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International Forum on Disability Management

Serifz (talk) 00:07, 20 November 2009 (UTC)Serifz, November 19, 2009[reply]

Draft is at User:Serifz/International Forum on Disability Management. – ukexpat (talk) 00:34, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Generally looks OK, except I see no evidence of discussion of this event in reliable sources. Seems likely it is Notable, but we need to include evidence.

Some of your external source links were mangled, I fixed them. Also made a minor copy edit change. Is there an external link for the second meeting in Maastricht?--SPhilbrick T 17:46, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Paul Welday

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I am a new wikipedia editor looking for this article's validity to be accepted. What do I do? It is for Paul Welday. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Soccer4926 (talk • contribs) 02:24, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I see one or two problems. See WP:CRYSTAL. This appears to be about someone who might be nominated or elected to office. I don't know whether announcing one's candidacy for office is sufficient for notability, but I kinda doubt it. (I'm not admin, I'm just an editor like you, so don't take this as gospel!)

There's also the issue of regional interest. If a person is running for a federal office, I think the person needs to be notable on their own until they actually win the race. Think of Al Franken of Minnesota (or Sonny Bono of CA, or Fred Grandy of IA). He had already established a notable career before running for the US Senate. I don't see notability yet for Mr. Welday. My 2 cents. BTW, remember to sign your entries. Dcs002 (talk) 11:52, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your analysis is correct, please see WP:POLITICIAN. The article has been speedily deleted. – ukexpat (talk) 20:06, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Bog turtle

Done

Bog turtle is being actively worked on and is getting closer to being GA quality. But it isn't there yet. If anyone is interested, could you make a comment or two regarding things you see in the article that are problematic (and things that are working). Cheers, Wassupwestcoast (talk) 02:53, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

2 comments: 1) This looks really good to me! You have high standards I think. 2) In the "Scientific Classification" section (taxonomy), class and order are missing. Any reason? Was it intentional? Again, I think this article looks really good. Nice pictures, and I like the endangered species scale graphic. Dcs002 (talk) 11:59, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking the time! Very good point about needing a taxonomy section. Cheers!Wassupwestcoast (talk) 15:12, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, we appreciate all the help we can get. I am going to check the taxonomy box right now. Thanks to both westcoast and Dcs002.--NYMFan69-86 (talk) 21:10, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have added the class and order on the page, again thanks for the feedback.--NYMFan69-86 (talk) 21:23, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your help. --Merry Beth (talk) 16:52, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Homeowners of Texas

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How am I doing? Please check out Homeowners of Texas. It describes a non-profit that seeks to protect people from corporate abuse. I’m the Communications Director, so I had to work extra hard to be neutral and unbiased. In the spirit of full disclosure, I declared my potential Conflict of Interest in the DISCUSSION page, where I also address potential issues of notability and copyright. Is that the best place for that? I rewrote my original article (as a draft this time) to address issues raised by an administrator, andI hope I got it right this time with an article acceptable to the Wikipedia community. Thanks for your help. Wayne Caswell, Communications Director, Homeowners of Texas
(waynecaswell AT homeownersoftexas.org) TXhomeowner (talk) 03:59, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I can see you've put a lot of thought into the notability issue, but unfortunately I don't think you've quite got it yet. I think it's still at risk for speedy deletion.

First of all, I don't think there should be a notability section per se in the article. Notability is established within the text of the article. But in the notability section, you cited your organization's website three times as the source for the good works your organization has accomplished. Articles about organizations can't cite themselves in order to establish notability. (Imagine a person doing that. They make their own website listing all the good things they've done, and then start a WP article about themselves, citing their own website as evidence of notability. People can't do that, and neither can organizations. It lacks verifiability.) The two remaining sources cited in that section are cited in support of the claim that two state agencies also criticized the TRCC. I didn't read through those sources (the first one I opened was 54 pages long), but unless they satisfy the notability criteria directly for your organization they won't work either.

Because of these issues, it still reads like a self-serving publicity piece. I don't think that's what you intended, but that's how it looks when an organization claims certain accomplishments and then cites itself as the source for those accomplishments.

I think your organization might very well be notable by WP standards. I just don't think you've established that yet. Look for news or magazine reports, maybe quotes by prominent people... If the organization is notable, it should be pretty easy to find this kind of documentation for it. Good luck! Dcs002 (talk) 11:37, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

And of course there is still the problem that TXhomeowner has a huge conflict of interest here. It is not an insurmountable problem, but will lead to the article receiving considerable scrutiny, as indeed it has in the past - it has been speedily deleted at least twice. TXhomeowner has also been blocked as a WP:SPAMNAME. – ukexpat (talk) 15:44, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Oops! I said "Look for news or magazine reports, maybe quotes by prominent people..." There are already news reports cited right below the paragraph I had commented on. Sorry!

However, the clear majority of citations still point to the organization's website. I think the problem still exists that it looks like a self-promotion piece. It might be best if you remove all information that's supported by citations pointing to the organization's website and see what you have left. Try to build the article based on existing media reports. Remember, verifiability usually requires that key information comes from sources other than the subject of the article itself. Dcs002 (talk) 11:13, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Eric Gillette article

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Hello, I am requesting feedback on an article I created, which can be located at Eric Gillette. I appreciate any pointers or criticisms that anyone could provide.

Joebjay20 (talk) 14:25, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Please take a look at the tags that have been placed on the draft. If moved to the mainspace in its current form, it would almost certainly be speedily deleted as advertising. – ukexpat (talk) 18:40, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi ukexpat,

I have made changes to the article and I would appreciate your assistance with further feedback.

Joebjay20 (talk) 16:06, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This article still lacks notability IMO. A contributing author who owns his own business? I'm not at all as well versed in WP policies as ukexpat is, but my gut is telling me this article still isn't gonna make it based on notability, and it appears to me still as a promotion piece. Dcs002 (talk) 13:59, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Novus Biologicals

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Novus Biologicals - I created a new page for an international antibody company that has recently won a few awards. Feedback would be greatly appreciated.

AmyChamberlain (talk) 19:28, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

First of all, as Product Marketing Manager for the company you have a huge conflict of interest and are strongly advised not to create or edit articles about the company, as it is very hard for you to mantain a neutral point of view. I have looked at the article and the tone is a little promotional, and you need some more reliable sources to support notability. Please take a look at WP:CORP and WP:FAQO. – ukexpat (talk) 19:54, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Paper and Pulp Industry in Dryden

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Hello all!

I have written an new article onPaper and Pulp Industry in Dryden. So, I am hoping that someone would take a look at it ,and hopefully someone give me any feedback for my article.

Thank you for your time!

User:MT0220 17:35, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia does not use capital letters for common nouns in its article title - see WP:CAPS - so I have moved the article to Paper and pulp industry in Dryden, Ontario. In terms of content, it is fine. Gandalf61 (talk) 13:50, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Elizabeth Needham article

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Help!! There are so many choices I don't know where to go to comment on the article about Elizabeth Needham the brothel keeper. I was actually looking to see what you had for Elizabeth Needham the First Fleet convict, and I was intrigued to see that Elizabeth Needham the brothel keeper had the Earl of Winchelsea as a client. Was he the son or the husband of Lady Charlotte Finch? Elizabeth Needham the convict was born in 1762 Elizabeth Gore, the daughter of George Gore and his wife Elizabeth nee Lake. George was the coachman to Lady Charlotte Finch and Elizabeth their daughter, was brought up in their house. Elizabeth Gore married Henry Needham, a butcher, on 11 Feb 1782 and they had a child. Shc was convicted of stealing two pairs of silk stockings and transported to Australia for seven years, where she served her sentence and married three more times, becoming a useful and very wealthy member of the new colony. Having seen your article, I'm wondering if this Elizabeth Needham the brothel keeper could have been Elizabeth Gore's mother-in-law? Is there anything known about her possible children? Merilyn Pedrick Aldgate South Australia —Preceding unsigned comment added by 118.210.255.218 (talk) 02:17, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia has a reference desk (click WP:RD) for questions like this. Go there and click the Humanities link to ask your question. Dcs002 (talk) 11:22, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Popup camper

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Popup camper I created a new article about popup campers, a popular type of recreational vehicle. This is my first article, so advice is appreciated. Korey99 (talk) 15:06, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think overall it looks nice -- much better than my first article. Just three things: Did you license the photos properly? (They look great, illustrate the topic very well.) And did you mean to say AC to DC converters instead of DC to AC? (I'm not a camper -- I don't know. It's just that if they have deep cycle batteries and you want to run AC items, it would be the other way around. Again, I ask because I don't know.) Finally, just concerning visual appearance, it seems that most of the article space is taken up with lists. I personally think that makes it a bit clunky to read. Hope this helps! Dcs002 (talk) 10:56, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the help! The photos are all my own work, and I submitted them to Wikimedia commons. Only one of them got a request for "permission" though. The AC to DC is actually correct (it's a device to get DC power when plugged in). About the lists - Do you think I should collapse them into paragraph form? That is the way I originally had it. Thanks for all the comments! As an aside, I'd love if someone could help getting my image annotations to work on the article page, but I'll seek help through a more appropriate forum. --Korey99 (talk) 22:59, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Well, remember I'm kinda new at editing too, but I think the lists of features would look better if they were trimmed down and put back into paragraph form, with sentences that give just a few examples at each level, such as "Low price models might include features such as..., while mid-range models might offer features like... For more extravagant amenities, such as..., customers can expect to pay top dollar." I don't think every available feature needs to be mentioned (though I'm sure there are more that you already left out). I'm just giving an opinion as a person who loves to read WP articles, not as someone with a lot of expertise in this kind of writing. And thanks for clarifying the AC to DC thing. :o) Good luck also with your photo annotations. I'm afraid I'm not the guy to ask. Dcs002 (talk) 14:21, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Cameron Knowles Show

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The Cameron Knowles Show Knowlamp (talk) 19:00, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

A good draft article. I think it is ready to be moved into main article space. Gandalf61 (talk) 13:55, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Are you serious that there's no page for the Bill O'Reilly show???? Xcviii (talk) 01:21, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sears Hometown Stores

Done

SearsHTS/Sears Hometown Stores

SearsHTS (talk) 22:03, 21 November 2009 (UTC) SearHTS November 21, 2009[reply]

Your draft article is not ready for main article space yet, because it has no sources. I have moved it back to your user space, User:SearsHTS/Sears Hometown Stores. In addition, your choice of user name indicates that you may have a conclict of interest when writing about this company, in which case it may be inappropriate for you to be writing this article at all. Gandalf61 (talk) 14:09, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Chandra Om

Hello,

This is the first page i have created, subject is Chandra Om User:Premandom/Chandra_om, a well-known teacher in Yoga circles. i am intersted if you think it needs any work, and what type before i try to post it for everyone to see. Thanks very much.

Premandom (talk) 23:30, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Good job on the article not being promotional, but aren't you in violation of the conflict of interests rules? Xcviii (talk) 01:16, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Premandom - thank you for your time and the feedback Xcviii. i am not sure what you mean about the conflict of interest. Is it because my username has a 'om' in it? 'Prem and Om' is how i sign some of my emails. It means Love and God and i thought it was a nice username. Sorry for the confusion. Should i try to post it under a less confusing looking username? Or do you have any other suggestions? Premandom (talk) 13:48, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your user name is fine. However I disagree with Xcviii about the draft article. It does read as promotional to me, more like a press release than an encyclopedic article. Phrases such as "dedicated her life to selfless service", "initiated by Sri Dharma Mittra into his spiritual lineage", "dedicating her life to the service of others" are not encyclopedic. – ukexpat (talk) 16:40, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

μWatch

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I have just written a brief article on an unusual DIY watch called the User:NigelFraserKer/μWatch. I'm cautious about the fact that the name includes the symbol "μ" and therefore may cause problems with people searching for it...perhaps the title should be "μWatch or uWatch"?

