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I've listed this article for peer review because I know that with the right improvements, this article could become a good one in the future. Remember, any suggestions help!

Thanks, Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 14:45, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by David Fuchs

~~Hello, I'll take a look over at this. Comments forthcoming this week. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 15:17, 29 December 2020 (UTC)~~[reply]

For copyright and promotional reasons, we should restate the premise in Wikipedia's words instead of just having a regurgitated log line.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Likewise, the use of quotations for cast descriptions is excessive.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Prose could use some work throughout.

In the plot, Late at night, a hidden drone is sent into Isla Nublar to record the dinosaurs, while an anonymous person hands over a flash drive to the drone.—Doesn't really seem like a drone has agency where someone could "hand over" a flash drive to it. Rephrase?

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Later on, you say which grows after her phone mysteriously disappears and I'm confused as to whose phone is disappearing, and whether the article is saying the dinosaur magically grew.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

While working, crew members were allowed to watch Jurassic World several times—this reads really strangely, implying that they couldn't watch Jurassic Park films normally.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Likewise, Early on, the cast was forced to rerecord scenes in which they yelled—why are they being "forced"?

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

It's odd to me Glen Powell's role is mentioned in his caption, but no further details are present about casting details and the writing of said characters in the article body itself.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

The Marketing section devolves into "On date X, Y" which is boring and tedious to read. Rephrasing it will make it much more pleasant.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Why does the LA Times review get a whole block quote for his opinions, and everyone else doesn't?

I tried copying the style of other GA-articles, more specifically, the Better Call Saul episode "Uno".

In this case I don't think following that article's lead is the right choice. Pull quotes by their nature convey special consideration on the text. It's not like the LA Times review is particularly novel, and there's no real reason to give them a higher weighting. It feels purely decorative and unnecessary. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 16:05, 6 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

Given the topics covered and number of reviews, I think the section should be reorganized to focus on parts of the production and said parts' reception, versus just listing a bunch of critics and their opinions on everything, one after another.

I think the reception section is already pretty organized. Paragraph 1 (P1) is an overview, P2 is more about styles/designs, voice cast, and reviews on the show's characters, and P3 is centered around the show's general story.

The problem is it doesn't read that way. The second paragraph is just a listing of critic's scores and then pull quotes, instead of summarizing the reception in aggregate. I recommend reading WP:RECEPTION for some pointers.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?}

It seems like it'd make more sense to stick the details about the second season after reception.

Could you elaborate on what you want done?

To me its weird we discuss a second season before we've discussed reception of the first, ergo move the deals about the second season to a section after reception. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 16:05, 6 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

As the second season has just been released, this is no longer necessary. Some Dude From North Carolina^{wanna talk?} 22:29, 22 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

--Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 23:12, 1 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Jurassic World Camp Cretaceous/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Bobamnertiopsis (talk · contribs) 19:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I can take this one! —Collin^{t c} 19:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

1a: Just a few small tweaks:

"In March, a third ten-episode season" I think this phrasing implies that the other two seasons were also ten episodes; consider "a ten-episode third season"

Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

There are a few instances where things are italicized when they don't need to be, namely "Camp Cretaceous" (when referring to the in-universe camp, but not the show) and "Mantah Corp".

Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

In the episode 4 description, "Carnotaurus" should be italicized.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"which is then sent into Isla Nublar to record the dinosaurs," should end in a period.

Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"-ly" adverbs don't need hyphens after them, as in the cases of "recently-built" and "newly-made".

Fixed Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"an "eco-tourist" who" should be "whom" in both instances.

Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Do characters in the show use "it" pronouns for Bumpy?

Yes. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

1b: Lead does not contain info not already mentioned elsewhere in the body. Layout looks good. No words to watch problems. Article treats fiction appropriately and incorporates its character and episode lists appropriately.

2a: No qualms!

2b: Well-cited throughout (thank you for archiving sources!) to a higher-than-GA standard. Spot-checked sources brought forth no issues. What makes DVD-fever, Droid Journal, and Solzy at the Movies reliable sources?

2c: No OR concerns.

2d: Some copyvio flags from Droid Journal especially, although they appear to have copied from Wikipedia and not the other way around based on the date of the article and the text of this page at that time.

3aand 3b: No concerns; article broad in focus and does not delve into detail unnecessarily. The lead might benefit from a mention of the changes in critical reception in season 2 but I won't hold that to the GA review!

4: Neutral treatment, including of reviews.

5: Decently stable.

6a: File:Jurassic World Camp Cretaceous promo.png tagged with appropriate fair use justification. File:Glen Powell (31550284041).jpg CC-BY-SA 2.0 on Commons. File:Jurassic World Fallen Kingdom Japan Premiere Red Carpet Colin Trevorrow (42200702315).jpg CC-BY 2.0 on Commons. File:Steven Spielberg by Gage Skidmore.jpg CC-BY-SA 3.0 on Commons. All good.

6b: Images are appropriate.

All in all, looks pretty good; it's obvious a lot of work has gone into this one already. Happy to put this on hold for a week while concerns are addressed. Thank you! Kindly —Collin^{t c} 20:06, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Bobamnertiopsis: I believe I have addressed all of your suggestions. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:15, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Some Dude From North Carolina! I still have the questions about those three sources in 2b, especially Droid Journal which seemingly lifted a bunch of text verbatim from an early version of this article. 1a changes look good. —Collin^{t c} 23:39, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Bobamnertiopsis: Sorry about not addressing the issue (didn't notice it). Anyway, I have removed the references from DVD-fever and Droid Journal, but have kept the review from Solzy at the Movies because it was included at Rotten Tomatoes. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:55, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's a totally reasonable justification. Thank you for your work on this, I'm happy to pass this one! Have a lovely weekend! —Collin^{t c} 00:09, 21 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Seperate Main Pages for the main characters

Should a page about all of the main characters of the series, including Darius Bowman, Ben Pincus, Yasmina "Yaz" Fadoula, Brooklynn, Kenji Kon, and Sammy Gutierrez be made? given the fact that other Jurassic Park protagonists do have one.

Side note: I would like the page to be called either "Campers of Camp Cretaceous" or "Camp Cretaceous campers" 114.75.148.198 (talk) 09:17, 22 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Genre Review

Hello, everyone.

I've only watched the first three seasons of Jurassic World Camp Cretaceous as of this post. I've been contemplating: six teenage misfits trying to escape the wrath of the wilderness filled with dinosaurs, particularly a specially-created hostile creature; this really rings "survival genre." True, that label may be applied to films, but I've seen at least one series (whose title has escaped me) that carries the genre. Should Camp Cretaceous be classified as "Survival"? Nebulous2357 (talk) 17:03, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

We go by reliable sources. You need to provide a reliable source to add the additional genre. — YoungForever^(talk) 19:53, 30 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]