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The conversions on this page are off. For example, 190cm is 6'2.88" (rounded up to 6'3") not 6'1". Minnoch was 185cm, (6'1"), which is what the centimetre figure should read. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 122.135.134.61 (talk) 19:33, 22 June 2015 (UTC)
Wasn't Austen Powers badguy Fat Bastard hi based on him? User:-The Bold Guy--The Bold Guy- 13:08, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
- Do you have a reliable source for that? -- Satori Son 19:07, 3 October 2007 (UTC)
Stone
[edit]151.151.98.237 (talk) 18:54, 10 November 2008 (UTC) Why clutter the text with measurements in "stones"? Isn't this anachronistic? Are there people who are unfamiliar with both Kg AND Lbs?
- because stone (weight) is not archaic in the UK. Imperial units are not all the same as United States customary units. While people in the UK are familiar with pounds, and use the measure in many contexts, human weight is traditionally measured in stones (apart from newborn babies). Thus saying someone weighed 214 pounds is similar to saying they weigh 3672 ounces; the units are familiar, and with some arithmetic you can understand it, but it is not immediately obvious. jnestorius(talk) 19:07, 10 November 2008 (UTC)
"He weighed approximately 7 lb (3 kg; 1 st) at birth" 7 lb is 1/2 stone not 1. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 80.47.80.7 (talk) 09:48, 13 August 2024 (UTC)
So when did he weighted 628 kg(1400lb)?
[edit]Apart from the introduction, article doesn't mention anything more that 450kg. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Tiredtime (talk • contribs) 08:20, 10 April 2009 (UTC)
- At his admission to the hospital.--Alexmagnus (talk) 12:35, 28 January 2016 (UTC)
Back in the 80's, the Guiness Book of Records used to have his weight recorded as 1800lbs (816kg), and only later changed it to "over 1400lbs" Kusanagi-sama (talk) 17:14, 7 March 2020 (UTC)
Heaviest primate?
[edit]I doubt it. Please provide a source or remove claim —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.229.231.62 (talk) 06:46, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
- Actually, he almost certainly was. It's unlikely that anyone before the age of modern medicine would have survived to approach the kind of weight this man had, so he's probably one of, if not the, heaviest human in history. Gorillas are the heaviest primates on average, and they only weigh around 400 pounds at most in the wild, and up to around 600 pounds in captivity, and the harsh conditions of the wild would have selected against any super-obese gorillas. So Minnoch likely was the heaviest primate. —Lowellian (reply) 07:01, 6 May 2010 (UTC)
Ambiguous statement?
[edit]I have a very, very minor issue with one statement in this article and would really just like to know if someone could help clarify for me the Wiki policy regarding factually correct statements that could be considered somewhat ambiguous.
The statement is: "Transportation for Minnoch was extremely difficult. It took over a dozen firemen and rescue personnel, a specially modified stretcher, and a ferry boat to transport him to University of Washington Medical Center in Seattle."
The addition of the ferry to the list of the dramatic measures needed to transport him to Seattle could suggest to some the ferry was hired specifically for moving him, when in fact it is quite simply how more than 90% travel between the island and the mainland, as the 35 minute ferry ride is the fastest, easiest and cheapest means to do so. The only other option is a near two hour, 95 mile drive around Puget Sound to cross at the Tacoma Narrows Bridge. Thanks for your help! OneHappyHusky (talk) 05:43, 28 May 2014 (UTC)
- I'm surprised the comment was still in the article three years after the above remark. Indeed, there's nothing exceptional about ferry transportation. Perhaps for him they made some sort of special provision, but the statement was unsourced anyway, so I deleted it. —BarrelProof (talk) 00:19, 6 July 2017 (UTC)
Succession box
[edit]The succession box currently has "Heaviest person ever recorded 1941-1983" which seems misleading; he wasn't the heaviest person for all of his life. When did he become the heaviest person? Also, is there any source which indicates that either Francis John Lang (per Nadavzara741's recent edits) or Robert Earl Hughes (as previously shown) was the world's heaviest person up to the time Minnoch became the heaviest? That's not obvious from this article or from List of the heaviest people. Or should we consider doing without a succession box? NebY (talk) 11:16, 31 May 2015 (UTC)
Personal Life
[edit]He was married at age 19 to Rian Nicole Porter of Edmond, Oklahoma. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lexidraperr (talk • contribs) 16:11, 26 September 2018 (UTC)
Editor admitting to inappropriate re-editing after reversion; is protection or banning needed?
