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Requests for Feedback

This page provides comments and constructive criticism about articles that you have drafted, created, or substantially changed. This is not a general help page. To seek assistance or ask a question, see Wikipedia:Questions. If you are seeking an outside opinion about a dispute, please follow the steps in Wikipedia:Dispute resolution. Please note that this page is patrolled by volunteer editors just like you and it may take several days to review your request.

Before you request feedback

There are certain things which come up again and again so it may help if you deal with them before requesting feedback: Does your article have reliable sources? These are important in terms of both verifiability and notability. Do you have a conflict of interest that may harm your ability to produce a neutral article? If you would like a beginner's guide to these sorts of issues, take a look at the article wizard. If you are unsure about how to edit Wikipedia articles, take a look at this tutorial. For a more general discussion of writing your first article, see "Your first article".

How to post a request

Place a Wikilink, with the title of the page inside [[ and ]] - for example, [[User:Example/Lipsum]] or [[Cats]] - in the box below. Click Click To Add Request In the new article, Write a brief summary of your work or what in particular you need help with, but do not post the whole article here. If you have rewritten an existing article, you may wish to provide a diff link from that article's history that shows your changes. Check regularly for responses to your request; they will most often be made here. ↓ Post your request using the box below. Replace "Untitled" with a wikilink to your article - e.g. [[User:Example/Lipsum]] or [[Cats]] ↓

After Receiving Feedback

Check back here often, as you will receive a response here. Respond to the feedback, either with a simple thank you, to ask for help with anything mentioned, or, after you've made some of the improvements, what they think of them. Consider helping out here in the future - anyone can read up on what articles should be like and provide constructive criticism.

Are you providing feedback?

Please consider notifying the user whose article you are providing feedback for by placing a message on their talk page, so they will be able to read it in a timely manner and reply if necessary. You can use.. {{Feedbackreply-sm}} A template asking the user to check back here and consider responding {{Feedbackreply-alt}} A more personal version of the first offering your help with developing, moving to mainspace, etc.

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Index of all requests for feedback

Chandra Om

Hello,

This is the first page i have created, subject is Chandra Om User:Premandom/Chandra_om, a well-known teacher in Yoga circles. i am intersted if you think it needs any work, and what type before i try to post it for everyone to see. Thanks very much.

Premandom (talk) 23:30, 21 November 2009 (UTC)

Good job on the article not being promotional, but aren't you in violation of the conflict of interests rules? Xcviii (talk) 01:16, 4 December 2009 (UTC)

Premandom - thank you for your time and the feedback Xcviii. i am not sure what you mean about the conflict of interest. Is it because my username has a 'om' in it? 'Prem and Om' is how i sign some of my emails. It means Love and God and i thought it was a nice username. Sorry for the confusion. Should i try to post it under a less confusing looking username? Or do you have any other suggestions? Premandom (talk) 13:48, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Your user name is fine. However I disagree with Xcviii about the draft article. It does read as promotional to me, more like a press release than an encyclopedic article. Phrases such as "dedicated her life to selfless service", "initiated by Sri Dharma Mittra into his spiritual lineage", "dedicating her life to the service of others" are not encyclopedic. – ukexpat (talk) 16:40, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

Premandom - thank you for the feedback. I am not sure how to edit it to make it more understandable. In the Yogic tradition, spiritual initiation and selfless service (Karma Yoga) are commonly understood phrases and ideas, though in western culture they are not. I looked at wiki pages on other Yogis, ie, Swami Sivananda, Dharma Mittra and Swami Sivanda Radha to see what language had previously been acceptable and this language is common to them as well. Do you have any specific suggestions on how it can be more encyclopedic? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Premandom (talk • contribs) 16:59, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

3CX Phone System

I have updated this page based on the feedback received User:Voipguy/3CX_Phone_System and would welcome further feedback Voipguy (talk) 13:52, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

