Talk:Mariano R. Vázquez
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On 8 April 2024, it was proposed that this article be moved from Marià Rodríguez i Vázquez to Mariano R. Vázquez. The result of the discussion was moved. |
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Requested move 8 April 2024
[edit]- The following is a closed discussion of a requested move. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made in a new section on the talk page. Editors desiring to contest the closing decision should consider a move review after discussing it on the closer's talk page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The result of the move request was: moved. Dab created at Mariano Vázquez (closed by non-admin page mover) ❯❯❯ Raydann(Talk) 17:11, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Marià Rodríguez i Vázquez → Mariano R. Vázquez – While looking through my sources on Vázquez, I found that the Catalanised "Marià Rodríguez i Vázquez" doesn't seem to be as common as I'd initially thought when I first translated the article in 2020. Going through my own sources, as well as searches on Google Scholar, it appears that his common name is in Spanish, although what variant of it is the most common isn't so clear. These variants include the use of the full Spanish name "Mariano Rodríguez Vázquez", the version with a contracted patrilineal "Mariano R. Vázquez", the solely matrilineal name "Mariano Vázquez" and the nickname "Marianet".
These are often used interchangeably, so it's difficult to figure out which version to use for the article title. As I'm not sure about us using nicknames for article titles (i.e. we don't call Dolores Ibárruri "La Pasionaria" in the article title), I'll rule out "Marianet". The full Spanish name "Mariano Rodríguez Vázquez" also appears to be less common, which makes sense as Vázquez himself preferred to drop his patrilineal surname. This leaves the contracted "Mariano R. Vázquez" and the matrilineal-only "Mariano Vázquez", which seem to be the ones most used in my own sources.
My instinct is to provisionally propose we move the article to "Mariano R. Vázquez", as it appears to be marginally more common in English sources and as that's how he usually signed his name in documents. It also disambiguates sufficiently from the Argentine footballer Mariano Vázquez. So I wanted to open this up for discussion rather than unilaterally moving, as there are so many options without an obvious choice, I want to seek consensus on the best one. Feel free to comment with which variant you think we should use for the title. Grnrchst (talk) 09:32, 8 April 2024 (UTC)
- Support per nom, although I'd probably create DAB at Mariano Vázquez, and move the footballer to Mariano Vázquez (footballer).--Ortizesp (talk) 12:56, 11 April 2024 (UTC)
- I'd support that too, not sure which if either of them are the primary topic. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:24, 12 April 2024 (UTC)
GA Review
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Nominator: Grnrchst (talk · contribs) 14:21, 3 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 17:33, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
I'll take this on over the next day. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 17:33, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
General comments
[edit]I'll be adding little bits and pieces to this review until it's done, hopefully won't take too long. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 23:27, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
Thankyou for bringing this to GA, you've clearly put a lot of work into it. The following is going to sound a bit hot, but I want this page to be the best it can be. I'm a little over a 1/3 through by my estimation, and there's a lot of things that are not clear. A big part of the reason is that it I have NPOV concerns. I hope by reading the following you can see why. I also think the article could be improved with the surgical, precise addition of background information. The reader is assumed to have a lot of context, i.e. the CNT is never defined. I want to read your responses to my concerns before I continue, as I think you might be able to quell them. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 03:24, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking this on! I hope I'll be able to address your concerns on this. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:12, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Great work on the revisions, particularly over my NPOV concerns, essentially allayed. I'll do a second sweep now.
Prose/contents
[edit]- Idioms:
Come to a head
In the wake of the conflict
Vázquez hit back
- The profession in the infobox is incorrect.
Lede
[edit]getting involved in a debate on anarchist feminism with Lucía Sánchez Saornil that culminated in the establishment of the Mujeres Libres.
