and suggested adding more content to address 'recentism'.Oz freediver (talk) 01:18, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Oz freediver, it would help if the lead paragraph in the draft explained the context of the topic and also had links to the double dissolution article. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 01:28, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Done.Oz freediver (talk) 02:32, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Updated

AngusWoof, You were right about that one source. I didn't realize it was a press release. But no matter. It was just an extra to accompany the source right before it that backed up Infinite Energy going into the Texas market. I deleted it.

But I think my sources are good, no? One is from a publication in Gainesville, Florida. One is from a publication in Ocala, Florida. Two are from publications in Georgia, where this company does business. And a fifth source is from Energy Choice Matters.

I see this company has a bunch of awards. Would it help if I built a section highlighting those awards with links to the different groups--some national--that presented them?

DolphinianDolphinian (talk) 14:36, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Dolphinian, again, it is more useful to have more secondary sources that discuss the company in detail. If the awards can be linked to other Wikipedia articles then that would show they are notable industry awards. The national awards would be worth retaining. If it's just some local community award it may not be that notble. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 17:59, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:2012 KNVB Cup Final

Hello there,

Thank you for your suggestions on the Draft:2012 KNVB Cup Final article. I have added more sources and cleaned up what needs to be added to the article. I believe it is now ready to be published into an actual article for Wikipedia. Thank you. KingSkyLord (talk) 00:51, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

KingSkyLord, I've pushed this one through. More news sources will keep it from going to AFD. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 22:48, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

Request for help with AfC submission by Vladislav at SSHE

Hi, AngusWOOF!

Thank you for your review of the draft article (Draft:Swiss School of Higher Education). I've brought in additional sources. Can I ask if everything else is okay?

Thank you! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vladislav at SSHE (talk • contribs) 07:05, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

My post

Hi Angus! I saw you reviewed my ENOUGH! coalition wikipage. The problem is you changed the name to chega, and that’s not right. The name for the coalition is Basta!, the name for the party itself is Chega. That’s the page for the coalition, not the party. Rodrigospascoal (talk) 10:01, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

Are you sure? I looked at the official website provided, and the organization calls itself Partido Politico CHEGA. I'll rename to Basta then, but it isn't "Enough!" They don't use the English name at all. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 13:30, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

Rodrigospascoal, this news article [5] says they have three different proposed names: 1) Chega, 2) Coalition Enough (which got confused with Europe Enough) 3) Basta AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 13:46, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

AngusWOOF, Yep, they first tried the name Chega and the court said it couldn’t be named like that because the party had that name, then they tried “Europe Enough” (Europa Chega) and it wasn’t approved because it had the political party name still, then they tried Basta and it was approved.

Rodrigospascoal, thanks, you should put that into the history section of the group. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 14:06, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

Rodrigospascoal, can you put that name changing article into the history section? That would help explain things. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 14:16, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

Draft:Rita McGhee

Thank you for reviewing. I've left a comment on the draft page. E-Stylus (talk) 21:40, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi AngusWOOF - I've worked on removing the peacock language for Draft:Rita McGhee. If possible, can you take a look and let me know if further revisions are needed to meet the guidelines for encyclopedic format? Thanks. E-Stylus (talk) 19:07, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

E-Stylus, it looks good. I pushed it through. Congrats! AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 19:20, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks AngusWOOF. E-Stylus (talk) 19:39, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

Cellemetry data services

You had asked me to list three sources for this article. Here they are:

   first source - [1] This is a book on Personal Communications (the all encompassing name that was used for the many services / uses for cellular at the time). This book goes on to cover numerous other technology / services / data networks of the time.
   second source - [2] This is another book that covers Cellemetry.
   third source - [3] During this time, cellular was a rapidly developing industry / Technology and much of the news was covered in industry publications. RCR was one of the premier publications.

I have also put these on the Cellemetry page.

   Note - if you would like news paper articles, SEC filings, etc. please let me know.

Let me know if the edits look good. Thanks for reformatting the article. This makes it much easier to read and understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by CSYguy (talk • contribs)

Ways to improve Jonathan Wax

Hello, AngusWOOF,

Thanks for creating Jonathan Wax! I edit here too, under the username I dream of horses and it's nice to meet you :-)

I wanted to let you know that I have tagged the page as having some issues to fix, as a part of our page curation process and note that:-

Ramniram, AngusWOOF was very gracious to move the article to draftspace. It's unfortunate that you didn't accept the offer for help; if you had, I wouldn't need to add the cleanup tags.

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Ramniram had insisted on moving the article to mainspace, despite it not being ready from draft. I dream of horses can you make sure your tag concerns have been addressed? AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 14:15, 29 April 2019 (UTC)

I dream of horses and AngusWOOF I have added more references in early life and education section as per you have suggested me. I will be happy to know any more suggestions you have. So, I can improve this page more. Gladly waiting for both of your expert replies. Thank You :) (Ramniram (talk) 02:10, 30 April 2019 (UTC))

Draft: Joe Laresca

This draft is highly self-promotional of both himself and his social media agency. The subject does not meet notability requirements per my understanding. In addition, his sources are primarily articles he wrote and websites he created. I see you originally rejected it - they resubmitted but not much has changed. I would hate to see a page like this created. As an aspiring AFC editor am I missing something? Or do you agree? Any insight would be appreciated.

Drsammyjohnson (talk) 20:26, 29 April 2019 (UTC)drsammyjohnson

Drsammyjohnson, that sounds like a fair assessment. It doesn't appear to be blatant advertising, but if it reads like that, then you could recommend CSD G11. The question is also whether it even has a chance of being notable. Are there any news articles included that would meet WP:GNG. I'd also have him get rid of all the embedded links such as Harvard Business School and change them to links related to Wikipedia such as Harvard Business School. Also the article lacks the references that even connect Laresca to Harvard Business School. AngusWOOF (bark • sniff) 21:16, 29 April 2019 (UTC)