Please review new page Satan's Pilgrims

The new page about the instrumental surf band, Satan's Pilgrims,can be found at User:Crowdesign/Satan's Pilgrims.

```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Crowdesign (talk • contribs) 03:36, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Your footnotes need tighetening up, but before working on that, make sure you can establish Notability. That link is general, for more specific advice, see WP:MUSIC.--SPhilbrickT 16:57, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Frank B. Wynn

I have just started a new article User:Davidclydewalters/Frank B. Wynn I have much more information on Dr. Wynn and his considerable contribution to medical history and the conservation movement in the United States. I have just completed a Doctoral dissertation on leadership and the biography of Dr. Wynn at the University of Montana. The article is not complete. I have only started it to learn how to contribute. I am requesting feedback only so that the article is properly constructed and will not be deleted. I will continue to work on it. Thank you for creating and maintaining this valuable information resource. I have already made a donation and expect to do so again in the future. --Davidclydewalters (talk) 05:39, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Safety_Fuse

I am writing this article for a history class I am taking at the University of Maryland. I was wondering if anyone could provide me with constructive criticism on how I can improve this article. Any feedback would be appreciated! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Smodarre (talk • contribs) 05:52, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Your opening sentence assumes the reader knows what a safety fuse is. Start with an introduction, directed at people who might not be familiar with the object.

Please review Article Layout for some suggestions for improvement.

Your current structure is a single long section. Think about how to break it into two or three relevant sections.

Unfortunately, I have to suggest that you read Fuse (explosives). At first glance, I see a lot of overlap, so you'll have to figure out if your exposition can be distinguished from the existing article.--SPhilbrickT 16:39, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Institute of Land Administration

Requesting feedback. Institute of Land Administration Smwiti (talk) 10:41, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

You've jumped too quickly into details without a proper introduction.

For example, you mention it is in East Africa, but you don't mention the country.

One might guess it is a college or university, but those guesses would be wrong.

Start by telling us what is it, and where it is. With whom is it affiliated? When was it created?

The sentence starting "possible employers" and the sentence closing "this is an education for you" are not appropriate.

You need to establish Notability with references to reliable sources

If you can address these issues, then look at footnotes for suggestions on how to properly include references.--SPhilbrickT 17:10, 6 December 2009 (UTC)

Dynamic Language 2

user:Rick206/Dynamic Language This article is about a communications company I heard about located in Washington State. It is in a subpage. I would like to add a picture as well if this possible after the move is allowed. Thank you for reviews and remarks. Much appreciated. Rick206 (talk) 19:13, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

As before, you still need to provide more third party, secondary sources that support claims of notability. The tone is also a little spammy so that will need some work. Also take a look at WP:FAQO. – ukexpat (talk) 19:35, 7 December 2009 (UTC)

Is it possible to request another review to see if the above issues have been resolved or are making progressive steps toward a mainspace article? Thank you!

Rick206 (talk) 19:53, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

The added sources do not add a lot of the mentioned necessary press coverage in WP:CORP. Please add more information of third party, secondary sources if possible to document notability. The revenue alone is not reason for notability alone, although this could be argued. Furthermore, there could be the question of WP:COI with your username. Are you related to the company? --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 01:50, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback. I am aware of the COI rules. It is truly a coincidence. My only relation to the company is that I have used their services. I have never personally dealt with their higher management and thus never knew the gentleman's name was Rick until beginning this article. But I see the cause for COI. How do I go about resolving that situation to not conflict with COI?

Also, if you wouldn't mind clarifying, as article writing is new to me: "The revenue alone is not a reason for notability?" Would revenue mean the location of the sources? The sources I found are all articles about the company or founders. Is it not possible to use that as notability? Thank you for your help. Much appreciated! Rick206 (talk) 17:06, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

You do not have to do anything about the coincidence of your username with the the VP of the company. I just wanted to make sure. For revenue, I referred to the values on the linked page on inc.com. However, I cannot access this page anymore at the moment. I just wanted to note that independent third party, secondary sources are desired that explain the importance. The fact that a company is listed with a profile even with a certain revenue may not be enough to render it notable. Could you please check the currently broken link? Thanks, --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 22:59, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

The Chain Gang of 1974

The Chain Gang of 1974

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LCLproject/The_Chain_Gang_of_1974

I'm new to wiki and any help would be greatly appreciated.

LCLproject (talk) 06:55, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Acrompton/multifaith spaces

Posting request based on Acrompton (talk · contribs · deleted contribs · logs · filter log · block user · block log) pasting article text into this page. – ukexpat (talk) 14:37, 8 December 2009 (UTC)

Obie One B.A.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nemo05/obieoneba (Nemo05 (talk) 01:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)).

Canadian Crossroads International

Canadian Crossroads International Cbentl2 (talk) 17:30, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

You have no reliable sources demonstrating Notability. --SPhilbrickT 17:58, 10 December 2009 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Carmen2u/Lee_Aase

This is an article I have written regarding a notable figure in the world of social media in healthcare, Lee Aase. I have compiled an extensive list of references, external links, and other supplementary information. With able guidance from PhantomSteve (a Wiki contributor and advisor), I have fortified each of the sections I created and am now seeking broader review to ensure that this page will be ready for formal submission to the active site. I welcome your constructive criticism. As a first-time article writer for Wikipedia, I have been warmed by the good counsel I have obtained so far and look forward to your input. Thanks. Carmen Gonzalez, also known as Carmen2u (talk) 04:26, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Despite the list of potential sources, external links, and interviews, I'm not sure if you have established notability. One to two lines in reputable sources (ie Forbes and Good Morning America) are not enough to create an article. Articles cannot rely predominately on primary (the subject's) sources or blogs. You might want to consider creating an article on social networking in medicine since it appears to be the subject receiving the significant coverage in the reliable sources. That being said, you have made some steps towards this biography. If you choose to continue with it:

• Remove the interviews and reduce the external links sections. It appears that you were attempting to assert notability but it does not improve the encyclopedic value of the article. WP:ELNO for the external links.
• A good PR run (which appears to be what some of the coverage is based off of) will make a PR article. Limit and watch the wording of coverage solicited by the subject.
• Remove all blogs. These are not references. A mention of the subjects blogs can get some room but I would recommend making sure sources discuss it or other editors will assume it is promotional (just the way it works on Wikipeida). Blogs should not be used as sources. None of them appear to be by reputable sources joining in new media but utilyzing full editorial control so they do not meet the requirements in the guidelines. See Wikipedia:Reliable sources#Self-published and questionable sources
• Reformat all of the references. I recommend cutting out all of the inappropriate ones before taking this step
• The lead does not need a section header . WP:LAYOUT
• "evangelist" seems a little fluffy. "Proponent" or something similar would be less pretty but more encyclopedic.
• The Speaking engagements subsection needs sources independent of the subject that are not blogs for lines such as "Aase is a highly regarded figure in the social media arena..."

• Your "sources" have verified that the subject spoke at conferences (such as the one in Vegas) but without appropriate sources throughout the article already truly verifying notability, it reads like a resume.

Cptnono (talk) 05:22, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Ayodele Awojobi

I have recently written the article, Ayodele Awojobi, and would need valuable feed-back.

The article, I believe, speaks about the life and achievements of what I believe to be a remarkable Nigerian academic; a pioneer in Mechanical Engineering research, out of Africa.

Feed-back would be highly appreciated.

Thanks.

Krrush 10:00, 11 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Krrush (talk • contribs)

I have reviewed about half the article and cleaned it up quite a bit -- the language is way too "flowery", repetitious, and full of hyperbole, and has to be toned down to make it more encyclopedic. Please take a look at WP:MOSBIO for guidance. I will continue to review and tone down. – ukexpat (talk) 17:19, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

Legion Airs

Legion Airs is a published collection of music that may be of interest to WWI and WWII historians, Choral groups, or others looking for public domain materials.

user:Paskperfect/Legion Airs

I am giving the publisher's address (directly from the published work) as the reference. Is this acceptable?

Paskperfect (talk) 18:18, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

The key problem here is notability - please read WP:MUSIC, and I guess WP:NB, for appropriate guidelines. – ukexpat (talk) 19:00, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Trunks_cscs/Anthology_of_Anvil

I was reading the Wiki page on the band Anvil and noticed that the link for Anthology was to an unwritten article, so I decided to put something together User:Trunks_cscs/Anthology_of_Anvil. —Preceding undated comment added 18:50, 12 December 2009 (UTC).

The album does not appear to meet the notability guidelines set out at WP:NALBUMS and the tone is not encyclopedic - "One of the nice things about this disc..."; "Excellent career retrospective of one of heavy metal's most respected underground bands" etc. – ukexpat (talk) 16:40, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Good Data Practices Related to Government Data

This article consolidates technical information related to good and best data practices used by governments when publishing on the Internet.

Joe Carmel —Preceding unsigned comment added by Joe carmel (talk • contribs) 16:36, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

That's not an encyclopedia article, it's a chapter reading for a data management course; it violates our prohibition on synthesis and original research. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:24, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

I can see where using the phrase "Good" or "Recommended" might be construed to mean that the article is advancing a position. I'll clean up the language. There's already been some pro and con language too. Thanks.

Joe Carmel (talk) 00:23, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Material ConneXion

Hello, I am requesting feedback on this page. The company is one of the few existing resources on innovative materials. Your insight is appreciated! Thanks. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kylewooley (talk • contribs) 17:51, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

Gene expression profiling in cancer

Hello. This is the first article--Gene expression profiling in cancer--I have written and any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks! Ahwang1 (talk) 23:54, 13 December 2009 (UTC)

Great first article, well done. A few remarks: On the first hand, the article is repeating a lot of information that can be found already in other articles. In this respect, I was wondering whether this profiling could not just be a section in the main article Gene expression profiling with a few references on clinical applications, which is the major important point of the new article. However, the topic cancer is very important. Therefore, it could really be worthwhile to have a specific article on this sub-topic. Still, the text should be shortened to prevent too much of redundancy with other articles. A shorter text will also help the reader to really find the specific information and not loose him/herself in the long text. In respect of shortening: Currently, I get the impression that single references are cited with many additional information like author name, university and journals inside of the text instead of just using the reference. This could be deleted not only to shorten the text but also to increase the focus to the facts themselves and not distract the reader by less important information.

The article is well referenced. Currently, there are just a few examples of certain cancers, which is a good starting point. However, such a selection has always the risk to give a biased overview, in particular if there are some primary sources. I think that the article could be improved for an encyclopedia by moving the focus to more general insights that can be drawn on various cancers with this method. If a reader really needs very detailed information on a particular cancer, she/he has to read current scientific articles.

And as a last point, I would like to recommend to also introduce some critical discussion on the value of this technique. This would help to get a neutral point of information. Such points could be: What is really the clinical relevance of these markers at the moment despite of scientific interest? Although many markers have been shown retrospectively or prospectively to be associated with better or worse prognosis (i.e. to be a prognostic factor), it is not so sure for many of them whether they can also be used as a trigger for therapeutic decisions.

In general, I think your article is on a very good road. Best wishes, --Firefly's luciferase (talk) 01:24, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Doren Robbins

Doren Robbins http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Doren_Robbins

I have created this Wiki page for Doren Robbins himself. He has provided me with all content, much of which has already been cited. Please let me know what else I need to do to get the warnings at the top of the page to go away.

Thank you!

