Talk:Paparazzi (Girls' Generation song)

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• From Mr. Taxi / Run Devil Run: "Gaon Album Chart — May 2011 Chart". Gaon (in Korean). Retrieved June 30, 2011.
• From Girls' Generation discography: "Gaon Chart" (in Korean). Gaon Chart. Retrieved May 28, 2013.
• From The Boys (Girls' Generation album): "Gaon Chart". Gaonchart.co.kr. Retrieved 2012-02-18.

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 14:34, 15 May 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I'm Cartoon network freak and here's my review for this article:

Lead

• "Paparazzi" is a Japanese song recorded by South Korean girl group Girls' Generation for their second Japanese studio album, Girls & Peace (2012). -> "Paparazzi" is a song recorded in Japanese language by South Korean girl group Girls' Generation for their sophomore studio album, Girls & Peace (2012).

•  Not done — Changed the first clause, but is "sophomore" really makes the article better? I mean, this is only GA, so the term "second studio album" is acceptable

• Unlink lead single

•  Done

• Miles Walker, "Paparazzi" was described as an electropop and R&B song. -> Miles Walker, the track was named an electropop and R&B recording.

•  Not done — "described" is acceptable

• and Hey! Hey! Hey! Music Champ. A music video for the song directed by Toshiyuki Suzuki premiered on June 10, 2012. -> and Hey! Hey! Hey! Music Champ, while a music video directed by Toshiyuki Suzuki premiered on June 10, 2012 in order to accompany the release of "Paparazzi".
• previous Japanese single "Mr. Taxi" in 2011.-> previous Japanese-language single, "Mr. Taxi" (2011).

•  Done

• It was -> The track was

•  Done — But I still don't get why "It" is not suitable

• The single was -> Furthermore, the single was

•  Not done — The two sentences do not have any link with each other

• Japan, peaking -> Japan, with it peaking

•  Not done — could you explain more why "peaking" only is not suitable? I don't get it

• two on the -> two on both the

•  Done

• It received certifications from the Recording Industry Association of Japan on two bases–physical sales (gold) and digital download (gold). -> "Paparazzi" was certified Gold in Japan for the sales of the single's digital and physical release, respectively.

•  Done — Simon (talk) 10:51, 16 May 2016 (UTC)

Recording and release

• "Paparazzi" is a Japanese song described as a hybrid of electropop and R&B. -> "Paparazzi" is a song recorded in Japanese language, which was described as a hybrid of electropop and R&B.

•  Done

• Unlink "Japanese language"

•  Done

• Becker, and produced by American producer Miles Walker. -> Becker, while production was handled by American producer Miles Walker

•  Done

• The song was released -> The track was released (you've already used "song" before)

•  Done

• If you say "Japanese song", it sounds like the recording has an identity; change it to "Japanese language"

•  Done

• studio album Girls & Peace -> studio album, Girls & Peace (2012)

•  Done

• "Paparazzi" was also released in Hong Kong, Taiwan, and South Korea in mid-2012 -> The release of "Paparazzi" as well reached Hong Kong...

•  Done

Promotion

• the group dressed -> the group was dressed

• Y Changed to "wore"

• connect the two paragraphs

•  Done

• The music video -> An accompanying music video

•  Done Yet I still think "accompanying" is superfluous

• performing the choreography -> performing a choreography

•  Done

• Girls' Generation. The show begins -> Girls' Generation, with the show beginning

•  Not done I used semicolon instead

• They dance in-> Subsequently, the band dance sporting

•  Not done "Subsequently"? It doesn't fit here

• outfits–the -> outfits – the

•  Done

• Remove "the" in both cases for the outfits

•  Done

• routines as -> routines for their

•  Done

Reception

• Unlink music critics here and in the lead; do the same with certified gold in the lead

•  Not done I don't know why they should be unlinked

• Hadfield writing for the Tokyo edition of Time Out compared -> Hadfield, writing for the Tokyo edition of Time Out, compared

•  Done

• previous Japanese single -> the same as above

•  Done

• single "Mr. Taxi" (2011) and -> single, "Mr. Taxi" (2011), and

•  Not done I did change the sentence but not as above

• the 2011 single -> the latter single

•  Done

• Connect all three paragraphs

•  Not done Why? Three different ideas are presented and there is no connection between them

• was a commercial -> remained a commercial

•  Not done What's wrong with "was"?

• Japan. It debuted -> Japan, debuting

•  Done

• Oricon Singles Chart on the chart issue dated -> Oricon Singles Chart issued for

•  Not done The current wording is fine for me

• physical copies of 2012 on the Oricon chart, selling selling 136,181 copies. -> physical release of 2012 on the Oricon chart, with it bringing total sales of 136,181 shipments

•  Done

• rose to the -> rose up to the

•  Done

• It ranked [...] on the year-end chart of 2012.-> "Paparazzi" ranked at [...] on that chart's year-end chart of 2012.; you've already used "it" before

•  Done

• It also charted -> The track as well charted

•  Done

• number five -> at number five

•  Not done the preposition "at" was already included beforehand

• on the -> remove "the"

•  Not done similar to "the Billboard Hot 100", "the Billboard Japan Hot 100" etc.

• and number two -> and at number two

•  Not done As above

• sold 103,000 -> sold a total of 103,000

•  Not done Superfluous. — Simon (talk) 13:33, 17 May 2016 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

• Credits adapted from "Paparazzi" CD liner notes -> Credits adapted from the CD issue's liner notes

Charts

• U.S. -> US

•  Done

Release history

• Unlink digital download, CD & DVD; its overfous
• The catalog number section is not really needed and remains, as well, overflous

•  Done — Simon (talk)

• @HĐ: Outcome: On-hold for 7 days. Good luck! -Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:44, 16 May 2016 (UTC)

• Thank you so much for the review. Though some points to me are quite superfluous, the review is very appreciated. Best regards, — Simon (talk) 13:36, 17 May 2016 (UTC)

@HĐ: Passing the article! Congratulations... Cartoon network freak (talk) 14:56, 17 May 2016 (UTC)

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