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Thank you for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:20, 27 August 2016 (UTC)
I don't think you need "substantial".
"It was the family seat of the Bankes family, who had previously resided nearby at Corfe Castle until its destruction in the English Civil War after its incumbent owners, Sir John Bankes and Dame Mary, remained loyal to Charles I." -a bit of a mouthful, the "after" part doesn't flow well, perhaps split/copyedit a bit.
"The gardens and parkland were laid down at the same time" -by Pratt too?
"By the 16th century the house was in ruins. In 1603 King James I gave the lands to Sir Charles Blount, whose son in 1636 sold the estate to Sir John Bankes, who had been appointed attorney general to King Charles I in 1634." -"whose" and "who" makes it jar a little. I'd split it a bit/copyedit
"Although deprived of their castle, the Bankes family still owned some 8,000 acres (3,200 ha) of the surrounding Dorset countryside and coastline, and the local villagers used the handy supply of stone to rebuild their own residences." -the latter part of the sentence is unrelated so should probably be split.
I would reorganize the sections, Make background history, merge in History further down and then change "The House" to "Architecture"
"Like that house, the hall is two storeys high, but in this case, the great stair has been moved out of the main hall and is no longer at the centre of the house." -need sa copyedit, try something like " Like that house, the hall is two storeys high, though its great stair as been removed from the main hall in the centre of the house"
"Pratt's original plans have been lost, but he did leave extensive notes on his thinking, and his design is clear." -rep of "he and "his" -
"Sited centrally within the 164 hectares (410 acres) grounds, externally the new house was provided with 5 hectares (12 acres) of formal gardens and pleasure grounds, some of which were enclosed by walls, while a series of formal avenues radiated throughout the surrounding 159 hectares (390 acres) of park lands." - a bit of a mouthful, can you rephrase?
"Bankes often entertained his friends William Pitt the Younger and the Arthur Wellesley, 1st Duke of Wellington at the house.
His son, "
Change His to Bankes's as he wasn't the last person mentioned above it
"which was now to be formally known" -awkward tense
"The formal gardens and pleasure grounds are situated close to the house, with an area of informal pleasure grounds" -rep of "pleasure grounds"
Could/should the two red character date stamps, on two of the images in the gallery, be removed somehow? Martinevans123 (talk) 18:27, 10 September 2016 (UTC)
I agree they are a bit unsightly but am unsure how to go about removing them. There may be other images we could substitute for them. Feel free to do what you like. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:00, 10 September 2016 (UTC)
As images go, I think they're pretty good. I'm sure a few minutes with PaintShop Pro would render something more acceptable. Martinevans123 (talk) 19:44, 10 September 2016 (UTC)
I found there is a backlog at the Photography Workshop and plenty of alternative images at Commons so I have substituted two images in the gallery. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:40, 11 September 2016 (UTC)
That's probably for the best then. I only mentioned it because I requested a date stamp removed from one of my images and found it to be most satisfactory.--Ykraps (talk) 09:55, 11 September 2016 (UTC)
Lol. I won't bother doing a quick and dirty clean up with Paint then! But those images are probably better. Martinevans123 (talk) 16:24, 11 September 2016 (UTC)