Jrwood08 (talk) 02:13, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Please read our guidance on conflict of interest. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:30, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Wiruae/Iron oxide nanoparticles

Adding request in place of article text. – ukexpat (talk) 18:01, 14 December 2009 (UTC), pp Wiruae (talk • contribs) 05:45, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

seeking user input on first page: Willie George

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gu2542/williegeorge —Preceding unsigned comment added by Gu2542 (talk • contribs) 17:34, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

Request for feedback on wood project

Wood facade project http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Baruns7/Wooden_Facade_project

Baruns7 (talk) 19:35, 14 December 2009 (UTC) BSG 14th December 09Baruns7 (talk) 19:35, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

H2O Audio

I have created the page H2O Audio and don't want it to get deleted as potential advertising, I feel that I have reliable sources, but would love a second opinion...

DanaS (talk) 20:56, 14 December 2009 (UTC)DanaS 12/14/09

Lock-in (decision-making)

Lock-in (decision-making)

Cccantarelli (talk) 10:22, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Charles S. Zane

Requesting comments on my new article about Utah's first Supreme Court Chief Justice, Charles S. Zane. Charles S. Zane All feedback appreciated.--Thelema12 (talk) 16:10, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

surbiryal,nizamabad

surbiryal, nizamabad and Surbiryal, Nizamabad --Shashankreddyd (talk) 05:02, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Fixed link; offered some feedback at article itself. --Orange Mike | Talk 18:55, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

Louise Schabacker

Louise Schabacker User:Myivories88/Louise Schabacker

Myivories88 (talk) 18:06, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

"Personal interview by phone, interviewer unknown" and "Unknown Erie newspaper source" do not constitute reliable sources of the sort we require. --Orange Mike | Talk 19:03, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

I've changed the citation for this phone interview, still trying to find the name of the interviewer. I understand this reference is fairly well useless without that name, but the transcript of this interview is available in a museum archive where I am currently interning if that helps. I've also found a concrete date and name for the newspaper source. Does this make them reasonably reliable? Myivories88 (talk) 16:48, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Cincinnati Women Bloggers Page

This is my first attempt and creating a Wikipedia page. I would love your feedback. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shannanb/CincinnatiWomenBloggers

Thank you! shannan boyer 18:48, 16 December 2009 (UTC)Shannan Boyer —Preceding unsigned comment added by Shannanb (talk • contribs)

Unless you can WP:CITE some significant coverage in reliable sources this group does not appear to meet the notability guidelines set out at WP:ORG, and the article would almost certainly be speedily deleted if moved to the main space. – ukexpat (talk) 19:33, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

We have been written about by the Cincinnati Enquirer too, but unfortunately the article is no longer online. Is there another way to site them;/ shannan boyer 20:28, 16 December 2009 (UTC)shannan boyer —Preceding unsigned comment added by Shannanb (talk • contribs)

It is a common misconception that sources have to be online - they don't - as long as the source can be verified by someone minded to do so (in a public library for example) then it is perfectly OK. In fact we have a citation template for that - {{cite news}}. However unless that coverage is significant, I don't think it's going to help. Also, as you appear to have a conflict of interest, please see WP:COI. – ukexpat (talk) 15:37, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

PostERP

I am trying to write the article for User:CN Liou/PostERP. The previous draft was deleted by someone else. Please review and comment this rewritten version so I can bring it alive. CN Liou (talk) 09:50, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Please read Article Layout. Articles are generally written as prose, not bullet points.--SPhilbrickT 18:52, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you! All the bullet points have been removed.CN Liou (talk) 03:57, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

Nice improvement.

One of the most important of the criteria for an article is Notability which can be staidfied by showing the software system is discussed in a few reliable sources--SPhilbrickT 18:15, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

Vitamini

Please review my Vitamini Vitamini article here http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Neteraser/Vitamini: It's about an indie video game which recently became notable enough to publish it here on Wikipedia! I appericate any feedback on this article. Thanks!

Neteraser (talk) 21:43, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

At the moment the draft says nothing about how or why the game is notable per Wikipedia's inclusion policy. You will have to cite reliable sources to support claims of notability. – ukexpat (talk) 21:51, 17 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Kashcroft/new article name here

Hi I wondered if someone could take a look at this for me. I can't seem to figure out how to get the title right! It should be GEORGE PECK. Also, any other comments would be really helpful. thanks

Kashcroft (talk) 12:08, 18 December 2009 (UTC) Kashcroft 18/12/09

Please take a look at WP:BIO - at the moment the article does not speak to the notability of the subject as per Wikipedia's inclusion policy. You will need to look for and cite significant coverage of the subject in reliable sources to show notability. – ukexpat (talk) 14:51, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

The modpodTM

User:Compeng001/modpod is my first attempt at drafting a wikipedia article.

I have attempted to follow the guidelines for the development of articles for publication on Wikipedia. Can some kind volunteer give me their feedback as to whether they think the article is ok for going live?

Compeng001 (talk) 18:00, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

Sorry but at the moment the major problem is that it reads like an advertisement - expressions such as "innovative application", "a solution that offers superior strength and durability but with the benefit of reduced weight", "pleasing livability and aesthetics", etc are promotional, not encyclopedic and the use of TM is inappropriate. So the draft needs toning down considerably to a neutral point of view. – ukexpat (talk) 18:08, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

UFC Fan Expo

I've created a new page called "UFC Fan Expo". It is about the Expo that the UFC (Ultimate Fighting Championship) hold once a year. Here is the wikilink:

[[1]]

UFC Fan Expo

seedofsparta 20:19, 18 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Seedofsparta (talk • contribs)

I see two major problems: first, the article doesn't address how or why the event is notable per Wikipedia's inclusion criteria - you will need to cite significant coverage in reliable sources to show notability; second, the tone is not encyclopedic - it reads more like a promotional piece for the event (prices, no-strollers, photo policy etc), so it will need some significant rewriting from a neutral point of view. – ukexpat (talk) 21:21, 18 December 2009 (UTC)

Feedback request! short and sweet!

Need help getting this live. User:Addyj1987/Anna Dello Russo Russo there aren't many credible source on Dello Russo hence the brevity but i think she deserves one as director at Japanese Vogue. Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Addyj1987 (talk • contribs)

"there aren't many credible source [sic]": That's the problem - I don't think the day-in-the-life blog counts as a reliable source, and unless you can find some significant third party coverage, I am afraid this one is doomed, even as a stub. – ukexpat (talk) 16:09, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

Spill.com

hello, I just recreated the page for Spill.com, a page that has a contentious history and has been deleted many times in the past. I put a lot of time into it and I believe it to be notable and reliable with over 10 reliable sources so I think it should be fine. I'm just requesting here for someone to give it a quick look to see if there are any other things wrong with it so that new unreviewed article template can be removed. Smithers45 (talk) 19:54, 19 December 2009 (UTC)

It's still a minor website with no notability outside the Austin city limits. --Orange Mike | Talk 21:04, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

You can read my answer on the article talk page and your talk page Orangemike, but I thought I might post my reply to your suggestion for deletion here as well. I would have to completely disagree with the suggestion from Orangemike that Spill.com isn't notable. Under the specific criteria for notability for web content located atWikipedia:Notability_(web), it mentions that only one of the listed criteria must be met for the page to be considered notable. The second listed Criteria for web content goes as follows,"2. The website or content has won a well-known and independent award from either a publication or organization." Obviously Orangmike must have not read the entire article because there is an entire section dedicated to awards in which it is mentioned that they won the 2009 best podcast for the movies/film section from The People's Choice Podcast Awards, better known as the Podcast Awards. Clicking on the wikilink or going to their website at www.podcastawards.com and scrolling down the page, on the right hand column, will find that Spill.com has won the award. The podcast awards are the preeminent awards for podcasts in the world and are most definitely an organization. Other winners include This American Life and ESPN so it is very feel known, I really don't think there are any disputes of that. Also, user Gogo Dodo has backed this article up in saying that it is notable. On my talk page he has said, " The awarding of a 2009 Podcast Award would qualify Spill.com per the notability guidelines." I have no objections to recreating the article because now the site meets the notability guidelines" and you can visit the top of my talk page to confirm that. Smithers45 (talk) 00:46, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Kaitlin Cassidy

Kaitlin Cassidy Kaitlin Cassidy

Greentoga (talk) 06:11, 20 December 2009 (UTC) greentoga December 18 2009

Your current version is here:Kaitlin Cassidy

You need to establish Notability with references to reliable sources. Please check out Referencing for beginners. I prefer LDR style, but go with the suggestion in the beginners page if you choose.

You've included a number of external links. They do not "count" as references, unless the text in the article is specifically cited to the link. The format of the links can be improved—I've fixed the first one to show you how—it is very easy, just add a space and text.--SPhilbrickT 14:59, 20 December 2009 (UTC)

Leonard Steinhorn

I'd like to request feedback on the new article for writer/political analyst Leonard Steinhorn. Thank you. Theparticipant (talk) 23:22, 20 December 2009 (UTC)

The subject's autobiography at his college's website does not constitute a reliable source; neither do book reviews on commercial sites such as Amazon. Please read WP:CITE for guidance on how to format a citation. --Orange Mike | Talk 21:11, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

75B

I would like feedback before moving this article: 75B to the mainspace I am an Art History student specialised in contemporary graphic design. I think it's pretty good but hope someone can take another look.

Thank you for your time Ghckraak (talk) 13:39, 21 December 2009 (UTC) GHC Kraak December 21, 2009

Gabriele_Giolito_de'_Ferrari

I've created the page User:LiMarMu/Gabriele_Giolito_de'_Ferrari in my user space. Giolito was a 16th century Italian printer active in Venice during the early 16th century, and was later succeeded by his sons. The text is largely translated from the Italian Wikipedia, though I also consulted a source not previously listed in the Italian article. Thanks in advance for your feedback. LiMarMu (talk) 18:02, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

I've made the page live now - it will be redirected from the link above. LiMarMu (talk) 16:45, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Shuuro

Is it [2] a reliable source for new article "Shuuro"? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Italian giusti (talk • contribs) 23:46, 21 December 2009 (UTC)

Review of Kenwood Towne Place

Seeking feedback Kenwood Towne Place

This article is about a large scale business development in Cincinnati, Ohio that has been making local and national news because of its finical problems and mismanagement. I have started, what I think is good article, however I would like someone else to look over it. Jsgoodrich (talk) 00:41, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

The Monster's Mind (novella and film)

Hello,

This is my first draft for the article about a novella and its adaptation, both called The Monster's Mind User:Tyler durden fc/TheMonstersMind. The information in the article is limited, but it is as much as I could use/write that was reliable and unbiased. I would love feedback on the quality and how much more I could possibly include.

Thank you!

--Tyler durden fc (talk) 10:54, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Both novella and film are clearly not notable under our criteria, and such an article would probably be deleted immediately. --Orange Mike | Talk 15:36, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Brand Tribalism

Hi I would love some feedback on this article/stub I have written. I feel that this is an area that is becoming commonly refered to in mainstream culture and for this reason it shoukld have a wikipedia entry to explain it in more detail. I also feel that given the subjetc matter and contributary nature of this space, wikipedia is the ideal platform to begin defining this movement/topic.

(Jozette Heerman (talk) 13:19, 22 December 2009 (UTC))

Your footnotes don't contain page numbers. Is this term actually used in either book? If so, on what page(s)? This looks like a neologism for which you are seeking publicity. (And as a person of partially Native American ancestry, I will admit that I also resent the usurpation of the word "tribe" to describe this kind of phenomenon.) --Orange Mike | Talk 15:34, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Champmasters/James_M._Masters_Sr.

Hi, I am a wiki newbie. I have written a biographical article about a Marine Corps General (deceased), located at User:Champmasters/James_M._Masters_Sr.. I would appreciate if you can review and provide comments - and corrections, as necessary. I particularly had difficulty with creating new categories (e.g. Notable graduates of the u.s. national war college). I also had difficulty trying to add entries to categories that contained lists (e.g. United States Marine Corps generals). I would very much like to have your comments so that I can make required changes I before publish the page 'live'. Thanks very much Champmasters (talk) 19:17, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Covert Affairs

An article I created about an upcoming television series. It may not be notable yet, and if it is, go ahead and delete, and I'll save a copy to my archives in case it's ever acceptable. Otherwise, I'd just like some feedback. Thanks. Kevinbrogers (talk) 19:45, 22 December 2009 (UTC)

Article on author Connie Ann Kirk