NigelFraserKer (talk) 11:19, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

While this watch sounds fantastic, I'm afraid the article reads like an advertisement. That plus notability problems might easily make this an article for speedy deletion if moved to the main space. Dcs002 (talk) 14:27, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

When you say it reads like an advertisement, is there any guidance to make it sound less advert-like? (I deliberately avoided any subjective language - there are only facts.) I agree that it would be good to establish the notability better...I'll look into this one. NigelFraserKer (talk) 15:37, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

See WP:SPAM, WP:N and WP:RS. – ukexpat (talk) 22:58, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I don't know if you've made changes since the last comment, but it seems very factual and non-advert-esque. However, until you bulk it up with some notability stuff, it is premature to publish. Xcviii (talk) 01:19, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Tarif Khalidi

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Tarif Khalidi Tarif Khalidi http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Angiebean1256/Tarif_Khalidi&oldid=327104465

Angiebean1256 (talk) 11:53, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

A good article. I have removed the unreviewed tag. Gandalf61 (talk) 10:51, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Corby & Baily

I am looking for feedback and guidance on the above article on British Artists Corby and Baily.

Corby & Baily

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Corby_%26_Baily

Many thanks. Mothas

(Mothas (talk) 18:07, 22 November 2009 (UTC))[reply]

This reads like a resume. After reading it, I would not be able to tell a Corby & Bailey work if it hit me in the face. What movement does it belong to? What are their influences? Whom did they influence? How can their work be identified as opposed to that of other artists? Xcviii (talk) 01:14, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Ks0stm/Mesovortices

User:Ks0stm/Mesovortices is a draft of an article that I am writing about mesovortices, and I am looking for feedback on how it can be improved (I'm guessing by adding more sources, but what else?). Right now the article incorporates text from mesocyclone and Eye (cyclone)#Eyewall mesovortices, and will hopefully eventually be a main article for those two topics, rather than vice versa. Any and all input appreciated, Ks0stm ^(T•C•G) 00:25, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, I'm not finding it. --SPhilbrick T 17:56, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Camp Mar-Y-Mac

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This is the first article I have ever posted. It is based on original research about a camp that I attended and worked at which fell prey to a growth-driven hydroelectric project. Please see http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Camp_Mar-Y-Mac_Dinkey_Creek,_California The article title is Camp Mar-Y-Mac Dinkey Creek, California

I would greatly appreciate feedback; one question I have is why does the last part of the article appear unformatted in a box--is it too long? Thanks. Dulcie Chatwood Dulcie2c (talk) 01:49, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have removed the unreviewed tag. I have also fixed the formatting problem that you mentioned - if you start a paragraph with a space then Wikipedia does not wrap the text in the paragraph. Easily fixed by removing initial spaces in paragraphs. Gandalf61 (talk) 12:00, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have moved the article to Camp Mar-Y-Mac - the location is not necessary in the title. I have also removed the personal recollections as references. Personal recollections are not reliable sources as defined on Wikipedia. I also have concerns about notability generally. Only a couple of the sources cited would appear to be relevant to the notability of the camp, as opposed to the ups and downs of the hydroelectric project, so I think we need more sources dealing with the camp itself. – ukexpat (talk) 18:38, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

If there are any court cases involving the camp, that might be a good notability reason (public record) to maintain this page. Xcviii (talk) 01:11, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

North Wilkesboro Fire Department

Done

Looking for feedback on a new page relating to the User:Nwfd/North_Wilkesboro_Fire_Department. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Nwfd (talk) 05:39, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think you have some notability issues here. Please read WP:ORG, WP:FAQO and WP:RS - in order to meet notability requirements you will need to show significant coverage in reliable sources, the FD's own website doesn't count I am afraid. – ukexpat (talk) 18:45, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Jonathan Westhues

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Jonathan Westhues http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jonathan_Westhues

This entry needs to be reviewed to update its "new, unreviewed" status. Thanks.

Wkp123 (talk) 11:30, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think that an article about a person should be biographical, and thus it should have a section on early life and family life, education, stuff like that. Not just a curriculum vita (or resume). I've got many more academic publications than that, & I'm certainly not notable. He seems marginally notable -- I can't say one way or the other. Good luck! Dcs002 (talk) 14:44, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Mautner Project

Any feedback is greatly appreciated: [[1]] (Actsoccer (talk) 17:45, 24 November 2009 (UTC))[reply]

I see two issues. The first is Notability . Most of your references are to the project itself or other sites not qualifying as reliable sources. You do have some references which I think qualify, but they barely mention the organization. I fear that this article might not survive if it does not have better references.

The second point is easier to address. The footnoting style is not standard within WP. You can look at footnotes for help. Also, I personally find it very helpful to use the optional citation gadget. To install, go to "My preferences", select the rightmost tab "Gadgets", the check the box next to refTools (in the Editing gadgets section). Once installed, it will add a new button "Cite" to your editing toolbar. Click on it to add a citation. Makes it much easier.--SPhilbrick T 18:25, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sears Hometown Stores (2)

Done

Sears Hometown Stores

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sears_Hometown_Stores

Shaunak Dave Nov 24, 2009Shaunakhdave (talk) 18:34, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It is still way too spammy and has been tagged for speedy deletion. Please read WP:YFA, WP:CORP, WP:FAQO, WP:RS and WP:SPAM. – ukexpat (talk) 18:49, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This page reads as if I'm reading off the sears.com website.. didn't check, but I wouldn't be surprised if it's copy-pasted considering the first-person style. Find outside sources and make the article neutral instead of promoting Sears so much (Actsoccer (talk) 19:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC))[reply]

Temple Touch Thermometer

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I could really use someone's help editing the User:Grchapman5/Temple Touch Thermometer page I have created. I have done the best I can to ensure that the article is written from a neutral perspective devoid of any sales bias. Any and all comments you guys could send my direction would be great as I want to launch the page soon without running the risk of speedy deletion. Thanks in advance for your help.

Sincerely,

Graham Chapman <e-mail redacted> Grchapman5 (talk) 19:22, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

We still have some big issues here. The draft still reads like a promotional piece for the product and its manufacturer and I suspect that, had it been in the mainspace, it would not have survived the speedy deletion nomination. Are you associated with 919 Marketing Company and if so, does that company provide marketing services for this product? If so, you have a huge conflict of interest and are directed to read WP:COI. In addition, the images in the article that have been uploaded to Commons do not show any evidence of permission from the copyright owner and have been tagged as such. If this product really is notable someone will write an article about it sooner or later. Please also take a look at WP:YFA, WP:CORP, WP:FAQO and WP:RS. – ukexpat (talk) 20:01, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Seriously...this needs a lot of work. You need to omit all references to where it can be purchased and who markets it. Imagine you are describing the device to somebody who has never heard about it. That's what your article should say. You should also say how it works/science behind it, and whether it has been FDA approved (or whatever agency). You should also cite links to newspaper articles talking about why this device is important. You also need to delete the promotional section about Medism. Xcviii (talk) 01:06, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Grooming Lounge

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User:Bluelinenine/Grooming Lounge is an article that I recently posted and I'm looking for feedback.

Thanks, Adam

Bluelinenine (talk) 21:53, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think your draft article needs more third party sources to demonstrate notability. Gandalf61 (talk) 15:31, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Corinne Kempa

Done

Corinne Kempa

[[2]]

Andybuiadh (talk) 22:13, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your draft article is very short. It needs to be longer, and it needs to show that this actress is notable. Gandalf61 (talk) 15:32, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Shared Hope International

Done

I just created a page for User:Karinandrew/Shared Hope International and was wondering if anyone could look at it and give me feedback or tips. Thanks!! Karinandrew (talk) 22:31, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your draft article is looking good. I think it is ready to be moved to main article space. Gandalf61 (talk) 15:36, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:GregBeaver/Chiara Quartet

Done

User:GregBeaver/Chiara Quartet User:GregBeaver/Chiara Quartet

GregBeaver (talk) 06:31, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Not a bad attempt. I think this could go into the mainspace with just a little bit of work. I did not see articles on quartets that are highly assesed but it looks like you might have shown that the general notability guidelines are met.

Sources

More coverage such as this review to assert notability. Sources like this will improve the article. Without these, notability is questionable.
cdbaby.com and smsclassical.com really are not appropriate reliable sources. Since they are sales, it comes across promotional which gets new articles deleted.
Throw the citations into templates. See [Wikipedia:Citing sources/example style|examples]]. For reviews, Template:Cite news is a good template.

Layout

The layout needs to be changed. See Wikipedia:Layout.
The lead should be a summary. The lead should not go into any detial that is not expanded upon in the main body. Try moving most of that into a new "History" section. The following section could go into that section as paragraphs or subsections as well.
The discography should be part of a "Works" section which should come after the prose and before the "References". I recommend taking it out of the table and putting it in the format seen here A good format is:

Title (year), label – notes

The external links needs to be trimmed. See what should be linked, maybe linked, and not linked. For example: The Brick, Kansas City does not provide a unique resource needed in this article. The line in the body is sufficient.
Other

"In this and the following season, the quartet will be performing all 16 of Ludwig van Beethoven's string quartets at Harvard University, the University of Nebraska-Lincoln and Music at Deerfield in Northampton, MA.": This isn't their webpage. It is an encyclopedic article so watch out for promotion. Something like this could be in but needs to be worded as if it was not going to be updated "In the 2009 and 2010,..." See Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Chronological items.
I'm not terribly familiar with the topic. What is "Quartet-in-residence". Write the article so that those unfamiliar with the topic can fully grasp the subject. Wikilinks might help, too.
This] is a good mention from a critic. OK for the article but should not be in an "Award" section.
"Club Premieres project." does not need to be bolded. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style (text formatting). There are other minor things that I can grab if you want. Years need en dashes for example (2009–2010)

Cptnono (talk) 00:19, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Chandka Medical College

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Chandka Medical College i have wriiten this article for first time, plz check wether the Refrences i have given are considerable or not. i should also mention here that i myself am a student f Chandka Medical College. Dr.Schayan (talk) 10:22, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your draft article at User:Dr.Schayan/new article name here still needs a lot of work. You need to improve the grammar and spelling in the article. You need to improve its layout and format - look at how other Wikipedia article are formatted, and try to make yours look the same. Most importantly, you need to provide references to third party sources which demonstrate the notability of the college; a single link to the college's own website is not enough to show notability. Gandalf61 (talk) 11:05, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Jewel Kid

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Requests for feedback on new article Jewel Kid please

Xer014 (talk) 11:14, 25 November 2009 (UTC) xer014 25/11/09 Xer014 (talk) 11:14, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The article has been speedily deleted as spam. Please see WP:Spam. – ukexpat (talk) 18:40, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

3CX Phone System

I have updated this page based on the feedback received User:Voipguy/3CX_Phone_System and would welcome further feedback Voipguy (talk) 13:52, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dynamic Language

Done

Dynamic Language

The article is based on a communications company based in Seattle, WA. They focus on translations and etc. Their article should asses their credibility. Thank you for helping edit this page!

DynamicDLC (talk) 14:49, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The article has been proposed for deletion. – ukexpat (talk) 18:26, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Richard H. Bernstein

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I just wrote my first Wikipedia entry on Richard H. Bernstein after seeing him speak at a conference earlier in the month. Any feedback that you could offer for improving this piece would be most appreciated! --Edtechgal (talk) 15:24, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have reviewed and removed the "unreviewed" template. It does still read a little like a curriculum vitae, so the tone may need some work. – ukexpat (talk) 18:49, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JanaDixon/ipodmeister

Hi there! I wrote this article on a company I heard about on the news. I've tried to write it once before and it came across too advertisment like I suppose. I was hoping to get some feedback to make it acceptable for wikipedia. Thanks for any help!

JanaDixon (talk) 18:09, 25 November 2009 (UTC)JanaDixon 11/25/09[reply]

At the moment the tone is still too promotional in my view so the tone will need some work before it is moved to the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 18:56, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I revised the article and added a picture. I think. I'm still a little confused and I have 12 windows open with different guides. Is it still too promotional? Thanks again!

