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Contested deletion

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This article should not be speedily deleted for lack of asserted importance because... (your reason here) --K3vinbarker1 (talk) 23:40, 15 December 2014 (UTC) All information is true.[reply]

Read this. Origamite 23:49, 15 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Kyle Dubas/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 14:17, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


I'll pick this one up, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 14:17, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

Lead

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  • I'd link General manager here and in the infobox. It's not a widely used term outside the U.S.
  • Link agent to Sports agent.
  • "eventually ending up as their general manager", ending up is a little informal. Being appointed, perhaps?
  • "behind Arizona Coyotes general manager John Chayka", probably don't need to repeat GM here.

Early life and education

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  • "His father was a Greyhounds intern", is this the same Greyhounds team mentioned later in the sentence? If so, the link should be moved here.

Player agent

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  • Link agent again for the first main text mention here.

Junior hockey

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  • Add an abbreviation in brackets (GM) after the first use of general manager so that the term is explained for future use.
  • "In this position, he hired Sheldon Keefe as head coach", the last position mentioned before this is as a dressing room attendant. Perhaps start with "As general manager..." to avoid confusion.

National Hockey League

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  • "introduced blinded reviews", what are these?
  • "in terms of what where your organization can go", I think it's safe to assume the what is a typo. There are refs which don't include it [1] [2]
  • "During the 2018–2019 season" > 2018-19?

Personal life

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  • As this is a new section, I'd start with Dubas rather than "His".

References

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  • Refs 3 and 8 are formatted manually rather than using a ref template. There's not much technically wrong with this but it's displaying the authors incorrectly. They both need an accessdate date as well.
  • Avoid shouting in ref titles like in ref 7, per WP:ALLCAPS.

Nothing major to worry about, a nice article overall. A few minor points to look at, placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 19:31, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Response

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Thanks so much for the review. I had no issues making most of these changes, and they were mostly straightforward. In the National Hockey League section - I expanded the "blinded reviews" section - please check if that is understandable, and then for the third bullet point in this section of your review - I am not sure I understand what you mean? Happy to make adjustments, just not sure what!

For refs 3 and 8, the links were redirects to the newspapers main page, so I replaced them both. Please let me know if there is anything else I missed! Canada Hky (talk) 18:12, 3 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies, I should have explained that third point more. I think the norm for mentioning seasons would be for the four-two digit format (2018–19), like you use just before this, rather than full years (2018–2019). Kosack (talk) 18:18, 3 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ahh, yes - that makes sense, and I fixed it. Thanks for the clarification! Canada Hky (talk) 19:17, 3 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No worries, I think that's it from me. I'm happy this covers all the bases required of a GA class article. Happy to promote. Kosack (talk) 19:32, 4 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]