I wrote an article for biographer and independent scholar Connie Ann Kirk: User:BKred/Connie Ann Kirk I believe it satisfies the guidelines for WP:Notability given that she has been reviewed by multiple periodicals (Booklist, School Library Review, Writers' Journal, etc.) Should I mention these reviews in the article? How does it look otherwise? Any input I can get is much appreciated, thanks! BKred (talk) 16:11, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

The references that you have at the moment do not qualify as reliable sources as defined on Wikipedia - the first is the author's own site and answers.com is not, as far as I know, regarded as reliable. Please take a look at WP:AUTHOR for relevant notability guidelines. So yes, you will need to cite some of those "multiple periodicals" to support notability. – ukexpat (talk) 16:21, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Okay, I'll work on finding better primary sources. I will also include references to the reviews I mentioned. I didn't want to include them before in case they made it look to much of a promotional page. Thank you! BKred (talk) 18:37, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Remember, also, that there's a big difference between mentioning a review (OK) and using selected pull quotes from a review, like you were compiling cover copy for a paperback release (not OK). --Orange Mike | Talk 19:42, 23 December 2009 (UTC) (writes occasional book reviews professionally)

So should I include the actual review, or just include the fact that they were reviewed?BKred (talk) 19:53, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Certainly not the actual review (though a link to it would be OK); that would be a copyright violation, and also would constitute undue emphasis on the reviews. --Orange Mike | Talk 20:07, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Well I'm a little perplexed now. The majority of her reviews are in registered-user-access-only archives. I can try to cobble together the reviews that aren't, but would it be terribly inappropriate for me to link to the relevant amazon pages, where the reviews are given in total? BKred (talk) 20:56, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Sources doesn't have to be even available online, much less registered-user-access-only. Sole Soul (talk) 01:19, 25 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Mallman64/Railex

User:Mallman64/Railex

I am trying to get a article started on Railex It is in partnership with the CSX and UP railroads. a first of its king unit train to move fruits vegetable and other refrigerated product on a regular schedule departures and arrivals. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mallman64 (talk • contribs) 04:00, 24 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Dansack/Society for Values in Higher Education

I have written my first article, User:Dansack/Society for Values in Higher Education and would welcome reactions. I have included several references which I believe make a good case for its notability. Dansack (talk) 16:49, 24 December 2009 (UTC)

Sources have to be independent to establish notability. For me, the subject seems notable. The other issue is the tone of the article, sounds little promotional and un-encyclopedic. You need to make it more neutral. Sole Soul (talk) 00:57, 25 December 2009 (UTC)

Rajjpuut's 7 Golden Rules of Health

Rajjpuut's Seven Golden Rules of Health

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:A1Protagonist/Rajjpuut%27s_7_Golden_Rules_of_Health

This does not read like an encyclopedia article, it reads like a piece of advocacy, full of words like "unfortunately" which betray a point of view. There is also no evidence given that the subject is in any way notable. Blog posts are not considered reliable sources, yet two of the three "references" given are footnotes to blogs. --Orange Mike | Talk 16:24, 26 December 2009 (UTC)

Népouite

Please give me some feedback on User:Strickja/Népouite, which is my first article. This is a summary of the properties of this rare mineral, together with a photograph, taken by myself, of a specimen in my collection. Thank you for your help. Anthea Strickland Strickja (talk) 07:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)

Coming along fine, but you need a better first sentence to tell us what this rock is. See WP:LEDE. You should also consider breaking the text into short paragraphs. You've got page references, which is good, but ideally you would use in-line references. See WP:CITE. Have a look at other mineralogy articles to see how they are structured. Itsmejudith (talk) 16:41, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

Abdul Qaiyum Ansari

User:Pradeep.khot/Abdul Qaiyum Ansari Pradeep.khot (talk) 17:53, 26 December 2009 (UTC) PradeepKhot 26-12-2009

Please review this article and let me know your comments on the same.

Please note that there are not many references on the web for this person so there are only one or two site references added. Not much content is available on net. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Pradeep.khot (talk • contribs) 19:16, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

The sources doesn't have to be online. The article lack neutrality, for example "During the agression of Pakistan on Kashmir in October 1947". Please, read WP:Neutral. Sole Soul (talk) 20:10, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

Lancefield railway line, Victoria

Criticism and comments would be appreciated for User:Scottius11/Lancefield railway line, Victoria. Scottius11 (talk) 02:04, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

Neil Martin-Banks

Hi, I have rather thoroughly gone through the wizard of creating an article on Wikipedia.

I ask that you take some time to have a look at the article I have created. The article is called Neil Martin-Banks who is an actor living in Sweden.

I would appreciate as much feedback as possible in how, in your opinion, it could be made better or whether you thnk it IS good enough to go live as it is and edit it later on.

Yours faithfully,

Nicholas Oliver 2009-12-27 Nickoliver100 (talk) 10:42, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

wikilink - Senko Hanabi

dear referee,

Could you please check my draft titled Senko Hanabi I have researched, reworded, quoted and referenced the article as to the best of my ability. The article is about the senko hanabi, incest fireworks. A ritualistic, symbolic and traditional japanese item with a strong connection to the japanese psyche.

Thank you for your time, Bahbak --Bahbak (talk) 15:32, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

Hi Bahbak. It's a very nice start. I have reformatted your references for full attribution, and given the ones used more than once names and combined them (see here) and made many other manual of style tweaks. It could use expansion and more reliable sources (see this search and this search).--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 15:59, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

The Midlands Academy of Dance and Drama

This is my first articale, it is about a local college in my district- I read some other schools pages for an idea about neutrality and wording etc...

Is this okay??! I had trouble referencing it, not finding the references but making them appear, I got quite muddled and the "help" was no help. so any help? —Preceding unsigned comment added by SheilaGalvin1962 (talk • contribs) 17:25, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

The references with their <ref>...</ref> tags are meant to be placed within the main article text, usually at the end of the sentence they support. I've moved the two at User:SheilaGalvin1962/Midlands Academy of Dance and Drama to the end of the first and second paragraphs as a demonstration. If you continue with the article, please find some sources that come from places independent of the Academy, and that have a reputation for factual accuracy. Is the Academy mentioned anywhere by the BBC or in a national newspaper, for example. The Academy's own website is acceptable for information such as location, staff, etc. but you'll need reliable, third-party (i.e. independent) sources to back up claims such as "many students discover careers in commercial dance, dance companies, television, music and film". Please read the wikipedia pages on notability and reliable sources to get an idea of what is required for an encyclopedia article. --RexxS (talk) 03:59, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

Mairoon Ali

Can someone assist me on this article? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Harry000 (talk • contribs) 00:19, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

User:Harry000/Mairoon Ali

Harry000 (talk) 19:22, 27 December 2009 (UTC)Harry 000

I have formatted the references in a more stanedard way, and done a litle bit of cleanup. But the article was already in good shape, particularly for a newcvommer to Wikipedia. DES <sup>(talk)</sup> 19:29, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Gogyohka

Gogyohka

This article is about a form of Japanese five-line poetry created by Enta Kusakabe that can be written in any language. The article has been edited by two of my colleagues, but further feedback from a disinterested third party would be very much welcomed.

Thanks very much for your time and hard work to keep Wikipedia operating credibly. Yours, Tim Geaghan

Geaghant (talk) 22:33, 27 December 2009 (UTC)

New article on American author

I've written an article for author Connie Ann Kirk, posted here: [3]. I previously got some feedback to expand on notability within the article and to find more reliable primary sources, which I feel that I have done. I intend to publish, but if there are any glaring issues that I have not noticed, I would appreciate any feedback. Thanks. BKred (talk) 03:27, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

V.Velankutty Master

V.Velankutty Master en.wikipedia.org/wiki/V.Velankutty_Master This article is created by me is about a BJS/BJP leader from Palakkad.

Sanal vv (talk) 11:20, 28 December 2009 (UTC) 28 Decemeber 2009

Shouldn't there be a space after the "V."? I will move the article for you. You need to add at least one reference so that readers can verify that the article is correct. And you need to add internal links to the places and people mentioned. See WP:LINK for how to do that. You also need to add a stub template. I will edit the article to make a few other minor changes. Itsmejudith (talk) 09:21, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Creating eggPlantv10 page

Hi ,

I have created this page regarding this QA automation tool , which has different approach for testing.

Link to the page: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Richfriend/new_article_name_here

Please suggest if I need to make any changes to before making the page live.

Thanks, Sri —Preceding unsigned comment added by Richfriend (talk • contribs) 14:17, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

John F. Fitzpatrick (publisher)

Requesting feedback on my new article John F. Fitzpatrick (publisher). All feedback appreciated. Thanks!--Thelema12 (talk) 16:18, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

Mark Siddall (artist)

Requesting feedback on my first article User:Cyberxs/Mark_Siddall Thanks. Andrew Kadar 04:14, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Yellowbook

Requesting feedback on my first article User:Jlitz77/Yellowbook Jlitz77 (talk) 05:10, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Looking at your article you have no secondary sources that are outside the sources of article itself. Take a look at Wikipedia:Reliable sources You should look for coverage form an outside sources. With out that your article could be listed for deletion. Jsgoodrich (talk) 05:55, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

TheEssayAward

TheEssayAward TheEssayAward

Feedback appreciated

Jay Jaytee18 (talk) 12:55, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Please see my response to the move request at User talk:Jaytee18/TheEssayAward. – ukexpat (talk) 03:19, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

IDiscoveri Education

Please provide your valuable feedback on this article. This article is about a company called IDiscoveri Education which is doing great work in schools especially in India in transforming the education system in India from "rote learning" to "being creative and passionate" about learning.

IDiscoveri (talk) 14:16, 29 December 2009 (UTC) Ravi
29th Dec '09.

Most Worshipful Prince Hall Grand Lodge of Georgia

Most Worshipful Prince Hall Grand Lodge of Georgia —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jsnow1 (talk • contribs) 15:00, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Montessori Method - major revamp

I have made a major revamp of the Montessori method article It is located at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Havis1/Montessori_method which is User:Havis1/Montessori method Please look it over; since I want to replace the entire existing article Montessori method Thanks.Havis1 (talk) 15:04, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Editing Wikipedia is a collaborative effort, and replacing an entire old article with another that you have been editing in your user page is against this principal. Please discuss first at Talk:Montessori method. Sole Soul (talk) 00:21, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

I have posted my invitation at the MM site. It has been there for weeks - with opportunity to comment; and reference to the new language. I keep looking for response. But nothing so far. In addition, I posted the changes to a major "Montessori" discussion list for comment as well. So far, just one favorable reply. I suppose people wait until a definite "action" is taken that gets people's attention that people reply. But I will allow another week before I act "bold" like suggested by the wiki-folk suggest.Havis1 (talk) 15:11, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

First: the MM site (if you mean an external site) and a "Montessori discussion list" do not count, enwiki announcements only count. Second: in the talk page [4] you said "when I have a revised version ready for inspection, I will offer it here for comment", and only 2 days ago announced that you've completed your revamp, so how do you expect anybody to comment before that? Third: nobody is required to go to your user page to build the consensus there.

You can go and be bold if you are sure that nobody will object, but if someone reverted your changes you have to discuss it with them because even merging (which is less controversial than replacing) has to be discussed if someone objected. Sole Soul (talk) 23:51, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Commcare_Pharmacy

This is a new entry for an Inc 500 company. Please take a minute to review it for neutrality.

User:Tracerrx/Commcare_Pharmacy

Thanks in advance for taking the time to review this entry!

Tracerrx (talk) 17:00, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

The paragraph beginning "Disease State Management is a continuous..." is a direct copy of the source, which appears to be copyrighted. Furthermore, you can't present that as truth, you can only say "The AMCP defines Disease State Management as..." and either rewrite in your own words or use quote marks to make clear you are not the author of the text. Franamax (talk) 19:00, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Thanks Franamax. I have attempted to re-write using additional sources as well. Your further input or assistance would be appreciated! --Tracerrx (talk) 20:13, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Page moved to mainspace - additional edits/comments or contributions are appreciated. --Tracerrx (talk) 16:19, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Commcare_Pharmacy--Tracerrx (talk) 14:24, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Allen Technologies

