Talk:Kotaro Uchikoshi

GA nom preperations

@IDV: I think this article is close to GA status. Would you be willing to look through the article to see if any pertinent information is missing? I tried to mention as much as I could with his pre-Zero Escape games, but I don't know much about those games. Also, I thought about making a reception section, and including what reviewers think of his writing style, but few reviewers mention him by name when talking about the writing, especially with his pre-Zero Escape stuff. The writing style section could be expanded (I don't know if the Untold Stories of Japanese Game Developers book has any useful info on that section since I don't own it), but as it stands right now, it's fine. Famous Hobo (talk) 08:15, 3 August 2017 (UTC)

@Famous Hobo: It's been a while since I read Untold Stories, but I'll take a look at the Uchikoshi chapter again and see if there's anything we're missing. As for pre-Zero Escape, there is a bit of development information in the Infinity series articles, some of which might be possible to integrate here - particularly the Ever 17 article, thanks to a recent anniversary interview that I was able to expand the article with (note that there's spoilery information, in case you think you might want to play E17 at some point). Regarding writing style, I recall describing in Steins;Gate: Linear Bounded Phenogram how Uchikoshi did not write his scenario sequentially.--IDV^talk 08:52, 3 August 2017 (UTC)

Okay, so I've found these bits in Untold Stories that aren't covered in the article

• In the chapter about Ryukishi07 (specifically on page 295), Ryukishi07 says this: R7: <looks at Mr Seto’s phone> Wow. I’m looking at the Wikipedia page for Mr Uchikoshi, and I didn’t know his name, but he’s a really prolific writer! Many of his visual novels I’ve played and I greatly appreciate them. I just didn’t recognise the name. - I dunno if this is too vague or insignificant, but yeah, a fellow VN writer commenting on Uchikoshi's work.
• The book introduces Uchikoshi like this (following the chapter about Ryukishi07, which is why he is brought up): Mr Uchikoshi is the mainstream, commercial analogue to Ryukishi07, and represents a fascinating intersection of Japanese and Western perspectives, given that his narrative-focused games are extremely popular outside of Japan, perhaps even more so than within Japan. [...] Given the desire of Japanese developers to appeal to Western audiences, Mr Uchikoshi’s work deserves further examination. - can we use this in some way?
• When asked about how conscious he is of the foreign market when writing Zero Escape: Of course the game is made for a world audience, but if you ask me what’s foremost in front of my eyes, what’s foremost in my mind, it’s actually the Japanese audience, or players. So I think about what’s . . . The lines are designed with a Japanese audience in mind, the funny scenes, the humour, the jokes are all tailored for the Japanese audience. Of course I’m creating for the global market, but it’s kind of tailored for Japan. What’s funny about this, is that despite this effort I make to tailor it to Japan, in Japan it doesn’t sell so well. let’s just say it has a kind of average result. Whereas overseas it seems to be much more appreciated, which is kind of ironic.

Everything else is already covered, or not directly about Uchikoshi (he for instance describes what KID was like, and how Kamaitachi no Yoru Niwango-ban worked)--IDV^talk 08:01, 4 August 2017 (UTC)

Mentioned the third bit from Untold Stories. The bit about how Uchikoshi's games are often strangely more popular in the West than in Japan is interesting, but I'm not sure were we would put that. Famous Hobo (talk) 06:39, 10 August 2017 (UTC)

I think it is a difficult thing to include, because most of Uchikoshi's games have not been released in the West - only Ever 17 and the Zero Escape series, and I feel like the statement really is only about Zero Escape.--IDV^talk 08:28, 10 August 2017 (UTC)

Pre-GAN review

Alexandra IDV: Here's some ideas on how I think the article could be changed prior to a GAN:

Lead

• His writing style often incorporates elements of science fiction with various scientific and philosophical themes, and makes heavy use of plot twists. I think this could be changed to His work often incorporatea both scientific and science fiction elements, as well as philosophical themes. I think a new sentence should be used to discuss the plot twists, otherwise it's just there. Many writers use plot twists to keep their audience entertained, so IMO you need to explain why it's important to include this in the lead.
• Uchikoshi joined Chunsoft in 2007, where he came up with the idea of integrating puzzles → Uchikoshi joined Chunsoft in 2007, where he introduced the idea of integrating puzzles
• the first game in which he served as the director. How about shortening this to: the first game he directed.
• He also worked on a manga and video game adaptation of Punch Line. Seeing as you've mentioned Punch Line in the last sentence, could it be removed here? and wrote his first anime series, Punch Line (2015). He also worked on a manga and video game adaptation.

Early years

• and claims that had his doctor not dangled him upside down and hit his backside, he would have died. Seems to casual. and claims he would have died had his doctor not held him upside down and "hit his backside". Whether you change it to this or not, you'll need to move the Destructoid article to after that sentence because the nearest one to it at the moment doesn't mention it.
• which resulted in the teachers being able to better focus and take care of the smaller group of students who still attended. A bit jumbled.

Career

• Uchikoshi believes that the reason the producer choose him to be a scenario writer was because of his easygoing personality and experience writing design documents. How about Uchikoshi believes he was chosen because of his personality and experience with writing.
• he joined the company in → accepted the offer in
• in Nine Hours, Nine Persons, Nine Doors (2009), in which → [...] for which
• its unexpected critical success in North America prompted Uchikoshi to continue the series. → [...] to revive the series
• effectively ending the Zero Escape series → effectively concluding the series
• but felt that the idea would not be persuasive enough for it to meet the goal. This is very similar to the source. Could you change the wording?
• Spike Chunsoft Up until this point you've called the company Chunsoft. Keep it consistent with one or the other. This also doesn't need to be wikilinked.

Writing style and philosophy

• I made a few of my own changes.
• important lines for a Japanese specific audience. Change to aimed towards Japanese audiences.
• replay through the entire game again. Either replay or again should be removed. replay the entire game or play the entire game again.
• When asked about these themes → When asked about this
• Among his influences include. Either remove "Among" or "include". Among his influences are or His influences include

Finished these points, will take a look at some of the other points later. Famous Hobo (talk) 01:40, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

I'll take a look at the rest tomorrow. Anarchyte (work | talk) 13:14, 8 January 2018 (UTC)

• Thanks, I'll look at this (and start my review of Monaco) tonight.--Alexandra IDV^talk 14:24, 8 January 2018 (UTC)

@Alexandra IDV: Finished looking over it and I've left comments above. Anarchyte (work | talk) 11:22, 9 January 2018 (UTC)

Twenty days later. I'm gonna look at this now.--Alexandra IDV^talk 18:03, 28 January 2018 (UTC)

@Alexandra IDV: Noticed you began working on this again. Just a reminder these comments are here Anarchyte (work | talk) 12:40, 8 July 2018 (UTC)

Yeah, I've had a rough time this year so it's been tough to motivate myself to work as much on WP as I would like to. I do intend to get to this though!!--Alexandra IDV^talk 12:42, 8 July 2018 (UTC)