Talk:Scott Laughton

Contested deletion

This article should not be speedy deleted as having no substantive content, because it refers to a recently drafted player in the NHL 2012 Draft and will be further filled in the next couple of days --Driverag (talk) 01:45, 23 June 2012 (UTC)

Contested deletion

This article should not be speedy deleted as having no substantive content, because he is the 2012 first round draft pick of the Philadelphia Flyers. Draftwatcher (talk) 01:52, 23 June 2012 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Scott Laughton/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Wikilink junior hockey to the relevant article
  •  Done
• "Following his sophomore season in the OHL," - OHL needs to be spelt out in full and the acroynms in parentheses
  •  Done

Early life

• "to play junior in the Ontario Hockey League (OHL)." - word-to-word of the nj.com that will need a little rewording to pass limited wording
  •  Done
• Wikilink lacrosse
  •  Done

Youth

• The second wikilink for Oakville, Ontario is not needed
  •  Done
• Goals and assists need to be wikilinked on the first mention for non-Ice hockey readers
  •  Done
• "Laughton also skated in two games with the St. Michael's Buzzers of the CCHL." - The full name of the CCML will need to be written out
  •  Done
• "As a result of his minor hockey play," - achievements
  •  Done
• "His play earned him a roster spot on the CHL/NHL Top Prospects Game[12]" - a comma is missing between "Game" and the citation
  •  Done
• Wikilink point to the relevant article on the first mention only
  •  Done

Professional

• "giving the Flyers five more games to decide whether he stays in the NHL or returns to major juniors." - remained in the NHL to returned
  •  Done
• "after failing to stick with the NHL club to start the season." - more formal; remain
  •  Done
• "for Team Canada at the 2013 World Junior Ice Hockey Championships." - Team Canada's U20 team
  •  Done
• "during the week of October 20." - phantomshockey.com source says the week ending October 19
  •  Done
• "and was expected to miss 3–4 weeks" - 3 to 4 weeks
  •  Done
• "the Flyers re-signed Laughton to a two-year, $1.925 million contract worth $962,500 annually." - the salary is not mentioned by the NHL source
  • Replaced ref
• Wikilink penalty killer to the relevant article
  •  Done
• Think the final paragraph can be split into two with the Laughton's activities in the Stanley Cup in its own paragraph
  •  Done
• "Laughton suffered a broken finger at the start of the 2019–20 season" - perhaps mention it was a broken finger on his right hand
  •  Done
• "A few games following his return," - how many games exactly?
  •  Done. Changed to December
• "The team rewarded his efforts by gifting him the 2020 Pelle Lindbergh Memorial Trophy as the team's most improved player." - repetition of "team"
  •  Done
• "When the NHL returned to play," - mention the season was delayed due to the COVID-19 pandemic as stated in The Hockey Writers
  •  Done
• Wikilink Seed to Seed (sports)
  •  Done
• "Laughton helped the team bounce back from a blown lead" - recover from a lost lead
  •  Done
• Wikilink shorthanded to the relevant article
  • Already WL for penalty killer
• Wikilink shutout
  •  Done

References

• Reference 6 is missing the author
  •  Done
• Reference 18 is missing The Canadian Press as the agency
  •  Done
• The hyphens in season in Reference 27 and the score in Reference 48 should be en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
  •  Done
• The author of Reference 38 should be formatted as Friedman, Elliott and the wikilnk be in the authorlink= field
  •  Done
• Reference 46 is missing Associated Press as the agency
  •  Done
• Reference 47 is missing the author
  •  Done
• The first word in the title of Reference 51 should not be all in capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS
  •  Done

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:41, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

MWright96, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:21, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

• @HickoryOughtShirt?4: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:53, 9 October 2020 (UTC)