[edit]At https://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20190525222440AAdJXQa an editor admits having repeatedly edited the article to say "chubbiest" instead of "heaviest" and to having "edited his cause of death to chubbiness", which isn't even accurate.47.139.45.69 (talk) 22:40, 25 May 2019 (UTC)
BMI at death
[edit]His BMI at death is given as 105.3, neither verified or mentioned by the GBR source. Using the {{BMI}}
template and the parameters {{BMI|cm = 185|lb = 798}} gives 105.8 as his BMI. Should this be replaced?--Auric talk 17:26, 31 May 2019 (UTC)
No longer the largest documented weight loss
[edit]The article describes this as the largest documented weight loss ever, and cites a 2006 Guinness World Record for it. He was surpassed in 2017 by Khalid bin Mohsen Shaari.[1] — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nbeam (talk • contribs) 21:40, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
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Second largest weight loss? No Citation
[edit]The citation for him having the second largest weight loss in history is to the Guinness book of world records page which doesn't show any one else as having a larger one, where did this information come from? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 192.173.176.132 (talk) 19:41, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
Cause of death
[edit]With his underlying condition of edema being incurable and difficult to treat, the decision was made to discontinue treatment...
This statement is unsourced, and is not supported by the current inline references. In fact, this source refers to a diagnosis of edema and congestive heart failure during his first pre-diet hospitalization, not his last, so I've removed it for now. I tried to find a source that gave an exact cause of death or a diagnosis for his final hospital stay, but couldn't find one. Matuko (talk) 22:27, 1 November 2021 (UTC)
Jon brower
[edit]Minnoch 102.141.196.146 (talk) 12:06, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
A mãe do admin é mais gordo
[edit]yes 158.162.208.90 (talk) 13:22, 23 May 2023 (UTC)
GA Review
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Reviewer: Vaticidalprophet (talk · contribs) 14:08, 26 June 2023 (UTC)
This is certainly an interesting premise! Having said that, the article needs a fair amount of work. The first thing that stood out to me was the short length and suspicion of missing elements. To take a rather glaring example: Minnoch has a mugshot pictured, clarifying that he was arrested at 19 for burglary...but no arrests are mentioned in the article! There's evidently quite a bit missing about Minnoch's personal life, with only enough detail to raise further questions (e.g. the lack of clarity around his relationships and children, and complete absence of any mention of his parents/potential siblings/etc). If the sourcing exists for what we have, it should exist for more, even if it may be difficult to find considering it would overwhelmingly be pre-internet and not necessarily digitized. (If there's a mugshot, for instance, there's more about his arrest and why it happened -- some of it might not be usable in a BLP, but this is not a BLP.)
While this is the most significant issue with the article, and some work would need to be done on it before many further comments, there are a few other bullet points I have to note:
- His first wife is mentioned as preferring to go by her middle name. Why does her first name necessarily need mentioning, in this case?
- 'WA' shouldn't be used for 'Washington', as it's ambiguous between many locations.
[S]uggesting a genetic cause for his condition
is far too big a claim to be made by that source -- obesity is complex and multifactorial, including obesity onset in childhood, and the sense in which it's 'genetic' is fairly complicated. Probably we shouldn't speculate on why he was fat at all, except to note the very obvious fact he lost substantial amounts of weight when eating less.80% fat
should be clarified as having a body fat percentage of 80%, to avoid ambiguity. (For...juxtaposition purposes, it also might be good to rearrange this such that his claims about water retention immediately follow this sentence.)- The fair use picture is justifiable, but the current justification used on the file page doesn't work, because multiple public domain photos of him exist and are in the article. However, there aren't free images including his body, so the FUR should be amended to clarify that none of the free images actually show him as 'especially fat' rather than 'guy with double chin'.