JanaDixon (talk) 16:09, 2 December 2009 (UTC) JanaDixon 12/2/09[reply]

I think in order for this to be sufficiently nonpromotional, you need to think of it as a page to explain another page. Such as, if there is a general social movement towards bartering/recycling, you could talk about this group in that context, and provide links to the main wiki page talking about that movement. As long as all the article does is talk about a company or group and its objectives/goals/projects, it's not an encyclopedia article; it's a promotional item. Xcviii (talk) 00:59, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry again to bother everyone! I tried to add more about the recycling and Voluntary Simplicity aspects of the company, better? Worse?

JanaDixon (talk) 19:50, 7 December 2009 (UTC) JanaDixon[reply]

user:emiliephelps/Daniel Lorenzetti

I've created a page about the documentary photographer Daniel Lorenzetti at user:emiliephelps/Daniel Lorenzetti, who is an author of The Birth of Coffee. I'm not sure if all aspects of his career are considered notable (his contributions to the technology and the internet seem worthy in my opinion), or just his documentary work. I'm ready to hear any and all feedback! Thanks, Emiliephelps (talk) 19:17, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Combustion Chemical Vapor Deposition

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User:Aartich/ Combustion Chemical Vapor Deposition Aartich (talk) 22:44, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Someone else has already added a notice that it reads like an advertisement. I concur. I see no evidence Notability referenced to reliable sources.--SPhilbrick T 19:50, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Mcs102/Zina Saro-Wiwa

Done

Hello,

I am looking for feedback for an article I have created as a subpage (User:Mcs102/Zina Saro-Wiwa). I've read the tutorials and help pages, and would like to hear if there is anything I should do before moving the article to a public page.

Thanks very much.

Mcs102 (talk) 23:58, 25 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have reviewed the draft and I think it is ready to move to the main space. Let me know if you need assistance with this. Also, some additional third party references will be necessary - when it's moved it will be tagged as requiring additional sources. – ukexpat (talk) 19:16, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I moved it for you to Zina Saro-Wiwa. – ukexpat (talk) 18:50, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Complication

Done

The problem remains at least for me and a few other people is that Wikipedia blocks are insufficient. It's very easy to find an open proxy list and change your proxy server and port number in a matter of minutes. Thanks! South Bay (talk) 00:57, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This is not the correct forum for this discussion, please try WP:VPP. – ukexpat (talk) 19:17, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Linnda Durré

Done

Linnda Durré Just want some advice on how I can improve it. Thanks. User:Tnegron14/Linnda Durré --Tnegron14 (talk) 04:17, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have taken a look at the draft and I think the subject probably meets our notability guidelines. However, the article should be broken down into sections - please peruse WP:LAYOUT and WP:MOSBIO. The article also requires some third party reliable sources to support notability. – ukexpat (talk) 19:24, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Russian Scientist Valery Dudyshev

Hello. I am new to Wikipedia and wrote an article about Russian scientist Valery Dudyshev. As of now, I left the entry on my talk page User:Ruye and I would appreciate it, if you could take a look at it and see if it meets Wikipedia's criteria. I am very grateful for your help. Thank you very much! Ruye (talk) 21:02, 26 November 2009 (UTC) Ruye[reply]

Hello once more. Since I don't want to add to the long list of entries, I'll just attach this to the first question. The article I wrote is now published under Valery Dudyshev and I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you very much in advance. Ruye (talk) 19:33, 3 December 2009 (UTC)Ruye[reply]

Naz Foundation v. National Capital Territory of Delhi

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Naz Foundation v. National Capital Territory of Delhi

Hi, I noticed that this important recent decision was linked on several Wikipedia pages, but no article exists as yet. I have tried to scrupulously follow Wikipedia guidelines, but since this is my first full length article, I may have gone astray. I would be really grateful for any feedback. Thanks in advance! Sroyon (talk) 21:52, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Congratulations on your first full length article. Better than my first attempt for sure! A few things:

There is already a Section 377 of the Indian Penal Code article. Do you think the case deserves its own article or would it be better merged? I think that this amount of of content may disrupt the weight of the main article and I have been surprised before at how well legal articles come together. however, it looks like there is the risk of the articles duplicating themselves to a certain extent. That would be the only barrier to it going into the main space that I can see so I'll leave that up to you.
It looks like you accidentally said the exact opposite f what you meant (or this is some new sort of vandalism ;) ) with "This phrase was interpreted to mean all forms of sexual activity other than homosexual penile-vaginal." did you mean "heterosexual" Try: "...heterosexual penile-vaginal intercourse".
Is "160 (2009) DLT 277" the appropriate citation template? I don't recognize the format.
Do you have the sources available to add an "Arguments" section? It seems to be lacking content since it jumps from Background to Judgment.
The blockquote may not be long enough for a blockquote (see: WP:MOSQUOTE) but I'm not sure.
"It should be noted..." is something to avoid (see WP:EDITORIAL). Don't note it just say it.
"Activists[15],..." should be "Activists,[15]...".

I'm sure there are other minor things but I feel the biggest next step is adding some content to the actual legal proceedings. I personally wouldn't object to this going live. Consider taking a look at the best of the best (according to WikiProject Law's Category:FA-Class legal articles) and some of the other cases seen at Category:GA-Class legal articles. Consider checking out [Wikipedia:WikiProject Law/Assessment]] if this is moved into the main space.Cptnono (talk) 04:01, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for your kind words and your meticulous and helpful feedback. It is extremely appreciated. I will address your suggestions in order:

I think the decision was important enough to merit a separate article. I'll just take your advice and move it into mainspace, and let's see what the community thinks.
Whoops! Huge blooper. Corrected that.
Sorry about that. I am now using the citation template for court decisions.
I have lots of sources for an "Arguments" section; I didn't add it only because I feared it might make the article too long and tedious. However, since you advise it, I will add the section.
I have removed the blockquote formatting.
Changed that too.

I'm moving it to mainspace now. Thanks again!Sroyon (talk) 10:00, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Nicolas Peyrac

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Hi all. I have just written my first new article, about the French musician Nicolas Peyrac. See talk page for remarks and questions I have. Thanks in advance for reviewing. Jalwikip (talk) 08:26, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I left feedback at the article's talk page. Annalise (talk) 03:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

mainspace:Rapid Tears - the History of

Mainspace:Rapid Tears - the History of

Requesting feedback please

Michael J. Miller 18:00, 27 November 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mickstars5 (talk • contribs)

Environmental Health Foundation of Canada (EHFC)

Done

Environmental Health Foundation of Canada (EHFC) Hello to all you great volunteers. I am trying to post this information and I keep going around in circles. I guess I have to edit a few more in order to be able to post it. Can you please tell me if this is an acceptable addition. I am Vice chair of the foundation and a volunteer as well. And learning how to do this. I need to report back to the others if it is not acceptable. Thank you for your time. --Shenwiki (talk) 19:11, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I did not read it, but in general it's "dangerous" to edit on a subject you are closely connected or linked with, as it may cloud your NPOV. I would say that a vice chair is never a good judge of a NPOV. Also, you may be prone to include original/own research. Jalwikip (talk) 14:55, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Zameer_Rizvi

Just correcting the link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Samuel.chaudry1/Zameer_Rizvi —Preceding unsigned comment added by Samuel.chaudry1 (talk • contribs) 22:31, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi,

I have written an article about musician Zameer Rizvi Zameer_Rizvi. I would appreciate your feedback.

User:Samuel.chaudry1/Zameer_Rizvi

Thanks, Samuel

Samuel.chaudry1 (talk) 21:10, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Not bad. Xcviii (talk) 00:55, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

article name: American Feud: A History of Conservatives and Liberals

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Helpful, constructive feedback of the article: American Feud: A History of Conservatives and Liberals appreciated: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Guptaft/American_feud:_a_history_of_conservatives_and_liberals

thanks! Guptaft (talk) 21:16, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

First of all, you need to prove Notability. You can find the guidelines for films at WP:NF. Your other concern is layout and formatting. You have a reasonable amount of information, but it isn't very clearly-organized. Adding the film infobox would be a good start. You can find it at Template: Infobox Film. If you want a guide to the format the article should be in, you can find that at MOS:FILM. Annalise (talk) 16:33, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

German Gymnasium http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gymnasium_(Germany)

Gymnasium (Germany) So that would be very kind of you if you could proof the article and tell me: 1. If that article makes sense to you 2. If you have questions about the school that have not been answered by the article 3. If I should add some stuff about scientific studies dealing with the Gymnasium. Recently a lot of studies about Gymnasium and social class have been done and this is a "hot topic" in my home country... but I am not sure if that is so interesting for people from other countries and I already covered it in the article (did not cover the studies, but covered what political parties said about Gymnasium and social class). Thank you very much.--212.201.83.59 (talk) 21:37, 27 November 2009 (UTC) PS: That article was not written by me. I only contributed to it.--212.201.83.59 (talk) 21:39, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Would be also nice if you could tell me, if I prensented both sides in a fair light, when I wrote about that political discussion.--212.201.83.59 (talk) 22:26, 27 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Forgotten Fish Memory Orchestra

please can you provide feedback and guidance on this page. Forgotten Fish Memory Orchestra (FFMO) have been a notable phenomenon in Global Music and art theatre in the Netherlands and throughout Europe for the last ten years. Can you let me know if the article as it stands shows notability? If so and it can be made a Wiki page how do I upload images? —Preceding unsigned comment added by Vidura108 (talk • contribs) 03:25, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Le Butcherettes

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Le Butcherettes Please provide feedback for this page. It's a Mexican underground rock-punk band growing in the Mexican scene. I use references mostly from important Mexican Newspapers and official sites from a music fest and some Awards, one known blog from Red Bull and a photo page from a known photographer from Mexico. Of course they're all in spanish. The importance of this band also relies on being directly linked with three other bands artists known all over the world and might be interesting to lots of people. Thanks!

CarlosOm (talk) 03:38, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Consider adding a "Musical style" section from information in the current "History" section. Joy Division and Tool (band) are FA class articles and have variances of such a section. For additional FA articles related to bands check out Tool (band). See the best of the best at Category:FA-Class Rock music articles for ideas on how to improve your layout. Nice work following a decent layout, already, though.
It could be argued that the general notability guideline or (if necessary) the band specific notability guideline are not met. Sources need improvement. More are needed to both assert notability and expand the article. I also recommend finding some English sources if you can since it will make verification easier and editors will be less likely to call for deletion.

Blogs are typically not OK. They can be OK if writers are professionals and the blog is subject to appropriate vetting from an editorial staff. See Wikipedia:Reliable sources#Self-published and questionable sources and double-check to see if this is really a proper source
The same La Jornada is used twice. Add "ref name" in the citation template. Speaking of citation templates, use them. See: Wikipedia:Referencing for beginners
Does indieomusicawards.com.mx say they are the most prestigious award? Wording like that needs an independent source or a wikilink to a sourced article about the award.
tono.tv looks like pretty pictures but is not a good source
I assume El Universal (Mexico City) and La Jornada are OK but I don't speak Spanish and a few more should be provided to ensure that there is significant coverage.

It could use some grammar and spell check work. I changed "recluted" to "recruited" (I assumed let me know if that is wrong) and noticed that it doesn't read as clean as it could. For example: "A difference on the band's direction led Auryn Jolene to abruptly leave the band claiming the end of it leading to media confusion." is a little jumbled.
Per WP:ELNO, links to social networking sites are to be avoided. Cptnono (talk) 11:40, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Moved discussion to Talk:Le Butcherettes Cptnono (talk) 12:42, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Request for review of highly time-sensitive content for LGBT community tradition

Done

I am a new user and after taking the time to do a lot of research I finally created a page for the bridge of light, the gay new year.

But your system said I couldn't upload it because it was an autobiography!

What's up?