I am sure the body will establish this, but could his position be clarified here?- I'm not sure how to summarise the debate's positions without it getting overly long. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- You don't have to. The sentence just throws up a lot of questions; how could the debate culminate in the founding of a feminist org? Was it Vazquez who created it? Was it created in a reaction to criticism of Vazquez? You don't have to summarise the whole debate, just the position he took, or argued against. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Added a bit more detail. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:08, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Perfect. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:54, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Added a bit more detail. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:08, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- You don't have to. The sentence just throws up a lot of questions; how could the debate culminate in the founding of a feminist org? Was it Vazquez who created it? Was it created in a reaction to criticism of Vazquez? You don't have to summarise the whole debate, just the position he took, or argued against. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
movement, which questioned
->movement questioning
?- That doesn't read right to me. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Me neither, I was trying to push the ambiguity. The sentence currently reads that he was criticised for not being loyal enough to the government, because that's what questioning loyalty usually means. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Already changed to "condemned", per comments below. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:06, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Me neither, I was trying to push the ambiguity. The sentence currently reads that he was criticised for not being loyal enough to the government, because that's what questioning loyalty usually means. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
polemical exchange
I have only ever heard one person's speech described as polemic, is there a possible substitute?- Replaced with "heated". --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Negrín and the Communists"
introduce "the Communists"- Introduced as the Communist Party of Spain. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
"duped" by Negrín and the Communists
and it was Negrín and the Communists' fault the war was lost?- Anarchists believed so. Attempted to clarify. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
the Revolution
should revolution be capitalised?- Probably not. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
with Helios Gómez
did these two work together? If not, unnecessary to include Gomez in the lede.- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Early life and activism
[edit]having problems with child abuse
wouldabusing children
be appropriate?- I think "child abuse" works well enough. Any reason I should change it? --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Just if two are equally readable, tiebreaker goes to more concise. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Changed. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:59, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Always up to you though if it's more readable. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:54, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Changed. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:59, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Just if two are equally readable, tiebreaker goes to more concise. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
By the time
When- Changed. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
faced difficulties with poverty
problems from poverty, or poverty was the problem? If it's the latter it's euphemistic.- The former? I thought that was clear. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
took up work
less colloquial- Changed to "found work". --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
as well as the Federación Anarquista Ibérica (FAI)
gloss- Gloss? I don't understand. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- "a translation or explanation of a word or phrase." Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Translated. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- "a translation or explanation of a word or phrase." Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
demonstrating sympathy for the problems anarchist women faced within the movement and recognising that they were effectively "slaves of slaves" so long as they continued to be subject to domination by men
careful with wikivoice- Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
in which everyone would have economic independence and women would thus be liberated from male domination
->
where everyone has economic independence, liberating women from male domination.
even with this more concise version, reword for wikivoice, attributing
- Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
bring an end to
->end
: Watch out for superfluous words
ignited a public debate
imagery- Changed "ignited" to "led to". --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
between him and Lucía Sánchez Saornil over the issue of anarchist feminism
you need to say what her position is, otherwise it seems like she's pro domination by men.- Expanded to include the entire debate. Hopefully this clarifies things a bit better. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:53, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- You can sum this up (He called for anarchist women... separate journal for anarchist women) in like 2/3 sentences. Thankyou for clarification; this changes the entire read of the debate and significantly helps with my concerns over NPOV. Other parts of the article that have this also need to be rewritten. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Ok, I've attempted to trim down the debate somewhat. Let me know if anything you think was important got cut/unimportant left in, and I'll try to tighten it up further. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:06, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- You can sum this up (He called for anarchist women... separate journal for anarchist women) in like 2/3 sentences. Thankyou for clarification; this changes the entire read of the debate and significantly helps with my concerns over NPOV. Other parts of the article that have this also need to be rewritten. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:30, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Rise to the CNT leadership
[edit]who appeared to having accepted the anarchist control over Barcelona.
awkward tenses- Whoops, fixed. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
defending the necessity
->arguing for the necessity
unless it actually was a necessity- Changed. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- sideline: Did they sideline by bringing the Civil Guard in or was this separate?
- It was related. The Catalan government wanted to get back some of the political power it had lost to the CCMA, which it attempted to do by bringing in the civil guard. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Joan Garcia i Oliver
should this beJuan García Oliver
? The topic article is not clear, although seems to lean towards the latter.- Juan García Oliver is the Castilianised version of the Catalan name Joan Garcia i Oliver. I used the latter purely because I'm more used to seeing it in Catalan. I can change if it's necessary. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
by force of arms
I don't know what this means/euphemistic- Attempted to clarify. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez became a leading advocate of anarchist collaboration with the governments of Catalonia and the Spanish Republic.
wordy- Not sure how to make it more concise, to be honest. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
replacing the "bohemian"
I don't feel comfortable with the lack of attribution here.- Replaced with a description of Callejas' approach to editing, which is more relevant to why Vázquez deposed him. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Throughout the war, Vázquez concerned himself with the situation of the Durruti Column, cultivating relations with Mexico, inviting foreign anarcho-syndicalists to Spain and making revolutionary martyrs of those people killed on the front.