I'll be able to make more comments as the article is expanded. Vaticidalprophet 14:08, 26 June 2023 (UTC)
GA Fixes
[edit]- Hi @Vaticidalprophet! Thank you for taking the time to review this article! I am happy to address some of your initial concerns:
- For starters, many aspects of Minnoch's personal life are simply unknown. Believe me--I have searched far and wide for sources. Practically all RS about Minnoch is already cited within in the article.
- Re: mugshots. As stated above, I have searched diligently for a source about Minnoch's arrest back in 1960. But, alas, there is no information about it (minus the mugshot itself). I have searched all possible archives. If need be, we can cite the mugshot itself (or we can simply remove the mugshot photo--but it's a really good photo).
- Re: other personal life stuff. 1) Minnoch had no siblings. 2) I'm not exactly sure what you mean by "the lack of clarity around his relationships". Minnoch was married twice--both marriages are noted in the article. There really isn't any other relevant information to include about his relationships. 3) The article notes Minnoch had 2 children. I might be able to find their names, if you believe that is relevant to include in the article (names added!) 4) I think I am able to include the names of his parents! (names added!)
- Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 21:54, 26 June 2023 (UTC)
- So, what I'm thinking here is: if he was arrested, there are records of the arrest. There are likely news articles, and there are certainly primary sources around his arrest. In a BLP, these wouldn't be usable, but this isn't a BLP. This is something that can be an interesting learning curve for editors going between BLPs and BDPs (in either direction), because the sourcing and due weight requirements can change quite a bit. I definitely respect the issue with finding sources, but I also note everything currently in the article has a link to some kind of free online archive (e.g. Google Books) -- keep in mind a lot of things don't make it there! Similarly, if we know he was an only child, can we source that? I have seen the expansions to add some detail about his parents and children (given the names, it might be worth just saying 'sons'...unless we happen to know he named his daughters John and Jason), and I'm very happy with that. I'm not asking to double the size of the article or anything, I'm just poking a little about some details that are reasonably likely to have some kind of source, even if it's primary or couldn't go in a living person's article with their more specific considerations. Vaticidalprophet 13:11, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
- Addendum: I've been looking through Newspapers.com, which you'll have access to through The Wikipedia Library, and found his mother's obituary with some details on her (career, that she outlived her son, confirmation of grandsons). This also confirms his middle name as his mother's maiden name, which seemed likely to me. Vaticidalprophet 15:33, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
- I've beefed up the personal life section considerably. But i'm still struggling to find a source for the arrest. I did manage to find this one article published a day after Minnoch's arrest about a series of burglaries in the area committed by seven juveniles, two of whom were over the age of 18. But there is no specific mention of Minnoch :( Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 00:28, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
- I'm currently inclined to say we should leave out the mugshot for now, until we can find more sourcing (even primary) about it -- while WP:MUG is BLP, the element of
[b]ecause a police booking photograph can imply that the person depicted was charged with or convicted of a specific crime
is still relevant, so I'd at least like to see some kind of in-text confirmation. Aside from that, I'm happy with the structural changes and will launch into a prose and sourcing review soon. Vaticidalprophet 14:06, 28 June 2023 (UTC)- Agreed! Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 19:37, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
- I'm currently inclined to say we should leave out the mugshot for now, until we can find more sourcing (even primary) about it -- while WP:MUG is BLP, the element of
- So, what I'm thinking here is: if he was arrested, there are records of the arrest. There are likely news articles, and there are certainly primary sources around his arrest. In a BLP, these wouldn't be usable, but this isn't a BLP. This is something that can be an interesting learning curve for editors going between BLPs and BDPs (in either direction), because the sourcing and due weight requirements can change quite a bit. I definitely respect the issue with finding sources, but I also note everything currently in the article has a link to some kind of free online archive (e.g. Google Books) -- keep in mind a lot of things don't make it there! Similarly, if we know he was an only child, can we source that? I have seen the expansions to add some detail about his parents and children (given the names, it might be worth just saying 'sons'...unless we happen to know he named his daughters John and Jason), and I'm very happy with that. I'm not asking to double the size of the article or anything, I'm just poking a little about some details that are reasonably likely to have some kind of source, even if it's primary or couldn't go in a living person's article with their more specific considerations. Vaticidalprophet 13:11, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
GA Fixes
[edit]His first wife...