I moved it to a user page:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bridgeoflight/Bridge_of_light

Thanks for taking a look & letting me know if this is ready for publishing. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bridgeoflight (talk • contribs) 09:52, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Please find sources independent of the subject to assert notability. For something like this, I would recommend doing some google news archive searches to see if significant coverage is available from newspapers, magazines, or other reputable sources. It also comes across like a fan page with the list of principles. There are also concerns with general formatting, especially the citations. Take a look at Wikipedia:Your first article. You mentioned it in your edit summary so keep in mind that there is not a legitimate reason for this to be time sensitive. Best of luck and please let me know if you need a hand with reviewing sources.

Sign your posts with 4 of these:~~~~. Cptnono (talk) 10:18, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Fastflow (Computer Science)

Please take a look at Fastflow (Computer Science) article. It needs reveiewing by someone other than myself. Fastflow is a C++ template library implementing lock-free communications and synchronisations. Fastflow-based applications are particularly fast on multi-core machine. We tested it against may programming environment for multi-core, including OpenMP, Intel TBB, Posix threads, Cilk. In our experiments, Fastflow always demonstrated to be faster than all of them. Any question or comment is welcome.

Aldinuc (talk) 16:27, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Shield349/Greensulate

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Greensulate : User:Shield349/Greensulate Hey I would like to get some helpful feedback on that page, My previous post had quite a tragic fate, so i'm trying to make sure i get everything right this time around.

Shield349 (talk) 19:06, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I put a reply on your talk page Richard-of-Earth (talk) 18:54, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Lets_Play_Live

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User:Axikal/Lets_Play_Live

Axikal (talk) 23:37, 28 November 2009 (UTC) The following is my first attempt at posting a Wikipedia article. It's about a webshow series that I've been hosting, and gives a brief (and soon to be elabourated) account on the creation of the series, where the series can be seen, and any other details about said series. I'd like to know what could be refined on this page, if possible. Thanks.[reply]

You need to establish notability of the subject. See also WP:ORG and WP:FAQO.
For people who know little about the internet, your article would be confusing. Internal links would help, so they could read about things mentioned like Web series, live-streaming, Perhaps you need to create an article about "Let's Play" genre of gaming internet movies as I can't figure out what it is. Richard-of-Earth (talk) 19:20, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

If it is moved to the mainspace in its current form it would almost certainly be speedily deleted as not showing the importance or significance of the subject matter. – ukexpat (talk) 19:54, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

DJ Frank E

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DJ Frank E User:Chrismarez/DJ Frank E Looking for feedback on this article before I request it to be moved. Any help is appreciated.

Chrismarez (talk) 01:24, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I cleaned it up a little, but you will need some better sources - blogs are not generally regarded as reliable sources per WP:RS. If notability can be supported by better sources, I will move it for you. – ukexpat (talk) 17:36, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

And there is still a potential copyvio issue - the text is very close to http://artistpublishinggroup.com/djfranke/ – ukexpat (talk) 17:40, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Peter Grubb, Jr.

This article is IMO ready to go live. Any suggestions would be appreciated.

LynnSGrubb (talk) 04:17, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:LynnSGrubb/Peter Grubb, Jr. – ukexpat (talk) 17:28, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Jehu Grubb

Jehu Grubb is ready to go live. Any comments to improve it would be appreciated.

LynnSGrubb (talk) 04:18, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Looking forward to get help for improvment of this article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 195.229.235.40 (talk) 06:57, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:LynnSGrubb/Jehu Grubb – ukexpat (talk) 17:16, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Society for Mormon Philosophy and Theology

Done

Society for Mormon Philosophy and Theology is ready to go live. Any comments are welcome; I was a DMOZ editor over ten years ago, and am rusty.

Of note: I do not like the way I linked internal pages of the same website for such a small article, so if there is a Best Practice to avoid this, please advise.

Thanks!

Wr!ter (talk) 07:07, 29 November 2009 (UTC)wr!ter[reply]

At the moment the draft says nothing about the notability of the subject. Please take a look at WP:ORG and WP:FAQO. You will need some reliable, third party, sources per WP:RS to establish notability. – ukexpat (talk) 17:12, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Zebra_Mix!

Done

Hello,

Clearly, this is my first attempt here, and I don't think I've even entered the article title correctly, but I don't understand the directions. I apologize in advance for any confusion.

User:Ndaley/Zebra Mix!

Any and all constructive criticism is very welcome.

I plan on adding a picture and a chart with the basic company overview: founders names, contact info, logo, industry, etc... but have not figured out how to do that yet.

Thank You!!

Ndaley (talk) 08:38, 29 November 2009 (UTC)NDaley 11/29/09[reply]

At the moment the draft is way too promotional in tone and does not state how or why the subject is notable - please see WP:CORP and WP:FAQO. You will need to cite reliable sources to support claims of notability. – ukexpat (talk) 16:51, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:KevinBTheobald/CFEOM

Done

This is my first crack at Wikipedia writing (it's not live yet), so apologies if I missed something. I just wrote a brief summary because there are good definitive sources on the web; I summarized and gave links and references to those sources. That would probably be better than my trying to rewrite their papers. What do you think? KevinBTheobald (talk) 10:31, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Please, rewrite their papers! I'm thinking articles should be complete on Wikipedia. But you can create this as a stub for others to contribute to. (See WP:Stub) Put the template {{genetic-disorder-stub}} at or close to the end. Also, the title should be the full name, not the abbreviation. See MOS:ABBR to see how to make a redirect page from the abbreviation to the main page. Richard-of-Earth (talk) 19:56, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Xer014_/Jewel_Kid

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Feedback on this article is much appreciated please :)) Thanks

11:01, 29 November 2009 (UTC)Xer014 (talk)

Same issues as last time: it's too promotional in tone; it has layout and formatting issues (see WP:MOS and WP:LAYOUT); it has too may images (and they have problems themselves, see the tags added to the image information pages on Commons). – ukexpat (talk) 16:35, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

whats the best way to add images? should I remove them from Commons and upload them another way?

I will take some off from the article and re-arange the wording again. Thanks Xer014 (talk) 10:01, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The requirements for using copyright images on Wikipedia are set out here: WP:NFCC - if the images do not meet those criteria (and copyright images of living people rarely do) they should not be uploaded and used on Wikipedia. So if you cannot show permissions to use the images that you have uploaded to Commons, the article will have to be "imageless". – ukexpat (talk) 20:47, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've been seeing some similar pages and their images refer to Flikr. Can I use the images from a myspace page, and get the owner of the page to confirm them? Xer014 (talk) 08:20, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

wiki: Izzat Traboulsi

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Hello, thanks in advance for your help. My questions are: How do i include a table of contents? How do i add my page in a portal: Category:Politicians? and for some reason when i search for the wiki without caps eg. "Izzat traboulsi" it does not find the article. As for the content, i know there is not much references, so i need a little time to gather sources. I would appreciate any other feedback and help with formatting. Thanks

Izzat_Traboulsi —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kartra (talk • contribs) 14:48, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You need to break up the article into sections. The TOC will be automatically generated when the article has at least 3 sections. I have added some relevant categories for you. – ukexpat (talk) 16:48, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Kids4Trees

Kids4Trees Sredner598 (talk) 14:53, 29 November 2009 (UTC) November 29, 2009[reply]

I am afraid that I have tagged the article for speedy deletion as the article does not indicate why the subject is important or significant. It's also rather promotional in tone. – ukexpat (talk) 16:29, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done

RBF Morph

Done

Hi all. I have prepared a draft about a new software RBF Morph. As the author of the software I'm not sure to have the right point of view for describing it; I have used the description of similar software as guideline. Thanks. MEB71 (talk) 17:12, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi. You're right that you don't have the right point of view to be writing this article; you have a serious conflict of interest, which means that it's almost impossible for you to write in a neutral tone. Since the draft isn't in the main space, I think that the best thing for you to do would be to leave it alone for a while. If the software is notable, someone else will probably create an article for it eventually, at which point you can suggest changes on the article's talk page in compliance with the COI guidelines. Annalise (talk) 04:24, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Hbfree/Russell W Freeburg

I would appreciate feedback on my posting on User:Hbfree/Russell W Freeburg

Thank you.

--Hbfree (talk) 00:48, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your links section is empty (except for the placeholder). I'm sure the author has a website. Or perhaps you could post a link to his book. Xcviii (talk) 00:47, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

BTW...I just noticed you are posting about yourself. That is against the posting rules. Xcviii (talk) 00:48, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Micskeiz/SecureChange

I created a wikipage for our research projects, I would appreciate some feedback on it: User:Micskeiz/SecureChange

Thanks, Micskeiz (talk) 10:18, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You say "our projects"; what is your connection to SecureChange? --Orange Mike | Talk 02:29, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'm a researcher working on that project. For this reason I tried to add external references to scientific papers to support every claim in the article. Let me know if you think there is a notability problem, or something is not properly backed up by external references. Micskeiz (talk) 09:02, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Laura Hamilton

Created a page on Nickelodeon Presenter Laura Hamilton wanted a simple subject for my first article. User:Rgjjunior/Laura Hamilton. Thanks, Rgjjunior (talk) 12:00, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Lisaanimal/NEADS/Dogs for Deaf and Disabled Americans

This is a request to review the draft page for NEADS/Dogs for Deaf and Disabled Americans. Your feedback on whether this article meets Wikipedia's requirements is appreciated.

Thanks, Lisa

--Lisaanimal (talk) 15:44, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It reads like an advertisement for the charity. I would like to see more about the historical significance of the company. Was it part of an international movement? Are there any famous events/people associated with it? Did it spark something other than itself? I think that as-is it violates the terms, but you could turn it into a valid page. Xcviii (talk) 00:46, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

American Songwriter (magazine)

Request feedback for http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Remyrb/American_Songwriter_%28magazine%29

User:Remyrb/American_Songwriter_(magazine)

Remyrb (talk) 21:01, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Why is it important? Are there any historical events involving it? Xcviii (talk) 00:43, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

BodyFit Wellness

I would appreciate feedback on this article. Thanks in advance for your time and effort.

User:Rumorad/BodyFit-Wellness by Coni Judge

Rumorad (talk) 22:57, 30 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

So not appropriate. Buy yourself a webpage. Xcviii (talk) 00:42, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Tongal

I would appreciate some feedback regarding the following article Tongal.

Thank you for your time and effort.

Fightonfortroy (talk) 00:38, 1 December 2009 (UTC) 11/30/09 fightonfortroy[reply]

This article does not appear to meet the general notability guideline or the company specific guideline. You need significant coverage in secondary sources. Such sources must be reliable, and independent of the subject. The sources that at first look to have promise due to who they are (such as Wired or BusinessWeek ) are about crowdsourcing and not Tongal. It also appears to be more promotional than encyclopedic. Please provide that or the article may be deleted. Customers such as Lending Tree are not appropriate sources to establish notability. PC Mag looks to be a step in the right direction. Formatting wise, bold is misused, citations are duplicated, there is no lead, etc. This should all be addressed after notability is established.Cptnono (talk) 02:36, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Philliton/Draft_of_Refugees_in_Nepal

This article is about refugees living in Nepal, a subject that gets a considerable amount of media attention, but is barely mentioned by any Wikipedia article.

Its my first article and will undoubtedly contain errors, but I've done my best to read the guidelines and make this concise, well-referenced, objective, and notable.

Thanks in advance for your time!

Philliton (talk) 05:55, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Pdxgroup/LED Tattoo - New Article for a Class Project

Hi everyone,

We are (username: pdxgroup) a 4 person group from Portland State University and an requirement of the class we are currently taking is to create a new article or add substantial content to an existing article on Wikipedia. Our group has chosen the topic of LED Tattoo; which is a new and upcoming technology. It is a interesting article and our group needs some feedback on the new article we created.