If you could provide feedback on this article it would be greatly appreciated. I've posted other articles, but never on a company before.

I am the VP of Engineering for Allen Technologies.

I tried to follow all of the recommendations provided by Wikipedia. The posting is about my company. However, I have tried to make it informative and not an advertisement. I've avoided the usual marketing speak. I've added citations and references to related wikipedia articles.

I am sure I can add more technical detail if needed.

Here is the link to the article: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Allen_Technologies

Thank you. Jeff Cartwright VP Engineering Allen Technologies <e-mail redacted>

66.68.166.82 (talk) 23:28, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Thank you for being honest about your connection. You acted in good faith but still, writing an article about subject that you have a close connection to is strongly discouraged, see WP:COI. People with conflict of interest may avoid the marketing language when they write about their companies, but suppose that there is a negative, credible information about their companies, most likely they will skip that information. In addition to this problem, the article lack reliable sources that are needed to establish notability. Sole Soul (talk) 00:48, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

David Siegel (musician)

Hello everyone! Ive created an article about David Siegel and would love any feedback on it. This is my first article, and I tried to get everything right but Id really like to make sure. Also, Im really clueless on the review process...how and when does that happen? Thanks so much! --Dragn77 (talk) 23:53, 29 December 2009 (UTC)

Looks like a pretty good start to me, nice to see some reliable inline refs in a new article for a change. There are a few formatting issues with this article though. Firstly, overlinking - well known, major geographic locations like America and Miami don't need to be wikilinks, as per WP:OVERLINKING. Also, I personally don't like to see abbreviations like FL in the main body of the text, not everyone who reads wikipedia is familiar with U.S. state abbreviations - I would actually write Florida for clarity and ease of understanding. Florida also doesn't require a wikilink.

Song titles shouldn't be italicized and should be within quotation marks like - "Escape", not Escape - as detailed in WP:MUSTARD and MOS:MUSIC. Billboard Hot 100 should be formatted and wikilinked like this - Billboard Hot 100. Also, the last two paragraphs are in need of some additional wikilinks and formatting, on things like Billboard magazine, bass, and rock band for example. The discography section is good but could do with being sub-divided into the artists own releases, guest appearances and various artists compilation appearances. Take a look at the Gene Parsons page and see how the discography there is sub-divided for clarity. This is kind of how I would present the discographical info in this article.

Lastly, as someone totally unfamiliar with the artist, I feel that the part where it says "as well as co-writing 3x certified platinum song by the RIAA" is confusing. Do you mean he's written three platinum certified songs or one triple platinum certified song? This ambiguity needs addressing.

All of these points I've made might sound like there's a lot wrong with the article but actually, the majority of its problems fall under the heading of formatting. There's not much actually wrong with the presentation of the article or its text. I'm happy to give you a hand on this article if you want me to but I'll refrain unless you specifically ask me to help. --Kohoutek1138 (talk) 02:56, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Dragn77, It is a nice start, I would try and include some biographical info as well. The article is for the most part his song credits and removing some might help with not only the size but the OVERLINKING. The artist's hits would be good or try and compress the section. --NortyNort (talk) 22:57, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Mungo Mackay

I wrote an article on Mungo Mackay. He is mentioned in several Wiki articles but does not have his own article. I request feedback and suggestions on my draft in my filespace. Block1945 (talk) 15:47, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Good start at User:Block1945/Mungo Mackay. A few notes:

• There are some punctuation errors. Inline citations go after periods (.<ref...) and some general clean up is needed (In November of 1775 Massachusetts... doesn't have one at all)
• Verification is a little hard. Not everything needs to be online but it looks like several parameters are missing. provide as much information as possible. See [[5]]. You don't need to use the templates but it shows the common details mentioned in various formats. When using a reference multiple times, give the initial reference a name so that it can be reused without additional citations.
• It appears to be underlinked wiklink wise/not descriptive enough. Try adding some clarification or links to the lead.
• James Otis is a disambiguation page. Which one is it. Also, adding a line to why his testimony was important or what its effect was would be good.
• You might want to clarify Newcastle, England just to be on the safe side.
• The subsection headings seem off. Use a higher level section heading (ie ==Early life==, ==Revolution==, ==Post...==) or similar. Also, do not use title case for section headings. Drop the capitalization on the second word if it is not a proper noun.

Klingle Road

I've greatly expanded the Klingle Road article http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Klingle_Road , and perhaps this will no longer be classified as a "stub". Abuelo jack (talk) 17:04, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Well, at first glance, it certainly looks to me as if it's big enough and comprehensive enough not to be rated as a stub any more. However, a bigger problem is that this article had no Lead section - that is, the paragraph or two at the start of the article, before the first "The automobile road" section. Check out WP:LEAD for details on how to construct a suitable lead section. Don't be afraid to repeat info in the lead that is touched on elsewhere in the article because that's exactly what a lead section should do - give a short, overview of the most important points of an article for the casual reader. If people want more info then they can read the rest of the article. Check out the lead section for the album Mr. Tambourine Man, which I was recently involved in writing, and you'll see how it touches upon all of the most important points regarding the song - then these same points are covered in much more detail later on within the main body of the article. --Kohoutek1138 (talk) 17:48, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Sinus Dynamics

User:JillianHerbert/Sinus Dynamics

Request feedback on additional reference/source —Preceding unsigned comment added by JillianHerbert (talk • contribs) 06:10, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

This page was drafted to provide information about sinus dynamics. It basically contains general information about the program and a description of the equipment. I plan to add more to it, but for now, I'd like to review feedbacks so I know how to proceed further. --JillianHerbert (talk) 22:55, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

Hi JillianHerbert. The current version is sourced only to press releases and the subject's own website. What is required for both verifiability (WP:V) and notability (WP:N) is independent third-party coverage. <sup>Bongo</sup><sub>matic</sub> 23:08, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

eCamp

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ECamp

Gigiflyer (talk) 08:22, 31 December 2009 (UTC)

Page has been deleted by someone other than myself. --NortyNort (talk) 22:59, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Kim West

Kim West

I've just written this article about a fashion designer who was well known in the 80s and early 90s as part of Wikiproject fashion. She's particularly interesting because she used latex as a fabric and had to fight preconceptions of that fabric to gain acceptance. Please let me know your thoughts on the article. thanks

Andygrub (talk) 14:14, 31 December 2009 (UTC)

Alan Heston

Hello wikipedia world. I have created the User:Resumerenovators/Alan Heston wiki. I'd appreciate any feedback for this article about an economist notable for his contributions to purchasing power parity and national income calculations.

Thanks! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Resumerenovators (talk • contribs) 16:16, 31 December 2009 (UTC)

It certainly does look like he is notable and merits an article. However, to satisfy Wikipedia's notability guidelines, an article's subject must demonstrate significant coverage in third party publications- publications neither Heston nor UPENN is affiliated with. For example, this New York Times article. Offline references to reliable journals or other media are also acceptable. "Signficant" doesn't mean an entire article, but something greater than a trivial mention.

In addition, while the article starts off well, the latter part of the article is very listy and reads like a resume. It also looks like it was copy-and-pasted into the article, which likely violates copy-right. You can either make it prose or delete it- don't worry about creating a short article, as long as it shows notability. Almost all Wikipedia articles are works in progress.

Finally, add more references to your article. You got the information from somewhere, so cite it. See WP:Referencing for beginners for help.

Nice start to an informative article on a good topic! If you have further questions, you can contact me by clicking the "talk". Liqudluck✽talk 02:43, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

Alfred Garth Jones

Hello! Please be patient as this is my first attempted/proposed article.

The subject Alfred Garth Jones (User:GarthJones/Alfred Garth Jones) was a notable illustrator around 1900-1901 as well as being my Great Uncle. Some information is a bit sketchy but I hope the article does attain the required Wikipedia standard.

Thanks for any feedback!

GarthJones (talk) 12:48, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

Looks like a notable subject. I'd recommend watching your conflict of interest, though- you're not so connected that I'd tell you not to contribute at all, but make sure not to simply remove cited criticism or negative details that other editors might add to the article. Instead, discuss it on the article's talk page.

On to the article itself! You'll need to cite where you got your information by adding inline references- see Wikipedia:Referencing for beginners. As a quick example:

"At that time, Thomas Jones was a Mechanical Draughtsman although he later progressed to become an Engineering Lecturer".<ref>reference material</ref> produces: "At that time, Thomas Jones was a Mechanical Draughtsman although he later progressed to become an Engineering Lecturer". On the actual article, that number will be a link to the source.

Also, watch biased words which do not present a WP:Neutral Point of View. For example, "prestigious" in "adorned many prestigious publications of his day"- although HG Wells is probably more important than Farmer Bob, Wikipedia can only state what reliable sources state. So, if the New York Times says the work is prestigious, you need to put a cite at the end. Alternatively, if the NYT says Jones' created the best artwork ever ever ever, you can say "___ ___ of the New York Times described Jones' work as "the best artwork ever ever ever" - with a cite at the end.

You may include references to offline works, such as books or magazine articles. See Wikipedia:Citation templates for how to cite them.

Thanks for your contributions. If you have questions, you can contact me on my talk page (click "talk" at the end of my signature). Liqudluck✽talk 00:15, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Feedback - True North Productions

Dear Sir/Madam, I would like to ask for some feedback on the creation of a new article - True North Productions - submitted today. The article is about a television production company and it's the first time I have created an article in this way and it would be useful to confirm that everything is in order. Best Wishes, Glyn Middleton —Preceding unsigned comment added by Truenorthglyn (talk • contribs) 13:46, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

I've just had a look at this article and the most glaring problem at the moment is that there are currently four inline citations in the article that do not support the information given. They are citations directing to a specific webpage and in each case, the webpage does not contain the facts that the refs are supposed to support. For instance, the article says that programmes made by True North Productions "have so far been screened in 186 countries." However, the ref that follows this statement directs to a web page and nowhere on that webpage does it state that this the correct number of countries. It's not enough to link to a website which may contain the relevant info, the inline refs should link to the specific page where the information you're citing can easily be found. Consequently, I've tagged this article with multiple "failed verification" tags and a "citecheck" banner at the top. These should only be removed when this problem is fixed. There's also the possibility of a conflict of interest with this article but as long as you're careful that what you write isn't biased, it should be OK. Post a message on my talk page (click the word "talk" in my signature) if you want any further help or advice with this article. --Kohoutek1138 (talk) 15:46, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Daisy Alliance

Daisy Alliance is an article I have just written. Before continuing, I would like to know whether being both author/editor and founder of Daisy Alliance would be a COI. Bruce RothBrucearoth (talk) 16:17, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

Yes, it would be a conflict of interest- as founder, you may be unlikely to add unfavorable information/criticism about the organization and may, even unknowingly, write the article like an advertisement. However, you may continue work if you "exercise great caution".

If you have already written the article, make a userspace draft (see Help:Userspace draft) by creating User:Brucearoth/Daisy Alliance and ask on this page for comments on your draft. If the article is deemed notable and NPOV and is created, declare your relationship on the article's talk page and avoid making edits to the article other than undoing blatant vandalism. Rather, request changes on the article's talk page.

First things first, though- establish the notability of the Daisy Alliance. I searched just NY Times (found no articles) and UN.org (found this page). You'll need at least 2-3 third party sources to establish notability- see WP:GNG and Wikipedia:Notability (organizations and companies). Liqudluck✽talk 23:53, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RexManningDay/new_article_name_here

I wrote an entry on the Long Island based indie rock band Aunt Ange with most of the information taken from their website. As this is my first article for wikipedia, I was worried that I might not have enough references. Thanks for your help!

best,

Rich (RexManningDay (talk) 21:26, 1 January 2010 (UTC))

The subject does not seem to meet Wikipedia's notability standards (see particularly WP:BAND). The sources offered also are insufficient for Wikipedia's verifiability policy. Moreover, the text appears to be copy/pasted from the band's website, in contravention of Wikipedia's copyrighted material policy. The article should be deleted in its current form and recreated if and when the subject can be verified to meet the notability standards. <sup>Bongo</sup><sub>matic</sub> 21:36, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