--Fixed'WA' shouldn't be used for 'Washington'...
--Fixed[S]uggesting a genetic cause for his condition
--Fixed80% fat
--FixedThe fair use picture is justifiable...
--Fixed Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 22:15, 26 June 2023 (UTC)
Further comments
[edit]The article is relatively short, so my comments shouldn't be too much of a wall of text.
Lead:
died of cardiac arrest
This isn't a great wording, given cardiac arrest is, technically, what death is. The formal cause of death in the body is fine, but in the lead this should just be "died in September 1983".- Is the 'honours' in the infobox hardcoded/not changeable? If it's changeable, then probably worth changing it, because it's a sort of awkward descriptor.
Body:
- The first paragraph could do with some restructuring. He was born in Seattle; it's worth giving his place of birth in the first sentence, then discussing the moves. Similarly, his parents should probably be named in the first sentence. Something like
Minnoch was born in 1941 in Seattle, Washington, to John Minnoch, a machinist, and June (née Brower), a nurse and telephone operator
fits the more conventional format for biographies (then revise the rest of the paragraph from there). - It might be less jarring to have a different sentence flow between Minnoch's BF% and his claims of water retention, like
He had a body fat percentage of about 80%, although he said water retention was the primary cause of his obesity
. I don't have access to this source to check (Google Books previews vary by location, which is why it's not ideal to cite them, though this is within author discretion), but I also wonder if it explicitly says this was confirmed (and how), or if it was a speculative estimate. - It also sounds better to say where he attended high school somewhere other than 'right at the end of the paragraph about his weight', though I can't quite place where would be ideal. It might work after his childhood weight, or in the paragraph about his personal life. Not sure.
He fathered two sons, named John and Jason
flows better as just "two sons, John and Jason", but more concerningly, I can't verify this from the cited source. I believe some other sources gave their names, so this might just be a misreferencing?- The 600-calorie diet might use a piped link to Very-low-calorie diet, to contextualize for people who don't necessarily grok calories as a unit of measure that this is insanely low.
Minnoch consented to his wife's pleas to enter a hospital
Is "consented to" the right word here, vs. something more natural like "agreed with" or "listened to"?- Keep an eye out for MOS:LQ -- you have internal rather than external full stops in most quotes.
Minnoch's doctors were unsure how he got so large
is a weird line, and not fully in agreement with the source, which (important detail) asks why rather than how. This line can probably be struck.- I notice that source also says 1400lbs was a low estimate (!), which is worth mentioning.
Minnoch soon started to gain weight again
Probably worth offsetting with something like 'nonetheless' or 'despite this'. You also use his surname quite heavily in this paragraph, which feels kind of like an attempt at 'elegant variation' that doesn't quite work out; it's usually not ambiguous who's being referred to.He was readmitted to the hospital just over a year later in October 1981, after his weight increased to 952 lb (432 kg; 68 st). Minnoch managed to gain 200 lb (91 kg; 14 st) in just seven days.
I think this might work better with a semicolon than a full stop, because while they're naturally separate sentences, they're all on the same note. (Also, see prior note on surname repetition.)According to his death certificate, Minnoch's immediate cause of death was cardiac arrest with respiratory failure and restrictive lung disease/obesity as contributing factors
This is kind of a run-on sentence (should have a comma before the "with respiratory failure etc" clause), and the slash for "restrictive lung disease/obesity" feels awkward. (It might technically be put as something like "respiratory failure and restrictive lung disease, caused by obesity".