Here's a link to a page named LED Tattoo

We would greatly appreciate your assistance. Thank you!

pdxgroup 10:24, 1 December 2009 (UTC) pdxgroup —Preceding unsigned comment added by Pdxgroup (talk • contribs)

Since group accounts are not permitted here, I've had to block this account. I've tagged the article itself for some of its problems. --Orange Mike | Talk 16:11, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It will be helpful for you to read Wikipedia:School and university projectsSPhilbrick T 22:53, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

That is a really cool topic. I am glad you guys posted it (even if a group account is not permitted). I guess one of you can just repost it under your own name. This article is screaming for a photo. Xcviii (talk) 00:41, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

webceo

Webceo User:Pellacia/webceo

Hello everyone, I need some feedback on the article about a developer of the software Web CEO. Any help will be appreciated

Pellacia (talk) 12:27, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Shilpa Architects

Shilpa Architects User:Rasikar/Shilpa Architects

I am trying to write an article about an architecture firm from India that is part of our class project. I am a newbie to authoring articles on wikipedia and any help would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

Rasikar (talk) 12:33, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

So not appropriate. Buy yourself a webpage.Xcviii (talk) 00:40, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Can you please guide to help me make it more appropriate? It would be very helpful to have your comments/edits/modifications/omissions to make it more suitable. These architects already have a web page but i drafted the article by researching what was available about them and their work, mainly from third party internet sites/media reports but I did refer to their website as well. The objective for my class project is for each student to create a profile and develop a case-study of contemporary foreign architects and urban planners. My hope is that a wikipedia article about my choice of firm will be part of my final project report. Thanks in advance for your help. Rasikar (talk) 09:52, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think Xcviiiwas a little harsh - I think there is the basis for a article here. You need to be more specific about why this firm is notable per WP:CORP and support it by references to reliable sources, such as newspapers, magazines etc where the firm and its accomplishments are discussed in some detail. Also it does need to be toned down a little to avoid sounding promotional - phrases such as "this emphasis has created sustainable infrastructure with a sensitivity for society as well as the built-natural environment" are not encyclopedic. When you have found your sources, take a look at WP:CITE for guidance as to how to cite them, or drop me a note on my talk page if you need help. – ukexpat (talk) 17:53, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks..I will modify based on your feedback. Thanks again! Rasikar (talk) 13:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Neveln/Anthony Morse

Done

I can't find the draft of a submission that I was working on. I used the save button while in the Article Wizard but I had not confirmed my registration at that time(although I have since confirmed it). —Preceding unsigned comment added by Neveln (talk • contribs) 14:23, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately it was never saved and is lost unless the web browser screen you are using or still have open still has it in its memory and you can click back enough times to retrieve it. Your entire edit history is here and you have no deleted contributions. This can happen for a number of reasons, most commonly in my experience because a person has the edit screen open for a long time and when they click "save page" it says something like "there has been a loss of data session". My advice to you is to always highlight text you've been working on and save it to your computer's clipboard (ctrl+v) (or an offline document if a large amount of text) before submitting. Wish I had better news.--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 14:31, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

There is a draft in your user space at User:Neveln/Anthony Morse. I have taken a look at it and I think that it is ready to move to the mainspace, so I have done that for you - Anthony Morse. – ukexpat (talk) 15:20, 3 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Michelle Valentine (TV Host)

Michelle Valentine (TV Host) User:Michelle Valentine/Michelle Valentine (TV Host)

I'm looking for feedback regarding the article I have edited for Michelle Valentine the TV Host. She is not the same Michelle Valentine (author) that already has an article.

Michelle Valentine (talk) 20:07, 1 December 2009 (UTC)Hannah Farber[reply]

The draft does not indicate how or why Ms Valentine is notable per WP:BIO. Without reliable sources to evidence claims of notability, the draft is destined to be deleted if moved to the mainspace. If you are in some way connected to Ms Valentine, please also read WP:COI. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 20:25, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The alleged "television show" seems to be a YouTube channel and possibly public access program, best I can decipher from the seemingly deliberate vagueness. --Orange Mike | Talk 20:47, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Soundwave Festival SF

Hello I appreciate any feedback on Soundwave Festival SF Soundwave Festival SF. It's super short and just a start. Many thanks Sweetsurly (talk) 00:16, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Sweetsurly.

It looks like someone moved it to Soundwave Festival (San Francisco) per the naming conventions.
It is short but should be easy enough to expand upon with he amount of sources that appear (haven't gone through them yet) to be available. Keep in mind that the lead is supposed to be a summary of the article and then the article should be broken into subsections. I poked around for some highly assessed music festival articles but didn't come up with much. For inspiration and ideas on what layout works, take a look at other articles found at the List of music festivals (double check their status on each article's talk page before relying on it too much).
We do not follow branding when it is ALLCAPS. These should be reduced to sentence/title case in the references and auricle body. See MOS:ALLCAPS and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (trademarks)
Format the references. I prefer templates but you can do it by hand. Check out Wikipedia:Citing sources/example style.

Looks like there is a good base to expand upon so nice work.Cptnono (talk) 23:18, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

CosmoGirl Toronto/Josie Dye

User: CosmoGirl Toronto/Josie Dye[[3]] I have written a new article for Josie Dye. She is already listed as one of CFNY's on-air personalities and shows up as a redirect for searches made on her name. The information currently listed is limited. I have created a main article for Josie Dye as was done for radio personality Alan Cross. I would appreciate any help in moving this page. CosmoGirl Toronto 22:08, 2 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by CosmoGirl Toronto (talk • contribs)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sarasepidzadeh/ShabnamRezaei

[[4]] user:sarasepidzadeh Sarasepidzadeh (talk) 01:22, 3 December 2009 (UTC) --Sarasepidzadeh (talk) 01:22, 3 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

mustardyellow/space2

user:Mustardyellow/space2

Hi

I've written an article about a company called space2 and I would like a review to see if it is likely to be deleted or if I need to add anything else, I've tried searching for online reliable sources for referencing, however I can only find 1. What else would I need to add to make it qualify or is it ok.

As I think have added more than dwell or Harveys_Furniture, although it is not as beefy as Ikea.

Thank you for your review

--Mustardyellow 09:39, 3 December 2009 (UTC)

I think you still have problems with notability. Please take a look at the guidance at WP:CORP and the kind of sources that we need to support notability per WP:RS. The single reference that you have (that I converted into an external link for now) is only a passing mention, we need significant coverage. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 15:09, 3 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Women of the Apocalypse

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Luthar28/Women_of_the_Apocalypse

Hi there, it's my first page so I'm wondering if it looks correct?

Luthar28 (talk) 18:04, 3 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

If I were you, I would give a more complete description of the themes of the four stories, and then do a section on each where you write a brief summary. That would be more helpful than merely listing the stories.

Also, it would look a lot better if you would get the publisher to upload a picture, or if you would provide a direct link to the particular item(s) you discuss, as opposed to a generic link to the publisher's website.

Xcviii (talk) 00:32, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! The formatting and most of the information on your page are very good. However, some of the writing doesn't comply with the Manual of Style. For example, we usually try to avoid contractions ("there's" in the second sentence) and to write out numbers. I would also make sure that all of the sentences in the article are complete sentences. For example, the article reads that "Published in October 2009 by Absolute Xpress." This is good information, but it doesn't read like an encyclopedia. Instead, you might want to say "The anthology was..." or something similar.

Other than that, your main concern would be to add more information and more sources. Try to find outside sources if you can - a newspaper article on the anthology would be good. If you want a guideline for how these sorts of articles can be put together, you can look at the page for To Kill A Mockingbird, which is a Featured Article. (The article you're writing doesn't have to be nearly so long, though - there probably isn't as much to say!)

Annalise (talk) 00:37, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the feedback. How would I add a picture and book info to this article? Specifically, I'm talking this type of format: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Flashforward(novel)

Luthar28 (talk) 15:09, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

No problem! What you're looking for is the infobox for books, which is here. I found it by going to the WP:BOOK page. It might be useful for you; they have a lot of information about how to write articles on books, including an Article Template that you can use. Annalise (talk) 15:43, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I think it's almost ready. I don't know how to upload pictures yet -- I've requested the the publisher do so. Any other suggestions?

Luthar28 (talk) 14:25, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Progress Party (Norway)

Hi, I think I have improved the article about the Progress Party (Norway) from being quite a mess, to something better. I just wondered if I could get some suggestions to how it eventually could be improved, in for instance style, and perhaps see if the article is worthy of more than a C-rating. -GabaG (talk) 19:21, 3 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Devisavit vel non

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:208.210.219.131/devisavit_vel_non

It is tough to write about legal issues without using direct quotes.

1. I am having a touch time finding information about the historical aspect of the cause of action. Do you think I should just publish it so that others can add to it?

2. What other information do you think is needed?

THANKS!!!

P.S. My username is XCVIII, but Wikipedia always makes it lowercase...which looks stupid. I disclaim any responsibility for the bad formatting.

Xcviii (talk) 00:26, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not a law person, so it's difficult for me to understand this article. If you want a lot of discussion on and help with it, you might be able to find a place to do so at WP:LAW. However, this also means that you might want to try to make the article a little bit more accessible to people who aren't familiar with law. (See WP:JARGON.) Sometimes, explaining all of the jargon in an article makes it too long and cluttered, but it seems like this article is going to be fairly short, so you shouldn't have too many problems doing that. Also, you made a tiny typo - Latin, in the first sentence, is supposed to be capitalized.

P.S. If you go to "my preferences," then to "signature," and type in your signature as you want people to see it, you should be able to get it capitalized.

I hope this was helpful! Annalise (talk) 00:58, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the info about the signature. I am going to add some links to other WP pages to clarify. XCVIII 01:38, 4 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Xcviii (talk • contribs)

Done

jstroudr/San Jacinto Valley

I created this article, however it is hard to find information on the geography, and climate. This valley is located in southern california, and contains around 50 sq. miles. I have done my best to find sources, so please give me feed back. San Jacinto Valley —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jstroudr (talk • contribs) 02:42, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

First of all, nice work. You've got a good start here - I especially like your use of photos. A few suggestions

Run the entire article through a spell-checker or, better yet, get someone else to look over it. I corrected a few spelling mistakes that stuck out at me, but I'm sure there are a few more that I missed and you just aren't seeing because you've looked over the article so many times.
Make sure to look for run-on sentences. You have quite a few in the article. For example, "The San Jacinto Valley as seen from the San Jacinto Mountains, the bright street in the middle is Florida Avenue in Hemet" is a run-on sentence. It needs to be made into two sentences.
Try to avoid statements about the future unless they can be sourced properly. For example, your sentence "The city will also be home to part of the Mid County Parkway, a new major transportation corridore in Riverside County." might be true, but you can't say it is unless it's sourced. See WP:CRYSTAL for more details about this.
If you want more to do, go to the Manual of Style, read down the list and make sure everything is compliant.

Hopefully this is helpful, and if you want more suggestions, feel free to ask either here or on my talk page. Annalise (talk) 15:30, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done

NEF (Notice of Electronic Filing) seeking feedback

Done – ukexpat (talk) 02:48, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I just created the page. Will take me a day or two to add more material. I am seeking feedback particularly from people with background in law, computers, or their intersection.InproperinLA (talk) 15:14, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I moved the article to Notice of Electronic Filing and did a litte clean up. – ukexpat (talk) 18:04, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, please see my current reply on the talk page. In a while I'll probably edit the article again, but I want to give you the opportunity to do so before I have to delete or rework a bunch of stuff. --Glenfarclas (talk) 20:40, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Richard Isaac Fine

Seeking feedback.InproperinLA (talk) 15:16, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'm uncomfortable with some aspects of this article.

I've made some changes, and reported my concern here.

