Template:Did you know nominations/John Jarvis-Smith

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 00:26, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

John Jarvis-Smith

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... that when the British government discovered that John Jarvis-Smith wasn't dead, they gave him a medal? Source: see article
- Reviewed: Catherine Flanagan
- Comment: still expanding the article with more details on the medal

5x expanded by Philafrenzy (talk), Edwardx (talk), and Whispyhistory (talk). Nominated by Philafrenzy (talk) at 22:09, 4 August 2022 (UTC).

Hi Philafrenzy, a nice little article saved from deletion. A few comments:
I don't yet make it a 5x expansion
"on the buses" feels a bit colloquial, can it be rephrased?
"in Operation Infatuate, the British and Canadian amphibious assault on heavily fortified and entrenched German positions on the Dutch island of Walcheren" is a direct copy from the source, could use rewording.
The "when they discovered [he] wasn't dead" part of the hook isn't yet reflected in the article

I see the article is still being worked on, if you give me a ping when you think it's ready I'll pop back to recheck. Thanks - Dumelow (talk) 08:27, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

- @Philafrenzy: status update? theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 19:39, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

Sorry, I forgot. I will do it in the next day or so. Philafrenzy (talk) 19:58, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

@Philafrenzy: Still with us? Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 01:01, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

I have added the full details of how he came to be awarded the medal. It should be OK now. Philafrenzy (talk) 10:30, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Hi Philafrenzy, expansion now sufficient; sourcing looks good (I added the Gazette where he was mentioned in dispatches, but searching for Smiths is always a nightmare and couldn't immediately find his DSC - it's supported by the obituaries though so that's fine); thanks for rephrasing those bits, think what's left is acceptable; QPQ carried out. Looks fine to me - Dumelow (talk) 07:02, 22 August 2022 (UTC)