concise, encyclopedic tone- Attempted to make it more concise. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
on the republican side
capitalise Republican here?- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez called for each party on the republican side to examine their own responsibility in the defeat
that's all? Was the CNT not involved in Málaga, was he also referring to the CNT, or was he blaming the other parties?- The CNT was involved in Málaga, but the Communist Party was too. He was calling for each party, including the CNT, to take responsibility for the defeat. To quote Vázquez: "we will give one notice, so that the Central Committee may take it into account when they speculate about the fall of Málaga: that Antonio Guerra, delegate of the Communist Party in the Military Command of Málaga, stayed there with the rebels. We want to say that in speaking of the responsibility for the fall of Málaga, we must start by examining that part which each of us has." Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Highlight that he was also turning the blame on the CNT.
confederal militias
what are these?- Militias of the CNT, attempted to clarify. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
He promised that the militarisation would not be an authoritarian implementation
difficulties with NPOV here. The only mention of criticisms is told through the lens of his justifications/defences, told in a factual manner.- Added that Nosotros had opposed the militarisation. I'm not sure how it's NPOV to cover what he said on the matter, but willing to hear suggestions for changing. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- This is better. NPOV from WP:BALANCE, WP:DUE type of things
"tidal wave of confusion"
why was the PCE causing confusion?- Really just the vast and rapid changes to state and military structures brought by them taking power. The cited source doesn't go into much further depth. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
that could better support the war effort
how?- Source doesn't go into much further depth. I can drop this bit if necessary. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
holding particular contempt for the "señoritos" (young bourgeois men) that spent their time relaxing in cafés rather than fighting on the frontline
because they didn't join his military recruitment drives?- The issue went back months before his recruitment drives. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
came under attack
idiom- Replaced with "criticised". --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
and charged him with adapting the newspaper to the strict discipline he saw as necessary.
can you clarify what it means for an editor to enforce "strict discipline"- Basically to not break the party line, not to publish anything that would run counter to military and societal cohesion during the war. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:27, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- I think you can bring that in, not sure of the wording. I can have a think if you are having difficulty. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:54, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- @Rollinginhisgrave: Hey, how's it going? I'm still looking forward to more of your comments from this, if you're still interested in reviewing this further :) --Grnrchst (talk) 08:16, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- Hey, getting back on this now, thanks for the ping. Sorry for the delay, lost some motivation. Give me a few hours. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 08:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- No bother! Thanks for getting back! I'll see to this as soon as possible. --Grnrchst (talk) 13:52, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- Hey, getting back on this now, thanks for the ping. Sorry for the delay, lost some motivation. Give me a few hours. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 08:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- @Rollinginhisgrave: Hey, how's it going? I'm still looking forward to more of your comments from this, if you're still interested in reviewing this further :) --Grnrchst (talk) 08:16, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- I think you can bring that in, not sure of the wording. I can have a think if you are having difficulty. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:54, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Conflict and mediation
[edit]as the latter faction increasingly attacked the former
A small gloss of motivation would help- It was over collectivisation, which the anarchists practised and the communists opposed. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- Inconsistency in capitalisation of communists (sometimes unclear why being referred to as ideology or party)
- De-capitalised. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez believed that the Communists had sought to provoke the anarchists into open conflict
How do we know this?- According to a memorandum written by Vázquez on behalf of the CNT executive committee, on 13 May 1937:
We observe the preparation abroad. From the moment that the first shots were heard, throughout the world the press raised a violent campaign against Catalan anarchism. The propaganda had been so rapid and extensive that it is not possible that it arose from knowledge of the events. One deduces easily that it was prepared... There is an important detail, that demonstrates that there existed a plot in the exterior. The Delegate of the National Committee intercepted in Barcelona a telegram directed by a distinguished member of the Esquerra and a separatist, to France in which it said textually: ‘Estic be, Tot marxa.’ (I’m well. Everything is going ahead.’) That telegram, was sent on
Wednesday at noon when fighting was intensifying in the streets of Barcelona.
--Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Although he saw the affair as a symptom of intra-Marxist conflict between the Stalinists and Trotskiysts, Vázquez publicly protested against the political repression of the POUM.
why although?- Missed some key bit of context, that he didn't think at the time that the repression of the POUM was part of a broader political repression against the Stalinists' political opponents. So that he protested the POUM's repression, despite not thinking he had common cause with them, was significant for him. Added this in. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
He subsequently appealed to the Republican government to stop repressing the POUM.
redundant two lines afterVázquez publicly protested against the political repression of the POUM
- Not exactly? Publicly protesting against something isn't the same as appealing directly to the government. In any case, I've cut the second instance, as it's a bit repetitive. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez appealed personally to President Manuel Azaña, demanding the re-entry of the CNT into government and a reform of the Republican war effort
appealed vs demanded- Replaced "appealed" with "wrote". --Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
may have been at risk
clarify tenses; is it actuallyhe may be
or was this historical at the time of claim- Good catch! I had trouble figuring out the tenses for this when writing. Changed it to "he may be". --Grnrchst (talk) 14:18, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Campaign for reintegration
[edit]even after Negrín's rise to power
redundant- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
who had taken up a personal vendetta against him
The sourcing behind this would have to be very strong to be necessary beyondVázquez was most vocally criticised by the Friends of Durruti Group
- From Casanova:
They [the FoD] were obviously not really concerned with the[ir] programme, but rather with the need to ‘proceed with the greatest energy against those who did not identify with the working class’. This was, in sum, merely the political rhetoric adopted to justify their personal vendettas against their rivals within the anarchist movement. As far as Balius was concerned, there were two names on his hit-list, Mariano R. Vázquez, the secretary of the National Committee of the CNT, and Jacinto Toryho, the editor of Solidaridad Obrera.
--Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- From Casanova:
were attacked by foreign anarchists
a lot less colloquial- Changed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
give them the confidence and support that they needed to win the war
->support them
- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
"instead of helping us and defending us from the attacks made on us abroad by Marxists and reformists... all they know is how to criticise us... [thus] playing into the hands of the enemy, helping its campaign to undermine Spanish anarchism."
sum up, i.e. "he criticised his enemies, saying they were "playing into the hands of the enemy""- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- This is a good example of the NPOV issues (which I know you will be able to address, just pointing them out for elucidation). When I was reading this paragraph, I was impressed that criticism of Vázquez was laid out concretely in "This made him a focus of criticism from other anarchists, who accused Vázquez of "revisionism" and a "betrayal of anarchist principles".". I then read almost 200 words of Vázquez defending himself, primarily through a string of his own quotes.
- This is a very good point. I'll admit I definitely went overboard quoting him and not using summary style here. I've attempted to trim down, while keeping the jist of his remarks. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
decreed the legalisation of
-> legalised- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
financial credit
is this phrase used to distinguish from money?- Aye, it was definitely credit, not money. If I recall correctly, money wasn't often exchanged between official parties on the republican side. Also in much of eastern Aragon, money had been abolished entirely, so credit was more useful than money they wouldn't use. Added a link to clarify. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Servicio de Información Militar
gloss- Clarified as the republic's secret police service. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
continued to support its existence
how can they continue to support its existence if it is just now being established?- Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
in spite of the repression against it
so did he downplay the repression or its effects (i.e. did he make it seem less bad or did he just say despite it the CNT remains strong)- The latter. Full quote:
The growth of the Communist party, the arbitrary acts of the reactionaries, the presence of our militants in Republican jails, etc., might suggest that our movement is declining and deceive some ill-informed observers. But the fact is that the CNT is on a good course, with a growing membership, with renewed combativeness and realism, and absolutely united in its point of view.
--Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- The latter. Full quote:
- Too many quotes from Vázquez. Summarise in prose. The majority of quotes in the article are Vázquez defending himself.
- Trimmed other quotes. Remaining ones are rather short, just for language that needs attribution. Let me know if I can do more on this front. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- I don't think you need to gloss Emma Goldman.
