Talk:Drake Dunsmore

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July 15, 2012	Good article nominee	Listed

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The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that neither Pat nor Drake Dunsmore, father and son National Football League tight ends, played organized American football before high school?

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 05:01, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:01, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this tomorrow, but very first thing I noticed is that the first ref has no newspaper listed; add that in. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:08, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:11, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

"He was a 2006 first team All-Class 5A State selection as a senior.[3] He was a 2006 third team All-State selection.[4]" These two sentences could be combined, which would actually make it more clear than it is now that they're separate.
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:58, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Through the article, add a few "Dunsmore" in the place of "He", as it gets repetitive.
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:23, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The 2005 mention should be moved before the 2006 stuff.
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:58, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"He was the 20th rated tight end in the national high school class of 2007 according to ESPN.[6] He was the 15th rated football player in the 2007 class in the state of Kansas according to Rivals.com.[7]" combining these two sentences would help flow.
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:03, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"He declined his invitation to participate in the August 3, 2007, Kansas Shrine Bowl due to his ongoing rehabilitation.[9]" rehabilitation from?
- Source says: "Lawrence, Smith and Woods all cited early reporting to college camp as their reasons for not playing, while Dunsmore, Murphy, Graves, Ruder and Louisburg's Jeremy Kush all pulled out after coming off injuries. Lawrence, Murphy and Graves were All-Staters for The Capital-Journal last winter."--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:17, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"He was one of two Northwester true freshmen" Northwestern
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:05, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"he had a 10-reception 90-yard effort" comma after reception
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:07, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"He had a four-touchdown 112-yard game" comma after touchdown
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:07, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Northwestern career receiving yards record for tight ends and was one" how many yards?
- Added.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:13, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The Pre-draft section reads overly listy and could use a copyedit.
- I gave it a shot.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:32, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"worth $2.15 Million" million
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:08, 14 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

After the issues are fixed, I would suggest trying to find someone to give this a copyedit, as the prose isn't very good. I'll put the article on hold. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:35, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:29, 15 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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