BLP's are a high profile issue at Wikipedia, so I want to make sure we are handling this correctly.--SPhilbrick T 19:07, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Rampart-FIPs (Falsely Imprisoned Persons)

seeking feedbackInproperinLA (talk) 15:18, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Seeking feedback for new article -SkiTAM

New user - first time submitter looking for feedback —Preceding unsigned comment added by Skitam (talk • contribs) 19:11, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Where did you create the article? The only edit that you have made with this username is the request you posted here. – ukexpat (talk) 20:15, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

If you are planning to write about SkiTAM, please read the WP:USERNAME policy first, especially the point about promotional names.--SPhilbrick T 21:56, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

InproperinLA (talk)

New Industrial Revolution

I would like some assistance in tightening up the article New Industrial Revolution. This article was deleted once and was just recently reinstated. If you would like the full history, you can check out my talk page ~ * ~ Blue Lunar Storm ~ * ~ (talk) 23:40, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I am specifically interested in including more references to this movement, so that it is not on the chopping block again. This is an existing worldwide movement, and has been referred to by this name. Thank you!! ~ * ~ Blue Lunar Storm ~ * ~ (talk) 23:40, 4 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I am leaning towards requesting its deletion again to be honest with you. You might be better writing an article on the book Cradle to Cradle if it meets notability guidelines.

It appears to be similar to a neologism. It may not be an appropriate article. See Wikipedia:Avoid neologisms
Yes, it is sourced, but it looks like you used synthesis of published material that advances a position (WP:SYNTHESIS}. "New Industrial Revolution" does not appear in here or here for example. You need to find sources linking all of the subsections to the subject. If they don't even mention the subject you are publishing an essay (WP:NOT#ESSAY).
These are a couple lines that jumped out:

"The New Industrial Revolution will produce a world of abundance and good design - a delightful, safe world that our children can play in." We cannot tell the future
"At the heart of the New Industrial Revolution is a quantum leap in the way that humans think of the products that we purchase and consume. The traditional "cradle to grave" product lifecycle must be changed to a system of "cradle to cradle" product flow" I assume this is a direct line from the book. Quote it if it is. A little fluffy for a neutral encyclopedia so paraphrasing might be even better.
"An analogy of the shift in values can be drawn from such governmental agencies as the Army Corps of Engineers and their activities of the past two hundred years..." needs a citation from a reliable source.
"The destruction that comes from war is now being recognized as wasteful, expensive, and an ill-conceived method for achieving peace in our world" -by who?
"Looking back there is just the one model for development, the global economic development that we know." Again, more essay like writing not appropriate for encyclopedic text.
"Spacious fields of greenery and towering housing complexes in Chicago." I'm seeing a small city garden and some mid rises.

Biomimicry. I don't know what is up with the link (fix it) but text is preferred over lists.
Earthships and Permaculture have 0 refs.
See WP:CITE#HOW for better citation formats.

Don't hesitate to ask if you need clarification on any specifics.Cptnono (talk) 06:44, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I concur. It reads like an essay. An interesting essay, to be sure, but still an essay.--SPhilbrick T 16:48, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Blizzard PPC

The Blizzard PPC Hi, this is my first article, it is related to the Commodore Amiga systems, specifically the Amiga 120 as its an accelerator for it. Please give me feedback on it, and tag appropriately. Thank you! Dreamcast270mhz (talk) 00:07, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I see the article has been proposed for deletion. I assume you think otherwise. You might leave MrKIA11 a note at his talk page. While he is someone preoccupied with his bid to become an administrator, he is an active member of the Video Games Project, and may be in a position to give you useful advice.--SPhilbrick T 22:10, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Formula One (1985 video game)

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:36, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi

I'm new to wikipedia, and I started an article on a videogame of the 1980's that wasn't present in the encyclopedia yet.

Right now it's a draft in my user space. Please give me some feedback on it, especially if it would be good enough to start as a real article or if it needs more info: User:NeoGenPT/Formula_One_(1985_video_game)

Thanks! NeoGenPT (talk) 02:19, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

1)You need to demonstrate in the article why this game is notable. 2)This article would benefit from an image. Please see if there are any free use images that fall under the Wikipedia:Image use policy and fit under one of the Wikipedia:Image copyright tags that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to Special:Upload; to upload non-fair use images on the Wikimedia Commons, go to commons:special:upload. Sole Soul (talk) 08:47, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Please check out Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games. You can post on the project talk page, or go to the list of members and post on one of their talk pages. You are likely to find someone with more knowledge and interest in your proposed article, and they will be better equipped to give you pertinent advice.--SPhilbrick T 16:54, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've done a major overhaul to the article and added images and stuff. I think its looking really good now, but this is the first real article I'm creating, and I really liked that video game back in the day, so I don't know if I have a neutral point of view about it. Please advise. :) —Preceding unsigned comment added by NeoGenPT (talk • contribs) 02:07, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, much better. I tweaked the formatting a little and I think it's ready to move to the mainspace. Let me know if you need help doing that. – ukexpat (talk) 17:36, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

By the way, I think the title should be Formula One (video game), the "1985" is not necessary IMHO. – ukexpat (talk) 17:40, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

article name Sandeep Das

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:27, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sandeep Das (HUM2009 (talk) 09:39, 5 December 2009 (UTC))[reply]

There is no article with that title (hence it is a redlink) - it was deleted on December 23, 2007 because it "provided little or no context" per this speedy deletion criterion. – ukexpat (talk) 21:03, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sharon Irla

Request for review, input and assistance of article User:Profklm/Sharon Irla. (created Nov 28, 2009)

I hope to later expand this article to include photo of the artist and, with her permission, some sample work.

Moreover, I hope to later add a section header of "Movement," as Irla is one of a handful of contemporary Cherokee Artists whose artwork is based on historical, scholarly research of the Cherokee. Other notables in this "Movement" would include Martha Berry, Talmadge Davis, and Anna B. (Sixkiller) Mitchell (for whom an article needs to be written).

I look forward to your input. Thanks Profklm (talk) 16:21, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Notability is sketchy. I see one mention in a reliable source. Is that it? I'm not sure this would survive a deletion proposal. I see quite a few awards, have any of them been discussed in a reliable source? Even if not, some referencing is required to support Verifiability

Please review Article Layout, as your article structure does not follow Wikipedia conventions.--SPhilbrick T 16:45, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Scome-squ/SCOME-Oman

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:25, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hello I have finished creating my draft and willing to seek advise to level it up to the wiki standards, http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Scome-squ/SCOME-Oman

Thx —Preceding unsigned comment added by Scome-squ (talk • contribs) 20:49, 5 December 2009 (UTC) ][reply]

In its current form it is way too promotional in tone and would be speedily deleted if moved to the main space. Please take a look at the pages that I have linked to on your talk page, in particular WP:SPAM, WP:ORG, WP:RS and WP:NPOV. – ukexpat (talk) 20:55, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Please review new page Satan's Pilgrims

