Talk:Patricia Gruben

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Great article![edit]

There are some small grammatical or wording changes I would make to avoid redundant phrasing, and a couple of clarifications I would add.

Introduction:

1. Is there an actual job title for "being in charge of props"? If so, use that instead. The current phrase makes the job sound unofficial/unprofessional

Biography:

1. Could probably add a link for the University of Texas

2. Did she study film production? Was she in a Film Studies/Theory program? What kind of degree? Did she get a B.F.A.? Then her Master's degree, was that also a University of Texas?

3. Instead of "different fields of the industry" I would say "various fields within the film industry" to clarify that film is the industry you're speaking of.

Career:

1. Instead of "Gruben continued to make another experimental.." I would phrase it "Gruben went on to make..." etc. Makes more sense.

2. International attention meaning praise? Screenings? Renown? Maybe try for a little clarification here.

3. Try to make the info about her work on the film "Spasms" and the film she directed "Low Visibility" two separate sentences. Perhaps say a bit about the reception for Spasms? The blurb about Low visibility should be part of the same sentence, so try "Gruben wrote and directed her first feature film in 1984, Low Visibility, which told the story of a man.. etc."

4. In paragraph 3, instead of "three years later" just say "in 1987." Otherwise it's not super clear what year you're talking about, and the reader has to refer back to two sentences ago.

5. Perhaps move the bit about being an associate prof in Indian cinema to the end of paragraph 3?

6. Paragraph 4, say "in producing" instead of "to produce"

7. Perhaps some reorganizing of paragraph 4 to avoid saying "Daryl Duke" redundantly.

Awards:

1. Make first two sentences one sentence. "Hosted by the non-profit organization Women in Film and television" or something similar.

Again, great job! Really well cited and thorough. — Preceding unsigned comment added by OliveYouToo (talk • contribs) 15:47, 8 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]