The source issues are the biggest ones of these, but not insurmountable ones. The rest are mostly grammatical/prose. Vaticidalprophet 08:35, 29 June 2023 (UTC)
- Thank you for your solid feedback! I'll start working on it momentarily. Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 21:34, 29 June 2023 (UTC)
- @Vaticidalprophet, All fixes implemented. Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 00:18, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
- Dr.Swag Lord, Ph.d, I'm happy to pass the article. I think a footnote on the 'then-largest weight loss' mentioning Khalid bin Mohsen Shaari is reasonable, but it's a relatively minor point, so can be done post-GAN. Thanks for your work on this article -- it's a high-view subject and a tricky one to pull off with sensitivity. Vaticidalprophet 04:37, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks @Vaticidalprophet! It was a pleasure working with you! Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 05:00, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
- Dr.Swag Lord, Ph.d, I'm happy to pass the article. I think a footnote on the 'then-largest weight loss' mentioning Khalid bin Mohsen Shaari is reasonable, but it's a relatively minor point, so can be done post-GAN. Thanks for your work on this article -- it's a high-view subject and a tricky one to pull off with sensitivity. Vaticidalprophet 04:37, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
Lead:
[edit]died of cardiac arrest
--fixed- honors --fixed (removed honors parameter since it appears to be hard coded) Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 21:43, 29 June 2023 (UTC)
Body:
[edit]- First paragraph --revised
He had a body fat percentage of about 80%, although he said water retention was the primary cause of his obesity
--mmmh, this seems a bit SYNTH-y. I replaced the 80% fat source with a slightly better one, which reads: "...was estimated to be over 1,400 pounds, and 80 percent of that was fat."- Put high school in different section
He fathered two sons, named John and Jason
--fixed (the visual editor is a bit glitchy and wouldn't want to insert the correct ref so I switched to source mode)- The 600-calorie diet --linked
- "Consented" --fixed
- MOS:LQ --fixed
Minnoch's doctors were unsure how he got so large
--fixed- 1400lbs was a low estimate -- Are you referring to this source? It says that Schwartz said "He was probably more than that". I included that in the article.
Minnoch soon started to gain weight again
--fixedHe was readmitted to the hospital just over a year later in October 1981, after his weight increased to 952 lb (432 kg; 68 st). Minnoch managed to gain 200 lb (91 kg; 14 st) in just seven days.
--fixedAccording to his death certificate, Minnoch's immediate cause of death was cardiac arrest with respiratory failure and restrictive lung disease/obesity as contributing factors
--re-wrote Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 00:03, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
Misspelled word
[edit]Just to let someone know, the word “grandfather” in Personal Life is misspelled without the “f”! Sincerely, Someone who got bored and decided on a whim to look up “heaviest person ever” on Google. 162.217.189.6 (talk) 06:52, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
- Fixed, thank you! Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 09:18, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
Did you know nomination
[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 07:55, 16 July 2023 (UTC)
- ... that Jon Brower Minnoch weighed twelve times his 110-pound wife? Source: pg.288
- ALT1: ... that it took thirteen hospital attendants to roll over Jon Brower Minnoch? Source: pg. 312
- ALT2: ... that Jon Brower Minnoch reached a peak body mass index of 186 kg/m2? Source: pg. 141
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Ben Collins (reporter)
- Comment: The article was on WP:OTD, but at the bottom, so it should still qualify for DYK.
Improved to Good Article status by Dr.Swag Lord, Ph.d (talk). Self-nominated at 09:48, 30 June 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Jon Brower Minnoch; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
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QPQ: - Not done
Overall: @Dr.Swag Lord, Ph.d: Good article. Needs QPQ. Onegreatjoke (talk) 21:16, 30 June 2023 (UTC)
- Onegreatjoke, QPQ done!.Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 22:33, 1 July 2023 (UTC)
Approve. Onegreatjoke (talk) 01:03, 5 July 2023 (UTC)
He gained 200 Ibs in 7 days?
[edit]It would likely be humanly implausible to gain that much weight over the course of a week. It takes 3500 calories to gain a single pound; 200 pounds would be 700,000 calories. That's approximately eating 30 large pizzas a day. I'm not sure a newspaper blurb supports that. PrimordialChowder (talk) 03:22, 27 November 2023 (UTC)
- Well, you have to remember that a good portion of that weight gain was likely due to his edema. Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 21:29, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
Water taxi or taxi cab?
[edit]The entry describes Minnoch as "driving a water taxi", but the article that claim cites describes him as owning or driving a taxi *cab*, as do several other of the articles. I live on Bainbridge Island so I could look into this easily at our local history museum. tobych (talk) 03:03, 3 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Tobych I’m fairly certain when sources say “taxi cab” they are referring to water taxis (given that he transported people to and from the island). Cool, that would be great! If you find some good sources on him, could you please email me? Also, let me know if you can find some additional photos! Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 08:27, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
Semi-protected edit request on 20 May 2024
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