- Ok then, trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
where he asked her to defend the CNT's continued collaboration with the Republican government
reword, awkward. Implies he was challenging her at the meeting.- Good catch, attempted rewrite. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
cultivate indifference
reword to be more clear.- Reworded. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
As the Nationalists began to advance against the Republicans
is began to advance a turn of phrase or were they just advancing?- The nationalist advance didn't really started until 1938, so I'm trying to make it clear that this is when it began. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
with the formation of a pact between the CNT and the UGT on the basis of the CNT's reentry into the government
reword a lot more simply.- Reworded. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez retorted that "we are indifferent to these malcontents... I embrace comrade Rodríguez Vega, the secretary of the UGT, as a symbol of the unity of the Spanish working class."
unnecessary dunk: we get it.- Largely rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
By this time, the Nationalists were already seeing massive advances in their Aragon Offensive
concise- Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
starting to consider
or just considering? Starting to consider implies ambivalence, which seems at odds with believing defeat is inevitable.- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
, believing their defeat to be inevitable
probably redundant if you make the above change.- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
demanded the Republicans continue to resist the Nationalist advance
-> refuse/don't surrender- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
peninsular committee
what is a peninsula committee?- The FAI was a pan-Iberian organisation (i.e. based in both Spain and Portugal), so the peninsula here refers to the Iberian peninsula. It's basically their central committee, so I've reworded it to that. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
was even beginning to consider the possibility of an armistice with the Nationalists
-> considered an armistice- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Prieto refused to resign, which he considered would have been "equivalent to desertion", although he acknowledged that he would continue to occupy his post "without authority and without respect.
probably too much detail; this is a biography of Vázquez after all.- Good catch. Cut. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez again reiterated his calls for representatives of the CNT be brought into the government
so the pact wasn't followed?- The government had more parties in it than just the UGT, the pact was only between the CNT and UGT; at this point, only the UGT was in favour of the CNT rejoining the government. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:00, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Debates on continued collaboration
[edit]but this was rejected by Vázquez
reword, implies Vázquez chose for both.- Dropped mention of the UGT for clarity. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
within the communist-controlled government
redundant- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
But Vázquez praised the formation of the new government
NPOV, why is this a but- Cut the but. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- More long quotes of Vázquez defending himself against one sentence of criticism. This whole paragraph will need rewording to deal with balance issues. Skipping to next para
- Attempted to trim back a bit more. Let me know if I could go further. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- More imbalance in the next paragraph, one sentence of criticism and three sentences filled with quotes of defence. Better with NPOV as he does not get the last word in.
- Cut two of the sentences, in which he was largely talking about things that happened earlier in the war. Kept it to the bits where he's looking forward, I think they're more interesting and less charged anyway. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
In her correspondence with Vázquez, she attempted to appeal for clemency
->She attempted to appeal Vázquez for clemency
- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Goldman's office in London was closed by the CNT-FAI
they were renting her offices while in a war?- The office had been set up by the CNT-FAI as a way of carrying out international outreach, which was hugely important for the Republican war effort. Goldman had been appointed by them as an international representative and revoked her mandate at this point. I didn't want to go too in depth about this, as this is Váquez's biography. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Meanwhile, at this time,
repetition- Whoops! Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:23, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Exile and death
[edit]began to advance
repeated problem of using "began" when issue is ongoing. In this case it appears the advance was concluding.- Replaced with "advanced". --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
to begin evacuating the country
->to evacuate Spain
- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
In the French capital of Paris
You can just say Paris- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
to cross the Atlantic to Mexico
just emigrate- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
and their transfer
->to
- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
International Institute of Social History (IISH)
you don't have to give an acronym if you aren't using it again.- Fair point. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
In his personal analysis of the Republican defeat...
para: Same issues of NPOV- Removed the final quote, which was too fanciful for an encyclopedia. Trimmed responses to Goldman down to the essentials. Let me know how this looks now. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
On the evening of that same birthday, she received another cable from Paris: Vázquez had been found dead in La Ferté-sous-Jouarre, having drowned in the Marne river.
I do like this writing style, it should probably be put in wikivoice rather than attributed. I.e. On that night he was found dead (not that, just outside of the framing device)- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:33, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Legacy
[edit]be treated in history
reword: remembered/understood etc. Same withrecorded in history
- Reworded. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
But to historian Burnett Bolloten
is this representative?- Bolloten is one of the preeminent historians of the Spanish Civil War and Revolution, his opinion is important. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
- I'm sure it is, but to respond to "He hoped to be remembered as a principled anti-fascist" with "but Burnett Bolloten didn't think of him that way" is a non-sequitur unless it can be established that Bolloten is representative in some way. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:59, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
- Ah right, I see what you mean. I've removed the "but" to try and make it less of a non-sequitur. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:05, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
- I'm sure it is, but to respond to "He hoped to be remembered as a principled anti-fascist" with "but Burnett Bolloten didn't think of him that way" is a non-sequitur unless it can be established that Bolloten is representative in some way. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:59, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
Anarchist historian Josep Peirats..