circumference of an oval --Whats inside the light bulb? (talk) 02:08, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

cirumference of an oval

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Whats_inside_the_light_bulb%3F/new_article_name_here It's my first article tell me what you think --Whats inside the light bulb? (talk) 02:35, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Although interesting, I am not sure if this is encyclopedic.--NortyNort (talk) 23:03, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Well, you need to give it some structure, and you need to watch spelling errors (it's vertical and horizontal, not virtical and horizantal). also, this would probably be better as part of a bigger article on computing circumferences...

for structure, what you should do is write out an introductory paragraph - basically tell us what the article is about, and then start a new section where you tell us how to do it. look at the manual of style to get an idea of what the page should look like. --Ludwigs2 23:28, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Cynthia Cozette Lee

User:Lezahstar/Cynthia Cozette Lee is an article about the life, music and works of a living African American female classical music composer. Please review the article's format and language to see if any changes need to be made in the article. I think the article is ready to go live. Your input would be greatly appreciated. Thank you. Lezahstar (talk) 02:55, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

While Cozette sounds like a great musician, the article does not yet demonstrate her notability (how Wikipedians determine what subjects merit an article) and, as a result, would likely be deleted. The basic way of establishing notability is to make sure the article meets the general notability guideline. If the article is unable to meet that guideline, it may meet more specific, music related notability guidelines on Wikipedia:Notability (music). If your article is nominated for deletion, be prepared to defend your article by demonstrating how it meets at least one notability guideline.

The article also has a lot of information but no references. Wikipedia has a policy against original research, so please cite your sources. If you're unsure of how to cite, please see WP:Referencing for beginners. The latter part of the article looks like a resume- please convert this to prose.

Hope that helps. If you have questions, contact me by clicking the pink "talk". Liqudluck✽talk 06:52, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

California Farm

Hi. I have just written my first article about a building I visited recently which I belivee to be of historical significance. I have written my first draft an dwould welcome some feedback on whether I have written this correctly and am in a position to publish it?

Yours gratefully

Sue —Preceding unsigned comment added by Sueowen (talk • contribs) 06:32, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your contribution. I see the article has gone live now, but it's been tagged as potentially not notable. Unfortunately, it may well be that this farmhouse is not notable enough for an article in Wikipedia. The only positive thing that is said about notability at the moment is that the farmhouse is 350 years old. But this is quite typical of farmhouses in England. Is there any other reason you know of that this farmhouse is special? If there isn't then the article will be deleted, because at the moment it could be taken as an advertisement for the bed & breakfast business, which goes against our rules on WP:SPAM. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:14, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

Angana P. Chatterji

Hi, I put the Angana P. Chatterji article up a while ago, but am still learning my way around editing Wikipedia and would appreciate some more eyes. An IP user made some edits but did not leave any comments in the discussion page regarding them, so I'm also hoping for other Wikipedians (hopefully others familiar with the work of Angana Chatterji?) to weigh in on those changes as well. Thank you. -- Torren (talk) 07:18, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

I'm not familiar with her work but I have read a lot of biographies of academics. The first thing to note is that just being a professor does not automatically mean that the person should have a Wikipedia article. The criteria are at WP:PROF. And the assertion of notability should be in the lead paragraph of the article. For example: "... is a biologist who won the .... prize for his work on ....". This article uses the subject's official biographies a lot, which gives it a particular flavour that is not really part of the Wikipedia style. My guess is that she actually is notable, but that needs to be stated more clearly. Have a look at a number of articles on really famous academics and see how they are structured. You have done a lot of work on this and your efforts are appreciated. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:48, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Thank you very much. -- Torren (talk) 19:37, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

John F. Kennedy Federal Building

I have just wrote a short article on the John F. Kennedy Federal Building. I noticed that most of the articles on buildings on Wikipedia are generally short and functionally descriptive. Keeping that in mind, I wanted to keep my article on the building succint, because there is a comprehensive building description on the GSA web sight (to which I've linked my article).

I would greatly appreciate any constructive criticisms or feedback from more experienced editors. In particular, is the length too short? Is there something I should add? I can't add it to the list of Boston's tallest buldings because it sits under 400 feet. Nevertheless, should it be included somewhere else rather than in a stand alone article?

Lastly, I had a little trouble categorizing it, so if someone could provide information on how to to that, I would be grateful.

Thank You.

Wildcard6 (talk) 19:09, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Nice start. Most articles on buildings are short because the articles' creators knew the building was notable, but never expanded them further. While stub articles are welcomed, it is always nice to have thorough, informative articles- so if you would like to expand further, please do so, but you are not required to. If you do add more cited information, you can nominate it to appear in the Did You Know? section of the main page (DYK articles must be at least 1500 characters long, and JFKFB is currently 500 characters). Articles described as Wikipedia's best, called as Featured Articles, on architecture are considerably longer- see Michigan State Capitol or Scottish Parliament Building for examples.

As to your article as it is, please add wikilinks to relevant articles by typing [[ ]] around the word- for example, [[postmodern architecture]] produces postmodern architecture. You can also create Piped links to other articles. It would be useful to know what the building is used for and when exactly it was built. It may also be helpful to add the Template:Infobox building, which creates a box on the side as a quick reference for readers.

You may have to search for ways to de-orphan/link to your articles. First, do a search for your article's name (if you use the toolbar in the left menu, make sure to hit "search" and not "go". I just did so and came up with Boston, which mentions the John F. Kennedy Federal Office Building (side note: is that the actual name of the building?). You could also add a link from City Hall Plaza. If the architect has an article, you could add a link from there.

The easiest way to categorize is by looking at the categories of similar articles. For example, Boston Public Library has several categories JFKFB would fit into. Hope this helps, and if you have questions, feel free to ask me on my talk page (click "talk" in my signature). Liqudluck✽talk 05:57, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

The Declaration on the Elimination of Violence Against Women

Hi, this is my first article for wikipedia. Would welcome any feedback/contributions from you more experienced contributors. User:Martlayton/The Declaration on the Elimination of Violence Against Women Many thanks. --Martlayton (talk) 22:23, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Nice start. What you'll need to do is add inline references to the supporting material- please read WP:Referencing for beginners. References should include at least the resource's author, publisher, and access date. The preferred way and, in my opinion, the easiest way of citing accurately is by using citation templates.

It may be worth adding the infobox for legislation: Template:Infobox Legislation. Leave unapplicable fields blank and they won't show up. Let me know on my talk page if you have further questions (click "talk" at the end of my signature). Liqudluck✽talk 01:07, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

Madison, Sirius/XM Satellite Radio DJ

Madison, Sirius/XM Satellite Radio DJ

I was shocked to find out that my favorite radio DJ didn't have a wikipedia page when most of her fellow Sirius Radio co-workers do. I decided to dig up some sources about her and start a wiki page on her behalf. I'm looking forward to getting it live!

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jami0821/Madison

Jami0821 (talk) 02:36, 3 January 2010 (UTC) Jami Gibbs 1/2/10

Madison Radio DJ

• She is pleasant on the eyes in that picture but it appears to be a copyright violation. Is Myspace actually raeleased under Creative Commons or did you just tag it as so?
• The citations are not formatted. Wikipedia:Citing sources/example style and Wikipedia:Referencing for beginners might help.
• Myspace as an external link is normally to be avoided (WP:ELNO).
• Category:FA-Class biography (arts and entertainment) articles might help you with some ideas on possible avenues of expansion. Wikipedia:Layout is also a must for how to handle the different sections.
• "Or a hooker. She is Jewish" is just plain weird. I assume they are not related but you took something that should be quoted (and put in context for the reader) and plopped religion next to it.
• Add an infobox
• Find more sources. Any reviews or other independent write ups in the press?
• It might need a new title. Madison(DJ/entertainer/something like that)

Cptnono (talk) 11:14, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

New Milton railway station

I have just started to contribute to Wikipedia and was wondering if someone would be kind enougth to look over my expansion of New Milton railway station from http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=New_Milton_railway_station&action=historysubmit&diff=335586211&oldid=333876743 I have listed my changes on the talk page which currently only contains the comment on my changes.

Many thanks in anticipation. --Wintonian (talk) 05:43, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

Great work, and I hope you enjoy contributing to Wikipedia and decide to carry on. The only problem was a few spelling mistakes. They're quickly corrected - I'll do that - but you might want to consider writing in wordprocessing software and using the spellchecker before copying your text into Wikipedia. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:22, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

You are right ofcourse, I should have thought about running through a spell checker. Grammer has never been a strong point of mine so thanks for going through it for me. --Wintonian (talk) 19:49, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

No probs. Itsmejudith (talk) 13:02, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

The_Inquisition_(underground_newspaper)

The_Inquisition_(underground_newspaper) User:Smalljones/Inquisition_(underground_newspaper) This article will complete a referenced but not existent article on this briefly lived but significant underground newspaper in Charlotte, NC. Reliable references and links to collected copies are included in the article. Smalljones (talk) 22:06, 3 January 2010 (UTC)

Andre Begin

I am writing to request feeback, Thank you kindly. Montrealfitness (talk) 05:01, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Montrealfitness, looks like a good start.

• I would fix the external links with this coding: *[http://www.musclememory.com/showArticle.php?mb671136 Muscle Builder, Vol 9, No 8, Page 36, November 1967]
• Maybe do a biography info box, see Template:Infobox person.
• The career sections can be sub-sectioned under a "Professional life" section.
• The Dedication to Holistic Health lifestyle can be placed elsewhere or removed.
• Try and break up the intro in separate paragraphs or remove/compress some info.

I created this bio with the biography template, for example: John L. Savage. Hope this helps. --NortyNort (talk) 23:20, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

We The People (band)

I'd be glad to hear some feedback. Thanks in advance.

We The People (band), Elitropia (talk) 10:11, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your work. Have a look at WP:BAND to see which of the notability criteria you think the band meets. If it doesn't meet any, then it isn't notable and the article will probably be deleted. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:31, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

This band definitely meets Wikipedia notability criteria as per WP:BAND and should not be deleted. Criteria that the band specifically meets are "Has been the subject of multiple non-trivial published works" and "Has released two or more albums on a major label or one of the more important indie labels"...although their albums are actually compilations of singles/unreleased tracks from the 1960s, but still. This article looks like a good start at first glance, although it could do with some inline refs. I'll try to have a more thorough look at it over the next day or two and see if I can help improve it any. It's good to see this band finally get an article - I particularly like their song, "Mirror of My Mind". --Kohoutek1138 (talk) 18:26, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

David R. Gamperl

I would like to request feedback on my article, David R. Gamperl. It is a biography of an entrepreneur who is based in Chicago, Illinois. Thank you, Carmelita Rubin 17:09, 4 January 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by CarmelitaRubin (talk • contribs)

The article is nicely laid out, but my worry is that that the subject is probably not notable. If one of the companies he has been involved in is notable, then the usual thing to do would be to have an article on that company and mention its founder or leader in that article. And if a businessperson has not been involved in any companies that are notable enough for their own article, then that businessperson is almost certainly not notable in their own right. Have a good read through the guidelines at WP:Notable. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:27, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Sustainable Electronics Initiative

Sustainable Electronics Initiative needs your feedback. Please take a moment to give us your comments. Thanks!!

Timonkhsu (talk) 21:16, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Jimmy Nichols

Jimmy Nichols

Draft