The new page about the instrumental surf band, Satan's Pilgrims,can be found at User:Crowdesign/Satan's Pilgrims.

```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Crowdesign (talk • contribs) 03:36, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your footnotes need tighetening up, but before working on that, make sure you can establish Notability. That link is general, for more specific advice, see WP:MUSIC.--SPhilbrick T 16:57, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Frank B. Wynn

I have just started a new article User:Davidclydewalters/Frank B. Wynn I have much more information on Dr. Wynn and his considerable contribution to medical history and the conservation movement in the United States. I have just completed a Doctoral dissertation on leadership and the biography of Dr. Wynn at the University of Montana. The article is not complete. I have only started it to learn how to contribute. I am requesting feedback only so that the article is properly constructed and will not be deleted. I will continue to work on it. Thank you for creating and maintaining this valuable information resource. I have already made a donation and expect to do so again in the future. --Davidclydewalters (talk) 05:39, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Safety_Fuse

I am writing this article for a history class I am taking at the University of Maryland. I was wondering if anyone could provide me with constructive criticism on how I can improve this article. Any feedback would be appreciated! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Smodarre (talk • contribs) 05:52, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your opening sentence assumes the reader knows what a safety fuse is. Start with an introduction, directed at people who might not be familiar with the object.

Please review Article Layout for some suggestions for improvement.

Your current structure is a single long section. Think about how to break it into two or three relevant sections.

Unfortunately, I have to suggest that you read Fuse (explosives). At first glance, I see a lot of overlap, so you'll have to figure out if your exposition can be distinguished from the existing article.--SPhilbrick T 16:39, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Humberstone Garden Suburb

82.7.37.91 (talk) 08:19, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The first thing to do is to establish Notability with references to reliable sources.

If you can meet those requirements, then check out Article Layout to see how to create sections.--SPhilbrick T 17:18, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Institute of Land Administration

Requesting feedback. Institute of Land Administration Smwiti (talk) 10:41, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You've jumped too quickly into details without a proper introduction.

For example, you mention it is in East Africa, but you don't mention the country.

One might guess it is a college or university, but those guesses would be wrong.

Start by telling us what is it, and where it is. With whom is it affiliated? When was it created?

The sentence starting "possible employers" and the sentence closing "this is an education for you" are not appropriate.

You need to establish Notability with references to reliable sources

If you can address these issues, then look at footnotes for suggestions on how to properly include references.--SPhilbrick T 17:10, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Gordon Muir Giles

Hello, I've written an article about occupational therapist Gordon Muir Giles -- he developed a significant new approach and treatment for individuals with neurological injuries. Would appreciate any feedback. Thanks! Mattymatt (talk) 12:15, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Constructive criticism can't really be provided until notability is asserted. Please provide additional independent sources (not from the subject) or this will more than likely be deleted. I hope this points you in the right direction.Cptnono (talk) 12:21, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Air Dubai (band)

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Article "Air Dubai (band)" link http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LCLproject/new_article_name_here. LCLproject (talk) 05:42, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The big problem is notability - the band does not appear to meet the guidelines set out at WP:BAND. – ukexpat (talk) 18:23, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

European Youth Portal

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dear community,

I have created an article about the European Youth Portal.

It would be nice to get your feedback. For some reason I could not edit the lead again. Therefore there are no internal links in the lead section and I could not create multiple references. The article is not published in the main section yet. Thank you for your feedback Regina —Preceding unsigned comment added by Edesk (talk • contribs) 11:50, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You will need to find some reliable, third party, sources to show why the subject matter is notable per WP:N. At the the moment the draft does not address notability and all the references appear to be self references to EU websites. – ukexpat (talk) 18:04, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Rasikar/Shilpa Architects (2)

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi again,

I am looking for some help in making the article I authored more appropriate for wikipedia. I got some broad feedback and have tried to modify the article accordingly User:Rasikar/Shilpa Architects. It would be very helpful if you could help me edit/modify my article. Any advice would be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance. Rasikar (talk) 12:39, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

See my additional reply to you earlier message above. – ukexpat (talk) 18:06, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Steve Kauffman

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC) Am looking for feedback and/or formatting corrections for the Steve Kauffman article at User:Tolnick/Steve Kauffman, especially as related to live linking the footnotes in the text with the footnotes actually found below.[reply]

Tolnick (talk) 16:52, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I cleaned up the reference formatting for you, moving the references to the body of the text and adding <ref></ref> tags and adding the {{Reflist}} template to the references section so that the refs are displayed there. I also removed the external links as they are already used as references. I think it's probably OK to be moved to the mainspace, though it may be tagged with a {{tone}} tag by someone. Let me know if you need help moving the draft. – ukexpat (talk) 18:20, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dynamic Language 2

user:Rick206/Dynamic Language This article is about a communications company I heard about located in Washington State. It is in a subpage. I would like to add a picture as well if this possible after the move is allowed. Thank you for reviews and remarks. Much appreciated. Rick206 (talk) 19:13, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

As before, you still need to provide more third party, secondary sources that support claims of notability. The tone is also a little spammy so that will need some work. Also take a look at WP:FAQO. – ukexpat (talk) 19:35, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Is it possible to request another review to see if the above issues have been resolved or are making progressive steps toward a mainspace article? Thank you!

Rick206 (talk) 19:53, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Edwin Francis Walker

Hello, I'm looking for feedback on a draft article in my userspace regarding User: Luckygrrrr/Edwin Francis Walker, a prolific investigator for the Southwest Museum. Any help regarding formatting and otherwise is appreciated. Thank you.

Luckygrrrr (talk) 20:04, 7 December 2009 (UTC)Luckygrrrr[reply]

The subject is probably notable per Wikipedia's definition, based on the numerous books he wrote, but you will have to cite some additional reliable sources to support those claims of notability - press coverage, scientific journals etc. Let me know if you need help with citing sources. Also, the list of works is rather long and in danger of swamping the rest of the article, maybe just select the major works?. – ukexpat (talk) 15:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Tin Syndrome (band)

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Tin Syndrome (band) 1981- 1985 Wellington, New Zealand.

Can someone please provide feedback on this article I have written about this influential New Zealand band - Parks White (Auckland NZ)

ParksIII (talk) 23:58, 7 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting article, Numerous references to reviews contemporanious with the band that are clearly expressing opinions of the authors and this is made clear in the main text. --Patrick.stjohn (talk) 01:11, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I cleaned up the formatting and moved the article to The Tin Syndrome as the disambiguating parentheses are not necessary. Also, I have had to tag the images on Commons for deletion as they are clearly scans from a magazine and newspaper. Even of you scanned them, the copyright remains with the original publication. – ukexpat (talk) 02:39, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Chain Gang of 1974

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LCLproject/The_Chain_Gang_of_1974

I'm new to wiki and any help would be greatly appreciated.

LCLproject (talk) 06:55, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Morrissey Fox

Done – ukexpat (talk) 14:48, 8 December 2009 (UTC) Morrissey Fox article.[reply]

Morrissey Fox - — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jg1984 (talk • contribs)

Looks fine as a stub - I have added a stub template and a category and removed the tag. I also added an appropriate Wikiproject template to the talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 14:48, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

User:Acrompton/multifaith spaces

Posting request based on Acrompton (talk · contribs · deleted contribs · logs · filter log · block user · block log) pasting article text into this page. – ukexpat (talk) 14:37, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

request to go live with page

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Apdsm/Andr%C3%A9_Marques

As there is several André Marques on wiki, I propose this one to go as André_Marques_(filmmaker).

Apdsm (talk) 14:52, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The subject is probably notable per Wikipedia's definition, based on the awards he has won, but you will have to cite some reliable sources to support those claims of notability. Let me know if you need help with citing sources. In the meantime I have tweaked the layout a little. – ukexpat (talk) 15:07, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

--

Hi there again. I've added some references. Let me know if one needs to do more.

regards. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Apdsm (talk • contribs) 11:45, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Glaiza de Castro

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. From November 15 of this year I have been editing the article on Filipina actress Glaiza de Castro extensively. Earlier today I checked its discussion tab purely out of curiosity and was surprised to find that despite the extensive editions I have made over the past 2-3 weeks, the article is still apparently "Stub level". I personally believe that in its present state the article is far from a stub and as such I would like to bring it up in this section for peer review. Above is the link to the article in its state as of December 08, 2009, 11:57 P.M.

In your assessment, please compare the current revision with the last revision of the article (http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Glaiza_de_Castro&oldid=324729858) before my own revisions beginning November 15th. If possible, please rate the current revision. Thank you in advance.

Inviktos (talk) Inviktos (talk) 16:23, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have changed the Class to C for both projects as the article is clearly that level. You will have to ask at the talk pages of the relevant Wikipedia project pages for further review. – ukexpat (talk) 16:37, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

European Youth Portal revised

Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:17, 8 December 2009 (UTC) Hi there,[reply]

thank you for your feedback. I now added some in my opinion reliable, third party, sources.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Requests_for_feedback

I still cannot edit the lead section - therefore I could not delete reference 2. Will this only be possible when the article goes live?

Please let me know which of the other (EU) sources you recommend not to use. I also would not mind to delete the last three sentences and the last reference if you think it makes the article more reliable.

Thank you very much!

Regina

Edesk (talk) 16:57, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You can edit the whole article, including the lead paragraph, by clicking the "edit" tab at the top of the page. I have reformatted the references for you and I think it's ready to be moved to the mainspace. Let me know if you need help with that. – ukexpat (talk) 17:15, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sedona Method

To whom it may concern,

I feel the Sedona Method article is a good addition to the vocabulary defined in your book.It spart of human relations study.

Sincerely,

Spelling B Girl <e-mail redacted> —Preceding unsigned comment added by SpellingBGirl (talk • contribs) 17:50, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The article has been tagged for speedy deletion as it is almost impossible to tell what the article is about. Please take a look at WP:YFA or you can use the the article creation wizard to assist you in creating your article. – ukexpat (talk) 17:59, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Red Feather Development Group

User:Dschotthoefer/Red Feather Development Group

This is my first article and I just want to make sure it is a good one and will not be deleted immediately. I believe this non-profit is article worthy due to their prominent work and great efforts to change the world. I figure that if Habitat for Humanity has an article, then the justification for Red Feather to have one lies in the same reasoning.

--Dschotthoefer (talk) 21:26, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have tweaked the formatting a little (for example, you don't need to specify a references group where the references are simple like these). I think it's ready to be moved to the mainspace, let me know if you need help with that. And just an FYI, "other stuff exists" is not usually justification for an article to exist, they key criterion is notability. – ukexpat (talk) 22:12, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

PRIMO (Internet Marketing System)

Hi, there, I am new and have just created an article called PRIMO (Internet Marketing System which is a automate system used for internet marketing.

I would appreciate your feedback and correction on it!

Many thanks for your help and input!

Kind regards,

Graciousness2009 (talk) 01:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Draft is at User:Graciousness2009/PRIMO (Internet Marketing System). I am afraid that at the moment this reads like a blatant advertisement for the system and its creator and would almost certainly be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace. You will have to do a lot more work on the tone of the article and find some more third party reliable sources to support the notability of the subject matter if this one is to have a chance at surviving in the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 19:17, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Timothy Hampton

Timothy Hampton recently died in suspicious circumstances. He was a British weapon of mass destruction specialist and employee of the Comprehensive Nuclear-Test-Ban Treaty Organization (CTBTO) in Vienna, Austria.

This is only my second posting but it looks close to me :) I do appreciate any input.

Wittym (talk) 01:42, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Your article is interesting, but it uses plain URLs in its external links. This is undesirable because sometimes websites/pages change URLs, and do not leave a redirect in their stead as is usually done here at Wikipedia. Therefore, over time, plain URLs could eventually become dead links, a phenomenon known as linkrot. With only a plain URL, it would be difficult for a user to track down the new location; therefore, it is recommended that you also provide a brief summary of the webpage (title, sitename, etc.) by using the syntax [http://www.example.com link title], obviously replacing example.com with the URL. Citation templates may assist with this task, particularly {{cite web}}. Cheers, Intelligentsium 03:34, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

My idea for a section on articles

I often refer to wikipedia for information. I often leave an article, after having read it, with more questions about the topic at hand. It would be nice to see a section in each article where visitors can post questions about that article so that others with knowledge could contribute answers to those questions directly in the article in a seamless form. Not as if they were answering the question (as forums do) but as a further contribution to the article to make it more complete. Once that question was answered then the question could be grayed out to show visitors that the the answer is in the article. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.90.191.233 (talk) 03:00, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

We have the talk page, wherein editors can ask a bit of information be included, then it is, and this is very similar to what you suggest. Unfortunately, this is the Requests for feedback page, for requesting feedback on articles. For requesting feedback on your idea to better Wikipedia, please see the proposals section of the village pump. Thank you. Intelligentsium 03:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In theory, one of the justifications for the reference desk is that people can ask questions, and if the question is a good one, and can be answered by someone staffing the desk, but cannot be found in an existing article, perhaps a relevant article should be expanded to include the answer.

However, the linkage between those types of discussions and actual changes to articles is rare. Perhaps if you flesh, it could be implemented, either on the talk page or on the relevant reference desk with a closer linkage, and someone actually changing the article. As noted, the best place to push this forward is the Village Pump, but you might check out the reference desk, and see if those pages should be part of the solution.--SPhilbrick T 00:46, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Lydia Forson

Done – ukexpat (talk) 19:09, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ghanablogger (talk) 06:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)Lydia Forson[reply]

Hi there,

I am the PR of the Ghanaian Actress, Lydia Forson. I just finished with her Wiki Page so it could return in searches online. Kindly have a look at this article. I would appreciate your feedback and correction on it!

Many thanks for your help and input!

Kind regards, Ghanablogger — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ghanablogger (talk • contribs)

I have spent some time cleaning the draft up for you so that it complies with the Manual of Style and I took out some fluffy, unencyclopedic material. I also removed a number of external links in the body of the article. Ms Forson is almost certainly notable enough for an article per our guidelines but the article needs more references from reliable sources to support that notability. Let me know if you need help moving the article to the mainspace. Also, please take a look at the conflict of interest message that I left on your talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 19:09, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Durban Industry Climate Change Partnership Project (DICCPP)