are these criticisms contemporaneous with death?- No, this came from a letter to Joan Llarch, who cited it in his 1985 book Negrín: ¡Resistir es vencer!. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
noting how much
wikivoice, implication of fact.But Bolloten rejected the characterisation
same issues persist. If historians are writing at the time of his death it is unfair for him to be debating with primary sources.- Gómez Casas wrote what we quote here in his History of the FAI, which was published 2002. Neither Peirats nor Gómez Casas are primary sources on the matter, nor is Bolloten debating primary sources. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Vázquez was posthumously accused of
by whom?- Both the cited sources attribute this generally to his opponents, but specifically mention Garcia i Oliver. I thought it was clear as this is mentioned later in the paragraph, but in hindsight, it's not. Attempted to clarify by moving some info. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
stressing his "intellectual limitation", other members of the anarchist leadership
I don't understand- Oh wow, I really butchered this sentence. Rewritten. Should be more clear now. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
In his book El eco de los pasos, Joan Garcia i Oliver accused Vázquez variously of being a Soviet puppet or, stressing his "intellectual limitation", other members of the anarchist leadership.
And these are linked to his Romani identity?- Allegations of untrustworthiness and intellectual limitations definitely align with anti-Romani sentiment. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
it was frequently highlighted and stereotyped by his opponents to discredit him.
can you give me a quote for this?"In the canonical account of Spanish anarchism, which discredited Vázquez in order to blame those who had promoted collaboration with other anti-fascist forces for their defeat, it is significant that many of the terms used to smear him – his ignorance, inconsistency, inability to theorize, corruptibility – can be ultimately traced back to his ‘Gypsiness’. For García-Oliver, Vázquez ‘was not to be trusted’ and ‘there was something unmistakably Gypsy about him’, as a result of which the political changes attributed to the Secretary of the CNT were described as ‘gitanerías’ (gypsy chicanery). Prejudice against ‘Gypsies’ also existed in the labour movement and left-wing ideologies and led to suspicions about the origins of Marianet, who ‘was not known to have any kind of family. Somewhat odd. In Catalonia, anarchists were almost always from well-known families’. [...] Both points are pertinent in the case of Mariano R. Vázquez, who never publicly alluded to his Romani status, but rather arrived at anarchism and campaigned in its organizations strictly as a worker. His effectiveness as the head of the CNT, one of the largest mass anarchist organizations in Europe, contrasts with the negative stereotypes of laziness, ignorance and dishonesty that his opponents used to attack him, launching unjustified criticisms based on prejudice that highlighted that he was a Gitano in order to discredit him.
Sierra and Pro talk more about this in other parts of their article.--Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
In contrast, while Federica Montseny
Gloss her again, distinguish her from a historian- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
with his effectiveness as leader of the CNT
attribute, contested- Attributed. --Grnrchst (talk) 15:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)
Suggestions
[edit]questioned his loyalty
reword to more clear language, ambiguity can be resolved with context but shouldn't have to be.- Changed to "condemned". --Grnrchst (talk) 09:31, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
the construction union of the Confederación Nacional del Trabajo (CNT)
It would be good to introduce what the CNT is here.- Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:31, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
- Because it's coming up a lot, "In order to" can usually just be expressed with "To" [1]. Same with subject then himself
- Trimmed. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:31, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
Second go through.
Lede
[edit]where he first found connection with
he found connection with people (socially/in his heart) or became connected to the movement?
After this, I just performed a copyedit of the lede. I did make quite a few changes, but they are minor changes to aid clarity and concision. The text already met the threshold for clarity and concision, so I am not worried and won't fail based on this. These changes can (and should) be reviewed here.
Sources
[edit]- Ref #10
While Mariano R. Vázquez was not an artist, he too was very aware of the importance of cultivating the cultural territory of the worker: thus, he managed an anarchist newspaper, advocated opening up a platform for women within the movement, paid attention to international propaganda books, and wrote frequently for the workers’ press.
This does not support "He became a leading voice within the anarchist press." NPOV concern.- Good catch. Replaced with "frequent contributor". --Grnrchst (talk) 08:11, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
- Ref #20
- Ref #34
Throughout the war, Vázquez oversaw the militia columns, engaged in diplomacy with Mexico and international volunteers, and publicised the deaths of anarchists fighting on the frontlines.