Jimmy Nichols is an esteemed keyboard player, producer, and music industry executive in Nashville, Tennessee. He has served as musical director/keyboardist on tour with Reba McEntire and Faith Hill. Other artist credits include: Carrie Underwood, Kelly Pickler, Mindy McCready, Billy Gilman, Elton John, The Martins, Jerry Kilgore, Trick Pony, Alabama, Hank Williams Jr. Sherrié Austin, Keith Urban, Lonestar, Craig Morgan, Jeff Bates, Lee Ann Womack, Jessica Simpson (credited as James Ginnetti), Brooks & Dunn, John Mellencamp, Sarah Darling, Julianne Hough, Tim McGraw, Billy Ray Cyrus, Reba McEntire, Carnie Wilson, and Steve Holy. He is currently the president of a record label in Nashville, Tennessee called, Black River Music Group. Their artist roster includes, Sarah Darling, Emma Jacob, and Jeff Bates. Early Life Jimmy Nichols, formally known as James Ginnetti, was born and raised in Columbus, Ohio. He was brought up in a very musical family, along with seven other siblings. His multi-talented father, Joey “Nichols” Ginnetti, had a huge musical influence on his children. Sadly, Joey Ginnetti died suddenly of cancer, leaving the rest of the Ginnetti family to carry on his musical influence. Career Career Jimmy began playing piano professionally at the age of 10, where he and his four brothers became very well-known around the Columbus area. They became known as “The Nichols Brothers.” Around 1980, The Nichols Brothers landed gigs touring with Eddie Rabbitt, Kenny Rogers, Barbara Mandrell, Mel Tillis, Roy Clark, and many, many others. They toured the country until 1994, when they were finally called to Nashville for a potential record deal. Sadly, their record deal did not work out. The only thing that stemmed from the record label was a chance to be a billboard pick with their song, “That’s When You Know It’s Over.” Before they even had a chance, the record label went under. In 1992, they met Terry and Kim Pegula, a successful business team who believed that The Nichols Brothers deserved another chance at stardom. Although things did not work out like they had planned, Jimmy was connected with legendary producer, David Malloy. David recognized Jimmy’s talent on the piano, and began using him for all of his recording sessions, beginning with Mindy McCready. Since then, Jimmy has become one of Nashville’s top session players. His artist credits include Carrie Underwood, Kelly Pickler, Mindy McCready, Billy Gilman, Elton John, The Martins, Jerry Kilgore, Trick Pony, Alabama, Hank Williams Jr. Sherrié Austin, Keith Urban, Lonestar, Craig Morgan, Jeff Bates, Lee Ann Womack, Jessica Simpson (credited as James Ginnetti), Brooks & Dunn, John Mellencamp, Sarah Darling, Julianne Hough, Tim McGraw, Billy Ray Cyrus, Reba McEntire, Carnie Wilson, and Steve Holy. Recent Currently, Jimmy and his wife, Tonya, have reconnected with Terry and Kim Pegula, and have formed the record label Black River Music Group located in Nashville, Tennessee. He currently is producing and recording Black River artists Sarah Darling, Jeff Bates, and Emma Jacob. References http://www.emu.com/artists/artist_jimmy_nichols.asp http://www.fullsail.edu/?fa=news.story&contentID=19079&section=degreeGeneral&pg=1&industry=no http://www.buddyleeattractions.com/talent.php?id=31 http://www.blackrivermusicgroup.com/about/Jimmy-Nichols External links [6] [7] [8]

Any such draft should be made in your user space not here. Let me know if you need a hand setting that up. A couple quick notes, everything above is not OK without independent coverage for both verification and to assert notability. Also, watch out for words like "esteemed" since it looks like overly promotional.Cptnono (talk) 23:41, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Scoliosis Research Society

Scoliosis Research Society Scoliosis Research Society

Msr250 (talk) 22:47, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

User:Msr250/Scoliosis Research Society

You need independent coverage of the subject. "'Independent of the subject' excludes works produced by those affiliated with the subject including (but not limited to): self-publicity, advertising, self-published material by the subject, autobiographies, press releases, etc." - Wikipedia:Notability#General notability guideline. :Something like "the SRS has gained recognition as one of the world's premier spine societies" is unacceptable without an inline citation from a reputable third party source.Cptnono (talk) 23:57, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Lily Eskelsen

Requesting feedback on my new article Lily Eskelsen. All feedback appreciated. Thanks!--Thelema12 (talk) 00:25, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Thelema12, looks good. I made on minor change in the intro. I made this biography a few weeks ago and I used the bio template. You may want to put an info box in there.--NortyNort (talk) 03:11, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nherbw/new_article_name_here

I have created a page for Embedded Systems Conference.

Nherbw (talk) 00:42, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Hello again, I have added some more links and updated the contents for the ESC page. I would greatly appreciate any help on making the article better. Thanks! Nherbw (talk) 21:07, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

Pixetell

Pixetell Pixetell

Hello: I have been working on the above mentioned page to improve it so that it meets the Wikipedia standard. I am employed by the company, Ontier, that makes and sells Pixetell. I have sought the guidance of a Wikipedia expert in my attempt to strengthen the article; I did not write the original version that was initially tagged for possible deletion. I would greatly appreciate any feedback on the article so that it can be upgraded.

Dcookatontier (talk) 18:05, 04 January 2010 (PST

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wikilarry/Gendicine

I created this page to document the medication Gendicine.

This is a commercial product and it is referred to by several wiki pages (e.g. Gene Therapy).

thanks,

-larry —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wikilarry (talk • contribs) 07:33, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Tika and The Dissidents

Hello, I would like to request feedback on my article, Tika and The Dissidents This article is about indonesian band Tika & the Dissidents who received many achievements despite releasing their album on their own label. Thank you. Antosastra (talk) 14:35, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

I have added a couple of maintenance tags which really speak for themselves. The tone, especially in the lead paragraph, is not appropriate, see WP:LEAD, and overall the tone is a little too promotional and unencyclopedic. You should also make sure that the band meets the notability requirements set out at WP:BAND. – ukexpat (talk) 21:03, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

There's some formatting problems with this page. For example, the song and album titles - they don't need to be in bold for a start. You might want to take a look at WP:MUSTARD#Formatting and WP:MOSMUSIC to see how things like song titles/album titles and music articles in general should be formatted. Also, the magazine mentioned in the first sentence should be formatted as Time magazine, as per WP:MOST. In addition, there seems to be some inconsistency in the body of the article regarding whether the band is called the Dissidents or The Dissidents (with a capital "T"). This needs to be correctly decided upon and then stuck to, as per Names (definite article). My feeling, from the little bit of research on Google I've just done, is that it should be The Dissidents. However, if this is incorrect then the article title itself is also incorrect and should be moved to Tika and the Dissidents. --Kohoutek1138 (talk) 22:41, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Premier Asia

Hello, I would like to request feedback regarding my article on the DVD distribution company Premier Asia. Thank you.

Tdk4051 (talk) 18:32, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

Please take a look at WP:CORP for our notability guidelines for companies and at WP:FAQO for more detail. At the moment the article does not address how or why the company is notable - you will need references from third party reliable sources to support notability, and those references must be significant coverage rather than just passing mentions. – ukexpat (talk) 20:31, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

User:Evanmackmusic/Angel of the Amazon

The article name is User:Evanmackmusic/Angel of the Amazon

I am requesting feedback

Evanmackmusic (talk) 19:02, 5 January 2010 (UTC)Evan Mack

Two issues: First as composer of the work you have a huge conflict of interest and should not be creating or editing this article; second, as this is a new work it is not yet notable and may never be. Please take a look at WP:N and WP:NMUSIC for guidance. – ukexpat (talk) 20:51, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

User:Natrob87/Hurdle Machine Works

History of the company I work for. They have changed the way the sawmill industry runs several times. I hope you will consider this submission.

Natrob87 (talk) 21:49, 5 January 2010 (UTC)

A few comments: first, because of your connection with the company, you have a significant conflict of interest and are strongly discourage from creating such an article. However, that is not fatal assuming if the article is written from a neutral point of view. On the substance, please take a look at WP:CORP for our notability guidelines for companies and at WP:FAQO for more detail. You will need more references from reliable sources to support notability, and those references must be significant coverage rather than just passing mentions. On the formatting, please take a look at other company articles to see how they are laid out - you don't need the first heading, but you do need a lead section as described in WP:LEAD; you should also Wikilink to other articles where appropriate; and we use sentence case for headings as described at WP:MOSHEAD. But first concentrate on the notability issue, the formatting can be cleaned up later. – ukexpat (talk) 20:20, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

Swami Shri Punitachariji

User:Only4ufriend1/Swami Shri Punitachariji

Only4ufriend1 (talk) 05:25, 6 January 2010 (UTC)Shivam agrawal 6.1.2010

Please take a look at WP:BIO - at the moment the draft does not indicate how or why the subject is notable as required by Wikipedia's inclusion criteria. You will need to cite significant coverage in reliable sources to support notability. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 20:09, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

John Kador

Requesting feedback on new article about writer John Kador. [9] http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RobertGeorge10/John_Kador

RobertGeorge10 (talk) 19:00, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

Please take a look at WP:BIO and WP:AUTHOR - you will need some reliable sources to support notability. Also note that the external links to online booksellers are not appropriate. You will also need to shorten the list of publications because at the moment the draft reads more like a promotional curriculum vitae than a neutral, encyclopedic article. Please take a look at WP:MOSBIO and other biographical articles to see how they are laid out. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 19:35, 6 January 2010 (UTC)

Stephen Paley

I just made my first wiki page attempt: Stephen Paley http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Idiolect43/new_article_name_here

Would appreciate help.

Idiolect43 (talk) 00:04, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Deshbandhu: Hindi Newspaper

User:Tarushikha/Deshbandhu: Hindi Newspaper

Deshbandhu: Hindi NewspaperDeshbandhu: Hindi Newspaper —Preceding unsigned comment added by Tarushikha (talk • contribs) 09:28, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

It's probably notable but at the moment the draft is totally unsourced. You will need to cite significant coverage in reliable sources to support the notability of the subject. – ukexpat (talk) 17:15, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

The_Gore_Effect

Hi i would like feedback from the community on this article [[10]] If you have time take a look and post any thoughts in the article talk page, thanks --mark nutley (talk) 12:35, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Speedy deletion has not happened here, it is now back up while talks go on to see if it should stay, if you`d like to take a look and have your say you still can. I would appreciate crits as this was my first try at actually writing an article in my usespace (my first artilce try was a disaster lol) Thanks --mark nutley (talk) 14:36, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

I have to tell you, this won't become an article. It will be regarded as a bit of trivia and violation of our biographies of living persons policy. Also, I read in it that an event of the 2000s coincided with "the first snow in London since 1922", sourced to the Washington Times. I think you'll find that there was quite a lot of snow in 1962-3 and in 1978-9, just to pick out two of the coldest years. Perhaps it's a typo for 1992, in which case - what's the big deal? I hope you will try your hand at other articles - if you do, look at the style for WP:LEDE lead paragraphs. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:38, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

Why do you believe it violates BLP? --GoRight (talk) 18:33, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

I think it could be taken as gossip that is (mildly) derogatory towards Al Gore. But if you want to argue that it's encyclopedic, please go ahead and do so. Itsmejudith (talk) 14:25, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Er, why did you delete the previous comments on this request? That was totally inappropriate. – ukexpat (talk) 18:20, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

Sorry man, i replied on my talk page --mark nutley (talk) 18:42, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

As in de.wp we actually got this article and it features the main page today, I'd like t osuggest that this article be integrated in en.wp, too. Sure you know about "our" draconian deletion policies, and maybe you could estimeem the article's surviving them as a test for relevance etc. (and, maybe not). I's suggest rewriting the en. article to fit quality standars, it's sure relevant. Regards, -- Klingon83 (talk) 14:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

KINDERDANCE INTERNATIONAL, INC.

Hi. Could you please advise as what we should delete. All information has been published in Essence and Entrepreneur magazines. I am new at this. Anything you would like us to take out, please let me know if possible. Thank you.

Kind regards, Darlene

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nuncscio/Kinderdance_International_Inc —Preceding unsigned comment added by Nuncscio (talk • contribs) 19:18, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

At the moment the tone is a little too promotional and your use of he circle-R is not appropriate - see MOS:TM. Also, to support notability, you will need significant coverage in sources that meet our requirements as to reliability - see WP:RS. Note that directory-type listings are not sufficient, we are looking for coverage in, for example, the press - newspapers etc. Also note that if you are creating the article on behalf of the company, or you are otherwise connected with it, you have a conflict of interest and are strongly advised not to create the article. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 19:28, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Galen Institute

User:Andrewpsroyal/Galen Institute

Hello,

Was hoping someone could look over the article on the Galen Institute I created in my user space and give some feedback before I post it. Thanks! Andrewpsroyal (talk) 19:30, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

