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Assessment for Military History project

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I have assessed this article for the mil hist project and believe it to be a start class article (please note mil hist doesn't use C class, which it would otherwise be). For a successful B class article there needs to be more details on the subject's life. For example more details on early life (birth, parents, education, etc), Also it needs more details of life after military service, i.e. circumstances of death, was he married, did he have children etc. Also every paragraph requires at least one in-line citation (more if multiple contestable assertions are made in a paragraph).

It is a very good start, however, and I feel that it would only need one or two more citations and a bit more information (perhaps add Early life and Later life sections) and it would easily be a B class in my opinion. If you would like more detailed comments, perhaps you could submit the article for peer review. A Military History peer review is available at WP:MHPR. Hope this helps. — AustralianRupert (talk) 06:36, 30 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Update: This article is progressing well, in my opinion. Good job. I think you have the coverage almost right now (do you know how or why he died?), but it needs a couple more citations I feel for a B class rating (one in the first paragraph of the Military career section, and one at the end of the Early life section). Also you use interchangeable terms (World War I and First World War), either one is fine in my opinion, but I think you need to be consistent, so choose one and make them all the same. I think that it is usually accepted that articles about British Commonwealth subjects tend to use First World War. — AustralianRupert (talk) 06:08, 31 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

1899 tour

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A number of the newspaper articles used as citations in the article 1899 British Lions tour to Australia could be helpful to this article. In particular this article (look to the section at the bottom of the article) illuminates some of the difficulty he had getting the tour organized. This whole tour was a big event for him, and could do with expansion into it's own section I think. Just my thoughts from the sidelines.SauliH (talk) 05:08, 6 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]