Being concerned about the "situation of the Durruti Division" can't be extrapolated out to overseeing all militia columns.- This is a relic of the concision change you requested, I've reworked it. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:11, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
- Ref #65 confusing in source whether decree was in June or July, appears to have been June
- Ref #4
- Ref #119
In contrast, while anarchist activist Federica Montseny agreed that the CNT's collaboration with Negrín had led to a "disaster", she also defended Vázquez's position of prolonging the war until the outbreak of World War II as having been vindicated by the pace of history.
Can you give me a quote supporting this? I can't navigate the epub unfortunately.- Aye, here you go:
Federica Montseny, a member of the peninsular committee of the FAI, who claims that the CNT's support of the Negrin government was leading to a "disaster," says in extenuation of Vazquez's position: "Mariano believed that we should prolong our resistance, because he thought that world war would break out and that it would create a favorable situation for us. If he agreed with Negrin and the Communists on this question, it does not mean that he had surrendered himself to them... Even today I ask myself who was right: we or he. If war had broken out at the beginning of 1939 instead of in September, the entire position of Mariano would have been redeemed. But the fact is that the Spanish people at that time could not stand any more and that any solution aimed at saving lives and the interests of the people—at least a minimum of those interests—looked like a collective salvation. How strange! Those days, the FAI, Azaña, and Indalecio Prieto coincided in their views."
--Grnrchst (talk) 09:08, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
- Aye, here you go:
Other criteria
[edit]- Images: appropriately tagged with public domain
- Broad in it's coverage
- Neutral: unless something goes wrong with requested source
- Stable
- No OR/COPYVIO (7.4% earwig)
This was a long review. Thanks for being so diligent and taking the commentary well, I think we can both agree the article is better now than it was at the start of the review, and that this is largely due to your solid reworking of it to meet the criteria. I'll wait until you can confirm with the quote and hit pass. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 08:54, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
- I definitely agree that it is better off for it. Maintaining an NPOV is difficult when writing about controversial figures like Vázquez, so I really appreciate you give me a second set of eyes to get that done. Thanks for all your comments and your very helpful review. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:10, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 23:27, 4 August 2024 (UTC)
Did you know nomination
[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by DimensionalFusion talk 10:20, 20 September 2024 (UTC)
- ... that during the Spanish Civil War, Mariano R. Vázquez oversaw the integration of anarchists into the government of Spain?
- Source: Sierra, María; Pro, Juan (October 2022). "Gypsy Anarchism: Navigating Ethnic and Political Identities". European History Quarterly. 52 (4): 598–599. doi:10.1177/02656914221097011. hdl:10261/280207. ISSN 0265-6914.
- ALT1: ... that Mariano R. Vázquez wanted to prolong the Spanish Civil War, as he believed that the outbreak of World War II would force the Western allies to intervene and help the Spanish Republicans? Source: Bolloten, Burnet (1991). The Spanish Civil War: Revolution and Counterrevolution. University of North Carolina Press. pp. 625–626. ISBN 0-8078-1906-9. LCCN 89-77911.
- ALT2: ... that Mariano R. Vázquez thought the Spanish Revolution of 1936 had been a mistake, as he believed it had frightened off potential Western allies from supporting the Spanish Republicans? Source: Wexler, Alice (1989). "Spain and the World". Emma Goldman in Exile: From the Russian Revolution to the Spanish Civil War. Boston: Beacon Press. pp. 229–230. ISBN 0-8070-7004-1. LCCN 88-43317.
- ALT3: ... that criticisms of Mariano R. Vázquez for his tenure as Secretary General of the CNT were often infused with anti-Romani sentiment? Source: Sierra, María; Pro, Juan (October 2022). "Gypsy Anarchism: Navigating Ethnic and Political Identities". European History Quarterly. 52 (4): 600–602. doi:10.1177/02656914221097011. hdl:10261/280207. ISSN 0265-6914.
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Kaylee Bryson
Grnrchst (talk) 11:40, 11 August 2024 (UTC).
- Article is long enough and promoted to GA one day before DYK nom. Article is presentable, well-sourced and copyvio free. Hooks are interesting and cited (one is inaccessible). QPQ done. Approving on good faith, thank you for your nomination Grnrchst! Kimikel (talk) 03:04, 9 September 2024 (UTC)
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