See my comments on your talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 20:52, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

RONEN GINSBURG

Ronen Ginsburg

--Bucurenciugabriela (talk) 22:33, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

What needs to be resolved first is whether this person is notable enough for an article. With CEOs, it is important that the company itself should be notable. At the moment, his company doesn't have its own article, although there is an article on the group that it belongs to. Even when a company is notable, the CEO often isn't, although there are of course exceptions for famous CEOs like Steve Jobs. So the most appropriate thing to do is to consider whether there is enough independent coverage of the company to create an article for it. If you do, put some information about the CEO in it - when he took over, his business background, perhaps something about his plans for the company. Best of luck. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:52, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:David_Bearman/Maxwell_L._Anderson

I've decided to try editing myself since I'm now co-hosting a meeting this spring with the Wikimedia Foundation on museum staff involved in editing wikipedi and have been feeling that I should at least have done it once.

This article User:David Bearman/Maxwell L. Anderson is a first stab at introducing someone who has played an important role in driving American art museums to the adoption of new media and online technologies. I first became involved with Max Anderson in the mid 1990's when I was directing the Getty Art Museum Image Consortium an he was a player on the Board. Since then I ve watched him in numerous roles in driving high tech in US Art Museums, most recently introducing the Dashboard feature at the Indianapolis Museum of Art which edp[oses all their data to the public. This 'stub-like' bio doesn't go into all that though if it is ok as is I may try adding some references to the important role Max has played in these efforts over the years. Feedback of any sort would be welcomed. David Bearman (talk) 18:28, 8 January 2010 (UTC)David Bearman, Jan. 8 2010

I have reviewed the draft and made some formatting and other edits. You need to brush up on how to link to other Wikipedia articles (using double square brackets, not ref tags) and a few other Wikipedia editing tricks! Anyway, I cleaned it up for you, but I still have concerns that the tone is a little bit too "press release"/promotional. I also posted a welcome message on you talk page with lots of useful links. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 20:42, 8 January 2010 (UTC)

User:Tnakagiri/SkyOne Federal Credit Union

User:Tnakagiri/SkyOne Federal Credit Union

Tnakagiri (talk) 23:47, 8 January 2010 (UTC) Tom Nakagiri 1/8/10

A great start. You could link to the FAA in the lead. Use a piped link WP:LINK if you need to link from the previous name to the article that uses the current name. Ready to go live, I think. Itsmejudith (talk) 14:29, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Amber Moelter

Request for feedback on Amber Moelter, created December 4th 2009, since scanned by SmackBot and looked at by Debresser, still carrying initial creation tags. Thanks. Holyramage (talk) 09:31, 9 January 2010 (UTC)

Igi Aferojn Finitajn (Esperanto version of Getting Things Done)

Mi provis traduki la anglan artikolon "Getting Things Done" al Esperanton: User:Jaffamcneill/Igi Aferojn Finitajn

Jim McNeill 11:47, 9 January 2010 (UTC)— Preceding unsigned comment added by Jaffamcneill (talk • contribs)

Sorry, this is the English Wikipedia and only accepts articles written in English. You should create your article at the Esperanto Wikipedia. – ukexpat (talk) 15:42, 9 January 2010 (UTC)

DoggyRide

DoggyRide DoggyRide

MvL 16:20, 10 January 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mattmontare (talk • contribs)

I think you need some more references to support the notability of the subject matter per WP:PRODUCT; it's also a little spammy in tone. I have tagged appropriately. – ukexpat (talk) 18:33, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

There is Love and There is Fear

Philibration (talk) 20:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)Phyllibration 1/10/2010

This is my first article about the "I Can Do IT" conference in Tampa Fla in Nov 2009. I have tried to follow the guidelines, but would appreciate constructive feedback to help me with the article.

Center for Higher Education Policy Analysis

User:Stefanir/Center for Higher Education Policy Analysis

The Center for Higher Education Policy Analysis is a leading research center at the University of Southern California.

Stefanir (talk) 01:03, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

Brenda Jean Patrick

This evening, I completed an article that was in a user space (User:Captaincorgi/Brenda Jean Patrick) and moved it to Brenda Jean Patrick. I did so after (1) removing sections of the text that had been questioned by a reviewer; (2) fixing the references using the appropriate Wikipedia format; and (3) adding five links--one related to the subject herself, two to the issue of customer service (within Wikipedia) and two to the issue of customer service in schools.

What will happen next?

Captaincorgi (talk) 02:26, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

I have reviewed and removed the tag. It's a good start, but needs further work. I have tagged it with some appropriate maintenance tags and please take a look at WP:MOSBIO. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 16:26, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Mars to Stay

Hi, suggestions welcome for improving this first draft of an article on "Mars to Stay"

User:Ericmachmer/Mars to Stay

Thanks for your help, it is appreciated...

Ericmachmer (talk) 06:56, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

Hotel Tofo Mar

Please can someone review and release the article on Hotel Tofo Mar User:FBImagineering/Hotel Tofo Mar

There is some historical importance of the hotel that I am still finding out but a treaty was signed with regards to Mozambique independence at this hotel and it is one of the oldest hotels in the area..

FBImagineering (talk) 12:56, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

At the moment the article does not indicate how or why the subject is notable per WP:N - the sources cited do not provide the significant coverage in reliable sources required to establish notability. Also, your user page is promotional in violation of WP:UP and your username appears to be a violation of the user name policy. – ukexpat (talk) 16:35, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Lactic acid fermentation

Soo… I’ve been working on lactic acid fermentation for a few days, and want to know what you all think about it. I’m reasonably sure that it conforms to standard policy, except for the decided lack of references in the first few sections. I’m right on fixing that, but am being lazy (and occupied with schoolwork), so will probably get to it in the next couple of days.

Thank you! Just for comparison, this is the article before I began. It was, um, pretty bad. Insorak ♫ talk 21:10, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

Looking good. I made a couple of minor formatting changes. – ukexpat (talk) 16:44, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Reverend Bob Childress

I am hoping that I can get some feedback for an article that I created. It is about a noteworthy Appalachian Minister. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Reverend_Bob_Childress. Any input or additions would be welcome. Elmmapleoakpine (talk) 00:31, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

User:Georgesh1/Heroes In the Sky(game)

Hello. I am looking for a friendly user who would like to look at my draft that I created. It is about a computer game. The draft page is there as a link. Any inputs, additions, and a little bit of deletion would be welcome.Georgesh1 (talk) 3:39, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Comunis

Hi, I started this article about a project, Comunis, which will produce interesting tools and benchmarks on spatial development. This project runs under an european Program, Interreg IV B Alpine Space, which has also created a page on Wikipedia. - How can I publish this Comunis page on the main page ? - Maybe I am not certified ? - Should I use another title like "Commercial Location Development" ? - What kind of references should I put as it is an international public program? After it I'll link this page from the Alpine Space Programme page.

Thanks for your comments and help.

Fparvex (talk) 13:42, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Marcus Cornish

My first attempt at creating an article from scratch, and also my first attempt at writing about a person (and one who is still living). It arose from people asking who created the sculpture of Paddington Bear in Paddington railway station in London, which I photographed. I would welcome any feedback on the article. I'm particularly concerned about whether or not the subject meets the notability guidelines for articles about people. Many thanks in advance to anyone who can spare a few minutes to review and comment. -- DMS (talk) 15:52, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Nice work! Judging from the sources you have cite he is most definitely notable. I made a couple of formatting changes. I think it is worthy of a DYK nomination. Will keep you posted on that. – ukexpat (talk) 16:00, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

DYK nomination: Template talk:Did you know#Articles created/expanded on January 10. – ukexpat (talk) 16:19, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Thank you! -- DMS (talk) 16:27, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Chris Kovarik

I have juts written my first article on Austrialian mountain bike legend Chris Kovarik and would appreciate any opinions/feeds back on the article. You can find it in my userspace here http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TinaEPO/Chris_Kovarik —Preceding unsigned comment added by TinaEPO (talk • contribs) 15:54, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Peter Dunn (author)

I'd be grateful to have the "new" template removed from this page Peter Dunn (author) on business writer and speaker Peter Dunn, originally created on December 17. (Thanks for the disambiguation tag, added 12/26 after my request.) Many thanks for additional feedback. EFSlattery (talk) 17:56, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

I have reviewed and removed the tag. I also made some formatting changes, including removing most of the inline external links (per WP:EL) and converting the rest into references. The lead paragraph is also too long - please take a look at WP:LEAD, it should briefly summarise the rest of article, at the moment, it is most of the article. Hope this helps.-ukexpat (talk) 18:58, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

LocalEats

Summary of new article: Description of website/smartphone app/book series LocalEats, published by Where The Locals Eat.

This is my first article, so any advice is very much welcome! Thanks.

Cathrjohnson —Preceding unsigned comment added by Cathrjohnson (talk • contribs) 17:57, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

correct date of birth

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ranjeeta_Kaur

Ranjeeta "Robby" Kaur (born 22 September 1962) is an Indian movie actress.[1] She was trained at FTII. She has appeared in around 47 films. October 22, 1962 (age 47)

in ur wiki there is two date of birth is shown for Ranjeeta Kaur plz rectife it....... —Preceding unsigned comment added by Sharma1988vivek (talk • contribs) 18:05, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

How do we know which date is correct? Do you have a reliable source? – ukexpat (talk) 18:31, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Bert Morgan

Bert Morgan Bert MorganGrandcraft (talk) 21:29, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Jason Smart

Jason Smart is a local "celebrity" for his work in state politics which has now progressed to Russian politics. His work in post-Soviet politics has been unusual for an American to pursue. I read one of his articles and really empathized with his points. I appreciate any comments or ideas on how this article can be improved. Thank you! Джейсон Смарт известный человек который работает в Америке и России. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Yuriipetrovich/jasonsmart --Yuriipetrovich (talk) 21:31, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Philip J Day

Philip J Day

Could I please have feedback relating to this article? It's an article about a director/producer names Philip J Day, I created it using the draft option and then published it directly.

Thank you,

Katie Greenfield —Preceding unsigned comment added by Edgewest (talk • contribs) 22:50, 12 January 2010 (UTC)

Jerome Elston Scott

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Extracare4u/JeromeElstonScott

Hello Everyone,

Take a look at my article. Any advice would be great.

Extracare4u (talk) 00:46, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

Globe effect (optics)

Globe effect (optics) User:Merlitz/Globe effect (optics)

This is a new entry, related to visual optics and instrumentation

Merlitz (talk) 09:14, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

HicCalc

User:Msmsshyam/HicCalc

HicCalc

An educational open-source graphics calculator written in Java by Manu M. Pillai. The program source code is available freely under the GPL license and hence, can be manipulated and used as a part of, or as a stand-alone program. This scientific utility can be used to create graphs of math functions by passing the function as input. The software supports unlimited exponents on variables. The software was being distributed as a product of 'HicSys Inc', but future versions may not be a part of the company.

Compatibility

As the software is written in Java, it can be run on any Java compatible system, which includes Windows, Mac and most Linux distributions.

Version History

The version available for download is currently HicCalc 1.0 .The version has all the bugs from version 1.0 corrected, in addition to new features. HicCalc 1.0 is also available for download from the Sourceforge database.

Constraints

Since the software is still in its 'Beta' stage, there are a few bugs that are being corrected, and hence the software needs to be updated frequently.

External links

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Msmsshyam (talk) 12:00, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

Brian David Smith

[15]

I have written a new article about Dr Brian Smith, an innovative thinker and prolific author in the field of Marketing Strategy. I'd appreciate any suggestions and help, especially improving the format, references, links etc. as this is the first article I've written. I also think it would be helpful to upload a couple of pictures - one of Smith and one of "Smith's Wheel" mentioned in the article - but I don't know how. Finally, have I got the references and external links correct?

13:06, 13 January 2010 (UTC)~Wickie Bruce —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wickie Bruce (talk • contribs)

Brian David Smith

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wickie_Bruce/Brian_David_Smith

I've written a new article about Dr Brian Smith, an innovative thinker and prolific author in the field of Marketing Strategy. I'd appreciate help in getting it right, in particular formatting, references and external links, as this is my first article. I also have two images that I think would be useful to upload - one is a picture of Smith, another is an image of "Smith's Wheel" that is mentioned in the article.

Help appreciated. Thanks

Wickie Bruce (talk) 13:15, 13 January 2010 (UTC) Wickie Bruce 13/Jan/2010