Done – ukexpat (talk) 19:09, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Durban Industry Climate Change Partnership Project (DICCPP)

Jlramayia (talk) 17:30, 9 December 2009 (UTC) 09 December 2009[reply]

I moved the article to Durban Industry Climate Change Partnership Project in accordance with our naming conventions and created a redirect at DICCPP. Also cleaned up some of the formatting and added a few maintenance tags. You really need to find some third party reliable sources to support the notability of the subject matter. – ukexpat (talk) 18:38, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Genie (programming language)

I have created a new article on Genie, a dialect of the Vala programming language. I am not affiliated with GNOME and tried to write the article as neutral as possible, but some revision (and hopefully enhancement) would be appreciated. Latinmidget (talk) 17:58, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

My main concern is Notability You have no examples of reliable sources showing that language has been used, discussed, or reviewed by others.--SPhilbrick T 00:21, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Well, only the first two external links are related to GNOME, the others are from independent authors who have certainly used and reviewed the language. Reliability is relative, but take for example Barry Kauler (creator of Puppy Linux, a well-known distro), who has chosen this language as development platform. In any case, it should be noted that this is actually an alternative dialect (I have rephrased this in the article) of a well known language (which already has an entry in Wikipedia and is intended to become one the main development platforms for GNOME 3.0), so IMHO the article on Genie has notability. Nevertheless, your concern is valid and I will try to look for more independent sources. Latinmidget (talk) 04:55, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't look at the external links; they should be interpreted as "reader, you might also find this interesting". If they do help establish Notability, that's great, but they need to be properly referenced to material in the article to "count". --SPhilbrick T 17:35, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Kresimir Chris Kunej

The article is in my user space at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Turqoise127/Kresimir_Chris_Kunej. It was deleted due to notability concerns. Since the deletion I have shortened the article to a great extent, replaced some rotlinked sources with screenprints of when they were active, I added some screenshots of the significant coverage source (TV show coverage), improved the refs, and added a paragraph entitled "Resulting Lasting Impact in the Field of..." which provides a clear corrolation with article subject and significant impact. I believe that now the article meets WP:PROF 1 and 4, there are 2 good RS one significant, that meets WP:N, notable enough to meet WP:GNG, mainly for subject's activities on the WP:fringe (his strict translation standards theories are very fringe, as I recently realized), as well as WP:ANYBIO (2.The person has made a widely recognized contribution that is part of the enduring historical record in his or her specific field.)(see "resulting lasting impact" paragraph). Although I believe my work has addressed the notability concern and met it, recently I was advised that now there may be WP:SYNTH concerns over the very paragraph that clearly shows notability. How do I re-word or change so there is no WP:SYNTH? What are your thoughts? And, can you provide me with some help and advice for improvements? I would be much obliged. Turqoise127 (talk) 18:48, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

For clarity and the convenience of other editors, can you please list here:

two reliable sources you refer to; and
the specific claims and sources backing them up that give demonstrate satisfaction of PROF 1 & 4?

Thanks, ^Bongo_matic 01:36, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I hope I did not misunderstand the nature of this forum, I was merely attempting to solicit some feedback, help and advice from experienced editors on here regarding an article I have worked hard on and firmly believe is a good contribution to the accumulation of knowledge on the project. Regardless, nothing in policy or guidelines says that sources have to be available to everyone, whether for reasons of physical access (e.g. if they are from books or journals only avaliable in libraries in one country) or of language. Sources have been provided for this article, and they are verifiable. If there is a language barrier issue please let me know.Turqoise127 (talk) 16:30, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think anyone patrolling this page is unaware that sources are not required to be on the internet or even in English. However, the article has 22 references, many in another language and some may require a library visit. It would be a waste of my time, if for example, I tracked down translation of reference 22 and concluded it didn't support notability. You might respond that it wasn't #22 that supports notability.

None of the first three sentences in the lede demonstrate notability. The fourth sentence might, but it isn't referenced. So I read Bongomatic's question as - which references should I look at in order to confirm that you've now met the requirement? Lots of relevant references is a good thing, but in most articles, it only take one or two references to support notability.--SPhilbrick T 17:50, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I was not aware that I would have to present a case here, I believed I would get some advice here for improvements by previously uninvolved editors. Regardless, for the sake of Sphilbrick's reasonable comment I will address the question;

the two reliable sources I refer to are (I will actually offer 3)

1) #14, significant reliable in-depth coverage on the subject on a national TV show. It is cited per guidelines. To strengthen this I have added screenshots of the actual segment showing subject interviewed and his academic publishing discussed.

2) #15, coverage in an article in Jutarnji list, as of late there is an article on that newspaper on our Wiki. Reliable, sourced.

3) #16, coverage on the subject on a different national channel and different TV show, reliable, sourced.

PROF 1 is met because it reads The person's research has made significant impact in their scholarly discipline, broadly construed. Read paragraph "Resulting Lasting Impact in the Field of Croatian Translations" for details on that. Also, article subject’s works and translated books are held widely in Republic of Croatia, WP:ACADEMIC does not state it has to be libraries in the US or a particular state. I listed sources of subject’s works in numerous libraries in Croatia (verifiable internet sources), including the major National University Library of Zagreb.
PROF 4 is met because at least two of the subject’s works are being used as textbooks, his translation of a Civil Engineering textbook at the University of Zagreb, Croatia and one of his academic papers as required reading at the University of Tubingen in Germany (both are sourced).

Article is also notable per WP:ANYBIO - 2.The person has made a widely recognized contribution that is part of the enduring historical record in his or her specific field. and per WP:FRINGE, which I actually realized in discussion with editor Bongomatic; subject's theories are fringe. Turqoise127 (talk) 22:03, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions for improvement include suggestions to help you edit the article so that it meets the basic inclusion criteria. If you read the rest of this page, you will see that the vast majority of responses are about notability and sources as those are areas about which there seem to be the most confusion or misunderstanding. – ukexpat (talk) 22:11, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Understood. I will be grateful for any and all input. Turqoise127 (talk) 22:42, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You are correct that you are not required "to present a case here", but neither are you required to list an article here for consideration by others. If you wish other editors to spend their time reviewing your article, specifically with reference to the criteria you yourself cited:

I believe that now the article meets WP:PROF 1 and 4, there are 2 good RS one significant, that . . . meet WP:GNG . . . as well as WP:ANYBIO

you are likely to get more thoughtful responses if you direct people to the relevant places. My suggestion, to which you took inexplicable umbrage (despite calling a nearly identical request "reasonable"), was a suggestion that—since the issues I excerpted from your initial request are those that readers of this page are likely to focus on—you make it easier for editors to review your article and claims regarding it. ^Bongo_matic 02:04, 11 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Nabto

Nabto http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tommyped/Nabto

Tommyped (talk) 20:27, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Please take a look at WP:N and WP:PRODUCT - at the moment the draft says nothing to indicate how or why this product is notable as required by our inclusion guidelines. You will also need reliable sources to support any claims of notability. – ukexpat (talk) 20:39, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Chain Gang of 1974

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LCLproject/The_Chain_Gang_of_1974

LCLproject (talk) 22:31, 9 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The article is mostly unreadable and looks more like a list of songs and albums than providing any useful information about the group. Lack of inline citations makes it difficult to tell what reference supports any notability the band may have. Most importantly, the article does not make any reliable claim that it passes WP:MUSIC, meaning that this article would likely be Speedy Deleted. -Drdisque (talk) 17:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Obie One B.A.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nemo05/obieoneba (Nemo05 (talk) 01:27, 10 December 2009 (UTC)).[reply]

Schoolwires

User:Afvincent/Schoolwires

Afvincent (talk) 02:18, 10 December 2009 (UTC)afvincent, 12/9/2009[reply]

I think there is the basis for an article here and the company may be notable per the guidelines at WP:CORP. However at the moment the article reads like a marketing tool - "solutions" and lists of features are marketing stuff, and not encyclopedic language. You will also need some third party reliable sources to support notability claims. Is there any significant press coverage? – ukexpat (talk) 18:13, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Slavery's Impact on African English

Hancocka (talk) 07:54, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

At the moment, the article reads like a term paper or essay, especially with the "Conclusions" section, rather than an encyclopedia article. Please take a look at articles on similar subjects and see how they are structured and the tone in which they are written. As a tertiary source, Wikipedia is not the place for original research. – ukexpat (talk) 17:19, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The article has now been nominated for deletion - the discussion is at: Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Slavery's Impact on African English. – ukexpat (talk) 17:32, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Pictures on page

I'm currently working on my page xer014_/Jewel_Kid and having some trouble with the pictures which were erased. Similar pages to this have pics with reference to Flickr ... Can I upload pics from a MYSPACE page, and get the owner of the page to confirm them? Is that valid? Xer014 (talk) 08:14, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Pictures from Flickr can be uploaded to Commons provided that they are licensed appropriately. In your case, the best thing to do is to ask the copyright owner to release the images per the process described at WP:IOWN. – ukexpat (talk) 17:13, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Canadian Crossroads International

Canadian Crossroads International Cbentl2 (talk) 17:30, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You have no reliable sources demonstrating Notability. --SPhilbrick T 17:58, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Natural Vibrations

I recently posted an article on the band, Natural Vibrations. I have performed the edits suggested to me previously and have yet to hear back from more wikipedia editors. If anyone has any feedback on my article it would be much appreciated. Thank you, Nhollis1113 (talk) 18:57, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You need some third party reliable sources to show how the band meets the notability guidelines set out in WP:BAND. At the moment the only cited references are to the band's own website and what appears to be an online retailer. If the band is indeed notable, there must be some significant press coverage that you can cite. – ukexpat (talk) 19:49, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Vincent Brooks, Day & Son

Vincent Brooks, Day & Son I'd appreciate some feedback on this page relating to a 19th century firm of lithographers. I realise the reference list is quite lengthy but hopefully reflects the depth of research made. Thanks in advance. --SVB 19:34, 10 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Simonvincentbrooks (talk • contribs)

Blimey, at first glance it looks very impressive. I will take a detailed look and assuming all checks out, I think this one would be a candidate for a Main Page "Did you know...?" spot... – ukexpat (talk) 19:52, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

OK I have done an initial review, removed the tag, cleaned up the external links and added some categories. Again, you have done a splendid job with the article. I have a couple of points that relate to some of the sources. Please don't take this as in any way detracting from the work you have done - I have no doubt that the company is notable per the guidelines at WP:CORP and therefore meets our inclusion criteria but I am concerned that some may not view some of the sources as reliable as that term is used on Wikidpedia. I am guessing from your user name that you are a family member with access to the family and other unpublished sources and therein lies a problem - Wikipedia's guidelines on reliable sources require that sources be verifiable. I see that the autobiography and other papers are available online in a blog. For Wikipedia's purposes that may not be a reliable source as it is basically "self-published". I am going to ask for further input on this over at the reliable sources noticeboard. My second point on sources was that it may help to use named references where appropriate to reduce the number of repeated references in the Refs section. Finally (for now anyway) I am going to nominate the article for a DYK over at the appropriate talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 20:24, 10 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for you work and nomination Ukexpat. If our self or unpublished sources are not deemed reliable enough I'm sure we can find alternatives. Thanks also for the tip on compacting the references, job now done. SVB 22:41, 10 December 2009 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Simonvincentbrooks (talk • contribs)

Split Works

User:Splitchina/SplitWorks

(Splitchina (talk) 02:56, 11 December 2009 (UTC))[reply]

The whole thing looks to me like one big advertisement for the company and would almost certainly be speedily deleted if moved to the main space. – ukexpat (talk) 03:13, 11 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Windward Reports

Please review User:DavidThi808/Windward_Reports to see if it meets the requirements for notability. I believe it does with Business Week and eWeek citing it.

thank you for your time

DavidThi808 (talk) 04:08, 11 December 2009 (UTC)DavidThi808 12/10/09[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Carmen2u/Lee_Aase

This is an article I have written regarding a notable figure in the world of social media in healthcare, Lee Aase. I have compiled an extensive list of references, external links, and other supplementary information. With able guidance from PhantomSteve (a Wiki contributor and advisor), I have fortified each of the sections I created and am now seeking broader review to ensure that this page will be ready for formal submission to the active site. I welcome your constructive criticism. As a first-time article writer for Wikipedia, I have been warmed by the good counsel I have obtained so far and look forward to your input. Thanks.

Carmen Gonzalez, also known as Carmen2u (talk) 04:26, 11 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Despite the list of potential sources, external links, and interviews, I'm not sure if you have established notability. One to two lines in reputable sources (ie Forbes and Good Morning America) are not enough to create an article. Articles cannot rely predominately on primary (the subject's) sources or blogs. You might want to consider creating an article on social networking in medicine since it appears to be the subject receiving the significant coverage in the reliable sources. That being said, you have made some steps towards this biography. If you choose to continue with it:

Remove the interviews and reduce the external links sections. It appears that you were attempting to assert notability but it does not improve the encyclopedic value of the article. WP:ELNO for the external links.
A good PR run (which appears to be what some of the coverage is based off of) will make a PR article. Limit and watch the wording of coverage solicited by the subject.
Remove all blogs. These are not references. A mention of the subjects blogs can get some room but I would recommend making sure sources discuss it or other editors will assume it is promotional (just the way it works on Wikipeida). Blogs should not be used as sources. None of them appear to be by reputable sources joining in new media but utilyzing full editorial control so they do not meet the requirements in the guidelines. See Wikipedia:Reliable sources#Self-published and questionable sources
Reformat all of the references. I recommend cutting out all of the inappropriate ones before taking this step
The lead does not need a section header . WP:LAYOUT
"evangelist" seems a little fluffy. "Proponent" or something similar would be less pretty but more encyclopedic.
The Speaking engagements subsection needs sources independent of the subject that are not blogs for lines such as "Aase is a highly regarded figure in the social media arena..."

Your "sources" have verified that the subject spoke at conferences (such as the one in Vegas) but without appropriate sources throughout the article already truly verifying notability, it reads like a resume.

Cptnono (talk) 05:22, 11 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ayodele Awojobi

I have recently written the article, Ayodele Awojobi, and would kindly needed valuable feed-back.

The article, I believe, speaks about the life and achievements of what I believe to be a remarkable Nigerian academic; a pioneer in Mechanical Engineering research, out of Africa.

Feed-back would be highly appreciated.

Thanks.

Krrush 10:00, 11 December 2009 (UTC)

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 ::*Your "sources" have verified that the subject spoke at conferences (such as the one in Vegas) but without appropriate sources throughout the article already truly verifying notability, it reads like a resume.
 :[[User:Cptnono|Cptnono]] ([[User talk:Cptnono|talk]]) 05:22, 11 December 2009 (UTC)
+== Ayodele Awojobi ==
+I have recently written the article, [[Ayodele Awojobi]], and would kindly needed valuable feed-back.
+The article, I believe, speaks about the life and achievements of what I believe to be a remarkable Nigerian academic; a pioneer in Mechanical Engineering research, out of Africa.
+Feed-back would be highly appreciated.
+Thanks.
+Krrush 10:00, 11 December 2009 (UTC)